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Originally posted by: Hamlet53

I Me and Myself... hammie... huuh is ?? here.. think.think... now before I recede into complete ghajini mode.. I gather my wits about me,and fire!
First of all me going ummhh, hummh, lowering my eyes and looking the other way..and saying to myself,dearest .. hainnn?? and that too me? oyeee baji what do you want? bol me listening... Hello my dear inspiration 😆 well now that you've read the prologue you must know exactly which part is inspired by our banter...haha...well must give you a thanks for triggering some thoughts for an FF and more importantly credit for bringing out the best in me and for always encouraging me with ur words .. 😳 i mean that is when u are not roaring or busy thinking about only yourself which is 99% of the time LOL...but glad to fit in the 1% 😆😆 jokes apart thank you dearest for coming 1st 😲 in my thread and leaving ur lovely lovely comments...much appreciated...
look ,my sharmilee tim tim , my dil and jigar..etc etc etc.. thank you..hammie humbled.. jelly knees now.. no no not swooning..just yawning...🥱
yeah yeah me know inside you are jumping in joy that this FF is uhmm inspired by you only...ur the type to deny that you're indeed swooning so no did not buy it...yawning? haa I can just smile at your ways 😛
ok... yadoon ke baraat, hummh, aacha hai tera title, after all the badgering you did to me.. you hatched a good one eventually.. It's fairly direct, the play on the word yaad, yaadien.. are indicative of the plot,hence teasing the reader to read on.
haan and you were useless in helping me in that regard...but used u to bounce ideas and think so i guess can say hummh thanks? lol ...glad you liked the title...even i feel it came out good lol
The beginning is excellent,very well written Daya..the use of first person is appealing immediately, and so unfold the workings of her mind,her,bane,her plight,and the reader empathizes.
Oh hammie...first person...am trying to get in a habit of writing in this style now...i realized i struggle with it...so thought it would make a good challenge...as naturally i resort to narrative, third...so i can say this is quite challenge...i just feel it works better for some stories...
So follow smoothly the chronological events of LTL1 with precision, and we allow them to follow us.
Daya, as I read your work, I hear a wailing , a calling for the past.. that which we all want to share with you.
can you blame me...these days i am remembering them way too much..relieving moments by watching some scenes randomly...makes me fall in love with them all over again...
Naku' after marriage stoic suffering is explained with a clear touch of sensible reasoning,as is also his cold indifference.Enjoyed the rationale behind the stalemate between them.. well done mate, proud of you.. billy choo..
Thanks you! actually i wanted to put some logic base while giving you the idea of aspects of the original story i have taken as a lead for my story...
Daya, Naku's realization of "who I was? ", regarding Dutta's... perception of her after accident, to me and to fa, also, when I read it to her meant, as in gori naku from dusky one. ummh could be easily felt too.
Aww you read it to fa 😳😳 glad so...lol loved her comment about of course when it comes to me who else would it be about other then our DN...
The passage of his medical condition makes me feel, how tragic. For does it really matter to her if he remembers her or not?as before his critical mishap she was just a distant figure,he seemed totally oblivious off..she was dead to him, yet my heart says yes that may be the case ,but she still nurtured hope that he might forgive, accept her one day ... and now this Daya, his present condition is nothing short of sadness..
Yes, it is sad...for everyone...as they have to deal with his condition just as much as he has to deal with it...it could be frustrating for everyone...and for her she of course loves him and the fact that everything was hanging on a thread before and now she is starting at a point where the challenge is just a great as before...keep in mind his mind set is that of disbelief he would never marry according to self...and she has no base for trust friendship something that naturally came at the place where they first met in the show...doesn't exist to him..he knows absolutely nothing of the woman...and she is his wife...>? 😕
Daya... his reacting to her effort ,of aiding him in recuperation, makes me wonder, there are obviously somethings he does remember..about her...dil se...its connected on a level no one can really understand..perhaps ur right 😉 this unknown force of attraction will certainly play its role ...so later on all is revealed ,she has been obliterated from his memory..from his life.
The memory loss truly ,in my opinion compliments very well the issue of beauty and betrayal.. thus shunning and blotting his wife out of his life.. YES...thats the link and plan...wanted it to have a good backdrop..altho am considering getting rid of the evil sister aspect...which i have decided on how to do..but unsure still will worry about that in october when I can get back to this SS...It reminds me of the scene in LTL1 post FR,where he asks AS, "kaun hai ye lardki ? aur mera kamra mein kiya kar rehe hai?..it was as if he had lost the plot..after FR. Baji is endearing and pivotal in a supportive position..
So my dearest , Daya thank you for an in depth , sensitive ,and fantastically written beginning. Now looking forward to Naku' battles towards the winning the war. much love xx yours hammie..
Thank you hammie for reading and commenting...glad you've liked the start...
I will give you a shout when I plan to UD...which you know will be in october some time...anyway mate...lots of love...see ya ...

Originally posted by: -vrshn-

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Wow! Daya, you're back!

The way you put emotions into ur words is as fascinating as ever!

You're simply the best at this! Loved the prologue! Would love to read more!!