OS: Naku - 'I do!' Pt 3 - Pg 15 - Page 22

Originally posted by: pardesii

Hey DD, sorry for the delay in my feedback. Here it goes:

The euphoria he is feeling is quickly dampened as she says that ''mere se shaadi karnaa nahi karnaa, woh faislaa aapka hoga, meraa nahi". Yet these words "Naku apne Sahib ko kabhie mana nahi kar sakti" sum up Naku's devotion to him.

[DD] Hey PD....I wanted Dutta to maintain his cool while being confused too...Be confused but remove doubts....Very difficult thing to do, but if this culd help him in anyways...Naku had to tell him that I am devoted to you....I love u but I have a truth that I cannot do anything about.....

Hai, yaar the beauty of your words are so touching. "Naku toh aapki hameshaa se hai, Aap Naku ke ho jaaoge!" ' that is so true. She is already his in heart, mind, body and soul but she cannot let him become hers until he knows all.

[DD] Exactly....for her...her love is hers....and that makes Naku belong to Dutta, not from the wordly perspective but from the emotions perspective....she has accepted him, she feels he is the closest to her heart, but she isnt sure about her status in his!!

DD you've captured the essence of Naku so well. You are keeping my hope alive that the Naku we used to know will resurface soon enough.

[DD] That is the point PD....If she changes then Dutta was better off with Kali Naku....else why wuld he wanna be with Gori Naku...He loved her for what she was....and thats the crux of the story.....and thats why I wanted to make sure this message is clearly passed on!

The confession before Naku's Bappa. How perfect! She can draw strength from him to not falter in what she must do. Yet even while doing so her only concern is for him, "Saab ke saath rehnaa aaj Bappa" ' her selflessness is limitless. (At least in your version DD).

[DD] You got exactly what I was thinking....There were two main objectives there....One, Bappa is always with her and Dutta wuld realize that Naku had no evil in her mind when she hid the truth....after all she cannot be evil standing in front of Bappa

2. She was fearless after her pep talk with CP....but Dutta needed more strength....wasnt she hiding the truth for him....

The confusion is too much for him. The flashbacks of having seen this face before hit him hard and he copes using his natural defence mechanism, his anger. He is disillusioned from his feelings because of her unfamiliar face but once the hurt subsides he will understand that his Naku is still there, only her colour has changed.

[DD] Bingo! U got it PD....Its the unfamiliar face thats making him not feel the love initially....as soon as he gets used to the face and map it with the same innocence, and clean hearted Naku....he wuld be able to face her!!

"Bappa...Dikhaa mujhe rastaa aaj!! Nahi rahi mere mein taaqat ab kuch bhi sehen karne ki". Naku's love slowly began to restore his faith in Bappa and now he needs that very divine support to keep him from falling into despair.

[DD] This was important PD for me...I have been seeing how Dutta is getting inclined towards Bappa....and I wanted to show that today he goes to the one person that his Kali Naku believed in....when Kali Naku isnt there for him to go to her, he goes to one person she was close too....to gather strength and feel her presence!!

"Saab, Aap ab mujhe dekhoge bhi nahi?" ' this is proof that he had fallen for her innocence, her inner beauty, her aura that he does not even want to indulge in seeing her 'beauty'.

[DD] *hugs hugs hugs*...u r like reading me PD!!...I love you for this! 🤗

"Saab, Aap apni Naku se door jaa rahe? Naku kaise jeeyegi agar aap usse nahi dekhoge? Yeh meraa chehraa hai, lekin mein wahi hai sahib, jo hameshaa se thi...Nakusha, jo aapse bahut pyaar karti hai! Aapke naam se jiski subah hoti hai, aapki yaad se jiski raat!" - In plain words, he must face her and really look at her because this is the truth. Neither he nor she can run from it. If he wants his Naku, he'll accept her in any form, dark or fair, in sickness or health (that vow sprang to mind for some reason).

[DD] She knows he loves her but he cannot run away from this....she can veery well come back in her soot for him, but whats the point in living the life of lies....and only when he starts looking at her, will he gradually transform his feelings, get used to it and feel the same!!

"Par jaise hi yeh roop dekhtaa hoon, mein pareshaan ho jaata hoon, kahaan hai woh meraa sapna? Woh Naku, jo Kaali mitti ki bani thi lekin sabse Gori thi!" ' haila, kya line hai. This was so beautifully written.

[DD] Thanku thanku!!....😛😛😛....The last line defined that he was still in awe of her inner beauty!!

"Mein uss Naku ko bahut miss kartaa hoon. Mujhe meri Naku chahiye...Meri Naku waapis de do." Your making me cry reading Dutta's plea to have his Naku back. He misses his Naku! I'm speechless!

[DD] Very much PD...He misses her...Just imagine PD...say the Gori Naku is called XYZ....Now, For him, Old Naku has left him, disappeared from his life, he wuld never see her....and there is a new gal in his house, XYZ.....so, if u consider Gri Naku as completely diff person, he has lost his love.....

Finally, Babi steps up to undo the wrong she did so many years ago!

[DD] She had too...and she better does even in LTL!!

Thank you DD. You portrayed Dutta's disgust at hearing the torment his Naku endured at the hands of Morey and Anna, exactly how I would want it to be. The new level of rage he has for those filthy, despicable men that had even intended to do such horrendous things to his Naku is apt. Despite saving her in time, just the thought that there could have been a much worse outcome is killing him.

[DD] PD, I feel this is the main argument that shld be presented to him for him to realize that why was it important for Babi to do what she did else he wuld have never met Naku...Today, she might be the keeper of some Dubai shekh, passed through many hands....oh god! it gives me shivers, what wuld it do to him!

"Naku yeh sehen nahi kar sakti ki uske saab uski wajah se rote hai" and Mere bus mein hota naa Sahib, Mein Bappa se bolti, Yeh roop le le, bus mere saab phir se mujhe dekhnaa shuru kar de! Naku ke sahib agar usse dekhte toh Naku Khoobsurat hai, nahi toh Naku kuch nahi!"' DD you really want me to cry don't you! This is the message the CVs will portray. That regardless of what society defines as 'beauty' for beauty is indeed in the eyes of the beholder. If the person we love, loves us with all our flaws then we'd never want to be anything but the way they see us.

[DD] Yeah PD....For Naku, this beauty doesnt mean a thing....remember how she was once temted to show Dutta her face bcoz she thought he might love her then but then her inner beauty took precedence and she stopped this thought....well, for her it was about Dutta's love and not beauty...and when she realizes that Dutta doesnt love beauty, then now she doesnt want it....it was always about Dutta!!....he is her epicenter!!

I had the exact line in my mind when I wrote this - Beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder!!

and I also remembered this song after writing these lines - "Ghoonghat ki aad se dilbagaa, deedar adhoora rehtaa hai, JAB TAK NA PADE AASHIQ KI NAZAR, SHRINGAAR ADHOORA REHTAA HAI"

"Mein aapse bahut pyaar karti hai, aur yeh haq mujhse koi nahi cheen saktaa! Yeh Pyaar sirf meraa hai." Exactly! No one can stop her loving him. No one.

I adored the part about him re-working his 'dream' and feeling the same yearning for her. The anxiety of the separating growing and his heart taking charge to go stop her, "Aaj mere se agar tu door chali gai Naku, toh teraa Saabjeenaa chod degaa."

[DD] The thought process here was that he has to feel her in his heart, the right feelings/aehsaas for him to envelop her....once he starts feeling her even with the fair skin, he wuld be able to accept her!

OMG DD. You did it. You brought tears to my eyes with Dutta's confession. His very existence is dependent on hers and he cannot let her go. All of it was mindblowing.
I will not copy it all, but this says it all "Tere hone se bar bar pyaar karne ka man karta hai!" Dutta is defeated. He is lost in her love. He cannot fight his fate, Bappa wants him to have love and so he must embrace it.

[DD] Oh god......u summarized my thoughts so well PD.....*hugs again*....I am in tears right now, reading ur analysis and the repetition of the lines I wrote!!...😭😭

Teraa chehraa badla, tera aks nahi.Teri shakal badli, Teraa aehsaas nahi.Teraa rang badla par mere liye teraa pyaar nahi!" ' Perfect!

[DD] I think this is the gist!!! I accept u NOW for what u r!...Gori or Kali! bcoz rest of the things remained same!

It was fresh to see that you avoided all the clich lines of only filling her life with happiness. Dutta speaks from the heart and he knows that their life will not be a bed of roses so he'll not make promises that are easily broken. He vows that with the bad shall come the good. E.g. Mein tere ko yeh waada toh nahi karta ki tere har pal khushi se bhar doonga, par yeh waada karta hoon, ki tere har pal mei mein hoongaa...

[DD] I actually hate those never-to-be-fulfilled promises...when they show those promises in Ekta serials, my blood used to boil....because the next da they wuld start a plot which wuld result in the two separating with all anger and bad blood.....and then I wuld think, didnt these two promise each other to never make each other unhappy??...how can they forget it? 😕

Hence, I wanted realistic...even I wuld want my man to be with me when I am sad....bcoz I know atleast at one point in time, I wuld be sad, no fault of anyone...thats life's equation!!....

I loved the cuteness in Naku's reply. Me or the alchohol. Like there is any contest but his response is awesome, "Tu hi meri Daroo hai Naku, Teraa Nasha utaarnaa mushkil hai, aur daroo mein kya loonga?!

[DD] Glad u liked it....This was an afterthought! 😉

I was smiling a big goofy grin at the end. Baaji cues in at the best times to make the normacly return.

[DD] Thats his role...isnt it!! such a faithful Laxman that he is! 😛

DD I love you for this. 🤗 🤗 🤗 This is my favourite face reveal FF. 👏
I really truly, madly, deeply, want the CVs to read this and be inspired!

[DD] I cant tell u how much I loved reading each and every line of ur review,....u just read my thoughts and I am so happy that I culd present it for u to feel what I wanted to say, what I think Love is, what I feel!!.....

u shld be my critic everytime I write anything! 😛😉😆

Hugs again!! 🤗🤗🤗🤗

Originally posted by: MishalLeoSheeba

Wow DD................Just read both the parts i missed..............Awsomeeeeeeeeeeee................superbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb.......and splendid dear!.................U rock.................

Originally posted by: nazia.icycool

hi DD read the parts yaar..what amazing work u did....
i mean it was DRAMATIC!....the dialogues were superb...where did u get these dialogs from DD?? 👏 .....awesome work sweety...

the room mein daaru ya naku wala idea was great... 👍🏼 ..loved ur OS DD..do make more na??😆

Originally posted by: thornewood9

Loved it MR! Keep writing! From acting to writing! WOW

Aisha xxx🤣

Originally posted by: MissOracle

My god!!! Nikki u are amazing.... all the three parts beat one another!!!!!!! I knew u were a bundle of talents, but u've surpassed all!!!! please continue writing!!!!! ur dialogues were truly awesome.... loved every bit 😉😉😉😉😉😉 all the dialogues were just my type... the typical MnB style, aawwwwhhhhhh the climax and the 2nd part dialogues were toooooooo coooll!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

Mwah!!!!!!!!!!!!

Originally posted by: rama_2010

fantastically written... enjoyed it..