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Posted: 12 years ago
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sai boss oskara hinge matadtiri?tumba bad ri.😆😆 Nanu kelhli khattini sorry odli khattini
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Each n every part was totally awesome plz continue soon!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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when are you giving the next update

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: alkaparmart

sai boss oskara hinge matadtiri?tumba bad ri.😆😆 Nanu kelhli khattini sorry odli khattini


😆😆😆 Ayyo nimge gothilla yeshtu jeeva tintane anta
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: amreen_ashni

Each n every part was totally awesome plz continue soon!


Thank you dear so much 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: moushu

when are you giving the next update



I know , I am very very late but can't help ...I am working for almost 16-17 hrs in my office as this month is bit hectic for us , so i am not getting much time to write ...I finished almost but still last ending is needed ...I will give by this Saturday

sorry once again
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Saturday? 3 more days !!!.
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Originally posted by: rajanigandha26

Saturday? 3 more days !!!.


only 3 days !!! i have to yet to start writing ...😲😆

just kidding , I will try my best to give it by tomorrow .night...😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I mentioned this OS is filmy is because of this chapter 😆 as i used the concept of OBE in here ...This is purely fictitious and I wrote this OS after watching one of my favorite movie " the invisible "...even though i changed the plot , i took the OBE concept from that movie ...

Hope i did not dissapointed you all ...Let me know how it came out 😃

Part 5


Nidhi waited restlessly, but from the gut of her inside she felt that something is wrong …she knows how it works for her brother …he will not understand, he won't...he never did …

She feared to think anything beyond what she left behind ….tears streaked down her face as she pressed Ashuthosh's number to check whether he reached back home safely ..Just to make sure he is not hurt ….

Her call got disconnected when no one picked up from the other end …..she wondered , what has she done? Now what she should do? Why she went out ….why dint she stayed back? Why dint she begged her brother enough to let him go ..Why dint she took the burnt instead of him ….why she let him stay back? …she thought she is strong …but she just the same weak girl who could not even save her sister ….she let her Ashuthosh go away just like her sister ……

Ripping back to reality, it is then she heard the gruff voices …slow but steady angry murmurs ….. Screech of the wheel on rough gravel and in the end there was stillness … stumbling through dark , ripping past her anxiety she stared at her brother …….there was silence , an awful lot of silence when he glared back at her …his look conjured his power over her …..How much he controls everything and she left with nothing but silence ….. " you won't see him ever again ….never!" he replied curtly …just statement which explain everything, may be nothing …..But In the silence that followed she kept hearing it again like stuck record ….tearing her heart apart" " you won't see him ever again ….never" what does that mean ? what have they done to him ….where is he now ?…..

Even before she could stop, words wobbled out from her mouth ……" what you did to him ….?" It was a question for she did not waited for an answer…..looking up She stared at her brother in glowing moonlight …..he did not even flinched under her accusing glance ..

At the moment He looked even uglier and disgusting …something in her snapped at that moment but at the same time her gnawing fear overruled her conscience …..

Her words got robbed away with his one look, she felt hollow and more responsible for whatever happened …..she felt her gnawing silence pressing upon her as her words choked below her tongue and got dissolved in her skull ….

Staring at sky , she realized It's so dark outside, dark as only night could get ,…the overcast sky is warm blanket of death …a choke of sadness seized up in her but she know the real tears will come later …now is surviving getting through it …may be this time she will never get through it …..

Folding her trembling hands around her empty chest, she gasped for breath as his face lingered in her mind …his smiling face , those eyes which followed like protective blanket ..she remembered his look and his smile ….he was her miracle , he was her voice ….he was her one and only friend and yes he was her love ..the way he looked at her sitting in between brightness ...below the stars and glowing moonlight ...that moment she felt so much towards him …..She felt her thudding heart, bursting with emotions …..And now he is gone just like her sister … dissolved in nothingness just like her sister ….maybe he will never come back …. Never ever just like her sister….

Day burns down to night

Burns the edge of my soul

In the night I break into sparks of sun

And become fire's end, the dust of bones

Night knifes my breath

Swallows whole my tongue

Turn back, reverse return

In the night, I see

The real concealed in the day's bright lie.

Eyes stitched shut, white teeth smile

Sleepwalks and talks

And feet mark to the drum less beat …..

-The Invisible

Ashuthosh woke up, he is awoken, his eyes opened and he is on his knees. He can hear the noise, cacophony of words surrounding him…some abrupt, some sharp noises like needle piercing through him ….. The noise whatever it was, he felt it is within him that is how it is sounded, like echo of words he heard so far and the echo could be infact a memory or may be fragment of condensed dream…

He sat upright now and stretched his hands towards the closed blinds...he glanced towards the door, towards window both remained sealed …and then he closed his eyes tight shut When he opened them again he stared at the window and then at the glass …this time its glowing as Sunshine peeked through slightly opened window sending prisms of colors through glass covered test tubes and pipettes

He wondered how he ended up here …in chemistry lab as he walked towards vast brightness ….., he felt the brightness of sun affecting him much more than it normally do...

Its day time and whole college was crowded with students, collecting paper work, getting ready for classes ….as usual there was no difference, he searched for his friends ….he saw them sitting ideal corner of canteen , arman looked bit distressed …mallika busy over phone …he walked up to them ….."Hi Arman …" he slapped his back …..

Arman did not seem to notice his touch as he kept on looking outside with same dejected look …." Arman ….is everything fine?" he asked sliding to his side …..

" Arman …..lest go , Mathur uncle just called ….uncle already filed missing complaint " mallika stated

" missing …..!" Ashu jumped in to face mallika " mallika …who is missing …why baba asked you to come ? " tugging her shoulder Ashu asked …

Completely ignoring his touch as if she did not registered it ..she walked over towards Arman …." Arman …..he will be fine , we have to be there for uncle now …we will find him " her reassuring voice panicked him ….

" who is missing …what happened ?" Ashu yanked at arman's shoulder but Ashu realized his touch is bouncing back …as if he never really could touch them …..

Running as cold wind swept through him ..he rushed through crowded corridors until he reached the closed auditorium door ….pressing his palm tightly on cement railing he clicked open the door to peek inside ..but to his disappointment whole place was deserted …..it is when getting down , something snapped inside …like flicker of images …something not real , something absurd ……and something horrible …..the memories of her tears and her fear gripped look , lingered in his mind ……

It is then he remembered the bruises, the pain and the cold muddy night...and then he mumbled to no one in particular " Am I dead ….?" But to his utter shock he realized, no one could notice him, no one could hear him and no one could see him and he is invisible.

"Hello beta …come in …..We were waiting for you " Alok opened the door for them as mallika and arman entered …..

"Any news where he is uncle …?" Arman spoke for the first time after getting the news that ashu is missing ……

With deep sigh Alok shook his head "no …nothing till now …..But they found his car …and few of things …huh near highway "

Arman tried to open his mouth but then his words got dimmed with kind of fear …" near highway …?" Mallika asked

Her face registered shock and fear ….." what was he doing there?" she asked to no one in particular

An elderly man got from his seat as they entered living area …" he …is kishen singh …dcp commissioner..he was my classmate ….and now he is handling Ashu's case " Alok introduced

" and they are Ashu's friends ….this is arman ….and this is mallika " they shook hand and sank in nearby couch

" where is dadi bua ,…" mallika asked to get over the uncanny silence which started suffocating them

"She is gone to attend family function …I did not informed anything to her…..hoping that things get sorted out even before it reaches her ear " Alok muttered with morose look

"So tell me about Ashuthosh ….." finally Kishen spoke …his voice was smooth, like velvet

"What exactly ….?" Mallika stared back in confusion..

"Anything which will help us to track him ….."

"He was fine ….I mean nothing unusual happened ...Till yesterday!" Mallika informed

" and when is the last time , you both spoke to him …..?"

" not sure ….huh .may be day before …." Mallika ended her sentence " but I spoke to him …yesterday evening …." Arman jumped in ….

"Evening …!" kishen gave curious look at arman " did he mentioned anything where he is ……?"

" no ..he just said that he is with a friend and ……and he said he will tell me everything about it later …"

" a friend ….." nibbling at his lower lip , he thought about it for a second " can you give me the number from where he called ?..."

"He called from his cell phone…..Here ..." Arman extended his mobile and showed received call list …..

Same time a police officer entered carrying plastic folder ..." sir ….No finger prints traced from any of these ….but still we are waiting for blood analysis result ….." and he handed over the folder to kishen …..

" and if I am not wrong ..Mathur told me that Ashuthosh won in some college election …..is that correct ?" He enquired

Arman nodded his head " yes …."

" and can you give me details who was the competitor …..Mathur sometime, I tell this young people take these election too seriously more than our politicians do …." He laughed to lighten up the mood but in turn it did the reverse affect as Alok looked away to hide his dread ……

As Arman gave Aditya's details Alok's cell phone buzzed " Hello …yes ..I am not coming to hospital today …yes ….ok , I will inform priyanka to look into that report …." Telling this he switched off his phone …

" Mathur …I came to KGH 3 days back …..to get statement about that accident case ...very interesting case I must say , in my whole profession …I never came across such a thing …" he mumbled

Alok nodded his head ..." I told the same thing to Ashu ……it was strange how that lady remembered every bit of it …." He replied, after a brief pause he continued " Ashu did not believed when I told him…he said …he is not 5 year old to believe such things " Gazing outside Alok gave a pained smile …..

" So does that happen …., I mean is there any medical explanation to such thing .." Kishen asked to distract him …

" not clearly though ….yes medically we call it OBE ,lucid dreaming ….it is more like hallucination when a person feel disconnected with his brain circuits which process these sensory information " Alok replied burying his face in his palm….

" like nightmare which we cannot get out …."

" No not …like that it is more like sleep paralysis …….To be more precise …it is state of mind when the body is injured but the conscience of person is very much active ….he can look around , see things and hear ….."Alok replied ….

" sir …I got my information " inspector spoke pulling them back to reality ….

"..ok …I want you to go and meet this boy personally ….be smooth and calm, try to take as much information as possible...Don't threaten " Kishen informed ..Nodding his head inspector walked away to carry out his next action ……

"Mathur ….. I will make a move from here…..here take this " extending his hand .he gave out the plastic folder which carried few of Ashu's things ….

" slowly he ripped opened the folder ……to find Ashu's mobile ….one dairy , broken camera lens …few of driving licensee documents …… "Whatever he was holding up so far burst out as sudden tear streaked down his face …..

" Mathur ….. don't worry , be brave ….I will promise that , I will find your son soon ……have faith ." kishen patted his back reassuringly ..

With a deep disappointed sigh kishen looked at Arman and Mallika ..." one last question ….."

" is there anyone ….any girl with whom Ashuthosh is linked with ….?" Alok stared at his friends face ….

" as far as I know …..no one .." Arman muttered

But mallika who seem to fidgeting with some thought till now …who was trying to link up the dots suddenly looked up ….." yes there is one …." …Hmm..ashu loved ….love her " Mallika stuttered

Making everyone stare at her with baffled look

" who is she ? " Kishen asked

" her name ..is …Nidhi …Nidhi verma ..She is Aditya verma's sister …the one who missed out in this election "Mallika mumbled

"Ok then …..I will ask Amar to contact her once …" telling this he got up from his seat ……

What is happening? Where am I going? No one could see me? Can hear me? What they did to me? , did they kill me? …….." hello ..." Ashu shrieked standing in between crowded streets , No one winced , no one even turned their head to his side …….His ear drums ached, throbbed begging for some comforting words …anger bubbled up and receded as fast it appeared confusion is the only thing left constantly keeping him company …..Walking into familiar background …Ashuthosh breathed in …he felt better; as he stared at his home ……towards his closed bedroom blinds and then his eyes caught sight of police jeep standing in his drive way ….he walked past it brushing his hand over plush, shining slammer …….He could hear their low murmurs and talks as he entered living area, his gaze first fell on his baba who is sitting with a grief stricken face….at the moment , he looked old and worn out and exhausted just like him …trying to figure out what exactly happened .

Sliding down next to his baba, he tugged at his baba's hands "baba, I am here …"

He could see the tear in his baba's eyes "can you give me details of the competitor?" something snapped in him when he heard those words …jerking his head up , he gazed at elderly looking police officer " I will tell you ..His name is Aditya verma …. And he killed me last night ! Cracked my skull …..And killed me in cold muddy road" His words wobbled and echoed in nothingness …." No one can hear me ….." Ashu groaned burying his face in his palm

" Ashu did not believed when I told him …he said …he is not 5 year old to believe such things " he gazed at pained expression on his baba's face ….

" Baba , I am dead …"his words sounded so hollow and empty , rebounding, bouncing back and forth but never reaching anyone ….

" So does that happen …., I mean is there any medical explanation to such thing .." he saw that elderly police asking his baba …

" not clearly though ….yes medically we call it OBE ,lucid dreaming ….it is more like hallucination when a person feel disconnected with his brain circuits which possess these sensory information " Ashuthosh sighed getting up from couch …tracing his finger on glass window ……he gazed outside

" like nightmare which we cannot get out …."

" yes a sickening nightmare ….which I don't know how to get out …." Ashu huffed out his words

" No not …like that it is more like sleep paralysis …….To be more precise …it is state of mind when the body is injured but the conscience of person is very much active ….he can look around , see things and hear ….."Alok replied ….

Pressing his palm over glass window Ashu breathed in….." sleep paralysis" "body is injured" "conscience…. very much active" those words bounced on him as he turned back his head …..It is just a flicker of truth but complete, creeping inside his mind as realization hit him …..

" does that mean am I alive?" he asked facing them …..

" Am I alive ?..." he tugged at his baba , No response ….

" Am I alive….? " he shrieked to get their attention …..no response

" Am I alive ?" he screamed on top of his lungs but it was scream of delight as his voice reverberated through walls around him and he let it sink in …into his inside ….and mumbled to no one in particular " I am Alive "

Aditya was pretty beaten up by the time he pulled in front of roadside dhaba , He cursed himself for getting into this mess ! What was he thinking when he killed him…?? Beating up people is one thing but killing is altogether different ….that too Ashuthosh Mathur.

Police must have sniffed his scent by now, that's why the phone call from inspector Amar "Hell…"he muttered and proceeded towards his gang of friends who are sitting with dejected expression….

Since he started this mess , he took the responsibility to clean it up even before anyone could get a chance to glimpse what he has done….after dumping the body somewhere safe , he returned and wiped everything they touched , everything they did not touched …everything they stepped upon …smashed camera lens , wiped the blood mark and he sat with patience bigger than himself as he worked on strategy to get out of it….he asked Akash to get rid of the vehicle and he buried their bloodshed clothes somewhere in outskirt of lucknow … in middle of woods ….No one can see , no one can even get glimpse of it …he smiled to himself.

After coming back, good shower helped him to cool down his stressed out brain ….and he sat calmly, showing outside world that it is just another day …nothing much changed….nothing much

But only thing troubled him is nidhi! He know her …he know how she is …he know how easy to manipulate and shut her mouth by making her guilty for things she has not done…. she will turn her head the way he asked her to …and look at the things he wanted her to see , it's easy to suppress her words and crush her thoughts …. He had done that once…. all those years back when their sister died ….making her feel guilty she is least responsible for ….but back then she was just a kid ….not more than 14 but now things changed …she is woman with a firm head ….he know even though most of the time …she look indifferent, quiet ..Mute. But from inside she is more like bundle of suppressed aggression ….he feared that this incident might turn out as trigger to break through her silence …. Venting out her anger , her hurt ……

" I asked you to get rid of that goddamn car .. " it is nitin hissing at Akash ….

" Not again…" Aditya thought as he rolled on side chair …

" get rid ! …I cannot burn down that thing Can I ? " how do you want me to get rid of it …." AKash snapped back ….

" I don't know ..that's not my problem , you should solved it by yourself …but no one asked you to leave that thing in middle of highway" Agitated nitin responded

" now they are fighting ….." great thought Aditya

" I was pretty drunk ..scared and …I dint knew what to do …." Akash confessed

" I saw them ….today morning , all those police officers and forensic nerds …sniffing here and there …trying to find our bloody finger print " Nitin mumbled with pretty scared voice ….

Jerking his head up aditya glared at him " tell me …..You are not stalking them?"

" I was …what else you want me to do …that is the only way I can save myself from getting strangled " Irritated Nitin snapped back ….

He can understand their plight , their fear …he know everyone are in mess but what irritated him the most is their stupidity through which they are letting people look at them with suspicious eyes ….

His friends who flaunt themselves with such heroism...in real nothing but hollow, weak and plain stupid …. Here the time came and their neck is in cutter and booom…..they cannot even handle the pressure "such a babies "he huffed out ….

Turning his head towards nitin , he spoke with very calm voice " Nitin ….here listen to me …"

Nitin who sat like nervous wreck stared back " what you need to remember is this ….when police look out for someone ..they see only those who is looking out for trouble …you understood ?"

Nitin shook his head "They won't look at you ..Cannot see you until you let them look at you...Understood!" aditya muttered ….

" and you are waiting for them to look at you …your face , your body language …everything about you emitting only one signal " I am here …come get me …" and this is what they are looking for " he muttered ….

He saw his friend shudder inwardly …." Now what to do ..?" Nitin asked at last …

" nothing …just pretend ….that you don't know anything until you feel that you are out of cutter, problem will arise if they find him …but you know they can't track his body "Aditya smirked

" how you know all this ….?" Akash asked abruptly addressing aditya

Aditya looked at him sharply " why's that important ? if I were you I would make sure there was never reason for my name to get till police ..Know what I mean "he huffed out and turned his head away …..

Just then his cell phone buzzed….He shuddered when he saw Nidhi's name flashing on caller ID " hello …." He breathed in ….

"I need to talk to you …." Her voice sounded distant but determined…..

His eyes hardened as kind of rage crawled on his face ….fisting his fingers in tight fist he thought …this is the last things He needed at the moment …..to hear her talk …because the problem is not about the talk …but the problem is nidhi want o talk …after all these years ..she want to talk ….that mean she do not want keep her silence anymore…she is ready to blurt out her bottled up aggression….and it is not good …not at all …..Good …

Tears streaked from corner of her eyes wetting the curls behind her ears ….fisting herself into tight fistful ball, she clutched her pillow … she could hear him, feel him somewhere near …. She is gone through the same thing all those years when her sister died …she used to feel her sister presence next to her for days after that incident but actually it was her imagination..Only her own imagination …..Created in her head to get through those darkest nights …..

" Ashuthosh is missing …" that young inspector informed her when he came to meet her….Did she heard it correctly ? how can he go missing …..and where is he now ?as inspector waited for statement patiently ,she had to look down to hide her grief ….her turmoil ….she wished she could tell him , everyone but her throat did not supported , her dead tongue collapsed …her words left her side when she needed them the most …..she do not want to lie anymore , do not want to hide anything anymore ..she felt too exhausted keeping everything inside from so long ...

In the silence that followed ….those words kept hanging , rewinding in her head ….like a messed up juke box which got stuck with same song …..She wished it will stop

" did they really killed him ….? Cannot be ….He cannot die….." a part of her shrieked ….but where is he? What they did to him …every time she conjured the strength to stand in front of her brother …something broke inside her …fearing that she might end up breaking into pieces more than she is now ...she wished she could break her silence now

She wished she is brave enough to voice her anger …..At her brother...At least now

Burying herself in bed ….she cursed herself for letting this happen, what she has done! Why she dragged him in her life...why she let it happen …why dint she stayed back ?...why she is not doing anything now ….why she is so weak shell of human , so easy to manipulated and here she is …lost in her own grief and loss ….lost in her own fear.

It just for a moment, then she heard him "nidhi …"whispered voice , drawing her out of the void , she recognized it immediately, just as she realized it was a invent of her desperate imagination, because the real owner of that voice would never be here, talking to her.
"Nidhi, Wake up," he murmured, his deep voice cutting through the layers of the darkness. "Don't do this. …don't let me go …Fight it."
She did not want to wake up. There was nothing but pain waiting for her in the real world. If she was asleep, she couldn't feel anything. It was her retreat, her sanctuary. She drew back from Ashu's voice, deeper into the comforting blackness. And, through the layer of dreams and madness, she heard a quiet sob.
"Please." A hand gripped her, real and solid, attaching her to the present "Nidhi …Please come out of it …." The voice broke off, took a ragged breath. "Don't leave," it whispered. "Nidhi, don't do this "

It is as if happened very first day, when she met him …his fingers firmly pressed on her trembling finger ,..she felt his touch , like magic releasing her pain and fear and all those uncertainty… may be she is dreaming ……

" Nidhi …" she heard his voice as she curled back in bed , it pierced through her heart …his breath brushing near her ear …she could hear him …feel him ..Like so real … she could hear his heart thudding near her back ….. his hands groping around her waist pulling her to his chest ...His voice soft likes velvet, whispering something only to her …." Nidhi ….save me , fight for me ….else…I will die " his voice reverberated through her conscience , jerking out of her half slumber she looked around ….her eyes filled as she stared at empty room …..For a moment she felt nothing then something in her shifted, suddenly terrifying like nothing she experienced before …white hot rage erupted...it consumed her fully, an exploding fire storm …which she never felt before ……it is then she clutched her mobile and pressed her brother's number and whispered " I need to talk to you …" her reaction was pretty impulsive and nothing but the result of her grief and loss which she is not able to take ……

She called him to talk ….Talk to him of all those day ….talk about all of his awful secrets and his manipulation….she need to know what they did to him …..she need to see him now …she know what will happen if she open her mouth but she dint cared …nor stopped herself …..Instead she felt calm and determined ….

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Sai!!

you have a real good collection of the poetry... and used them so well...👏


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