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Shafaq

@shafaq92

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Posted: 17 years ago

#291

Originally posted by: shabo24
First of all, I am SO mad at myself you have no idea!!!!!!!!!!😡
How come I didn't know about this? Huh Shafaq???*puts hands on hips* You are such a DAMN good writer and you don't think about dropping me a SINGLE PM lettine me know??😕Gosh....Aaj kal ke baache.....!(LMAO, that doesn't really work, I'm younger then you!)

Mad 😲 but why? Oh acha....aww I'm really sorry 😳 hun.....I should have let you know. I don't think I told anyone personally though. Promise won't make such a mistake 😊 again! I'm a bacha 😳 huh? We'll see who the Bacha is here?

Amazing. Fantastic. Beautiful. Great. Poetic. Awsome. Flawless. Out of this world.

I honestly think even THAT is not enough to describe this WONDERFUL FF.😃I am not just saying that....it is truly one of the BEST FF's I have ever read on the whole of IF!!! It is so well written!

Uff stop already 😳.....I can't stop blushing. You're too kind 🤗 Shabo! I honestly do not deserve this much praise. But it means so much 😃 too me. I have no words to express my gratitude. You've made my day [:D/> dear!

The way you describe each and every person's feeling, showing the raw pain, the emmense joy, the overwhelming emotions....it keeps the readers so hooked and intruged as to what will happen next! That is truly a sign of a writer. Ever considered a career in writing? I would so buy that book! Sign me up! That book would so be an instant best-seller!

OMG 😲 a career as a writer? No not really but who knows? In reality writing....English....languages basically have been my weak point 😳. I've always been a Maths/Science type of person and so this is such a big compliment.

The plot line itself is so interesting to read. I loved how you kept the basics of the original story but then added on to as how they met, their developing love story, thier problems, how they handle it etc.

I tried to keep it simple and I succeeded. As for keeping the basics....I felt it was extremely necessary as without that the story would have lost its original charm don't you think?

Coming to how they met....WOW! Meeting hua toh asi! It was so cute and adorable with Heer opening hte door, being completly thrown of guard when realizing who it was!🤣I think if it was me, I would have slammed the door in her face!!! And then Prem. Loving his charachter didz! It was so cute and so PREM like to fall in love with Heer like that! *snap* Very sweet begining right there.

Let me tell you....I wanted to do something different...unique you could say and that was when it hit me. You would have shut the door in his face? If it was Prem i.e Harshad 😳 standing on my doorstep I'd be too shocked to react let alone shut the door in his face.

Right of the bat, in thier relationships, mis-understandings....and I LOVED THAT!👏Now they have such a STRONG and UNBREAKABLE base to thier relationship, I can't wait to see how future problems and issues are handaled in thier married life.

That's exactly what I wanted to portray....their unconditional love for each other which may I add is still in its developing stages. Nevertheless its beginning to show what an unbreakable bond they share. Coming to future problems.....seeing as how understanding and practical 👍🏼 both characters are I'm sure they'll handle whatever comes their way rather logically.

Loving the side characters, Preet, Meher, Harman, Ash....(she cracks me up) Though I'm confused at whatever future love tracks you might have planned?😕Help a girl out!

At the moment I'm thinking 🤔 Preet-Ash and Harman-Meher but you never know 😉 with me. I'm really unpredictable 😆 but I hope that helps. Oh and yes Ash is a very humorous 🤣 character indeed.

The lil scenes you incoporated all over the FF showing the developing love story...very commmendble!!!!😃😃Me was giggling through so many! Thier describtions and chemistry is AMAZING!

I'm pleased 😃 to hear you liked them. I wanted to make it as realistic as possible which I felt could only be possible if I included everyone in the story.

Ughhhh ok each story has to have a villian or a problem! Hating DJ right now....am cursing moder technology! That's how she munitpulated the picture right??😕What a sicko. Honestly, I had to read the Choli part a couple of times to actually digest it!! Really felt for Balraaj there. All his hops and dreams were supposadly shattered in one second. Amazing how much can change in one second. *melo-dramatic*

I believe you're confused 😕 Shabz if not mistaken.....it really was Ash during that choli scene and DJ took advantage of the situation 😡 by taking pictures of the two together. If you go back to the scene it was such a brief moment of togetherness.....plus they didn't even get to face each other so Ash didn't have the chance to protest. She wasn't aware of her mother's instant plan though. You really think DJ has the brains 😆 to manipulate pictures using modern technological methods? I hope 😊 I've cleared things for you a bit. It just comes to show how nothing lasts forever....one minute you can be the happiest person on earth and the next you could be the saddest. Its a matter of a split of a second.

OMG....COMA.....and Heer and Prem's relationship on the rocks!!!😲Waiting VERY eagarly to see what you make of the current story line!!!😉I am literallty bouncing up and down in my seat....! Very impatient I am....can you tell?😉😉

Yes I can tell you're very impatient 😆......araam seh behto Shabo 😛...itna uchalna sehat ke liye theek nayi. I promise I won't torture you for long....I'll update soon just for my new reader here.

One more thing....loving the family love in between of all this....but why do I have the feeling Veera will turn eviil? *slaps herself* OK pretend I didn't say that, don't want you getting any ideas!!!😳

Veera and evil ❓ huh? I had no such plans....but why do both you and kimmu give me such ideas though? I never have the heart 😳 to refuse you guys and so I must follow suit 😈 muhahah.

🤢The worst part of this FF.....THAT LALIT IN A TOWEL SCENE! OMG I AM SCARED FOR LIFE!!!!!When I read that....I was like.....ewwwwwwwwwwww!!!🤢🤢And then I got images in my damn wild magination! *hits head* But I have to tell you, you got guts! Writing such a scary part!!!😃

Lalit in a Towel 😕 ? Oh I had completely forgotten. Are you talking about the time when Preet mixed itching powder in his soap or something like that? Writing it is different 😆 yaar. Tsk tsk Shabz what are you doing actually imagining Lallu 🤣 in a towel? How are you still alive? I'd be scarred for life.

Update whenever!!!!

Shabz

Whenever 🥳 huh? So much freedom.....let me tell you I'm a very lazy 😆 updater. But like I said.....I'll be updating soon that too just for you dear.

P.S. Hey, drop in a note at my FF as well....not as developed as yours but its my baby!😆

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/kis-desh-mein-hai-meraa-dil/1026237/ff-hum-saath-saath-hain-completed

Yeah I've noticed you've started a FF.....yet to read it though. I just haven't had the time 😔 too but I will. I'm sure its absolutely 👍🏼 great!

OK then....waiting EAGLRY for your update!!! Get my point??😆

Yeah yeah I get your point....pehle kehti ho update whenever and then I'm waiting eagerly....itna confuse kyun kar rahi ho? Jokes apart...I won't keep you waiting for long.

Welcome to the FF 😊 Shabo! Thanks 😃 and do keep reading!

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Shafaq

@shafaq92

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#292

Originally posted by: salma_786786
First of all im sorry Shafaq i wasn't here to read all your updates especially when you soo kindly dedicated many to me and others.... luv ya 🤗

Aww its okay Salma 😳.....no worries 🤗 at all.

Argh that Daljeet... i want to kill her here... but in the serial im kinna missing her... i have no idea why... i can't believe she is willing to disgrace her daughter like that... sooo disgusting... i knew it Prem didn't kiss Heer's neck... something smelled fishy to me... i applaud you on the way you created the suspense... i had me reaching the wall on whether im right or not 😆😆😆...

Oh so its not just me then 😆.....I miss her as well. As for disgracing her daughter......DJ 🤢 can do anything for money so what's this? Wouldn't it have been great 😉 if it had really been Premeer! I'm glad 😃 I was able to create the suspense I had intended on creating.

When that guy showed Balraaj the picture i thought ohhhh goddd why can't Premeer get married anywhere but THANK YOU SOOO MUCH for getting Premeer hooked 😆😆 no-one can split these two up now... its unfortunate about Balraaj but (Allah forgive me) im kinna glad he is out of the picture for a while... coz i don't think i can handle Heer misunderstanding Prem....

I just had to get them married 😍....couldn't resist myself. Besides otherwise it would have resulted in even more problems! Don't worry.....a lot of people are glad he's out for a while.

Mannat!!!! i can not believe Heer made that... why is she blaming herself/Prem and their relationship????

She's in a very difficult position but I agree her behavior 😕 with Prem isn't justified....hopefully she'll understand that soon.

Shafaq hun i just love your FF... its sooo simple and the plot itself is sooo interesting... your keeping to the main characters and not adding new characters every 5 minutes like the show... PLUS your starting the Harman and Meher track... yayyyyy will be amazing to get some info on them...
i was sooooo shocked when i saw that scene with Harman and Meher in the library because i was rooting for Preet and Meher but i realised H and M aren't soo bad together... soooo this is why im excited about how your gonna come about with this new relationship....

Thanks a lot 😊 Salma! On the Harman-Meher track....it was quite a spontaneous decision but I'm pleased to hear many of you have liked it. Oh you were rooting for Preet-Meher as well? So was I! As they say great minds think a like 😆. But I guess the Harman-Meher jodi will be quite interesting as well.

can't wait for next part...
Great updatesss 😆😆 hun...👏👏👏

I can understand your eagerness 😛. Thanks again.

Edited by shafaq92 - 17 years ago

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Shafaq

@shafaq92

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#293

Part
14

Hello Hello 😊

How is everyone? Schools/colleges will be starting 😡 if they haven't already and then it will be back to that same old routine ugh! I'll be starting on Monday myself. Since I'll be going to a new place....I'd like your best wishes. I personally don't like change much but hopefully I'll settle down in no time inshallah. Anyhow lets look on the bright side 😆.....I'm back with yet another part of this FF. I hope haven't kept you all waiting 😳 for too long. Now I know this part doesn't have much Premeer but there will be many scenes between the two in the upcoming parts so that's something for you all to look forward too!

But before you start reading.....I was wondering if any one could be kind enough 😳 to make a siggy/banner for this FF. I'd really appreciate it! I tried doing it myself and let me tell you it was an absolute disaster . PM me if you're interested. Thanks in advance!

Coming to dedications...I'll spare you this time, kimmu but not for long 😈 muhahaha. As this Part is dedicated to Shabo - welcome to the FF 😊 dear as well as Salma - welcome back to the FF 😆 dear.

A very big thank you 🤗 to the rest of my readers as well for taking the time out to read this FF along with commenting. It means so much 😳 to me.

Shafaq 😃
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She entered the bedroom hoping Prem wouldn't be there but to her dismay he was. It was his room after-all! Now it being almost 5:30AM in the morning anyone would expect him to be fast asleep but he was wide-awake and sat on the bed with his laptop in his lap. It looked as if he was trying to divert his mind with work but it didn't seem to be working too well. Heer wanting no conversation with her husband picked out a night gown from her still packed suitcase and rushed into the bathroom before Prem was given the chance to speak. Although they hadn't conversed at all.....he had seen the apprehension in her eyes. It was clearly evident that she wasn't too keen on sharing a bedroom with him. Perhaps if the circumstances had been different then their relationship would be too. But they weren't and sooner or later he'd have to compromise. They had hardly been married for a couple of hours. Prem understood exactly what she was going through and so by the time she returned from the bathroom he had already shifted to the two seater leather sofa in his bedroom with his laptop. She silently thanked him by smiling through her eyes. Prem acknowledged it and nodded his head lightly as if to say "no problem".

Heer then said a silent prayer to herself thanking God for not putting her in a difficult position. She wouldn't be able to handle anymore. But then for how long would she stall? She put aside any such thoughts and made her way to the bed which was placed in the centre of the bedroom. Heer lay awake for almost the rest of the night thinking of the sudden turn her life had taken complaining to God, pleading with Him to make things alright.

However Prem having no strength left within him fell asleep in no time.
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The following day, Juneja Mansion

Gayatri paced the living room tense as ever waiting to hear hopefully what would be good news from the hospital but little did she know that their good days had long gone. She was home with Teji, Kulraaj and her kids. Everyone else was obviously at the hospital. Finally after what had felt like an eternity the phone rang and she leapt over to it like a lion would to its prey.

"Hello..." she whispered into the phone.

There was complete silence for a while. She assumed it was a wrong number and decided to hang up but before she could do just that Prem spoke up mustering all the courage needed to do so.

"Haan Maa.....main Prem bol raha hoon." he said as if announcing his presence.

"Are Prem pehle kyun nayi bola? Mujhe laga wrong number hoga." she asked curiously whilst alerting the rest that it was a call from the hospital indeed.

"Woh Maa......uncle ki halaat bigarti jaa rahi hai. There are no chances of recovery anytime soon according to the doctors. Its well past 24 hours now as well. He could be in coma for months at the least if not years!" Prem stated getting straight to the point. There was no point hiding facts from his mother. She'd eventually find out.......having the ability to read right through him and his eyes.

"Yeh kya keh raha hai Prem! Shub bol beta!" she scolded angrily as quietly as she could unable to believe what she had just been told by her son.

"I want to Maa! Lekin doctors ne bhi jawaab de diya hai. Baaqi sab ghar arahein hain. Main abhi hospital mein hi hoon. They have to shift uncle to the long-term intensive care unit. Mujhe thori deir hojayegi. Heer bahut zidd kar rahi thi rukne ke liye lekin Meher ne use aunty ke naam per manaa liya. Woh raaste mein hi honge. Maa aap Teji aunty ko sambhaal lena aur Bauji toh poori tara seh toot gayein hai. Don't go into much detail with them! Even Heer and Meher don't know everything yet. No one does besides me, Preet and Balwant uncle." he carefully explained gradually revealing one truth after another.

"Acha theek hai beta. Deir mat karna lekin." she agreed with a heavy sigh and tried to put on a brave face for the rest who she would now have to face unfortunately.

As soon as she put the phone down she found Teji standing in front of her with her pleading eyes.

"Kya kaha Prem ne? Woh theek toh hain na? Doctors ne kya kaha? Aap kuch bol kyun nahi ri!" she asked one by one expecting immediate answers in return but when she didn't get them she became frustrated.

Gayatri gathered herself and finally responded "Bhai saab kuch dino mein bilkul theek hojayenge. Abhi tak toh woh coma mein hai lekin aap umeed mat hariye. Bhagwaan par bharosa kariye! Kuch hi deir mein sab ghar ajayenge.....unse saari baat pata chal jayegi. Lekin aap unki bilkul fikr mat karein. Prem hain na? Woh sab sambhaal lega. Aap sirf Meher aur Heer ka hausla buland rakhein. Unko aapki zaroorat hai!" she tried stalling by diverting her attention.

Just as Gayatri ended however the members from both families made a quiet entrance. Kiran thought it was best to leave them alone and so took Kulraaj and the kids away to the solitude of their bedroom. Veera too knew she'd break down being the highly emotional person she was if she stayed there any longer and so escaped to the safety of her bedroom. Harman took Meher to the garden on the pretense of being in a calm environment so that she could relax herself. Now only Lalit and Heer remained. They narrated whatever they had been told by the doctor word for word just a while back but not even they knew the truth. All they knew was that Baraaj's recovery would be a long process which would take many weeks and at the most a couple of months but that was about it! Prem had requested for the news of Balraaj's survival rate being extremely low to be kept from the rest of the family for as long as possible. He knew that no one would be able to handle it! At-least not right then. Teji believed them and felt a lot more relieved. She didn't question unnecessarily anymore but not wanting to be a burden on her daughter's in-laws for any longer did make a humble request. She appealed to Lalit stating that it was her desire for her and Meher to live with Balwant rather than at their newly wed daughter's in laws. After-all that was where they had been staying up till the marriage and who knew how long Balraaj's recovery would take. They had to think practically. What would people think? They couldn't over-stay their welcome any longer.

Lalit initially refused seeing Heer's sullen expression but on Gayatri's insistence allowed Teji to do whatever she felt was right. He didn't fail to remind her constantly how her daughter needed her as well at such a time but Teji simply stated that Heer had so many people to take care of her and besides they would be just a phone call away. Balwant didn't live very far from there! So Lalit gave in as well understanding Teji's perspective. He called Balwant on their behalf and asked him to pick them up if he could. He happily agreed and set on his way straight away.

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Preet saw Ash approaching their main door and turned towards the opposite direction immediately. But it was already to late as Ash caught up with him in no time.

"Preet! Kahaan bhaage jaa rahe ho? What's the hurry!" she shouted after him forcing him to do nothing but too stop.

"OH Ash! Tum? Yahaan?" he tried acting pleasantly surprised.

"Haan woh main aur Dad.....Teji Tayi aur Meher ko pick karne aye hain. Kidhar hain sab?" she asked casually.

"Andar hi honge. Listen I gotta go. PB mera intezaar kar rahe hain. Bye!" he explained in a rush leaving straight after he did so.

Ash just stood staring into space after him. Why wouldn't he acknowledge her presence? Preet had preferred to stay away from her since their first meeting. But Ash, she couldn't help but feel attracted towards him. Now was it just attraction or more? This only time would tell.

By the time Ash and Balwant arrived, Teji and Meher were saying their goodbyes to the Junejas as well as to a rather upset Heer. Once they had left, Gayatri tried consoling her troubled daughter-in-law but failed miserably and so Lalit and Gayatri decided it was best to let her be giving her time alone to herself. They planned on advising Prem to do the same in order to avoid the pain he'd receive from her ignoring him.

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Daljeet couldn't believe her eyes when she her good for nothing husband escort her Jethani and her daughter into their house. At first she thought her eyes had deceived her but soon she realized this was reality in-front of her. She forcefully put on a happy face and welcomed them into their home at the same time expressing her condolences on Balraaj's state. Daljeet constantly glared at her husband angrily warning him of what she could do. But she'd deal with him later. He was getting out of hand and Daljeet wasn't going to let that happen. For the last 23 years of their marriage she had kept him in her muthi you could say. Now she wasn't going to let go so easily and she knew exactly how.

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amana

@AmanaR

Navigator

Posted: 17 years ago

#294

great update!!!!!! i hope heer starts being nice to prem again really soon

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tanya

@tanyaaaa26

Dazzler

Posted: 17 years ago

#295

superb dear ab bas premeer ke scenes bhi dikhana next time but very nice do cont soon i will be waiting

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@shabo24

Rocker

Posted: 17 years ago

#296

OK to start of....in reply to your reply to my comments....oppsie....me was confused.....I think I may have skipped that part or skimmed read it, cuz sometimes when you past, something weird happens, like the story/part you have written is split down the middle so I can only read the left side. Dunno how many more people it happens too....but those parts, I don't get ot read in detial....so I just get the gist of it....!😳

Awwwww, you dedicated it to me! That's very sweet of you! It's cuz of the lamba comment naa? 😆 Well, keep in mind, that comment was the length of 13 comments....since I missed 13 parts! Will still try to keep my comments long!!!😃

The lil Prem and Heer interacting was so pure in the begining! WOW! I was like....jodi ho toh asi! Prem just understood her so well and what she was going through. Speaking of that, poor girl. On the happiest day of her life she sees her father go through a major heart attack!

Loving the Prem-Gayatri converstaion. They honestly and truly care for thier well being. 👏 Hats of to samdei jee! 👏 Ohhhh, getting impatient are they....! Can't wait to see how that realtionship progresses!

🤣 THAT PREET ASH SCENE.....was SOOOO FUNNY! OMG....I could completly see that happening!!!!😃🤣🤣 Loving that!!

Stupid DJ at the end...I honestly am prayign for her husband....he has no idea what he is playing with! I am sooo HOOKED! Intruging!!! Update soon! (No freedom this time)😉

Ohhh, university eh? I started grade 10 this week....so I know what you mean about the same routune etc etc. Good luck!!!

Shabz