||Tujhe Yaad Na Meri Aayi|| Song Fic (Premeer)

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Tujhe Yaad Na Meri Aayi


....rabba mere ishq kisiko aise na tadpaye...


She couldn't believe he left her. How could he go like that? Didn't he realize how much pain he had caused her the FIRST time she thought he died? There was no way she could live now just seeing him for 5 minutes as HER Prem. She needed to see him again.


...tujhe yaad na meri aayi
kisise ab kya kehna
dil roya ki ankh bhar aayi
kisise ab kya kehna...

Heer rushed into their bedroom and put her hand on his shoulder to turn him around. "Tum nahin jaa sakhte,"


"Heer, main kal jaa raha hoon." Prem says softly.


Heer shakes her head furiously. "Tum kahin nahi jaa rahe," She holds onto his shoulders.


"Heer, think rationally. If I'm leaving tomorrow, this while night will be torture for your memories," Prem sighs taking her hands away from his shoulders.


"Give me this night. I want at least one night with MY Prem," She pleads in front of him.


Prem takes one look in her eyes, and Heer could feel him wanting to say yes, but then his eyes went cold and he turned on his heel. "Main ma ke paas jaraha hoon,"


...tujhe har khushi dedi...labon ki hasi dedi


She had loved him with all her heart. He gave her all her happiness and she had though that she had given him all that in return. How could he leave like that? She wouldn't let him leave. The one time she had to go through the time that he had left her was enough. She wasn't going to let him take her life again. He was HER life. Without him, she was just breathing. Living was something she did the day he stepped into her life the first time around, and then back when she was in Rajasthan he came back to her like a breath of fresh air, pumping her back to life. Why was he being so difficult with her now? Didn't he love her the same way? How could he even stop himself from being near her? Feeling those last thoughts Heer holds her sides and slides down the wall, wallowing in tears.


....khata hogayi mujhse....kaha kuch nahin tumse...


Prem slowly rubs Vikas' head, sitting in his lap. Why didn't he tell Heer right away? He could see the question in her eyes, but he told her. He didn't want to see her in pain again. Why couldn't she understand that it was her wellbeing? He knew that they were one person with two bodies, yet he was trying to pull himself away, why couldn't she stop holding on.Every time he came in front of her, he could see the pain disappear from her eyes. He was the solution to her pain and she was his relief. Why did god have to play such cruel games with him? Pulling him away from death just to give him another four months to stay without his family and his life, HIS Heer? Wasn't there something he could do? He spent the rest of the night contemplating his next move.Early in the morning when Heer awoke, it was still dark outside and she didn't see HER Prem anywhere and so she rushed towards the kids' room and saw him smiling in his sleep, with his hand on top of Vikas' head. As if he could tell, Prem's eyes slowly fluttered open and his smile widened seeing Heer standing in the doorway.

...iqraar jo tum kar paate...to dur kabhi na jaate...

Slowly Prem's smile faded away and Heer could see the cold look coming back in his eyes. Why was he putting up a wall in front of her? She was HIS Heer, not some stranger! More than devastated now, Heer was frustrated with the way he was acting and she went back to her room without turning back once.

....koi samjhe na peer parayi....
...kisise ab kya kehna...

When she got in her room she grabbed her pillow and cried, letting out the pain, letting out the angst she felt towards Prem at that moment. The same Prem who had vowed to be with her forever, now he was leaving her? When she needed him? Who does that? She wouldn't be able to live without him again. Ek baar kiya tha, ab nahin hoga,

I couldn't think of an ending, so it was sorta abrupt! 😔 but I still hope you guys like it! 😳 And as for having them together at the ending, I wasn't sure if I wanted it like that...cus personally I'm UPSET with Prem for thinking that way! 😛

Love you loads,

Meera😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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*comes flying in* I'm here!
Omg Meera that was soo sad! I LOVED it! That's all I'm gonna say cuz I'm pretty much speechless. I love how whatever you wrote went with the lyrics of the song. No wait! The lyrics of the song went with what you wrote😉😆 I dunno what I'm talking about😆 My arm is still a bit sore so I'm gonna stop blabbering on and on😆
-Agent Ravs😎
Edited by -Ravjot- - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Oh........ that was so sad!!!!!! I'm upset at the story line right now!!!!!
There so much pain and frustration in this one-shot!!!! That was really nice!!!!! I hope you continue to write them!!!!
I really hope that Prem finds out that the docter lied!!!!! Curse you doctor ke nam pe ek daag!!!!!!
Nice one-shot though!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Heya! I was looking for the next part of Dhadke Jiya but I found this instead and hey, no regrets!
This is so sad...I liked the putting up a cold front parts, for some odd reason or another. And the ending was just fine! I think it does pretty much sum up Heer and how she feels...At any rate, the doctor must die.
Love,
Bhav (:
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Posted: 16 years ago
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omg that was sooooo sad...but i loved it
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Meeru, the doctor must die. Has Bhav told you our plan? I've asked Jaz as well. If we can get many people, we can go throttle her *maniac laughter*
Erm, right, anywho, what a tragic story, so sad, made me wanna cry. And the best part is, that's one of my favourite songs. Heh. I'm messed up.
The way you've expressed their pain, their anger at the situation, Heer's justified anger at Prem was wonderful. This is a brilliant piece of work, and the ending fit, it wasn't abrupt at all!
Love,
Radz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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simply awsome..present track is soooo confusd..

sree

Posted: 16 years ago
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I get dibs on scraping the doctor's head against a cheese grater!

But that was just wow. One of the best traigc stories I've ever read, I really think you can write it all from intensity, slap-stick, fluff and tragic! You rock at it, and honestly this one-shot had me tearing at my insides, it was all so CRUEL and heartbreaking! =[

Loved it to bits!

--shabz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey Meera!!
That was awesome....A really sad story bt hey who sed all love stories have a happy ending!!! L-o-v-e-d it to bits...
Khushbu x
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Posted: 16 years ago
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I'll comment back soon! 😃 But Khushi, that's the thing, I didn't want to give it a clear ending, he could not go and stay back or he could leave her there again...open ending! 😃

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