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Posted: 16 years ago
Hey. Sorry, the update is a day late, but I was having trouble penning down how I wanted the part to go. I'm happy with the middle bit, but not so much the beginning. Though it was fun to write. 😆 I hope you guys enjoy.

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Part 9


The engagement party was in full swing. Preet was dancing with Ash in the crowd, trying to rope his brothers in as well. Harman retreated to a corner, uncomfortable in his light brown sherwani. Prem was fidgeting in his cream-coloured sherwani, eyes flicking to the staircase every few moments. Ash reluctantly pulled away from Preet when she noticed Mahek frantically gesturing at her from the second floor. Preet admired the way her pale pink lehnga looked against her complexion as she made her way upstairs. He smirked, throwing one end of his dark blue dupatta over his shoulder.

"Hai, kya dikhti hai,"
he whistled softly. A sudden slap on his back stunned him, and he turned slowly. Shaurya raised an amused eyebrow.

"Kya keh rahey they?"

"Kuch – kuch nahin, bas,"
Preet shrugged slightly. "I was admiring the view."

Shaurya chuckled. "You have guts, my friend."

Preet gave a little bow. "Thank you."

"Ab chale?"
Shaurya steered the blue sherwani clad young man to the rest of the family.

A hush fell over the crowd as all eyes turned to the staircase. A vision in cream was making her way down the stairs, her sisters by her side. There was colour in her cheeks, adding to her radiance. Prem could not hear anything but the beat of his heart and the strains of the song playing dimly in the background.

Dhaage Tod Laao Chandani Se Noor Ke
Ghoonghat Hi Banalo Roshini Se Noor Ke

She looked more beautiful than he had ever seen. Or maybe she had always been this beautiful, but he was only noticing now. Shaurya tugged on his maroon sherwani, suddenly feeling trapped, when her lips curved into a teasing smile as she said something to his sister, resulting in giggles all around. Her anarkali-churidaar, the same colour as his, fit her like a glove. He saw the sindoor in her parting with a quiet happiness, that she was his.

Sharma Gai Toh Aagosh Mein Lo
Saason Se Uljhi Rahi Meri Saasein

Meher was having a hard time in her lehnga, the blue fabric constantly tangling between her legs. It was only Ash's hiss of warning that kept her from running upstairs to change into something simpler. To distract herself, she observed her sister's in-laws. There was absolute adoration on Jiju's face as he gazed at Heer Didi. It was as though the rest of the world did not exist. Lalit Chacha and Gayatri Chachi looked happy, and she was certain there were tears in Chacha's eyes. Kul Di and Veera were smiling, thrilled at the new addition to their family. They made their way to the base of the staircase. Haman had rejoined his family, a complacent smile on his lips, and Meher's lips twitched when she saw the pencil he held in one hand and the napkin in the other. Preet – she blinked suddenly. It was not that he was not happy, it was evident that he was. But, she fought to keep the scowl from spreading across her face, they were matching.

Dhaage Tod Laao Chandani Se Noor Ke
Ghoonghat Hi Banalo Roshini Se Noor Ke

Veera grinned at Ash as she stood next to her, walking her Bhabhi to her Bhaiyya. Her green lehnga was pinned to give her the least trouble, but she still had to keep herself from fidgeting. She was more comfortable in jeans than this fabric, beautiful though it was. Her lips curled upwards as she saw Manmeet struggle with his dark green kurta. At least, she thought to herself, someone was more uncomfortable than her.

Sharma Gai Toh Aagosh Mein Lo
Saason Se Uljhi Rahi Meri Saasein

His eyes twinkled merrily as he saw Heer reach Prem, whose hand instantly curled around hers, eliciting a wolf-whistle from someone he assumed was Preet. As the song came to an end, he made his way to the door, before giving his signal. It was showtime.

Whistling filled the air as the lights went off. A spotlight fell on the entrance of the house, where a man stood, back facing everyone inside. He wore a hat, tilted such that the shadow fell across his face. Only the white of his suit jacket and pants could be seen. He began to sing.

"Apni Yaadon Ko Chhod Na Jaana,
Apne Vaadon Ko Tod Na Jaana."


He spun around as he sang the next line, the light reflecting on the satin material of his pink shirt. He danced his way to the stunned family.

"Jaana Main Hoon Tera Deewana, Deewana.
Aashiq Pehla Purana."


Mahek covered her grin with one hand as she recognised the singer. Her husband had a growing look of comprehension on his face and he made a move to call out. She quietly stopped him, silently begging him to just enjoy the show. They watched the man slowly face each member of the family, pointing to each one as he sang.

"Jaise Tune Toda Mera Dil,
Tera Dil Tutega."


Prem's heart would have sunk if he had believed the song, but the completely bewildered look on Heer's face, and the reassuring weight of her hand in his told him that this was just a prank. His suspicions were confirmed when the man stopped in front of an amused Meher, repeating his lines.

"Jaise Tune Toda Mera Dil,
Tera Dil Tutega."


He pulled her against him. Meher's hand automatically clutched his shoulder, and he danced her across the room as he sang.

"Tera Haathon Se Bhi Kisi Ka, Daaman Chutega."


He dipped her, and she giggled when he pulled her back up, singing the next line. The ridiculousness of the song was evident to only the few that recognised the singer.

"Yaad Rakhna, Oh Bekadar, Bekhabar, Bewafa."


Letting go of Meher, he held out a hand to Mahek.

"Saari Rasmo Ko Chhod Na Jaana,
Apni Kasmo Ko Tod Na Jaana."


She took his hand, tossing a look at her grinning husband. The man twirled her.

"Jaana Main Hoon Tera Deewana, Deewana.
Aashiq Pehla Purana."


He pulled away from Mahek, who went to stand by Heer. The smile on both Prem and Heer's faces told Mahek that Heer had figured out the singer's identity and had shared this information with Prem.

The singer continued to dance, pausing in front of Ash. She folded her arms across her chest as he looked her up and down. He shook his head, and moved on. Ash rolled her eyes. As he sang, he approached Teji. Even Ash could not contain her giggles.

"Mere Baad Ab Kis Ko Barbaad Karegi.
Mere Baad Ab Kis Ko Barbaad Karegi,

Meri Tarah Tu Bhi Ek Din Faryaad Karegi."


Before he moved away from her, Teji tugged his ear, playfully scolding him, even as he continued to sing.

"Yaad Rakhna, Oh Be-Adab, Be-Samaj Be-Imaan."


He put a hand on Shaurya's shoulder as he mournfully sang the next few lines. Mahek muffled an un-ladylike snort. Meher and Ash were holding each other up, helplessly laughing.

"Aise Apno Ko Chhod Na Jaana,
Mere Sapno Ko Thod Na Jaana."


It was of no surprise to the Maans' when Shaurya rather happily danced off with the singer as he continued his song. The audience could only giggle as the two men waltzed romantically.

"Jaana Main Hoon Tera Deewana, Deewana.
Aashiq Pehla Purana."


They ended to applause and wolf-whistles, amidst hearty chuckles and guffaws. The singer removed his hat and took a bow.

Veera clutched her sister's arm. "Ohmygod, that's Vayu Kapoor!"

Kul Di nodded. "I know!" she squealed.

Vayu met the family properly, getting scolded by Teji again, as well as Balraj, both for coming late, and for pulling such a stunt without informing anyone. They introduced him officially to the Junejas, who enthusiastically greeted him. Preet was a bit surprised to see him bypass Ash, both ignoring one another, to pull Meher into a tight hug. The beam on Meher's face was unlike any he had ever seen.

Prem and Heer exchanged rings as everyone looked on. There were smiles on all faces as they saw the obvious happiness the couple was experiencing. The food was then opened to the crowd. The adults began to mingle with guests. Harman, upon spotting Nisha, tugged Veera away, so that he could go and annoy her. Preet and Manmeet headed for the food, and Kulraj disappeared, trying to find her children.

Vayu looked at Prem. "You do realise what you are getting into, right?"

Heer made a face at his obvious gesture to her. Prem smiled, eyes never leaving Heer's face. She blushed.

Vayu paused. "You know, I don't think I've ever seen Heer this quiet. She's always so annoying. And that irritating way she yells," he trailed off.

"Va-yu!" Heer whined, crossing her arms across her chest.

"There is it!" Vayu exclaimed. "I knew it was too good to be true." She pouted.

Mahek smirked, deciding to jump on the bandwagon. "Prem, why are you standing so far away from Hee – I mean, us?"

"Haan,"
Vayu nodded. "Tumhari toh sagai ho chuki hai, ab thoda flirt-shirt karo. I mean, look at these two." He gestured at Shaurya and Mahek. "There's barely an inch between them."

Mahek, who had been leaning comfortably against her friend, jerked away, as he let go of her hastily as well. Muttering something about guests, Shaurya sped off. His wife glared at Vayu, completely embarrassed.

Vayu winced. "I should probably," he escaped before finishing his sentence. Mahek followed close behind, her annoyance evident.

Luckily for Vayu, Mahek was waylaid by guests. He made his way to the food. He stopped when he ran into Manmeet. The other man paused as well, looking rather nervous. Vayu had been informed of the situation by Shaurya, and having had time to think things over, he had come to the conclusion that Manmeet was one strong person to have left his family. Silently, he held out his hand for the other man to shake. Manmeet gripped it tightly, exchanging grins. Ashlesha approached, and slipped an arm through Manmeet's.

"Why are you befriending
him?"
she asked disdainfully.

Vayu smirked. "The better question, sweetheart, would be, why is he friends with you?"

Ash glared at Vayu. "Maybe because he has some brains, unlike some people." She sniffed. "And I'm nice." She stressed the last word.

Vayu took a step closer, looking at her intently. She faltered slightly under his intense stare. "Nice to look at, for sure," he said huskily. He smirked. "If you're blind."

Ash's mouth fell open in shock, and Vayu grinned at Manmeet before walking away. Manmeet chuckled at the offended squeak that escaped the woman next to him. She hit his arm. "Not funny."

Manmeet nodded, biting his lip and clutching his arm in pain.


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New entry! Character sketch on page 4 has been edited. And people who are interested to know who plays who, just let me know. I was planning on adding photos, but now I'm too lazy to do that. I might make a credits video. Someday. 😆

Love,
Radz

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Posted: 16 years ago
*pokepoke*
--Bhav, who will be unreserving this after she finds out who wins AI.
Okay so I'm back! 😃 I loved how the couples are matching!! 😆 That is just way cute! And I loved how Ash didn't let Meher change! 😆 Hmmm...Ash doesn't seem to like Vayu very much...Do I sense a pairing on the way? 😉
Okay yeah short comment, but after the high that came with Kris winning, I'm like...burned out.
Love,
Bhav (:
Edited by sourpuss - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
awesome too good very nice part waitingggggg for next asap.
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Posted: 16 years ago
yay!!!!!!!!! You updated!!!!!!!!! *does a little jig* 😉😆
Oh ho ho!!!!!! Another new entry eh!?!?!??! wonder how he looks!?!?!? 😕😉 Sounds inetresting!!!! Oooooh, Preet noticed that Meher is close to him did he!?!?!? Good!!!!!! 😆
And even though Ash and Him don't seem to get along, i see some sparks flying!!!! I love how all the future couples, or just couples at the moment all matched!!!! Good motif!!!! 😆
Awwwwww, Prem couldn't take his eyes of Heer could he!?!?!? 😳😆 Sho Shweeeet!!!!!!! 😳 *Giggle* The whole performance was amazing!!!! I could picture the whole thing so nicely!!!!!! *thumbs up*
Great update Radz and can't wait for the next one!!!!!!!
Love you!!! *hug*
Posted: 16 years ago
Honestly so much to say - so lil time....I loved this part - the love depicted between Prem and Heer - I agree - thoda flirting hojaye? *wink* And Vuya is JOKES! Hope he stays on my good side. ROFL at Veera and Manmeet.

--shabz
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Posted: 16 years ago
My spot! 😃 (will be edited tom😳)

*edited*

Finally...I know! 😆😆😆 but can you blame me? I kinda died reading that AMAZING one shot you wrote!!! 😳

But anyways...heres my comment!😳 I love love love the way everyones matching AND uncomfortable in their outfits, makes it all more the cuter!😆

And I love the song you weaved in throughout the update! 😛 Ahhh and so judging from your comments....Vayus played by Jatin? this is gonna get interesting! *rubs hands together*

Can not wait for more!!! 😃😃😃

Love you loads and loads,

Meera😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: sourpuss

*pokepoke*

--Bhav, who will be unreserving this after she finds out who wins AI.
Okay so I'm back! 😃 I loved how the couples are matching!! 😆 That is just way cute! And I loved how Ash didn't let Meher change! 😆 Hmmm...Ash doesn't seem to like Vayu very much...Do I sense a pairing on the way? 😉 So you caught that! I was bored. 😆 PremHeer, ShauryaMeher and PreetMeher were intentional, and then I thought the others would feel left out, so I did it randomly. Plus, Jatin Shah could so carry off pink! 😆 No comment!
Okay yeah short comment, but after the high that came with Kris winning, I'm like...burned out.
Love, love you too!
Bhav (:



@ Sweta: Thank you!


Originally posted by: blackdaughter

yay!!!!!!!!! You updated!!!!!!!!! *does a little jig* 😉😆 *does a jig as well*

Oh ho ho!!!!!! Another new entry eh!?!?!??! wonder how he looks!?!?!? 😕😉 Sounds inetresting!!!! Oooooh, Preet noticed that Meher is close to him did he!?!?!? Good!!!!!! 😆 He looks like Jatin Shah, hot and so sexy. 😳😆 Yup, Preet noticed. 😉
And even though Ash and Him don't seem to get along, i see some sparks flying!!!! I love how all the future couples, or just couples at the moment all matched!!!! Good motif!!!! 😆 So you caught that too! And who says they are furture couples? Hmm? I was bored. 😆 What kind of sparks? Because those two cause explosions, trust me. They've go quite a bit up their sleeves. 😆

Awwwwww, Prem couldn't take his eyes of Heer could he!?!?!? 😳😆 Sho Shweeeet!!!!!!! 😳 *Giggle* The whole performance was amazing!!!! I could picture the whole thing so nicely!!!!!! *thumbs up*
Great update Radz and can't wait for the next one!!!!!!! Thanks so much Maddy! I had so much fun writing it! 😆
Love you!!! *hug*love you too!



Originally posted by: shabo24

Honestly so much to say - so lil time....I loved this part - the love depicted between Prem and Heer - I agree - thoda flirting hojaye? *wink* And Vuya is JOKES! Hope he stays on my good side. ROFL at Veera and Manmeet.

--shabz



Thanks! Don't worry, PremHeer will be flirting, soon. 😉 And Vayu is a good guy, don't worry. You'll definitely like him! 😆

@ Meera: Don't worry, you still have time. I have yet to even write the part! 😆

Love,
Radz




Posted: 16 years ago
woww!!!!!!
gr8 ff
lovely
do cont sooonnn
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: indiandoll89

My spot! 😃 (will be edited tom😳)

*edited*

Finally...I know! 😆😆😆 but can you blame me? I kinda died reading that AMAZING one shot you wrote!!! 😆 I'm just glad it got a smile on your face! I wasn't too sure how it'd come out when I was writing it. 😆

But anyways...heres my comment!😳 I love love love the way everyones matching AND uncomfortable in their outfits, makes it all more the cuter!😆 Yup, all uncomfortable 😉 Why, though, varies from person to person. 😆

And I love the song you weaved in throughout the update! 😛 Ahhh and so judging from your comments....Vayus played by Jatin? this is gonna get interesting! *rubs hands together* Thanks! The song kinda just, came to me. Vayu's song though, that was planned. 😆 Yupyup, Jatin plays Vayu. 😉 And it's going to get very interesting. Now to finish the next part. 😆

Can not wait for more!!! 😃😃😃

Love you loads and loads, love you too!

Meera😳
Love,
Radz

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Posted: 16 years ago
So, once again, I am a day late! Sorry. And another thing. I couldn't finish the part, so here's half of part 10, and hopefully, I shall post the second part within the week, rather than next week! 😆

Do enjoy, and it hasn't been proofread. 😆

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Part 10A


Heer sat on the terrace, smiling faintly at the pretty picture Prem made playing with his niece and nephews. Her smile grew as Tannu made her way towards her.

"Mammu,"
she began. Heer started, blushing slightly. She noticed the smirk on Prem's face when her eyes involuntarily flickered to him. "Yeh aap ke liye." Her attention turned back to the adorable little girl who was expectantly holding out a flower to her. Heer took it with a soft "Thank you."

Tannu ran back to her brothers and herded them away, proclaiming loudly that they would now play hide-and-seek, and not allowing them to say a word otherwise. Prem dusted his hands off on his pants, walking towards Heer. She made some space for him beside her. The comfort level between them had grown since their engagement party, and they had no qualms with openly spending time with one another. They sat in silence, basking in one another's presence. The moment was broken by the indistinct sound of a squabble, which was progressively getting louder. Prem and Heer exchanged exasperated glances; there was only one possibility as to who the voices belonged to.

"Bakwas idea hai,"
they heard Preet say.

"Toh tum yahi reh,"
Meher retorted.

"Guys, why are you arguing? First we should plan this thing, then decide all of this!"
Ash tried to pacify them. "Tum World War 3 kyun shuru kar rahe ho?"

"Inn dono ke saath, World War 3 ke ilava aur kuch nahi ho sakta,"
Vayu commented as they came into sight. He noticed Prem and Heer first. "Prem, Heer, tum dono yaha kya kar rahe ho?"

"Picnic manaa rahe hai,"
Heer replied drily.

Preet looked excited. "Toh aap bhi picnic ke liye raazi ho gaye!" Heer was confused. Prem rested one hand on her arm, silently reassuring her that at least one of them understood her sarcasm, and Preet's exuberance. "Lekin iss Meher ko bata ke hum bachche yah buddhe ko saath nahi ley rahe. Mazaa nahi aayega," he complained, making a face.

Meher rolled her eyes, turning to him to argue. Prem interrupted before she could start. "Yeh toh baad mein bhi decide ho sakta hai. Pehle toh sab ko pucho ke sab jaane chande ney ke nahi?" The duo silently acquiesced that he was right before turning to leave, shooting glares at one another. Ash shot Prem a grateful glance. Vayu pouted at the silently exiting couple.

"Sara mazaa kharab kar diya,"
he mock-glared at Prem. Ash pulled his ear, muttering darkly about how he deived enjoyment from others' pain and dragged him away.

Heer looked at Prem in amusement.

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The picnic got postponed to the following day, and to Preet's immense joy, the adults had opted to stay home and had offered to take care of Kul Di's children as well. Meher had only huffed in annoyance when he had gloated to her. Harman had been coaxed into leaving his first love for the day and joining the rest of the mere mortals for their planned picnic. He had agreed on the condition that he be allowed to ask Nisha along. This had been readily accepted by all, and prompted Preet to start teasing him mercilessly. Nisha had agreed, when Harman had tentatively broached the subject, and both had left the awkward conversation with faint blushes and small smiles.

They left for a field some distance away from the house before noon the next day, Meher promising a gorgeous area for them to lounge about in. Preet had scoffed, but not said anything, so Meher had not picked a fight, not wanting to spoil her mood. The field they arrived in was indeed beautiful, with flowers dotting the area. Shaurya immediately flopped down onto the grass, loudly complaining about the 'long journey' and ordering his wife to feed him. Mahek dropped a sandwich on his chest and sat by Vayu.

Ash was quickly roped into a conversation with Manmeet and Kulraj Di while Veera had joined Mahek and Vayu. Much to Preet's amusement, Harman and Nisha were deeply engrossed in a conversation and Prem and Heer were sitting silently side by side, holding hands, her head on his shoulder. Shaurya looked to be dozing, one arm flung over his face to protect himself from the sun. His gaze drifted to the firecracker wrapped in a tiny package that was more commonly known as Meher. She was humming to herself slightly as she knelt by some flowers. Even Preet could not deny (as much as he wanted to) that there was something in the peace she embodied at that moment which touched the heart.

Meher did not notice Preet trudge up to her until he dropped down next to her. She started, hand on her chest, and frowned at him, but did not say a word even as he rather shamelessly stared at her. It was only after he did not make a sarcastic observation but remained quiet did she look up and snap at him. "Why are you looking at me like that?"

"I'm trying to figure you out,"
he commented frankly. "I don't understand you."

Meher tilted her head to the side in confusion, contemplating his words. Rather than giving him the biting reply that was on the tip of her tongue, she asked, "What is there to understand?"

"You are,"
his gaze bore into her own and she was uncomfortable. It was like he could see right through her. "unlike any girl I have ever met," he finished, that eerily intense look still on his face. Meher tucked a stray lock of her behind her ear, trying to ignore the fact that his eyes had never once left her face since he had sat down next to her. She was saved by having to say anything by Kulraj Di, who loudly cracked a joke about them not fighting. Preet got up, and stood for a second, seemingly debating on whether or not to say something to her before deciding not to and walking away. Meher was, once again, left disconcerted by his behaviour.


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Do let me know what you think!

Love,
Radz

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