FF:Aankhein(MP/NA) Complete, Pages 1, 2 and 3 - Page 75

Originally posted by: dipsyworld

Rimz, r u saying this is the last part???Yes I am deepu No happy endings?🥺No... I simply cant understand why u ended it in this way.Oh god...I dunno...it just made sense in my head...Maybe i dont see the characters the way u doMaybe, I'm a sadist😆...no I'm kidding......but feeling really bad that there is no reunion and infact Neev is marrying someone else.I know what you mean...but atleast they're getting divorced first...no bigamy here. If they can kiss for a long time in the end, cant they give one more try to their marriage. I am sad.awwww LOL...It was a kiss goodbye hun, like closure. They'll always have feeling for each other but sometimes, I think it's better to have that love and just be happy in the knowledge of it rather than be with the person you love and be unhappy. Ayesha is who she is and it's not liely she would change. She knows Neev deserves more than that too.
Very beautifully written FF....i dont have to tell u again how much i love your writing. Do write more ffs and let me know when u start a new one. I will deff let people know if I start writing again...I might do, have been itching to😆but just not here. And thank you for the compliment.
Thanks, hun.🤗🤗Thank you deepu! Truely are a sweetheart😊

Originally posted by: janu_2006

hey

gr8 ending...

Originally posted by: blackcurrant

As sad as I am about the ending, I think this is the only way it could have ended.Thats what I think too Ela... It would have been unbelievable that Ayesha would suddenly let go of her distrust and insecurities. Exactly, it would have been unrealistic right...and I hoped to have kept it somewhat real (if not completely meldramatic😆)And she recognised that because she couldn't, it would eventually just destroy them.Yes she did...she became wiser and I think if she hadn't been so emotional at the time of her mother's death, she would have reacted like this too. I absolutely loved the last line, so sad.Yes, I like it too! Thank you Rima for a wonderful FF but for also being brave enough not to compromise your story by giving us a happy ending. 👏 It wouldn't have felt authentic in this situationThank you Ela, for the wonderful compliments! But it just shows, the people reading it were just as brave😆 really understood what I was trying to do too!

Originally posted by: blind horizon

You sadist... Reems you're worse than Sandman....

Originally posted by: meteora_smt

Ok Rima, here I am... I'd already read the chapter on the 2nd of December 😃... And lolz I would've commented but I was sorta scared... Read on, to know why...haha...I did and I know why now😆and thank you for reading...😃

First off, I loved the way you wrote the last chapter... The last line was especially resounding and memorable... And really Rimz, you have such a grasp on words, its a shame that you're not going to be writing any more FFs!!! 😔Sonia...I've said it a million time and I'll say it again, I dont know why people think that (I overuse the word said!! and they taught me at Primary school that that was not good😆) but I'll happily accept the lovely compliment there😃...I think the last line was officially a hit then! .... One part I liked was this "In their story there is no happily ever after. How could she stop him? And what for, for the cycle to continue; for the mistrust and the hurt to continue, it would destroy them both this time and they had Arjun to consider too. He was thriving despite the absence of a conventional family because they both put him first but if they were together, he would become secondary to her insecurities and fear and Neev would never understand" Its so heartbreaking really... And I'm prolly sounding redundant but I'll say it again I just love how you write... You write with such clarity, and in a poetical manner that it sounds very real....awww thank you so much...I like that bit, especially the in their story bit...I felt a bit stupid for giving it away at the middle but seemed to fit.

Anyways now the part I was scared about saying...You really shouldn't be, especially not to me! I wrote think, knowing full well people may not agree/find it difficult to understand/ being sad by it... I respect your stance dear, but I am not too fond of the ending,Lol, see and I totally respect you for telling me! Rimz.... Actually boy I sure wasn't expecting it because I'd imagined a happy ending for them,I was undecided about which way to take it...I could have really done it either way and though you are probably scoffing right now...I'd love for you to write one where they end up happy together all the while incorperating their characters too.(pleaseeeeeee *looks at sonia with puppy dog eyes*) that C-Night you wrote for Neesha, I thought that it was the culimination of the Neesha love, and then gradually after it Ayesha would learn to trust Neev and poof happy ending!!!LOl, Picture thodi baaki thii mere dost, iss liye... So just like Munee I too admittedly found it hard to digest, if you know what I mean?... Yes, I do completely...I think I would have too, the only reason I dont is because I have the other side of the coin in my head too. I know what would have happened if I had bought them back together, if that makes sense at all now😆The reason I felt so, was because I really wanted Neev and Ayesha to get their happy ending which they didn't get in the show...so did Sonia...you must know that but as I was writing, it seemed right to do it this way. You know, maybe we see the characters slightly differently, but I felt if not Neev, Ayesha's actions were justified and if they were, she would have done this. Ayesha has gone through such a painful childhood, I'd always wished that she got some happiness in her future, sort of like you can overcome your circumstances... Yes, you can for sure! But it's not true for everyone I guess and in a way, she was empowering herself by saying no to Neev because she knew she couldn't change who she was.Ditto for Neev, though I guess it isn't applicable in this FF coz he went through different circumstances here than on the show... Yes, they deff did but I wish I was able to bring in some of their essense...I may have deviated to make it in line with my story I guess...Like JC said, it sort of broke my Neesha dream, I was always of the opinion that Neev-and the uncorrupted Ayesha were perfect for each other and had they given each other that one chance, they would learn a lot from each other and ultimately make each other very happy... They would have...there's always two sides to the story isn't there? I know they could have had a happy ending, I even wish they did but in this instance, I couldn't do it. But it seems in this FF that even when they gave that one chance to each other, it didn't work out , it was simply futile and that is whats just so painful to grasp Rima, it goes against to what I believe of in Neesha... Also add to that I'm not very fond of tragic endings...Sonia...I actually feel quite sad because you're like one of the few that actually had that Neesha dream and I hope I haven't dashed them completely. Please dont think of them like they were in my fic, because they were different in the show and they could have ended up together and happy too. I had tragic endings, really used to annoy me when shows did that! I still cant get over how Joey ended up with Pacey in Dawson's Creek...now that was tragic for me...IIt's DAWSON'S creek for god's sake and he doesn't get the girl? Insanity I tell ya!

But having said that, your ending did make me think... I'd always imagined Neev-Ayesha to get their happily-ever-after...please give it to them...pleaseeeeeee😃 But its quite difficult to foresee how they would ever reach that stage with Ayesha's insecurities especially...But thats only because I emphasised on them...she could have been unlike that too...she is stronger than her mother...e.g. reforming after being dumped at the alter. I've to admit, had this situation happened in real life, it would've probably ended the same way you wrote it.... Its pretty practical. and probably the most reasonable outcome that could be achieved would Arjuns involvement..Yes I think so too but I guess the point of fiction is actually to just write how you want it to be😆, I tried alot to make it realistic though... And I admire you for having the courage enough to write an ending that you believe in but which is different from the norm, from whats expected... aww thank you...I dont think I could have done it without everyone though...knowing that atleast some people read kept me going...I dunno if i'd have had the courage if it was me alone😆 re-reading it In the end I felt the most sympathy for Ayesha I guess, especially with she had gone through, its sad that thaat childhood of hers puts an imposing wall around her, keeping her imprisoned from happiness... Its realistic, but sorta sad...Yeh it is isn't it...everyone does deserve happiness but I guess she'll get hers in a different way... I felt bad for Neev too, how his hopes crashed down the minute Ayesha spoke that she was ready to sign the divorce papers in a note of finalty...I know...my poor bebe😭...I actually felt the worst for him because he put himself out there and thats so hard to do...

I guess I've really enjoyed this FF except for the ending..ahaha, thank you and I completely understand...sometimes, when I re-read books, I just tootally ignore the ending if it's sad. It was brilliantly written... and I think I was just glad that someone wrote a proper Neesha FF since there are so few of those in the forum (barring JCs ofcourse)... Thank you Rima for giving me a chance to read this. 😊Thnaks you, thank you and thank you!! was wonderful to read your comments!!😃 and now...I think the next Neesha fic should come from you😡😆

Originally posted by: milindkidewani

Uff uff uff!!! Kya tragic ending di hai to a beautiful tragic love story......👏I know Goldy😭...paata nahin mujhe kya hua tha...

I can't decide whether to be happy or sad....to praise u for writing such a beautiful piece or just sit n cry over Neesha and the fact that this is the end n u r not writing anymore😕😕LOL...please be happy coz then I'll be sad!......I'm glad you thought it was good!

The ending was really a surprise...yup, I kept you in the dark...kept myself in the dark too!😆 during the whole deal I kept thinking yay...they r gonna be together but kahanThat was the thing isn't it...it could have been any point and yet none at all........tune unko juda kar diya..yes and I'm sorry...amnn se saath rehenge na pann.... Ayesha is such a lost soul....she is still worried and keeping everything to herself maybe she thinks Neev would never understand but she never really gave him a chance.... She thought she did...but it wasn't enough, they both should have communicated.

Neev....I so felt for him when all his hopes came crashing down with Ayesha final words.....😭😭😭 I know right...but I have a feeling, he will find his happiness at soem point...

Arjun...everything is the same for him....his parents were not together n they r not getting back together....yeh, kinda, usse bauaht farg nahin padega and they'll still continue to put him first...😒 In sab mei Priya ki to chandi ho gayi....They would keep eachother happy...I hope so....ahahah!! Haina!! lucky gal.😉😆...I hope so too...she's different from Ayesha.

But somehow I feel that this whole story just showed me a new way to look at relationships...Oh really...😃, I hope in a good way....Once u break a bond...its hard to make everything alright.....plus some relationships r never meant to be....Thats true...but I guess, I wanted to show that even if a relationship doesn't last...that doesn't mean there wasn't love there...if that makes sense...and also that, just because you love each other, doens't mean you'll be happy together.

I hate tragic endings n I hated this end too but u wrote this so beautifully...I loved the story n ur fic....I hope u do keep writing.....I can celebrate my bday every month😆lol, thank you Goldy! and haan haan...tumhe tou koi taleeq nahin hogi...diamonds ke dher lag jayenge fir.😉😆

Thankyou for writing such a wonderful ff 🤗 Love u loads!!!!!Thank you Goldy! and Please keep me sane and visit the forum often!!😡😆Love you too! Muah!