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Posted: 16 years ago
i ...um....can't think.

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so its finally over...in all its meaning. *Sigh*

It was a roller coaster ride. Especially this last one...with every paragraph...first would begin with "neesha are getting together" and end with "no they aren't" ...and i kept doing that don't know for how long...guess till the very end when Ayesha gave that determined and very cold answer. Though there was a bit more left after that i'd given up hope at that point....tho the title of the update would kinda throw you off...still at that point i knew it was a kiss goodbye.

You know there is a rational mind that says it was better this way and that together they would have never had the "dream" and might not even be happy. but then i hear a voice inside saying..."they'd have been together"đŸ„ș I cant explain that feeling. Choosing between a life of numbness vs destruction...i guess i'd have chosen destruction unless i had someone like Arjun in my life. And thats where i find myself forgiving you. Because you know what takes top priority on my list.😃 For him i guess this was the best option instead of witnessing the tensions between his parents.

however, i think in this whole fic....Neev gets my sympathy...Ayesha gets my pity...and Priya gets a sad smile.

Neevu meri jaan...i feel really bad...how must was he holding onto that last shred of hope that she might just give him a single glance that would give him reason to stop...but alas...and to think he is marrying Priya but what does he get out of it. I'd be very presumptuous ot say that he won't be happy with her...he could be if he gives that marriage a chance...but at the point that you ended the fic...he just is this tragic character...and the way he thought... the decision was made for him...if he couldn't be happy with Ayesha he'd have to live a life making Priya happier...that was called putting a knife thru my heart. he always tries to do his part correctly...and that i think is the most unselfish thing...but sometimes makes him so....tragic.

Ayesha you poor poor soul...and really she is poor...not in wealth. She is poor because she will never have the one thing she craves for...and thats her own doing. I can't say more...cause i think she was the sane one at the end...and what she did was a bit mature...she thought of the future and not of the present. Maybe she'll redeem herself...and maybe she'll have what she seeks ...from her son.

Priya...just a sad smile because she doesn't deserve to be in a relationship where she doesn't get what she puts in...still she got into it with full knowledge so no sympathies...just a sad smile.

for you Rima...i think i want to 👏 because you forced me to think about relationships in a much more realistic context than i prefer to do. And if it had been someone else writing this story i don't think i'd have stuck around till the end. I would have given up the moment i realized that its going to be a tragedy cause i likes my happies endings. But you managed that too...get me to read a tragedy. I've only ever read Shakespears's tragedies only because of his writing style...i am a fan😳...and still I gave a miss to a few.

So it really was because it was a story well told by an awesome writer that i am still here and find myself not wanting to kill you.😊 But thats all...you get no hugs..because after all you did kill my Neesha dream.

I better get a notification the next time you decide to write something.
Edited by jinc118 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
wow di...
an excellent end..
so they are not going to work out their probz,...
feel sorry for priya..
she wont get what she deserves
he wont love her as much as he lves aehsya...
hope u start an other ff soon!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
Sigh I'm too numbed, hurt too. Such disparity the hurt the hope so clear visible resonant. What guts honesyly Ayesha should be awarded most cold hearted woman though I can't blame her. Five years down the drain and then there's the child. Neev sigh sealed with a kiss, what do I say now is this the end? Do they never meet now? Arjun keeps shuttling between his parents that's so sad really. I feel for him so very much, he deserves a happy family with both his parents and no selfish Priya as step mother.
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: jinc118

i ...um....can't think.and I'm sorry about that...but wow! Thanks you for the comments hun!

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so its finally over...in all its meaning. *Sigh* Yup...deff...Cant believe I'll not write anymore😕😆

It was a roller coaster ride. Especially this last one...with every paragraph...first would begin with "neesha are getting together" and end with "no they aren't" ...and i kept doing that don't know for how long...guess till the very end when Ayesha gave that determined and very cold answer. Though there was a bit more left after that i'd given up hope at that point....tho the title of the update would kinda throw you off...still at that point i knew it was a kiss goodbye. Yes, the title I guess was meant for that...it could mean that the update went either way and you'd not know what to expect...I guess you felt that yo-yoing of emotions because I too felt it while I was writing, If I'm honest...until that very last dialogue from Ayesha...even I was soemwhat undecided but it was meant to be this way and I'm glad I chose to do it like that.

You know there is a rational mind that says it was better this way and that together they would have never had the "dream" and might not even be happy.Thats exactly what I thought...it could never have been the life for them... but then i hear a voice inside saying..."they'd have been together"đŸ„ș I cant explain that feeling. Thats the part that cherishes the Neesha dream of happines.s..I have that part😭...I promise I did...Choosing between a life of numbness vs destruction...i guess i'd have chosen destruction unless i had someone like Arjun in my life. And thats where i find myself forgiving you. Because you know what takes top priority on my list.😃 For him i guess this was the best option instead of witnessing the tensions between his parents. There you go...actually in retrospect, I should have elaborated more on Arjun but I kind of wanted it to end now but what you have mentioned, is another chief reason they couldn't be together because of how it would affect him if it went wrong again...could they really take that risk? No, because I think they both love him more than each other...Ayesha slightly more than Neev I guess...

however, i think in this whole fic....Neev gets my sympathy...Ayesha gets my pity...and Priya gets a sad smile.

Neevu meri jaan...i feel really bad...how must was he holding onto that last shred of hope that she might just give him a single glance that would give him reason to stopEven I thought she might...but she had tried before and it didn't work...I dont think she's strong enough to be with him again...but alas...and to think he is marrying Priya but what does he get out of it. Nothing really...none of them really get anything but then again, life doesn't always turn out like we want it to right? both of them will always have Arjun and I guess, that'll have to be enough to keep them going.I'd be very presumptuous ot say that he won't be happy with her and to a degree you would be right...but my mum always says, and I've been told in numerous lectures from her, "You'll learn to love it one day..." especially when she talks about sabzi😆...not to liken Priya to one but you get my gist right...he may have learnt to be happy with her someday...he could be if he gives that marriage a chance...but at the point that you ended the fic...he just is this tragic character...and the way he thought... the decision was made for him...if he couldn't be happy with Ayesha he'd have to live a life making Priya happier...that was called putting a knife thru my heart.Yes, I did act cruelly and it pained me to do it to him because I'm always going on about how he deserved to be happy and loved but it seemed right this way...he sacrificed but not before one last little selfish act on his part...somewhat liek the show. he always tries to do his part correctly...and that i think is the most unselfish thing...but sometimes makes him so....tragic. Yes, it does make him tragic but I think not because he is selfless but because he desires his own happiness but is unable to get it, if that makes sense and so he does what comes best after that, if he cant be happy, he'll make soemone else but he does for a moment, think about himself first.

Ayesha you poor poor soul...and really she is poor...not in wealth. She is poor because she will never have the one thing she craves for...and thats her own doing. I can't say more...cause i think she was the sane one at the end...and what she did was a bit mature...she thought of the future and not of the present. Maybe she'll redeem herself...and maybe she'll have what she seeks ...from her son. I think she redeemed herself by not accepting Neev because she would never have been able to give him what he deserved from her and in a way she knew that...and you're right, she become alot more sane because for the first time, she acted rationally and not implusively, without thinking properly. Arjun is a consolation for both and it's my consolation that atleast in a way, they can be happy with him.

Priya...just a sad smile because she doesn't deserve to be in a relationship where she doesn't get what she puts in...still she got into it with full knowledge so no sympathies...just a sad smile. You're right...but we will never know if she did or did not get it back...but of course a part of her knew that Neev wasn't in love with her or out of love with Ayesha yet, if she chose to overlook it, she should be aware of the concequences too...

for you Rima...i think i want to 👏 because you forced me to think about relationships in a much more realistic context than i prefer to do. Thank you JC...it's sttrange but I started of writing fiction to escape the reality of it and now have ended with portraying the harshness of it.And if it had been someone else writing this story i don't think i'd have stuck around till the end. I would have given up the moment i realized that its going to be a tragedy cause i likes my happies endings.awww, I like my happy endings too. JC, you weren't the only one, I dont think a lot of people would have stuck around, which is pretty evident and understandble too. But you managed that too...get me to read a tragedy. It's because you're a good friend and I appreciate it so much...would not have had the courage to continue otherwise.I've only ever read Shakespears's tragedies only because of his writing style...i am a fan😳...and still I gave a miss to a few.lol...oddly enough...I dont like Shakespeare apart from his tradegies...Othello and Macbeth are the only plays I ever liked of his.

So it really was because it was a story well told by an awesome writer that i am still here and find myself not wanting to kill you.😊 But thats all...you get no hugs..because after all you did kill my Neesha dream.LOL...it'll come when you're good and ready...you'll have to gimme that hug one day!!!

I better get a notification the next time you decide to write something.I deff will...I'll need soemone to talk me up😉😆

Thanks JC!!! IIt was invaluable, all your contribution to this fic and elsewhere!😊
Edited by zcbcc34 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: chillingal16

wow di...

an excellent end..Thank you...glad you found it fitting.
so they are not going to work out their probz,...No they are not...they wouldn't have got far without another one cropping up.
feel sorry for priya..Me too in a way
she wont get what she deserves no but she's not stupid, she knows what she's getting herself in to.
he wont love her as much as he lves aehsya...hope u start an other ff soon!!That much I can gurantee...he wont love her as much...but he may one day love her a tiny bit.

Thank you hun!😊
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: blind horizon

Sigh I'm too numbed, hurt too.I'm sorry... Such disparity the hurt the hope so clear visible resonant. What guts honesyly Ayesha should be awarded most cold hearted woman though I can't blame her. not cold hearted Munee...just a woman who is wiser now...Five years down the drain and then there's the child.Yes, and thats exactly why she didn't do it...for the child...think about it, if they had gone back to before...he would have been in the middle this time and scarred much worse then just having his parents live sepeartely. Neev sigh sealed with a kiss, what do I say now is this the end? Yes, it is the end. Somewhat open ended but unambiguious. Though I have clearly set out a path from them all...if you use your imagination, could the situation be slavaged? perhaps. Do they never meet now? Yes, they do but not as they would have before,not with any hope or any expectation Arjun keeps shuttling between his parents that's so sad really. I feel for him so very much, he deserves a happy family with both his parents and no selfish Priya as step motherahaha...I feel as though they've done the right thing for him. I feel as though sometimes just because a family seems conventional from the outside, doens't mean the child is put first and is nutured how they should be. Children in single parent homes grow up to be just as happy and especially with Arjun because he has both his parents in his life, just not together.

Thanks Munee. For sticking with me till the end! 😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
OH Rims...i just finished reading the ff and this is how i feel at the moment💔


I cant tell you how sad i feel... especially when i read the last line "It was finally over, both had felt it break, it was settled and it was sealed with a kiss."...I just kept reading that last line...not wanting to beleive that it was actually the End...Never thought u would end it like this...So i guess there wasnt a "Happily ever after" for our Neesha track...it is understandable....but i cant help but feel sad...

Awww Rims i just feel bad for everyone...for Aeysha and Neev for not able to make it till the end...for Priya for not having the love she deserves and for little Arjun...although i'm sure Ayesha and Neev along with Priya will always there for him...

Rims this is the first ff i have read that end like this...u know ff usaully always have a happy ending...I love happy endings...but i guess life is not always about happy endings...and in this ff u have given us a touch of reality in it....things doest always turn out the way u have planed...and thats life and u got to continue to live...and thats what Neev and Ayehsa will do...

So now that this has come to an end...do u plan on writing something new...u can always count on me...even if im not as active as before...i'm always here to read ur ffs...the are simply "bole to" MINDBLOWING and BEAUTIFULLY BEAUTIFULLY BEAUTIFULLY written...and i REALLY mean it...

THANKS A LOTS RIMSđŸ€—
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Posted: 16 years ago
Rimz, r u saying this is the last part??? No happy endings?đŸ„ș I simply cant understand why u ended it in this way. Maybe i dont see the characters the way u do...but feeling really bad that there is no reunion and infact Neev is marrying someone else. If they can kiss for a long time in the end, cant they give one more try to their marriage. I am sad.
Very beautifully written FF....i dont have to tell u again how much i love your writing. Do write more ffs and let me know when u start a new one.
Thanks, hun.đŸ€—đŸ€—

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Posted: 16 years ago
As sad as I am about the ending, I think this is the only way it could have ended. It would have been unbelievable that Ayesha would suddenly let go of her distrust and insecurities. And she recognised that because she couldn't, it would eventually just destroy them. I absolutely loved the last line, so sad. Thank you Rima for a wonderful FF but for also being brave enough not to compromise your story by giving us a happy ending. 👏 It wouldn't have felt authentic in this situation.
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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Heeba

OH Rims...i just finished reading the ff and this is how i feel at the moment💔awww Heebs...me too in a way!! and btw, it is so great to see you around!! 😃


I cant tell you how sad i feel...I think I can guess! coz me feeling the same... especially when i read the last line "It was finally over, both had felt it break, it was settled and it was sealed with a kiss."...I just kept reading that last line...not wanting to beleive that it was actually the End.but unfortunately it was...I could have kept going I guess but this seemed like the perfect place to stop...the last line I like very much, I wrote it first and then the rest followed...Never thought u would end it like this...So i guess there wasnt a "Happily ever after" for our Neesha track...it is understandable....but i cant help but feel sad...I know heebs...I wanted a happily ever after for them but when I started writing about them, I rrealised they never could...I wonder if the creatives ever felt the same...😕

Awww Rims i just feel bad for everyone...for Aeysha and Neev for not able to make it till the end...for Priya for not having the love she deserves and for little Arjun...although i'm sure Ayesha and Neev along with Priya will always there for him...Yes, you're right, at this moment in time, they're all very sorry characters but if you think beyond it, they may all have found there happiness at one point in time.😊

Rims this is the first ff i have read that end like this...u know ff usaully always have a happy ending...I love happy endings...but i guess life is not always about happy endings...and in this ff u have given us a touch of reality in it....things doest always turn out the way u have planed...and thats life and u got to continue to live...and thats what Neev and Ayehsa will do...Thats such a great way to put it! I'm glad everyoe doesn't want to kill me right now!😆phew!

So now that this has come to an end...do u plan on writing something new...u can always count on me...even if im not as active as before...i'm always here to read ur ffs...the are simply "bole to" MINDBLOWING and BEAUTIFULLY BEAUTIFULLY BEAUTIFULLY written...and i REALLY mean it...ahaha Heebs thank you very much for the support...no plans as of now, will let you know if I do...

THANKS A LOTS RIMSđŸ€—No probs hunny, thanks for reading!!

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