FF: Redeeming Pia, part 5, Page 8 - Page 4

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Sorry you guys no Pia today because Prachi scene was to long and I have homework to do. I hope you all understand. I promise a extra nice Pia part tomorrow. Hint, it well explian the wedding with Pushkar and maybe some flash forwards.

Dear Dairy,

I was just reading over what I wrote to you in the past few days and realized that none of it makes sense. Now that I am settled in here at Pushkars/dads, I well explain. Now don't fall asleep dairy, okay?

Here's how I got the diary: Mom had left it in her will that I should receive her dairy when I turn 16 and can understand the past. She had left this dairy with Pushkar/dad on the day of my birth and had him promise that he would one day give it to me. He kept his promise. Now I well do my part and understand mom's live and fulfill her wish. What I didn't except was the storm it would create in my life, a storm that might break a once happy family….This storm has already thrown all the relationships into a whirlwind. Who are mine and who are strangers, only time well tell.

Now the bigger question, what am I doing at Pushkars/dad. You have been dying to ask me that, right? Well after I got the dairy, I blasted off mom for never telling me the truth. I always trusted mom and never expected that she would hid such a thing from me, it seemed so surreal. Looking back, maybe I shouldn't have yelled but at the moment I couldn't help it because my god broke my trust. I might have even apologized right then and there but before I could Dad…I mean Jai slapped me for raising my voice with mom, I mean Bani. At that point I could no longer think straight and locked myself in my room and you know Dairy, not one person tried to talk to me. Not one! That was when I first opened moms dairy and a piece of paper fell on the floor. I opened it to find, Pia/mom's pregnancy report. It clearly stated that Pushkar was my father. That was when I realized what I had to do. I went mom(Bani) and told her that I need some space and that I wanted to get to know Pushkar better because I believe that he is my dad. I told her that I was confused about my heritage right now and if I don't figure out the truth, our relationship would be ruined for life. I needed to do this for myself and also for the relationship I shared with her. At that point mom (Bani) called Pushkar and explained to him that it would be best if I moved in with him for a few days and asked him to take care of me for a few days as a favor to her. He agreed and I left to pack my stuff.
Rano massi came to my room to while I was packing and told me that if I plan to call myself Pia's daughter then I should never come back. Massi doesn't even want anybody to mention Pia in this house, Pia ruined her life. Dairy, tell this moment I can't forget Massi's words which she whispered as she left my room, "Pia you ruined my life because of you my child's life was ruined and I lost my husband…because of you". Dairy, was my mom really that bad?

Dairy, reading back on all I have told you, makes me wonder all over again who is my mother? Is it Bani, who I call mother without a second thought or is it Pia who gave birth to me? Do I have anybody else in this world other than Bani and the memoirs of Pia? Not one person came to me, when I need them….

-Prachi

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Posted: 18 years ago
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good, bad? your comments always made me think harder. The always made me become Prachi and defend her. I need your comments, they are my inspiration.

-Rimpy
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: ziddi

Rimy
I read the two parts, first i hesitant because it was about Pia, but then how you outlined your story. I plan to win readers by creativity, not by selling the winning combination of Jai and Bani as many people do. I am glad that I have won yet another reader.And how you started with Dear Diary, with Prachi's intro and how Pia wrote the entry. It touched me and i got glued in reading Pia's point of view and her goals. All our actions are justified by our thoughts, just like Pia's. We just need to be able to understand what is going on in her head.
Prachi's anger is understandable, how she got hurt and betrayed by the two people who she felt were her really people. Halia Rano is taking Pia's anger on Prachi, she can't still forget what her sister did but Bani accepted Prachi. This isn't about Bani, this is her pain talking. Pia has also hurt Rano too, though nobody seems to notice that. Hopefully Pia and Prachi well be able to explain Rano. And she did forget but what is one to do when the past is always in fornt of ones eyes. One can only forget so much.
From reading part2 Prachi seems very stubborn, she moved in with her dad, i hope we get to see some of PP bonding as father and daughter. we well soon
Did Pushkar move on with his life after Pia left him? Will Prachi here Pushkars point of view about Pia? Why he fell in love with her etc😕 I don't have answers to those questions yet, Pushkar life was never meant to be justified by this fanfic but after reading those questions, I think Pushkar might be able to help us out afterall. It well all come out out in a few days.
Please write soon I already did.😛 I believe in a update a day, keeps the belan away.

-Rimpy

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: punjabi#1


good, bad? your comments always made me think harder. The always made me become Prachi and defend her. I need your comments, they are my inspiration.

-Rimpy


ok honey... here goes...
In Part 1, Prachi came across as a spoilt brat... who didn't care for her parents' feelings... and who was even insulting them... (at least in her diary)
The second, the immaturity was justified a little bit... but in the third part, the way that she talks is more of a calm understanding after a fiesty outburst.... It was nice...



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Posted: 18 years ago
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Halia
Prachi realized her mistakes, only time will answer her questions and as she reads the diary about her mom.
The way you introduce her she seemed like a spoiled brat, but she is and understandable person maybe like Pia was and no one just took the time too understand her needs or talk to her.
How did Rano loose Sahil? What happened to Rano's child is it similar to KS?
please write soon
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Posted: 18 years ago
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hey rimpy, first of all, very very well writed 😊
now poor prachi is confused 😕 and its strange that nobody came to help her 😭 😡 , i mean she's just upset 😔 😔 for the sudden cirumtances which are in front of her and she haven't done any mistake like her mother.....banijai, should understand her 😡 🤢 , but we'll see what she founds and how she reaches to the true

continue asap
i'm very desperated to read more 😆

meenu 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Great part Rimpy 👏 👏 👏 This part makes it much clear now 😛 Can understand Prachi's feelings once again. It was a brash decision, but one that she felt she had to take. So even if it was not right, it was justified. 😛 Continue soon!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Rimpy...good job...sorry could not read the FF earlier...
So here goes...when i started reading the FF...I was not sure if I liked Prachi much...but then...after this part...i want to know her...thats good right???

I even want to know what Rano meant about Pia ruining her life too...

Please continue soon...
Rivs
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Posted: 18 years ago
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hey rimpy u dint even tell me u wrote an ff..only now i saw it and im commenting after reading those fabulous updates 👏 👏 👏

beautiful story...very different...hmm i sure wud like to find out what were Pia's reasons?!

update soon....(sounds familiar 😆 )

neetu
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: inavars

Great part Rimpy 👏 👏 👏 This part makes it much clear now 😛 Can understand Prachi's feelings once again. It was a brash decision, but one that she felt she had to take. So even if it was not right, it was justified. 😛 Continue soon!



The important part is not if a descision is right or worng, its wether you can justify it or not. Some of us are cool headed and think things through, others of us just do things.

As for continuing soon I well, I like to update daily.

-Rimpy

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