FF: Redeeming Pia, part 5, Page 8

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Posted: 18 years ago
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I always believed in listening to both sides of the story, so I am starting a new fanfic that is going to explain Pia's actions and redeem her character. In this fanfic I am introducing a new character with a familiar name, Prachi aka Pia's daughter. A lot of the story well be pieces from Prachi's and Pia's diaries. I know how popular Jai and Bani scenes are, I think that I well also add pieces from their lives, just not in diary form.

Dear Dairy,

I have turned 16 today and my world has turned upside down. I received the most unexcepted gift today, a gift that well rake open old wounds. How I wish I had never received this gift, but I guess I had to eventually come face to face with this bitter truth labeled 'Pia's Dairy'. You are probable wondering who is Pia and why in the 6 years that I have kept a dairy, not once mentioned her? And why is her dairy such a bad gift? Well Dairy, let me start form the beginning.

Pia is Bani's sister and my really mother. You heard right, Bani's not my mom....she lied to me all these years and called me her child. Heck, I think Jai's not my father either. I no longer wish to call those two mom and dad. You know Jai aka dad slapped me to, the guy that couldn't bare to see me sad, slapped me. You know why he slapped me? Because I told Bani that she wasn't my mother and that she'd never me my mother. How can I call the person that lied to be for 16 years, mom? But you know what really hurt? The fact that Rano Massi said that I am growing into a ungrateful b***h like my mother. How could they do this to me on my birthday?????

Somebody's at the door...till tomorrow then my dear Dairy.

-Prachi

P.S.- I am attaching the letter from mom.

Dear Prachi,
If you are reading this letter, then I must be dead. Prachi, I doubt anybody has told you that your mother isn't Bani. I am your mother Pia, just Pia because I don't have an identity to give you. I lost my identity long time ago in the mess, that was my life. I am leaving you my dairy, so you can put together your own identity and understand who your real mother was. I want you to hear my story from me, not anybody else. I want you to make up your mind about me on your own, not influenced by anybody else. If you ask anybody about me, they all well tell you what a horrible person I was but please understand that they don't know the whole story. Prachi, please listen to both sides before you make up you mind. Please, Prachi hear me out.....

-Pia

-Rimpy
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Posted: 18 years ago
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👏First of all congrats on starting a FF Rimpy!

I'm the first one to comment😛

Seems interesting, I like the idea of the diarys, I feel sorry for Pia already🤢 I mean her daughter doesn't even know who her mother was until her sweet 16, harsh. I can imagine the whole scene where Jai slapped Prachi, have a view into what life has been like for the past years.

You said that you couldn't write...you were lying! This is wonderfully wirtten and I am looking forward to reading the next part.

Sobia

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Posted: 18 years ago
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I don't think you need to do that, I am not a good writer and I am writing about Pia. I don't think I well get people rushing to comment on my fanfic.

-Rimpy
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Seems very interesting and different Rimpy. Prachi's anger is understandable...she's just a teenager who just realized a pretty scary truth...turns her world upside down. Great start! 👏 👏
continue soon.

-Sravi
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hey dear...

I for one would like to comment on your story...
Please don't take me otherwise...

For me your FF is also a story just like any other FF except that it eliminates the need for Character Sketches... and knowing a character!

I think I would like to read your story... Actually your idea of a FF from Pia's side was kind of ingenious!
:-D

I like what I have read till now... Good Job... waiting for the next part now!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: sobia.k

👏First of all congrats on starting a FF Rimpy!

I'm the first one to comment😛

Seems interesting, I like the idea of the diarys, I feel sorry for Pia already🤢 I mean her daughter doesn't even know who her mother was until her sweet 16, harsh. I can imagine the whole scene where Jai slapped Prachi, have a view into what life has been like for the past years.

You said that you couldn't write...you were lying! This is wonderfully wirtten and I am looking forward to reading the next part.

Sobia


Thanks Sobia, you always know how to put a smile on my face. If you feel sorry for Pia know, just wait and watch. I well soon have you forgiving Pia for her actions.😉

Sobia, I can write no where as well as you but still wanted to try my hand at it. And as for the next part, I well post it tomorrow. My motto is 'a part a day, keeps the belan's away.'

-Rimpy
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: inavars

Seems very interesting and different Rimpy. Prachi's anger is understandable...she's just a teenager who just realized a pretty scary truth...turns her world upside down. Great start! 👏 👏
continue soon.

-Sravi


thanks for reading inavars!!! I am glad that from reading the intro you can understand Prachi a little.

-Rimpy
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: punjabi#1


Thanks Sobia, you always know how to put a smile on my face. If you feel sorry for Pia know, just wait and watch. I well soon have you forgiving Pia for her actions.😉

Sobia, I can write no where as well as you but still wanted to try my hand at it. And as for the next part, I well post it tomorrow. My motto is 'a part a day, keeps the belan's away.'

-Rimpy

Ouch. I think the your motto is also applying that one of these days you are gonna send a belan after me! Don't worry I might update today.

Sobia

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Posted: 18 years ago
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rimpy...you dint tell me you were starting a FF....

Well its an awesome start... 👏
I am interested in seeing how Pia is being redeemed....coz I have a few ideas and i want to see how u do it...lol

Not sure if a lot of people will like this idea...but believe me...I will definitely be interested in knowing how u do this...
continue soon...

Rivs
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: sobia.k

Ouch. I think the your motto is also applying that one of these days you are gonna send a belan after me! yup, I thought I'd warn you about the belan before I throw one at you. Don't worry I might update today. might? might's not gonna work, you have to update. Or else

Sobia



-Rimpy

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