UNFORGIVEN - Page 6

Originally posted by: who am i???

sangs...

J-B seperation is never a revenge!! as for raaga that is an issue to party!!!

Raaga will be more than happy to see amma away from munna...think of other ways.

Revenge for all thats what I am aiming for.
I really wish I wasnt writing this saccharine sweet FF?

Originally posted by: sangitadas

Revenge for all thats what I am aiming for.
I really wish I wasnt writing this saccharine sweet FF?

what will u say to all gals who love ur FF esp Phd.gals now u hav to make a choice b/w ur revenge and love.

Originally posted by: who am i???

what will u say to all gals who love ur FF esp Phd.gals now u hav to make a choice b/w ur revenge and love.

Just that I turned mean 😈 🤣

U and mean!!!!!!!! 😆
Well Phd.gang will handle if u plan to seperate J-B

BTW in both cases its my win!!! J-B seperate coz of me!!! wt else can i ask for?? and if J-B are togethere i am happy too

Originally posted by: who am i???

U and mean!!!!!!!! 😆
Well Phd.gang will handle if u plan to seperate J-B

BTW in both cases its my win!!! J-B seperate coz of me!!! wt else can i ask for?? and if J-B are togethere i am happy too

Its not cos of U, its cos of ... U guessed right.

But I think I will not incorporate it into thsi story, cos I Have only 2-3 parts left, otherwise I will have to continue.

But then a short FF will work for me I guess?

Originally posted by: sangitadas

Just that I turned mean 😈 🤣

No, don't do it Sangita! Just today, I read your entire FF (great btw!) and I don't want you to separate them! 😭 Does revenge against one person really mean sadness for so many others of us? 😭

-Pari

Raaga,
beatifully written, but u made me 😭

what my sweet angel bani has done to u that u made her blind 😡, why u have punished her for deeds of reptile.

don't u think Christmas spirit is forgive repentant sinners so why u made JW suffer. do u think that he has not suffered enough for his act of betraying bani.

don't u think it would have been better if he could have got his love with him and what wrong that sweet krishna has done to u that she throughout her life with be staying away from her mother and with GFN WM insects 😡

i request u to just consider the ending of ur story and if u could change this one to a pleasant ending with bani able to see and living happily with JW.


(by the way i always appreciated ur old siggy till the time it was not proved that JW was raped in original KS).

swati

Rose wrote:

I shall be telling this with a sigh
Somewhere ages and ages hence:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I -
I took the one less travelled by,
And that has made all the difference.

from: The Road Not Taken (Poem)by Rober Frost

i got these lines after i read the story. better than this i didn't see an answer for such an ending you chose to give.. am i consoling myself for the ache it left in the heart...
it is wornderful... then i should accept it as you meant it to be.. because i believe every creation meant to be a unique one like the choice of the road which less travelled by anyone... congradulations.. but i think a sequel will kill its uniqueness... as many did kill Pride and Prejudice with it useless sequels... i wish it would be left as it

Thank you Rose. Yes personally I don't like sequels.

now let me tell you this too... i hate you to breake that man's heart like that... whatever it is no mistake is bigger than the life... that is why still we grow up in this world to see every changes happened after our sins... it was symbolic... a blind can be from your poetic point is someone who grown up to be a learned one from life... the "learned one" is defined by those who are beyond expectaions and hopes... the worlds happenings will not be enough to make an effet on them.. as bani said she is above all these .. she is learned.. and i wish jai will also learned... then no need for a sequel... they are connected to each other always..

Aww that was so beautiful. But it is not only him whose heart was broke. Her too. The pain is not only his. Hers too. And hence theirs. They will remain connected through the bond of pain.

Without pain what love? Love is recognized through pain yaar…

good luck.. it is good to see u back.. cheers

Rose

Thank you Rose. I love your name.

Thank you

I don't want to take the writer's right to do what she likes to do. I accepted that. What i said about life, natural life... big or small , we are all having one life... does any one person in this world who didn't make a mistake? big or small... we realise mistakes, repent it... but then it is the way it is.. repentence is the worst punishment a mistake can ever get... no one i mean no one can give more bigger a punishment than that... but we intend to see the life through a preset of narrow corridor... there we become helpless to do anything more than an impulsive reaction... because human is ruled by emotions than wisdom..

And emotions are never logical.

Sorry, I have to disagree… emotions are created in the brain depending upon the original feelings.. if u take it individually the emotions are results of the feelings … it become illogical when it come out in a wrong time and wrong place… hence human… we push back some of the feelings.. yet go and cry in dark.. but some can't push it back… they are weak… they cry instantly… how come it will be illogical when you see you should not be emotional in a circumstance, it is not appropriate.. etc… it is a real logical process in human.. but you emote yourself in loneliness… depend on how strong a personality is…

My god Rose! You amaze me! Life is all about sinning, making others sin; watch them committing sins and reaching that stage where you are able to perceive them dispassionately.

Well, that is something… till you see it is your own brother who is standing in that snowy morning in the middle of the road you will think it is a mountain far away, no it is hill some where near by, no it is some gigantic something… finally go close realize it is your own brother… wow we are there almost… unless we don't opt to aim at that gigantic something before we get there… because each moment of human life gives so much opportunity to do sins… and it is easy to do a sin than good… so sins are heavier…but it like darkness… exactly… if you get used to it the darkness will be easy to deal with.. slowly it will look like light though not bright.. we could make out something though not everything… we deal with sins that same… living with it around us it become light… here we go with life and sin balancing… it is the way it is… and it is the way it is to be… because we believe we can't take the life ourselves… God has to take it back in correct time… too much of emotions…

True. That night, not only Jai Walia died but also us and all that he stood for us. They made good fools of us…

Yes I agreed.. but a physical death is more appropriate.. because I believe the jai walia I adore didn't do a sin.. it is impossible.. atleast he didn't do it when he is in his sense… if he is not in his sense then it is not he who do it…

I pity people like Bani.

They don't need sympathy yaar… they are above all that… it is to be like we pity ourselves…

Thank you AP. I am afraid I can never capture the depth of her love. It is too complicated, judging by her actions!

Wallowing in the emptiness is meaningless when you already decided against it… Bani's case is like that… but she is not like that… because love doesn't support revenge/punishment… love never accept failure… so it forgives… it is dead when it fails to love , I mean fail to forgive… for genuine cause… it is easy to destroy something… but we will take ages to create or even become impossible to create it again at all…

Underlined creatives success had done so much damage… Gods of the illusion world… Gods of the imagination world… rule is their right… but the option left is to open or close your sensors when they rule… we have the sensors still in tact I believe

Hi Raga Om,

I have been a lurker for a while now. Your story compels me to come out of my hiding.

"Unforgiven" is redemption of Jai and Bani Walia in full measure.

Also, wittingly or unwittingly your character portrayal of Bani is even better than that of Jai. If one were to pitt one againts the other, in keeping with the flavor of the forum 😉 , Bani comes out ahead despite "munna" getting his "Krishna". In your story, it is Bani who stands out with her grace, her magnanimity, her giving from the beginning till the very end.

I say all this when I don't even like Bani much. Or for that matter Jai. I cancelled my zee after the ONS.

The end is very, very beautiful. That process of letting go, that is Jai and Bani's love story, or at least that is how I feel it should be.

One question, if Bani carried Mr. W's child six years back, then how is the kid still a toddler 😃 ? Another question, given that both the characters move beyond forgiveness to complete acceptance, why the title "Unforgiven"?

Regards,
Abha

That was so cute, but y did they go there onw ways!!!