UNFORGIVEN - Page 5

Originally posted by: sangitadas

Excellent,. but 😭

And believe me, you will pay for this.

Where's my hanky?

Is that a threat di?

Ms Das, you got a taste of your own medicine. Next time you decide to write a tragedy and make us cry buckets, think twice! Right Archie?

-Raaga

p.s: Omg! Di What lovely siggys! Aww the dolly's so cute! That should be me!😉

majumdar wrote

Raaga,

Why do make my Munna and me cry so much?

Well he looks so utterly desirable when he's crying so you would drool over him!

(He gives us what we deserve and not what we desire. And most often than not, what we deserve is much better than what we desired. )

Please don't tell that. Don't tell me that my Munna deserves all this pain and a lifelong separation from his Munni. Surely his sins aren't all that great.

Priys, it is Amma who ought to complain! At least my Munna has his Krishna. She has nobody. Who is to judge the magnitude of sins? Who is to judge if the punishment is deserving or not?

Rgds,

Pri

Kehan wrote

wonderful ,
i was having the images in my mind

superb

u shud be one of the kreatives of KS

Thank you so much dear.

-Raaga

Pinky wrote

Very well written but

But if it is catharsis and makes you feel better I am OK with that I guess.

Getting rid of all those bottled feeling has given us the old Raaga back so I will deal with my

You sound like Amma, Pinky!

Thank you so much!

-Raaga

Rose wrote:

I shall be telling this with a sigh
Somewhere ages and ages hence:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I -
I took the one less travelled by,
And that has made all the difference.

from: The Road Not Taken (Poem)by Rober Frost

i got these lines after i read the story. better than this i didn't see an answer for such an ending you chose to give.. am i consoling myself for the ache it left in the heart...
it is wornderful... then i should accept it as you meant it to be.. because i believe every creation meant to be a unique one like the choice of the road which less travelled by anyone... congradulations.. but i think a sequel will kill its uniqueness... as many did kill Pride and Prejudice with it useless sequels... i wish it would be left as it

Thank you Rose. Yes personally I don't like sequels.

now let me tell you this too... i hate you to breake that man's heart like that... whatever it is no mistake is bigger than the life... that is why still we grow up in this world to see every changes happened after our sins... it was symbolic... a blind can be from your poetic point is someone who grown up to be a learned one from life... the "learned one" is defined by those who are beyond expectaions and hopes... the worlds happenings will not be enough to make an effet on them.. as bani said she is above all these .. she is learned.. and i wish jai will also learned... then no need for a sequel... they are connected to each other always..

Aww that was so beautiful. But it is not only him whose heart was broke. Her too. The pain is not only his. Hers too. And hence theirs. They will remain connected through the bond of pain.

good luck.. it is good to see u back.. cheers

Rose

Thank you Rose. I love your name.

Lunza wrote

i loved it and hated it at the same time .. it is very well written and powerful but it is not the kind of ff tht i wud want to read again ...... bcuz i dont wanna cry again !
i hope the kreative lurkers dont read this and get crazy ideas about incorporating it in the story !

Thanks dear. I can assure you there won't be another one like this. I don't myself like tragedies.

God forbid!

-Raaga

majumdar wrote:

Rose/Raaga,

I am inclined to agree with Rose here. Forgiveness is a quality of the highest level. After all didn't Munna forgive Pia, Pooch, ND and Kiran for what they did to him, don't u think some forgiveness was also due to him? Or is forgiveness something that only the Dixits are entitled to?

Rgds,

Pri

I am sorry my dear Priyanka but I was in no mood to forgive any of them! The way they played with my heart, I wanted to punish them and indirectly myself. It sounds so stupid. But heck this show has made me crazy. I didn't grieve so much not even when my first TV crush, Onurag Basu was butchered. But Munna and Bani, they are different. They affected me much more than I had given credit. When dream broke, the illusion broke and I set out to punish and now that I have had my sweet revenge, even if a virtual one, I am sorry I wrote this at all.

If JB were real and if at all there are real couples like them, I wish they will never meet such an end and will remain together, forever, very much in love with each other.

-Raaga

Rose wrote

I don't want to take the writer's right to do what she likes to do. I accepted that. What i said about life, natural life... big or small , we are all having one life... does any one person in this world who didn't make a mistake? big or small... we realise mistakes, repent it... but then it is the way it is.. repentence is the worst punishment a mistake can ever get... no one i mean no one can give more bigger a punishment than that... but we intend to see the life through a preset of narrow corridor... there we become helpless to do anything more than an impulsive reaction... because human is ruled by emotions than wisdom..

And emotions are never logical.

My god Rose! You amaze me! Life is all about sinning, making others sin; watch them committing sins and reaching that stage where you are able to perceive them dispassionately.

Aperture wrote

Hey Raaga Om

Jai Walia, for me, died that night in Dubai. The socalled Kreatives made
chop suey out of him in exchange for a trp. He was sold to the cheapest
bidder. Blind Bani-well she was blindly in love with her husband. Poor
thing she can't see
that ppl can have their own hidden agendas even if it is her own sister.
Bani
could never think let alone imagine of something like wht Pia did to her in
her soul bc she
is not Pia. Bani's soul is pure and her love for JW was a pure love, a true
love, a simple love.
I understand why Bani's character can never live with JW. And I actually
admire her for her decision. She had loved Jai Walia and that Jai Walia to
her died that Dubai night. But her daughter does need her mother, even
if her mother is blind. Krishna needs Bani.
(I simply love the Blind metaphor-You have really captured the depth of
Bani's love.)
AP

True. That night, not only Jai Walia died but also us and all that he stood for us. They made good fools of us…

I pity people like Bani. They have to pay for their inherent flaw. At least Krishna has one parent who has understood life, his functions in this life by losing his everything. After all success is counted sweetest by those who ne'er succeed, as Emily Dickinson said.

Thank you AP. I am afraid I can never capture the depth of her love. It is too complicated, judging by her actions!

-Raaga

Pari wrote

Raaga,

I just read the story... and it was wonderfully written.

Thank you so much dear.

It left this sensation with me that I can't even explain to you. Somehow, it felt okay for you to have that as an ending. I am a happy-ever-after girl, it bugs me when stories end like this... but the way Jai and Bani both knew what they had to do at the end made it okay. I am still crying about it and I still feel hollowness about this story but it was nonetheless a piece of art.

Aww thank you! I am so grateful after the censure I have received, this is welcome!

I don't know if I am making sense.

Coourse you are.

Even though Bani is blind, she can still raise Krishna because I have seen people do that. It is now unfair how Jai has his entire family, Rano, Pushkar and especially Krishna with him but Bani has no one. I can't imagine her living all alone far from her loved ones... It is as if she is paying for Jai's mistakes more then he is.

That's the tragedy of life. It never is fair. But she won't be alone Pari. Bani is above the human mundanes. Her enlightenment and the final severing from the umbilical cord will be her company. You know it is like when we grieve for the dead. But actually we must grieve for ourselves because they have escaped. We have not.

Also, your story was such a conventional idea for us KS addicts that it raises so many different types of questions. We all hate Jaigiri and Banigiri but in the end we love Jai and Bani together. It is as if they are just in a different category together, they belong to each other with their strenghts and weaknesses.

That's true.Mayi has succeeding in to dividing us in to two enemy camps or so she thinks. Yet we are connected by a common want.Every one of us , irrespective of whether we are Jai brigadians or Bani campers, we have only one supermost desire and that is to see the two together, always and fight all the obstacles together.

But overall, I loved the story, it made me cry for both of them! But I guess that is life, we don't always get what we want.

Lot of times I am glad I don't get what I want! Lord to think of the foolish things I once wanted!

Look forward to other works that you may kindly give us in the future!

Thank you Pari . I love your name too. And wow how much sukoon your avtar gives me!

-Pari

-Raaga

I agree. It is not the sin that killed Jai but what the actions he took after the sin that killed him in my eyes.

-Pari

Exactly. If only he had behaved like the man that we fell in love with…

-Raaga

Btw this is what I found in my pm box in reply to this ff and I'd like to share with all:

🤣

Hi.......

I cried cried cried like hell!!!!!!!!

I am happy munna was alone as he is better off without all those GFN.Yes even without amma.

Amma u made her blind!!!! hailla what a sweet revenge u took!!! and nobody understood that,now thats why i like u...u see ur a meetha zaher for amma.but all i hav to say andhi ko kya andha banana??? amma was blind na,always

Killed billo!!! hai that was a kinda relief to my heart!!! kitna sukoon mila tha yeh line pad kar...

Thank God adi and jiggs left!!! esp jiggs else she would hav done some kinda bad to my krishna.

Sahil hahahaha i dont want to talk.

Well really loved french beard pooch and his velevet gown wife....personally i hate rano and pushkar as they are the ones who ruined my babies life by supporting amma in her bloody pyar ke naam tasks.

Next i hated when he kissed her.......no after six yrs of purity u made him maila again by making him kiss her,these bani never leaves any opportunity.

Pia she is like useless one in WM.

Fianlly i am so happy for krishna as she is gonna be with her dad!!! yaayaya she will be with her papa the best papa in the world.

PS : Bani did sound like a saint,priest,mata hari with all those dialogues she kept mouthing

From

Innocent little MUNNA'S DEVIL!

Originally posted by: Raaga_om

Is that a threat di?

Ms Das, you got a taste of your own medicine. Next time you decide to write a tragedy and make us cry buckets, think twice! Right Archie?

-Raaga

p.s: Omg! Di What lovely siggys! Aww the dolly's so cute! That should be me!😉

Treat it as whatever you wish to. But its payback time now Hun.

Tell Arch too.

Infact 'sawaan ke andhey ko to hariyaali dikhti hai'

I already have the perfect idea, just a matter of time.

You that dollie? Nah, thats me ☺️

Originally posted by: Raaga_om

Btw this is what I found in my pm box in reply to this ff and I'd like to share with all:

🤣

And I think I have a fair idea as to who wrote this. Style and attitude, I would say, My dear Raaga, those are the give aways.

Hi.......

I cried cried cried like hell!!!!!!!!

What's new with that anyway? With any of us?

I am happy munna was alone as he is better off without all those GFN.Yes even without amma.

Sure, he can now look for 'support' elsewhere, with nobody to keep tabs on him. 😉

Amma u made her blind!!!! hailla what a sweet revenge u took!!! and nobody understood that,now thats why i like u...u see ur a meetha zaher for amma.but all i hav to say andhi ko kya andha banana??? amma was blind na,always

Yes the medicine is much more bitter for JW I guess, he will continue living every day of his life with the feeling that he has finally succeeded in taking away everything from a person. Well all I can say is, Best of luck for your future Jai. 👏

Killed billo!!! hai that was a kinda relief to my heart!!! kitna sukoon mila tha yeh line pad kar...

Thank God adi and jiggs left!!! esp jiggs else she would hav done some kinda bad to my krishna.

Sahil hahahaha i dont want to talk.

Well really loved french beard pooch and his velevet gown wife....personally i hate rano and pushkar as they are the ones who ruined my babies life by supporting amma in her bloody pyar ke naam tasks.

Yes I know. If they ahd supported JW thorugh that period, they would have become mahaans, but what to do? A Dixit brain and a Shukla brain cant even make up for one-fourth of a Walia brain, which sometimes forgets its area of location.

Next i hated when he kissed her.......no after six yrs of purity u made him maila again by making him kiss her,these bani never leaves any opportunity.

This means NO JDD in my story, I am saved. Why make JW maila? I like the idea. He can later go to the cleanies, but I would keep him away from Bani.

If only people knew how much that kiss meant for their lives and was not a simple act of titillation. 😕

Pia she is like useless one in WM.

But she's still there.

Fianlly i am so happy for krishna as she is gonna be with her dad!!! yaayaya she will be with her papa the best papa in the world.

Amen to that.

PS : Bani did sound like a saint,priest,mata hari with all those dialogues she kept mouthing

Sure, writers influence must say. In any way, she suffers from Split Personae Syndrome, as per the Baiters, so whats new with it?

If only JW had sprouted those beauties, he would become so sensitive and empathetic.

From

Innocent little MUNNA'S DEVIL!

I loved it.

Originally posted by: sangitadas

Treat it as whatever you wish to. But its payback time now Hun.

Tell Arch too.

Infact 'sawaan ke andhey ko to hariyaali dikhti hai'

I already have the perfect idea, just a matter of time.

You that dollie? Nah, thats me ☺️

hurray!!! that means ur gonna write another FF!!! i am waiting!!!!!

J-B sty togethere are away its no matter of concern for me now!!!

PS : if ur planing another sadfic ,can i be the other woman in JW life??? 😳

Originally posted by: who am i???

hurray!!! that means ur gonna write another FF!!! i am waiting!!!!!

J-B sty togethere are away its no matter of concern for me now!!!

PS : if ur planing another sadfic ,can i be the other woman in JW life??? 😳

How abt I incorporate it in the present FF? My revenge you know. Its always so sweet.

Originally posted by: sangitadas

How abt I incorporate it in the present FF? My revenge you know. Its always so sweet.

Yeh tu kya karnae ja rahi hain??? ab to sirf shaadi hi hua hain,suhaag raat kya they did'nt even kiss still and ur seperating them.

i am here waqiting for their C-night and from last two updates ur drowning me with flashbacks!!!

PS : well if i am munna's ex with whom he had passionate fling then its okay😳..but i hav my reservations u cant put me in reptiles league if u dare do so u know wt will i do😡

Originally posted by: who am i???

Yeh tu kya karnae ja rahi hain??? ab to sirf shaadi hi hua hain,suhaag raat kya they did'nt even kiss still and ur seperating them.

i am here waqiting for their C-night and from last two updates ur drowning me with flashbacks!!!

PS : well if i am munna's ex with whom he had passionate fling then its okay😳..but i hav my reservations u cant put me in reptiles league if u dare do so u know wt will i do😡

How do you like the idea of 'blast from the past' with whom Jai had shared a torrid past?
Though he loves Bani, yet physically he cannot ignore the other woman too, say namely Pia. And this pihysical inclination will always come in front of him and guide him.

What a revenge?

Originally posted by: sangitadas

How do you like the idea of 'blast from the past' with whom Jai had shared a torrid past?
Though he loves Bani, yet physically he cannot ignore the other woman too, say namely Pia. And this pihysical inclination will always come in front of him and guide him.

What a revenge?

sangs...

J-B seperation is never a revenge!! as for raaga that is an issue to party!!!

Raaga will be more than happy to see amma away from munna...think of other ways.