MANAN-MY GUARDIAN ANGEL(Chapter-11 on pg.no.9)(25.2.2017) - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Intresting concept ... Would love to read this story
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CHAPTER-1

There was darkness all around. The silence of night had covered the surroundings.
In a dense forest there was a small house.
A dim light could be seen from the window of that house.

Few people were sitting across a long table.

They were whispering among themselves.

The door opened with a bang and two people entered and one of them sat down on one of the chair and the other one stood behind him.

The man who sat down was a short stout old man with a moustache.
The man standing was a medium height guy with long hair.

The old man cleared his throat and everyone got alerted and stopped the whispering.

The old man said- Gentlemen . You all are well aware of the reason why we have gathered here.

Everyone in the room nodded.

Old man - Well the time has now come and we need to speed up our tracking mission.

Our sources have informed us that the gang is hell bent in finding her.

We have to double up our efforts or else they will reach her before us.

One of the person sitting there said- But sir we don't know her whereabouts. We don't even know how she looks. Then how will we reach her.

Another man- You are right. All we could get our hands on is her childhood photo.

Old man- Yes I agree with whatever you all have to say. But we have to start from somewhere.
We cannot afford to be lenient.

The old man then turned to the medium height man and asked-

I want the total background history of the family on my desk in a week.

Get going now.

The medium height person nodded one and left.

Old man- That will be all. Gentlemen we need all your support .
This mission is not only important for us but for you people as well. You all can leave now.

Everyone left one by one.

The old man took out a photo and looked at it once then kept it in his pocket and walked out.

The servants locked the house and gave the keys to the old man. The old man took it and left from there in his car.

After everyone left , a person hiding behind a tree at a distance from the house came out and dialled a number and said-
Boss the meeting is over. Everyone has left the place.
They don't have any information regarding the girl except a photo.

Boss- Get that photo.

Person- Sorry Boss I couldn't see the photo.
They have taken it with them.

Boss- U idiot ! You are good for nothing.
Now come back before anyone spots you there.

Person- O.K. Boss.

Saying this he disconnected the call and went from there.

At a distance a man was sitting in the car parked at the side of the road.
It was the same old man who headed the meeting.

The old man saw the person who was talking on the phone.

He smiled and thought to himself- I knew it that you people will be after us.

Now I can easily mislead you.
I will never allow you guys to reach the girl before us.

Saying this even he left from there.

Done with the first chapter.

Guys first of all my apologies to all of you for taking so long in posting the first chapter.

I was caught up in some work.

But now I am back.

Secondly, I will not post this story regularly like my other works.

Hope you guys understand .

And lastly,

Keep supporting through your comments and tell me whether you liked it or not.



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Posted: 9 years ago
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Amazing start really liked the first chp...
All the best with the new story
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CHAPTER-2

A girl of tiny frame was sleeping on a huge bed.
She had a frown on her face. She was sweating badly. It seemed like she was having a nightmare.
She was murmuring something in her sleep.
She woke up with a jerk and shouted- Appaaa...
Two other girls came rushing after hearing her scream.

One of the girl said- Kya hua Nandu . Why did you shout? Fir se wahi sapna Dekha kya?

The girl nodded and she hugged both the girls. She looked scared.

She said- Mukku ,Alu why do I get this nightmare every time.
It seems that I have lost someone very important in my past. Why can't I remember anything?

Yes the girl was Nandini and the two other girls were her friends- Mukti and Aliya.

To lighten the atmosphere Aliya said- Guys I think Nandu ko pichle janam ke incidents dikhte hai neend me.

Nandini looked at Mukti and both of them laughed and said- Dumbo... Kuch bhi bolti hai.

Aliya made a sad pout and all three of them laughed again and shared a group hug.

Mukti's Mom came and saw the girls were still on bed as it was already late for their college.

She in panic mode- Oh God kya karu in ladkiyon ka mai. Suraj sar pe chadh gaya aur ye teen maharaniya abhi tak aaram farma rahi hai. Chalo jaldi utho aur ready ho jao. Warna aj fir college ke liye late hojaogi.

Nandini , Mukti and Aliya looked at each other and said in unison- Mommm... Take a chill pill...

Nandini and Aliya used to call Mukti's mother as Mom

Mukti's Mom- Haan Haan chill pill hot pill sab lelungi but first tum log ready hogao.

Mukti slapped her forehead hearing her mom. Aliya and Nandini giggled seeing Mukti.

All three of them got ready and went down to have breakfast.


They quickly had breakfast and Mukti's Mom asked them to hurry up for college.
Mukti rolled her eyes and then the three of them left for college.

They entered the college in full on attitude.

First came Mukti who was very sweet for her friends but very evil for those who tried to mess with her or her friends. She was known as Lady Bheem by her classmates.

Next was Nandini. She was sweet and innocent. But was a prankster.
Sometimes her pranks used to land all three of them in trouble. But them they loved her so much so they didn't mind .

Lastly Aliya. She was a fashion diva. She spent most of the time in reading fashion magazines and following latest trends in fashion.
She seldom used to study but she had Mukti and Nandini to help her out.

All three of them were very close to each other and shared an inseperable bond.

All the boys of the college wanted to get close to them but didn't have courage to approach either of them.

And the girls of the college were jealous of them as every boy in the college used to pay attention to the three girls and not them.

Ignoring all of them Mukti, Nandini and Aliya went inside the college to attend the lecture.


Done with the update.

It was just an introductory chapter.

Hope you guys like it.

Please give your valuable comments.

Edited by Sarahpeyton - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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loved it
its interesting
I think tat gal is nandu rite
y goons r behind her?
can't ewait
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Hey guys did you miss me...

I hope you all did.

I am back with a new update .

First let me finish this update.

Enjoy...


CHAPTER -3


Nandini, Mukti and Aliya entered the classroom and went and sat together at their favourite place that is at the last bench.

Every professor was afraid of these three . They were famous for their pranks.

Nandini was eating a bubblegum and Mukti and Aliya were throwing weird looks at the professor.

The professor gulped his saliva and turned to the board to start his lecture.

Meanwhile Mukti and Aliya got busy in their phone and fashion magazine respectively, Nandini was thinking of a plan to trouble the professor with one of her pranks.

Nandini burst the bubble gum in her mouth and the professor got alerted as it was a warning signal that Nandini is soon to come up with something wicked .

The professor without looking towards Nandini was giving lecture when Nandini raised her hand suddenly as if she has a doubt.

The professor first got confused as this was the first time Nandini had paid attention to his lecture and even got a doubt.

Professor - Yes Nandini tell me what is your doubt. I will clear it.

Nandini innocently looked at the professor and said-What doubt sir? I don't have any doubt.

Professor - But you have raised your hand to ask a doubt.

Nandini looked at her raised hand and then at the Professor.

Nandini - Oh this... Sir I was just stretching my hand that's it.

The professor's eyes popped out of the socket. He had again fallen for her prank.

The whole class started laughing seeing the Professor.

He immediately declared the end of class and rushed out after collecting his books to save himself from further embarrassment.

Mukti and Aliya slapped their foreheads and said- Nandu ki bachchi tu kabhi nahi Sudhregi na.

Nandini - Kabhi nahi.

And the three of them laughed and went to canteen.

The three of them were eating sandwiches when a person came and sat near Nandini and held her hand and said-

Hi Nanz... wanna go on a movie date with me.

Everyone present in the canteen froze on their spot hearing the person.

They knew what was to come next.

Mukti stopped eating her sandwich and got up from her seat.

She straightened the person's collar and asked -
Leave her hand.

Person- Relax Mukti why are you getting serious. I am talking to Nandini. Please don't interfere.

Mukti- Listen you Mr. Whatever sharafat se bol rahi hu hath chod uska warna...

Person - Hey first of all my name is Rocky... and secondly ye dhamki Kisi aur ko dena. Nahi chodunga hath kya karlogi.

Mukti - Listen you last time bol rahi hu leave her hand.

Rocky ignoring Mukti said to Nandini- So Nanz , Is it a yes.

Nandini - Ab mai kya bolu . Iska jawab to tumhe Mukti degi.

Before Rocky could realize , he was on the floor with a hard punch from Mukti.

Rocky wiped the blood coming out from his mouth and stood straight.

Mukti - Next time se don't even try to act smart with us.

Rocky- You... How dare you?

He was about to charge on her but one of his friends told him that the principal is on rounds of college so he went away after giving a killer look at Mukti and Nandini.

Nandini - Kya baat hai Mukku... I am impressed. Kya punch maara hai. Maza aagaya.

Saying this she hugged Mukti.

Aliya too joined them.

Meanwhile somewhere at a house in a village-

Morning time-

A man was sleeping on a cot peacefully when a small kid of 5 years came and sat on his back and started to wake him up.

Kid- CHACHU utho na jaldi...

Person - Kya hai Ansh jaa na. Sone de mujhe.

Ansh- Uthooo naaa...

The person got irritated and got up.

Person - Kya hai bol.

Ansh flashed his teeth and said-

CHACHU mujhe jaldi se chupao. Mere peeche rakshas pada hai. Wo mujhe maar dega. Jaldi chupao.

Person - Ansh Ab kya Kia tune.

Ansh with an innocent face- Maine Kuch nahi Kia.

Someone knocked on the door.

Person from outside - Manik darwaza kholo.

(Yes the person who was sleeping was none other than Manik)

Ansh- Jaldi chupao mujhe.

Manik - Jaa Jake us table ke neeche chup jaa.

Ansh ran and hid under the table.

Manik put a bed sheet over the table .


Then he went and opened the door.

A girl in in her early 20s stood there with a stick.

Girl- kaha hai wo badmash. Mai Janti hu wo tumhare paas hi aaya hoga. Hato side me. Aaj to uski Khair nahi.

Manik - Navya tum kiski baat kar rahi ho. Yahan to koi nahi hai. Mai to so raha tha.

(The girl was none other than Navya and Ansh was Cabir and Navya's son)

Navya- Tum jhoot mat bolo. Jeena haram karke rakha hai usne mera. Ek baar hath lagne do. Fir batati hu.

Navya went inside the house and started to search everywhere.

She saw Ansh hiding under the table.

She thought of a trick to bring him out by himself.

Navya- Shayad tum sahi bol rahe ho Manik. Ansh yaha nahi hai. Mai kahi aur jakar dhoondti hu.

Saying this she acted as if she went away.

Ansh peeked out from under the table and asked - CHACHU gaya kya rakshas...

That was it...

Manik palmed his face with one hand.

Navya appeared from nowhere and stood in front of Ansh.

Navya in a sugar coated tone - Nahi Beta rakshas yahi hai. Tumhe liye bina kahi nahi Jane wala ye rakshas.

Ansh tried to run away from there but Navya caught him.

Navya raised the stick and was about to beat him when Manik stopped her.

Manik - Navya jane dona bacha hai. Kyu itna gussa kar rahi ho. Kiya kya hai isne.

Navya- Manik tum beech me mat bolo. Tumhe pata hai isne us Bhola ki sari murgiya(hens) cage (or chicken coop) se release kar Di. Ab wo mere sar Par khada hai. Kehta hai ki mai sari murgiya pakad ke cage me daalu. Ab mai kya karu batao tumhi.

Manik - Uski itni himmat mai abhi dekhta hu use...

Manik was about to go out to teach Bhola a lesson.

But Navya stopped him.

Navya- Ye hi to hum nahi chahte. Jo kaam pyar se hosakta hai Uske liye jhagda kyu karna.

Manik - Par Navya... wo kya bhoolgaya ki tum kaun ho... aise kaise bolsakta hai wo. Tum ruko mai use yaad dilakar aata hu.

Navya - Agar tum hamare liye kuch karna chahte ho to tumhe wohi karna hoga jo hum kehte hai.

Manik - Nai... mai nahi karne wala... mai janta hu tum kya soch rahi ho. Par bhool jao mujhse nahi hoga...

Manik was about to go away when Navya said - Apni behen ke liye itna nahi karsakte tum...

Manik - Navya Ab ye emotional blackmail ka drama mat shuru karo.

Navya glared at him.

Manik - Theek hai jaraha hu...

Saying this he went away.

Navya shouted from behind - Saari murgiya pakadna. Ek bhi nahi chootni chahiye...

Manik - Ek do murgiya to chura kar le aaunga taake hum logon ka breakfast maze se hojaye.

Navya smiled at Manik's antics.

Navya turned towards Ansh and said- Ab tumhe kya alag se dawat deni padegi. Jao Jake CHACHU ki help karo.

Ansh - Theek hai...

And he ran away from there as fast as he could so that Navya won't be able to beat him again incase she changes her mood.

Manik and Ansh ran behind the hens to catch them.

It took them almost one hour to catch all the hens.

When all the hens were back in the cage, Manik and Ansh sighed and sat down on the stairs outside their house.

Ansh - Mai to thak gaya CHACHU.

Manik - Aise kaam karta hi kyu hai.

Ansh- Wo galti se cage ka lock khulgaya. Maine jaan boojh ke nahi kiya.

Manik - Acha theek hai. Bahut bhook lagi hai yaar.

Ansh- Haan mujhe bhi.

Manik - Chal do murgiya le le us cage se.

Ansh - Par CHACHU wo daantega.

Manik - Arey Kuch nahi hoga main hoon na.

Ansh took 2 hens from the cage and came to Manik.

The owner of the hens ran to catch him but stopped in his way on seeing Manik.

The shop owner gulped his saliva and said- Arey Bhaiyya aap yahan. Meri to kismat hi khulgaye Jo aj subah subah aapke darshan hogaye. Kahiye kya seva karu apki.

Manik - Kyu Bhola teri himmat bahut badgayi hai. Tu janta hai na Navya kaun hai. Fir bhi tune uspar awaaz uthayi.

Bhola - Galti hogayi Bhaiyya. Ainda se nahi hoga. Meri mat maari gayi thi.

Manik - is baar Jane de raha hu. Agar dobara aisa karne ki koshish bhi ki na to mujhse bura koi nahi hoga.

Bhola - Ji Bhaiyya samajgaya. Ap khade kyu ho baithiye na.

Then he saw the hens in Ansh's hand.

Ansh hid behind Manik and showed his tongue to Bhola.

Manik - Mai baithne nahi aaya tha. Tumhari Saari murgiya pakad ke cage me band kardi hai. Mai 2 murgiya le jaraha hu.

Bhola- Arey Bhaiyya ek aur le jaiye ap hi ki to dukaan hai. Jitne chahiye utne lejaiye.

Manik - Bakwas bandh kar apni. Free me nahi lejaraha hu. Le iske paise rakhle.

Saying this he handed Bhola the money for the hens.

Manik and Ansh went to Ansh's house with the hens.

Navya saw the hens in Ansh's hand and said- Manik tum sach me le aaye ye murgiya.

Manik - Haan Ab jaldi se koi achi dish banakar Lao. Bahut bhook lagi hai.

Navya sighed and took the hens with her for cooking.

In the meantime, Manik and Ansh freshened up .

Ansh came to the kitchen for eating.

Navya - Manik kaha hai.

Ansh - Wo to apne ghar chale gaye.

Navya served Ansh the chicken curry with chapati.

And took another plate for Manik and went to his house.

Navya- Manik tum chale kyu aaye waha se. Pata nahi kyu tum is ghar me hi rehte ho. Hamare sath kyu nahi rehte us ghar me.

Manik - Navya mujhe akele rehna pasand hai. Aur is baare me mujhe aur baat nahi karni.

Navya gave the food to Manik and he started to eat.

Navya- Manik Cabir kab tak aayega. Bahut din hogaye usey gaye hue.

Manik- Aaj Shaam tak aajayega wo.

Navya-Ok.

Manik finished eating and said-

Navya main jaraha hu. Shaam ko Cabir ko lekar hi lautunga.

Navya - Ok.

Saying this she went to her house.

Manik got ready and left for his work.





Done with another update.

In this chapter I have tried to show the bond of Nandini and Manik respectively with their loved ones.

Hope I have succeeded in showing the bond.

Did u guys like it .

Please give your comments, suggestions and feedback.

Edited by Sarahpeyton - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome update...
Wow! what a punch I expected in nandu's style but it's in mukti style.
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Awesome update...
Yes u were totally able to show the bond ..
Manik n Nandini have completely different life style..
The story looks really intersting
Thank u for the update

Conti soon
:)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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wow!!!
i loved it
was awesome

so manik lives in village wit cavya??
does tat means tat
there's some mystery behind
manan???

loved this prankster nandu
can't wait till it get
reveled
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Hi guys...

It's been too long since i have updated this story.

So here I am with the update.

CHAPTER -4

Manik got ready and left for his work.

Manik entered a huge bungalow.


He went straight to a room where a man was lying on the bed with a sling in his hand.

Manik sat on a stool near the bed.

Manik - Kaisa hai yaar ...

Man with the sling - Pehle se behtar hoon.

Manik - Navya pooch rahi thi tere baare me.

The guy with the sling was none other than Cabir.

Cabir - Kaisi hai wo aur Ansh kaisa hai.

Manik - Theek hai dono. Tujhe bahut yaad kar rahe hai. Maine bataya to nahi unhe teri is chot ke baare me. But kab tak chupaunga yaar. Tujhe nahi Lagta ki Hume chupana nahi chahiye Navya se is baare me.

Cabir - Nahi yaar. Bas Kuch dino ki baat hai. Phir mai theek hojaunga. Khamakha batake Pareshan kyu karu usey.

Manik - Wo bhi sahi hai.

Their talk was interrupted by a man around 50 years of age.

Manik got up as soon as the man entered.

Manik went and touched the man's feet and took his blessings.

Manik - Boss aap yahan. Hume bula liya hota.

The man was none other than Shakti Patil for whom Manik and Cabir worked.

Shakti Patil- Tum log mere khaas bande ho. To tumhara khayal rakhna mera farz banta hai. Mai Cabir ko dekhne aaya tha.

Cabir sat straight on the bed.

Cabir - Boss mai theek hu.

S.P- Hmm. Badiya. Bahut badiya. Manik ek naya order aaya hai. To tumhe abhi nikalna hoga.

Manik - Theek hai boss. But karna kya hai.

S.P- Ek bahut hi badi dealing hone wali hai chandan ke lakdiyo ki jungle me. To tum abhi jao aur usey apni nigrani me sahi salamat is patey ( address) pe pahucha do.

Saying this he handed Manik a chit on which the address was written.

Manik took it and kept it safely in his pocket.

S.P- Aur Haan ek baat ka dhyan rakhna Chahe Kuch bhi hojaye deal Puri karke hi lautna.

Manik - Ap fikar mat karo boss. Chahe jaan bhi chali jaye but order pura karunga mai.

S.P- Shabash... Yehi ummeed thi tumse mujhe. Bharose ke do teen ladki ko le jao sath.

Cabir - Boss mai jata hoon na Manik ke sath. Aap tension mat lijiye.

S.P- Cabir tum mat jao. Tumhare hath me chot hai. Tum aaram karo.

Cabir didn't say anything and agreed to his boss.

Manik - Theek hai boss mai nikalta hoon phir.

Saying this Manik left the room.

In the meantime at Mukti's house -

Nandini,Aliya and Mukti were discussing about their midterm vacations which had started.

They were confused as to where they should go this time as they had already explored all the possible places.

Mukti's Mom came and saw the girls were discussing something.

Mukti Mom- Kya hua bachcho tum log kya baatein kar rahe ho.

Nandini - Mom dekho na Hume samajhme nahi aaraha hai ki hum log kaha jaye vacation me. Aur Ab to time bhi kam hai. Aap hi Kuch suggest karo na.

Mukti Mom- Hmm... To tum log Kerala ke Marayur forest kyu nahi chali jati. Achchi jagah hai.

She said this casually and was about to go out of the room.

Mukti,Aliya and Nandini looked at each other and shouted- Aaahhh...

Mukti's Mom got scared hearing their shout.

M.M- Kya hua tum log chilla kyu rahe ho.

All three of them ran to Mukti's Mom and hugged her.

Mukti - Thanks Mom.Aap ne itni aasani se humari problem solve kardi. Love you Mom. You are the best.

M.M- Haan Haan. Mujhe pata hai. I am the best. Ab zyada time waste mat karo aur Jake packing karlo. Mai baaki ke arrangements karwati hoon.

Saying this she went away.

Mukti,Nandini and Aliya got excited to go to the Marayur forest.

They had heard a lot about the forest. It was the largest producer of sandalwood.

The three girls packed there bags and went down to see if Mukti's mother had done the arrangements of travelling and other stuff.

Done with another update.

It is short update.

But I hope you guys like it.

Please give your comments.


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