Voyage: A Manik-Nandini Fiction| *Completed* Ch11, Pg 27 - Page 9

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Posted: 9 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: jainishah061997

again a superb chapter!!!
Manik's confusion ...feelings...emotions for nandini have been beautifully penned! !!!!
Loved ur way of writing!
cont soon.


Thank You!

Its good that you like the way everything is been penned. And I surely do hope that i continue to pen it the same way, if not better.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: zohasad2.0

His confusion, his acceptance of a feeling greater than friendship but his inacceptance to love...aaah...I love u girl!


Thank You. I hope you people like the next as well. I love you too.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#83

Originally posted by: snow_manan

amazing👏👏

such an awesome writing skills you have girl👏👏
ohh god...loved the way you penned manik's confused thoughts
he was sure about friendship but unsure about love uff
great job girl



Thank You.

I still have a LOT to improve.

Thanks, I am glad you like his confusion.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#84

Originally posted by: bitasta

Thank you for this...

I firmly believe that love is a journey with too many sojourns in between... A blush here and a rush of adrenaline there, stolen moments or hitched breaths, some confusions, some seriousness, some playfulness, a little anxiety, a new found ecstacy or a never before experienced anguish. ... there are so many facets to love.. bittet sweet..As u have rightly said many stages to the ultimate realization...

We do not get to read and vicariously live through all these amazing moments very often... when the journey is of love, it is worth celebrating every milestone that comes in between this journery... Thanks once again for making this happen..

Please pm me whenever you update next...

Love n god bless
Anura

P.S : Just begun to read collision after I got to know about it.. Shall comment on it soon too..

Hey, Anura, Thank you so much!

Yes, love, life, and every damn single moment has a journey in itself. Every transition makes a journey. Some to love, some to cherish, some to learn from.


Thanks to you for appreciating this piece of randomness. And of course, love has different shades, various obstacles and moments to die for. So everything is worth experiencing.


I'd surely PM you for the upcoming chapter.

Thanks once again, Love you too. :)


PS: Take your time with Collision, unlike this, it isn't a small journey ;P
I'd be glad to hear your take on that as well.
Edited by -shenz- - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#85

Originally posted by: asmi.6

Some very well written stuff I just read here! Great work Shenz! Already love your writings skills beyond anything!! His confusions show that he would realise soon and the confession would be at last! The middle time period would be really inreresting! :D


Thank You, Asmi!

It just makes work harder and make sure I don't fail you people and your expectations.

I hope stage two can be as interesting as you expect it to be. I'll surely try to live up to the expectations. 😆

Thanks once again.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#86
I am in a rush today so trying to squeeze all my babbling.

Just so that everyone knows if you haven't realized it yet {Not your fault, I never mentioned}, this journey - Voyage is Manik's journey of Realization to Confession; Nandini is a part of it. But it's not her journey. So, most of the things narrated are to express Manik's side of the story. Yes, I could have jotted this one in Manik's Point of View but I didn't feel like. Third person narration is always the safest bet to reveal as well as conceal as per the situation.
We never know, whether Nandini experiences this journey along with Manik, or she has experienced it; or she would never experience it. Just stating the possibilities, no need to give me harsh stares
Her side of the story remains under the wrap for almost throughout the journey, obviously until confession, that is.
Anyways, Lastly, ignore the typos and any sort of error, grammatical or otherwise.

Chapter 3
The questions had kept his mind occupied throughout the week. He couldn't concentrate on his work; everything around him held the question right back at his face.
He was now frustrated; nothing answered him - not even Google. Yes, his irrational mind had reached the extent where he dug into novels and searched across Google to find the answer to his ultimate question - Love. He behaved like a lunatic person, drowned into the depth of her thoughts. Hence, he knew there wasn't a point to explain his behaviour or to expect sanity anytime soon.
He was into this, deep and maybe, for good.
He knew what he felt wasn't just friendship; his emotions ran much deeper than the bond of friendship could mean. He wouldn't deny that; not to himself.
Though, along with the craze of dizzy emotions came a fear. The fear of losing her was eating him up. He didn't know how or what he was to do. If he emotes his feeling to her, there lies the possibility that she might not reciprocate; or even worse she wouldn't wish to be friends with him anymore. While, if he holds back his emotions, he would lose his chance of being with her. Both ways, he had the odds of losing her smacked right into his face.
Now that he thinks of it, he surely knows that his life is incomplete without her. If she happens to walk out, he would have to live a hollow life. To say he was clueless as to when such a transition took place in his life wouldn't be wrong.
Pushing the thought at the back of his mind, trying his best to distance the nagging thought, he shifted his eyes at his blinking cell phone.
Nandini calling, It read.
It was hard to shove the thoughts away when she unintentionally pokes back at him. Not wasting another minute, he answered the call, "Hey," his voice held uncertainty just like his thoughts.
What does a person say after realizing that his feelings for the person has transformed to a much higher level than ever expected?
"Help," her pained voice hit him, "Need help," she trailed, and he rushed towards the exit.
While on his way, he didn't mind interrogating her whether it was another of her plans to fool him, though he knew the answer from her pained voice. She straightaway denied. The panic that was erupted through the sudden drowning of his emotions was now multiplied. The only thing that ran through his mind was that she was in pain.
Managing to get to her, safe, was a difficult journey. He knew whatever he felt might not be a perfect match for love, but then what was? Love or not he wished for her to accompany him throughout the roller coaster ride of his life - their life. If this wasn't love, he didn't know what was? And he didn't wish to know any further.
For him she was.



And with this Stage 1 ends.


Stage 2 starts from Monday!

That's all. I will send out the PMs as and when possible. Leave your views and let me know your take on this story; this chapter and surely the way or steps one would be able to evaluate someone's feeling or hint about one's own.
Edited by -shenz- - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#87
It's such a Chotu chapter :'(

PS- when are you going to update Collisions? :/
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Posted: 9 years ago
#88

Originally posted by: 19dishayadav

It's such a Chotu chapter :'(

PS- when are you going to update Collisions? :/

That's the reason it's called a drabble. It has to be 500 words approx and that's what it is.


Collision is in a mess and so am I, so that will take sometime. Be patient, I will let you all know when updated
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Posted: 9 years ago
#89
Happy realisation to Mr. Manik Malhotra! Yayy!
It was perect ! ^.^
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Posted: 9 years ago
#90
Okay. .
This time am late. .

And you are too early. . Like i loved the pace of ur updating. .

And about the update manik and his confusion. .

I never a thought a confusion can be explained this beautifully. .

I liked the way you portrayed manik. . Literally in a big dilemma. .
But finally happy realization Manik Malhotra


His fear is also correct if she just walks out of his life, that would break him. .

And m sure there would be another surprise for him and this time he will freak out i guess. .

Continue soon. .

Lots of love
Take care
Edited by DhruShti - 9 years ago

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