Voyage: A Manik-Nandini Fiction| *Completed* Ch11, Pg 27

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: asmi.6
Well if you seriously call this 'gross' then I would really like to suggest you to have a reality check! I mean c'mon this was really really nice.
Yes i agree it was random but it was no where near to bad !

Coming to your questions, well too difficult to answer btw!
But realisation and confession and contemplating the other person's realisation is an easy task that people have unnecessarily made complicated !

If you feel good being around someone, if you like to listen to them, share your own happiness and problems with them or you always want ro be a part of all their ups and downs that's when you should realise that you like or probably love that person and you should go and confess! Tell them whatever is there inside your heart. Life is all about risks! You don't know whether the other person would acknowledge or not, you dont know whether the other person would pay heed to it but for your own happiness, there's no harm in taking the risk!
I agree that rejection is something that needs to be faced with a very strong mind and heart but it still is not as bad as regret. If you don't get answers to your questions or if you don't get the desired closure, you end up hoping for the rest of your life which only ruins you further. It's better to let the other person know then and there.
But then it's not as simple as it sounds, in today's materialistic world it's not just about how you feel or you think the other person feels. There are so many factors that need to be taken care of before taking any step!
Contemplating other person's emotions is as important as realising your own! At times we without knowing the truth assume about the other person's feelings which screws up everything!

According to me, whatever you feel, good or bad, you should always say it! You need to ask questions in order to get answers! Don't keep anything inside just let it out and don't care about what might happen! Take risks! You've got one life, don't let it go waste for the world ! Everything is uncertain and not everybody gets a second chance :)

P.s. I really don't know what I have written or this was even the answer for your question or not, but whatever I have written has come straight through my heart :)

It was a brilliant start ! :D Thanks for the pm :)

I would say, I state that it was gross after having a reality check. There were scenes which were cheesy - too cheesy for my liking. I know readers love to read cheesy but I kinda dislike to categorize myself one among the heap of those who write 'The same old thing' in the name of romance. Cheesiness and mushy romance does quite a good job at times but at times it really irritates or even bores. My view.

The only thing that I liked, and I think was pretty much normal and likable was the scene where he questioned her about her whereabouts and the way she responds to him, the eye-rolling and all.

Other things seemed dragged and repetitive to me, if I look at it as a reader.

So that was gross, According to ME.

And about it being random, I agree and that's the reason the entire plot is out of randomness. The essence of the story lies in randomness to an extent. A reason why I enjoy typing such plots, they are random yet completely with the flow.

I do agree to your views about realization and confession. It's true that one should rather take the risk than to live life full of regrets and 'what ifs'

PS: Sometimes words straight from the heart are the best answers. :)

Originally posted by: asmi.6
Also, after reading other comments I feel i went over-board. The vrap I have written was not desired and you wanted to know how the realisation should take place in the story!
Of course, care and trust are the two most important factors that can be used for realisation. Pain agony amd separation can also be a factor. Accroding to me, self realisation is the best way rather than realisation that comes out because of jealousy or if some third person has to jump in and make the realisation happen. Thought at times, a little push is required but that can create a negative impact too and that takes away the purity of it ! May be :)

Care and Trust are there in the rough list, though the point arises how? :'(

Jealousy actually has a negative shade most of the time. Actually most of the things portrayed do have negative sides but in fictions the fairy-tale is what is more focused upon. A brighter side of the life is portrayed, that people wish to live in. Sad but true. One reason why I don't wish to include jealousy. But that is still a might be possibility; which I do not want to look upon.

By the way Thank you so much for your reviews and opinion on the story, chapter along with the suggestion. I am sure that's going to be helpful to me.

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: lovely-009
liked the update very much...😃
looking forward for a lot more...
pls update collision...pls...😭

Thank You so much.

Collision needs time, so patience my dear, patience. I will update it possibly soon but till then you people need to compromise with this one.

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: zohasad2.0
really intriguing !

Thank you so much, Zoha!!

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: Anapneo3003
Okayy i lovedd this chappy😳
As mukti pointed out nandini is alwayzz a safe bet wen it comes to manik!!!
I loved d bonding of nandini-manik here😆

"Where in the hell were you?" His eyes burned into her, though she remained unaffected. Instead, she had the audacity to roll her eyes at him, after making him run over the streets, searching for her at every place he knew, like crazy. "Don't you roll your eyes at me, Missy," he pointedly stated before repeating the question that was bugging him.

'Well," she drawled, fumbling with the fabric of his shirt sleeve, unknowingly. Half way through the interrogation and he knew it was planned to make him go brainless crazy in search of her so that they could plan his surprise birthday party. And all this while she was right there at his place, decorating it; and waiting for him.

By the end of it, she shrugged, rolling her lips out into a pout. A smile crept across his face as he looked at her. She was still embraced in his arms and her fingers had gone from fumbling to curling designs over his arms, mindlessly; to now stilled. It was her habit, to fumble with her fingers or anything that was under her hold, when she used to get nervous.

the above lines made me go aww and smile😊
so like nandu😛
And mukti's lines at d end made manik question abt his feelings for her!!
Interesting!!!
I don think he will realise his feelings soon😛i won mind if he realises it soon😆
And as alwayzz ur writeups r a treat to read
Continue soonish!!!
And i wont be able to chk updates frm nxt week till feb 1st week wil b little active or inactive due to exams😳

Ciao🤗

Thank you Aihsu 🤗

I am glad you like their bond, also that I was able to bring a smile to your face with my words. :)

You wish he doesn't realizes soon, don't you?

It's a treat to share the concepts with people around.

It's fine you'll find the links of the updates when you return on the CC :)

All the best, by the way.🤗

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: filter.coffee
as usual beautiful.the way you use words always slays.waiting to know more.read more.

and though it's kinda late but happy new year.have a great one

Thank you so much, Rez. It's good to know that you found it worth to read more.

It's never too late to wish anyone. :)

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#56

Bless the caller and my goddamn carelessness as yesterday amidst replying and being on the phone call, I thought I had updated, when I had not. And later I logged off in a hurry thinking that I would send out PMs today. Just when I am here to send out PMs I see that I actually did not post the chapter. So I am genuinely sorry about the mess that happened this time and would make sure that it doesn't happen the next time. But anyways, this wouldn't have any impact on tomorrow's update - that's going to be updated on time.

Thankfully, I even have my long babbling ready :P

Thank You to each one of you all for the love and support. I am really blessed. Thank you so much. I don't think I will ever be able to thank you all enough, since your comments are the thing I look back at when I find it difficult to search for inspiration and motivation. Each comment brings a smile at my face and with each smile I only think of one thing, How can people appreciate such randomness?'

But that's what motivates me to type, and work even better.

Okay! I know I do ramble a lot, but I can't help it and you guys have to deal with this.

Also, just a reminder, this story deals only with the phase of 'Realization to Confession'. So, people can expect a mixture of friendship, love and romance but I do not promise any mushy and cheesy romance. That's a little doubtful.

And, just because Collision is beyond the dimensions of just Friendship and Love, doesn't mean that this story is to compensate the romance quotient in Collision. I have said this, and I wouldn't mind to repeat it over and over again, that Collision is much more than just romance.

For Collision readers, It will take some more time for me to jot down the next update but as and when it is final, I will post it. So be patient, Please!

So, Here's the next chapter, though it's pretty much on the same track and a bit repetitive, if you ask me. But thoughts are a little a complex to portray and hence, this whole realization stage needs to be dealt a little carefully. I just hope I am being careful enough and at the same time not causing you all to dies out of boredom.

I am a person more into impromptu writing and thus, till the last minute, I am unaware of what exactly I will serve you all in the platter in form of updates. So please beware, you are already been warned ;P

Lastly, ignore the typos and any sort of error, grammatical or otherwise.

Chapter 2

The words, the emotions - all of it came crashing down at him as he sank into the bed, deeply engrossed in his world of thoughts. Unable to wrap his mind around the erupting emotions that he was still to pin point at, he dropped his head into his hands.

Hours had passed by, yet he wasn't in a state to conclude as to what exactly his actions meant. The burning ache of losing her was eased a bit, though still made its presence noticeable. His vulnerability came hitting back at him when the hours he had spent in search of her had flashed across him.

The entire scenario was held at a different height severity since she had been low for quite some while. Falling into the habit of aimless wandering of hers' didn't help either. He couldn't shake the feeling off, when he thought of the possibilities of being distanced from her.

She had become an integral part of his life; he needed her as much as a necessity. Though, he hadn't ever pondered over the thought - never felt the need to - he always knew she held an important place in his life. She wasn't his best friend by fluke.

He wouldn't deny that the daunting feeling he had experienced was the most heart wrenching one for him. For some reason he couldn't think of a life without her.

Now the only question that troubled him was - Why?

He had questioned his actions, his emotions. It wasn't just the piercing fear but also his relief at the mere sight of her. She had somehow managed to bring both fear as well as relief to him. This bothered him.

She made it difficult for him to grasp the reality and believe that she wasn't slipping away from him, yet again. Also, she was able to drain away all his tiredness and pain by just wrapping her arms around him; enclosing him into her shelter.

Mukti had rightly pointed that his outcome for anyone else would have been rather more composed. However, where Nandini was concerned he was anything but composed; he had the tendency to lose his mind. He was rather impulsive when it came to Nandini; his policy To think before you act,' wasn't applicable.

He stood in front of the wall plastered with memories of him along with his friends - his best friend included. He gazed over the number of snaps that depicted his smile with hers. He was able to see the moments in a different light. Those weren't just carefree moments but they held a deeper meaning - she was the reason behind his smile, every time - every damn single time. She had managed to bring out a smile on his face, tackled the sadness off him earning a chuckle or bubbles of laughter in response. And a sense of pride filled him when his eyes drew the sight of her happiness, her laughter in few - him.

Love?

He hadn't really pondered over his feelings as being best friends shrugged away any doubt that even made the slightest of occurrence in his mind. But now that the thought had registered itself, he was nothing but afraid.

Chapter 3

That's all.

I am planning on dividing this Drabble into three Stages.

Stage 1 - that we are in is Realization which will end with the next chapter.
Last Stage, which is Stage 3 - Confession;
and in between these two stages whatever happens, is the Stage 2 - Steps.

And I plan on completing this within this month itself, that is if I don't come up with sudden plans for Stage 2. Let's hope that I can actually complete this journey by the end of January. :D

Till then do leave your reviews and let me know. :)

Edited by -shenz- - 9 years ago

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Drashtiii

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Posted: 9 years ago

#57

That was pretty early i must say. .

I like the way u have penned beautifully his mind's confusion. .

Mukti has really hitted the bull's eye by asking such question. .

The only question he had was - why?

U really made us feel his confusion. .

Hats off dear. .

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: Cooldude101
Res! Need to work on writing one beautiful comment to this beautiful work! <3
Unres!
And let the voyage begin!
Oh! The start is so beautiful! The lingering feelings and the thoughts eating him alive because of his anxiousness!
Have I told you how amazing you are? I haven't I guess.
Don't worry whatever you plan I know is going to be the best I can ever get.
This beauty! Ahhh!
Dude where do you get this perfectionism? Haan?😳
I'm waiting oh god!

Thank You so much. I am glad you like it.

You find me amazing, well, that's a good thing, isn't it. 😃

You do have too much of faith in me, now don't you? Let me say that I'd hate to fail but that is a possibility here. You have been warned.😆

Well, it does have flaw, many flaws if I were to count. But anyways, thanks for your feedback :)

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: DhruShti
That was pretty early i must say. .

I like the way u have penned beautifully his mind's confusion. .

Mukti has really hitted the bull's eye by asking such question. .

The only question he had was - why?

U really made us feel his confusion. .

Hats off dear. .

Thank You!

Well, if you ask me, it's late. It's pretty late because I have handled things much faster than this. Anyway!

I am glad you like the way I jot down and that it actually made you feel his confusion. Though, his confusion still stays.

Thanks once again.