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Posted: 19 years ago
#41
relax guys..........ekta and balaji's are out of the question to be a part of this story, except for the names of the character, that i had to use!!!
so chill and enjoy an ORIGINAL story not a balaji crap. 😳
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Posted: 19 years ago
#42
so i am continuing..........from achanak........

keh achanak, kashish keh samne ek gari ake ruki, she was facing the passenger seat. the door of the car opened and she bent dwon to see who it is.........and who could it possibly be...........ofcourse guys Sujal!!!.
sujal: hi, ayiye mein aapko lift de deta hon
kashish: (a little hesistent, sepcially after the incident in the morning).....um.....nahi....woh .....mein khud chali........
sujal: dekhiye, ap apni khudari kisi aur din dekha dijeye ga, kyunke agar aap abhi na bheti to kal tak shayd bache gi bhi nahi!!! (strong words hi used there 😉 )
kashish idhar udhar dekhti hai aur phir car mein bhet jati hai. they leave from there.

they both were constently looking at each other but not speaking at all.
phir dono akhate bole
sujal and kashish: woh mein. (yeh keh kar they smiled)
kashish: i am sorry, subha mein ne aapke saath batameezi ki, asal mein aapko galat samajh bheti.
sujal: koi baat nahi, aksar aisa ho jata hai, aap samjhte kuch aur hain aur sachiye kuch aur hi hoti hai.
after saying this sujal gear badalta hai aur galti se, (remember GALTI) kashish ka dupatta gear ke upar ata hai aur sujal ka haath dupaate keh upar.
kashish was now feeling a little realxed after talking to sujal aur brish bhi kuch kuch ruk gayi thi, kashish ek bar phir se sujal ki taraf baat karne ke liye muri aur usne sujal ka haath apne dupate peh dekha.........
aur phir se usse ghuse keh doore pare 😆
kashish: gari rokiye
sujal: jee?
kashish: maine kaha gari rokiye,
sujal at once stoped the car
kashish gari se neeche utri and sujal too came out.
sujal: likin baat kya hai?
kashish: baat......aap ek baat kaan khool keh sun lijiye, dobara mujhse milne ki ya mere samne ane ki zaroorat nahi hai, galat kaha tha maine keh main ne aapko galat samjha, aap bilkul waise hi hain jaisa mein ne tasavoor kiya tha. aapne mujhe lift di, phir baat ki aur phir mera dupata.....
sujal thoda confuse ho jata hai
kashish: khair, meri hi bhool thi jo mein aapki gari mein aa behti! thank you very much and good bye.
yeh keh kar woh paas mein khari taxi mein bhet jati hai aur ghar chali jati hai

idhar sujal abhi tak kahara soch raha hota hai keh uski galti kya thi!!!!
sujal: ajeeb larki hai! par jaisi bhi hai......meri hai! (yeh keh kar hi smiles and sits in the and drives off)

AT KASHISH"S HOME
kashish arrives at home.
Charu: di, kahan reh gayi thi aap? kitni der laga di
kashish: haan woh barish ho rahi thi to mein.....
charu: chalo koi baat nahi, aap fresh ho jao, mein dinner ready karti hon! ok
kashish: theek hain.....waise mama kidhar hain?
charu: apne kamre mein hongi!
yeh keh kar charu kitchen mein chali jati hai aur kashish apne kamre mein!!
jab woh kamre mein pohanchti hai she realize keh.....
kashish: are mera purse....???????????

........likin purse to woh sujal ki gari mein bhool ayi hai.....oopsso doopsi kashish!!!!!

sujal is coming out of his car when he realizes that kashish ka purse seat ke side peh para huwa hai. he picks it up and says
sujal: kashish ka hoga......shayad galti se bhool gayi.......yeh ladki kcuh zaida hi galtiyan nahi karti????!!! and smiles. lagta hai usse cheeckhne chilane ke ilawa bhoolne ki bhi bimari hai............


sorry guys have to cut it here. i write the nerxt part in a few hours!!! take care and enjoy
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Posted: 19 years ago
#43
very very good story
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Posted: 19 years ago
#44
rajeev1 plz post next part soon 😊
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Posted: 19 years ago
#45
the story is amazing .keep up the good work
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Posted: 19 years ago
#46
ok guys........next part!!!!!!!

sujal: lagta hai isse cheekhne chilne ke ilawa bhoolne ki bhi bimari hai.....kabhie kitaab bhool jati hai to kabhi purse......ab waapis karne jaonga to aur problem mein phaas jaonga..........to phir kya karon? (he starts to worry while holding the purse close to him) ........haan, agar us hitler ko yaad agaya to khudhi dhunti hui ajayegi......mujhe kya?
(yeh keh kar he shrugged his shoulder and went inside his home).

INSIDE GAREWAL HOUSE

inside garewal house, rishi, veena and chetan were all waiting for sujal.
rishi: are woh dekho, Big b agaye
veena,: sujal, kitni der laga di, dekh tere papa ko kitni bhook lag rahi thi, chal ab jaldhi se fresh ho kar a jao mein khana lag wa deti hon
sujal: sorry, mama woh daftar mein hi thodi der ho gayi. ap log shuru karein mein ata hon. (he was hiding kashish's purse inside his coat)
Rishi looked at him and thought that something is fishy , he came upto sujal, who was trying to hide the purse.....
rishi: kya baat hai big b, koi tension?
sujal: nahi to, kyun?
rishis: nahi wohhhh ( and he brought his hand forward to touch sujal's hand with which he was holding onto the coat
sujal: kya hai, kyun tang kar raha hai?
veena: are sujal tum abhi tak yahi khare ho, aur rishi tum kya kar rahe ho, chalo table par
rishi: mom.....mujhe lagta hai keh big b keh saath koi panga........
veena: (slapping rishi lightly on his cheek) yeh kya zabaan istemal kar rahe ho. khabar daar jo dobara is tarah ki behuda zabaan istimal ki mere samne!
rishi: its cool mom
veena: mujhe pata hai kya cool , school hai. chal ab tu. (then she turn towards sujal jo keh abhi bhi ghabra raha tha keh kahin woh ek larki keh purse keh saath pakra na jaye......)
veena: aur yeh rishi kis pange...........
rishi: (in amusement) moooom...aap bhi. (and cracked up, so did chetan)
chetan: veena , mother language ka to suna tha magar tumne to apne bachon ki zabaan bari jaldhi sikhi hai!
veena: (a little embarassed) aap bhi na... mein to bus.........aur tu (while talking to rishi and holding his ear) chal mein tujhe abhi theek karti hon

all left laughing towards the dinner table while sujal ne thandi aah bhari and went in his room to hide the purse.

KASHISH"S ROOM

kashish was still in her room, thinking about her purse
kashish to herself: kahin uski gari mein to nahi bhool ayi. oh no! ab kya karun! phone karun? nahi..... phone nahi? likin phir .....us mein to mera ID card bhi hai.......(after loads of thoughts she decided to call sujal. she looked for his number in the directory)

KASHISH CALLED AT GAREWAL"S PLACE

tring tring....tring tring.....
veena: hello?
kashish: un....hello. ji.....namaste.....kya mein sujal garewal se baat kar skti hoon?
veena: (smiled, ek larki ka call sujal ke liye. she felt really excited) han beta, aap kaun baat kar rahi hain?
kashish: jee....mein...mera naam kashish hai
veena: kashish! (wow she thought to herself) beta ek minute. SUJAL, tera phone hai!!
sujal and the rest of the family were having dinner, he stood up from his chair and wiped his hands with the napkin.
sujal: kaun hai mama?
veena: koi larki hai (she said in a teasing tone and gave the phone in sujal's hand)
rishi: LARKI!!!!! aur big b?
veena: to, sirf tu hi larkiyon se baat kar sakta hai, woh nahi?
rishi: nahi...matlab haan. magar nahi.....
chetan: agar magar choru.......aur khana khao, woh baat kar raha hai na!

sujal to himself while holding the reciever......." larki kaun ho sakti hai"
sujal: hello
kashish: mr sujal?
sujal: jee...aap....kashish (God he recognizes her voice)
kashish: jee, woh mein ne isliye phone kiya......
sujal: kyun kiya? (he wanted to tease her a bit, akhir itni insult ki uski, thoda sa to tang karne ka haq hai)
kashish: wohi bata rahi ho.......
sujal: abhi tak to bataya nahi
kashish: aap bolne deinge to baton gi
sujal: mein ne apko mana to nahi kiya
kashish (now extremly fuming) aapko suna hai keh mein phone rakhon
sujal: nahi....baataye....
kashish: hmm..... mein shayad aapna purse apki gari mein bhool ayi hon,
sujal: mujeh maloom hai...to?
kashish: to...to kya matlab.....i want it back.....
sujal: to ake lein le (upar se akaro bane ki koshish kar raha tha magar dil mein ladoo phut rahe the. he want to hear her voice, )
kashish: mein....mein is waqt kaise a sakti hon?
sujal: to apka matlab hai keh mein ake de kar jaon?
kashish: jee! (demandingly)
sujal: likin mein is waqt kaise a sakta hoon
kashsih: matlab? kyun nahi asakte?
sujal: aap bhi to nahi asakti
kashish: magar mein to.....
sujal : magar app to kya?
kashsih was almost about to cry. she was sooo frustrated. us purse mein uske ID card ke ilawa uske papa ka diya huwa ek locket bhi tha jo us ne utar keh purse mein rakha tha! kashish ki awaaz bhet si gayi aur sujal ko ehsaas huwa keh woh ro rahi hai
sujal: are...app ro rahi hain, dekhiye mein to mazaq kar raha tha. plz royi mat......mujhe address batayi mein abhi ata hon
kashish.....siskiyan lete lete address bata ti hai and hangs up.

sujal to himself: idiot rula diya na usse!
then he came to the dining table and says: mama mein bus abhi ata hon. ek zaroori kaam hai
rishi: zaroori kaam? hummmmmmm?
sujal: rishi.....shut up
rishi: are.....pehle kuch tension mein aap ghar aye, phir larki ka phone aya aur ab aap ja rahe hain kisi ZAAROOORI kaam se. kuch to hai???????
sujal: tu soch jab tak mein aapna kaam kar keh ata hon!
he goes to his room,picks up the purse and leaves for kashish's house!



ok guys....hope you enjoy it!!!! coming up kashish and sujal's encounter at her house........will their love blossom ya aur takrar hoga????????
take care guys!!
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Posted: 19 years ago
#47

plz continue.too good 👏

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Posted: 19 years ago
#48
Wow that was awesome 👏 👏 👏 plz continue soon
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Posted: 19 years ago
#49
WOW...CONTINUE SOON.!! IM WAITING!! GREAT!!
HEY BY THE WAY..RAJEEV1..WHATS UR ORIGINAL NAME?? 😉
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Posted: 19 years ago
#50
hahhahaha, you know i was waiting for your comment since ages......so now that i have read it i can sleep!!! 😆 😆
oops, i didnt tell my name......i am farah!

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