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sashashyam

@sashashyam

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1201

Thank you, my little Shagun! I can do with some intelligent company, and then you are such a skillful writer yourself that you can spot and suitably appreciate these aspects of Lashy's creations.

If you look at back at the really excellent works of fiction or films, you will see that they all share this same quality.

Shyamala Aunty

Originally posted by: -AkDha.Lover-
Shyamala Aunty,

I am also there to join you in the remaining 10% of Lashy di's readers. Of the three characters you mentioned, I have already Lashy di that Gauri is an impressive character. The other two - Shehzaade and the Ustaad - are both quite intriguing. I love the way our author has paid attention to the traits of the characters apart from the leads -it makes the story much more fun and so real.

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karkuzhali

@karkuzhali

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1202

Shyamala and Lashy,

Reviewing a story which is being published in instalments is different from reviewing a full novel. In my opinion such reviews about the characters even before the story is half way through puts constraints on the imagination of the writer . He /she is forced to do a balancing walk. In every attempt to portray the chief characters, the author has to bear in mind the expectation of the readers always, which would not help the story to have a free flow. And a great expectation about the main characters at the start and passing comments even before we know how the story is going to develop should not turn into disappointment for the readers later. At this stage, my opinion is to enjoy the style, comment on the treatment of the story and how the situations are being handled by the author which will give encouragement to him/her.

I do not know about others, but I feel like this. That is why, even when I read the chapters twice or thrice, I am unable to assess and write about the characters elaborately like some readers do.

Please excuse me if I have offended anyone.

Yours

Saraswathi Akka/periamma.

Edited by karkuzhali - 9 years ago

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Shraddha

@lashy

Trailblazer

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#1203

@ Shagun

'Our author' ☺️ awww couldn't read past that!

Originally posted by: sashashyam
at this point, what he is to her is a 'mystery' a 'puzzle' and a 'distraction'
He is the only element in her day to day routine that does not remind her of jiji's death or of the humongous responsibility that lies ahead... (or even of the fact of what might happen to her people if she was to die fighting for her land)
Instead, he reminds her of a more carefree time in her life where she used to have such witty banter with her jiji... where she solved puzzles & riddles and enjoyed playing mind-games with her sister... he is right now filling that void... unbeknown to her own self... and without both of them actually wanting for it to happen.
This, Lashykanna, is a brilliant point that simply did not occur to me. You are absolutely right; all this speculation about Akbar takes her out of the slough of despond in which she was sunk, even if only for a while. It is an extension of that smile as she is walking away from that canal. It would be interesting to see if this works the other way too, vis a vis Akbar, even if to a lesser extent. He too surely has his own private griefs and wounds, even if he has shut them away for now.
>>> Yes... actually, Heera can sense it happening, but cannot help herself from being pulled-in (from the distraction that is)
That's why her complaint to jiji
I know you are watching out for me, jiji... but isn't this a rather odd way of getting me to stop crying? And let me tell you... it's not working!' she lied, wiping a soft tear from her cheek 'I can't think of any other reason why you'd send me puzzle after puzzle to decode...'
now, my assumption/apprehension after reading all the comments is.. that Heera is going to end up having far more takers than Akbar would 🤣
Not to worry! I have explained why, in another post to which you raised strong objections! 😉😉
>>> Not objections Periyamma... just playful banter 😆

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karkuzhali

@karkuzhali

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1204

Lashy, I have edited my post.

Saraswathi Periamma

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sashashyam

@sashashyam

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+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#1205

Well, my dear Akka, I do not know what you have edited and why, but I presume that you have toned it down somewhat! But why? Neither is Lashy nor am I so thin-skinned as to be upset by well meant dissent! So please do not apologise for stating your views, not now, not any other time.

As for me, if I was to follow your regulations, I would not have been able to do a single one of my Jodha Akbar episode analyses, which were the same thing as commenting on the chapters of a story. How could I analyse the episode, or the situations, without analysing the characters? They are after all the core of the tale, and I for one cannot simply comment on the style. What would I say each time, that it was wonderful, awesome, mindblowing et al? I would soon run out of both interest and adjectives!😉

My stand is that once a writer puts her/his work in the public domain, it is fair game for any kind of dissection and comment, provided it is not malicious. And as for my Lashykanna, she is a tough cookie, and I am sure she is not going to change her story line because of negative comments about her lead pair or indeed anything else. She is not Ekta Kapoor, a TRP-driven weather vane! You are, are you not, Lashykanna?

Shyamala

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

Shyamala and Lashy,
Reviewing a story which is being published in instalments is different from reviewing a full novel. In my opinion such reviews about the characters even before the story is half way through puts constraints on the imagination of the writer . He /she is forced to do a balancing walk. In every attempt to portray the chief characters, the author has to bear in mind the expectation of the readers always, which would not help the story to have a free flow. And a great expectation about the main characters at the start and passing comments even before we know how the story is going to develop should not turn into disappointment for the readers later. At this stage, my opinion is to enjoy the style, comment on the treatment of the story and how the situations are being handled by the author which will give encouragement to him/her.
I do not know about others, but I feel like this. That is why, even when I read the chapters twice or thrice, I am unable to assess and write about the characters elaborately like some readers do.
Please excuse me if I have offended anyone.
Yours
Saraswathi Akka/periamma.

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Sandhya.A

@Sandhya.A

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1206

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

Lashy, I have edited my post.
Saraswathi Periamma

Needn't have aunty. Nothing of the original text was offensive in any way. 😊

Even in a chapter-wise story or episode-wise serial aunty, the core of the characters cannot change, even if it does, the change has to be convincing. When the writer/maker tries to sway it and modify it to public demands the essence and credibility of the character is lost. This is what happened with JA esp wrt Jalal.

Here, Heera is already outlined very clearly. Akbar's is in the beginning stages only. Heera need not be infallible. She might have slips, might make mistakes but i presume her basic nature will remain the same.

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Sandhya.A

@Sandhya.A

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#1207

Originally posted by: lashy

My God! All these days, I've assumed the phrase tall, dark and handsome refers to the colour of skin... since most of the romance novels are written in the western world where there are more chances of blond hair than brunettes... and more importantly, since, the western world had/has a fascination with tanned skin... which implies a hard working or a well-travelled man!

Me too.🤓

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Shraddha

@lashy

Trailblazer

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1208

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

Lashy, I have edited my post.
Saraswathi Periamma

Why periyamma? 😊

It was your perspective, that's all... nothing that anyone should mistake... and to a large extent, you've written from the writer's viewpoint... so, it was touching..

Yes, it is a challenge when readers misunderstand/judge characters before the story unfolds further.. especially in those instances where scenes will continue till another few chapters..

... so yes, I do agree with you...

but, on the other hand... I understand, as Shyamala periyamma has also outlined... that probably everyone reads and reacts to material differently...😊

Some see only akbar-heera and their chemistry.. some the political aspects alone.. some drop in a line or don't do even do that for many chapters.. and some write at lengths..

More worrying than having to meet expectations is the 'falling into a slump' that comes after a harsh/negative review... I will confess, I am not as tough as periyamma is/makes me out to be😆... After all, it is my brainchild, hardwork and creativity being judged in an open platform... so, it does take a day or two to steel myself and write again...

But yes.. I cannot change the story Shyamala periyamma... the 60 chapters have been outlined and cannot be amended, esp since it has a mystery element which wouldn't make sense if changed...

My hope is that by the end of the story, I can get the readers to see the characters as they were meant to be and the story from my point of view...

🤗

Thank you both for being so encouraging!

Edited by lashy - 9 years ago

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sashashyam

@sashashyam

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Posted: 9 years ago

#1209

Good Lord!

Shyamala Aunty/Periyamma

Originally posted by: Sandhya.A

Me too.🤓

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karkuzhali

@karkuzhali

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#1210

My dear Shyamala,

In the case of Jodha Akbar or any other show, whatever you or I write is not going to the notice of the production team. Hence whatever we discussed about the episode would not have had any effect on the future episodes of the show. I don't agree that Akbar's character went down rock bottom because the production team tried to modify the story on public demand, a stated by Sandya. Plus the viewership of any TV serial is more than the readership of a story in this forum. Here every comment or remark is seen and answered by Lashy and it will definitely have effect on her.

Shyamala, Sandya and Lashy, I did not cut any portion of my original post, I simply deleted a word that was redundant in the context.

Yours,

Saraswathi Akka.

QUOTE=sashashyam]

Shyamala

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

Shyamala and Lashy,
Reviewing a story which is being published in instalments is different from reviewing a full novel. In my opinion such reviews about the characters even before the story is half way through puts constraints on the imagination of the writer . He /she is forced to do a balancing walk. In every attempt to portray the chief characters, the author has to bear in mind the expectation of the readers always, which would not help the story to have a free flow. And a great expectation about the main characters at the start and passing comments even before we know how the story is going to develop should not turn into disappointment for the readers later. At this stage, my opinion is to enjoy the style, comment on the treatment of the story and how the situations are being handled by the author which will give encouragement to him/her.
I do not know about others, but I feel like this. That is why, even when I read the chapters twice or thrice, I am unable to assess and write about the characters elaborately like some readers do.
Please excuse me if I have offended anyone.
Yours
Saraswathi Akka/periamma.

Edited by karkuzhali - 9 years ago