RKG CHAPTER 16 page 117 POSTED Oct 19th - Page 54

Thank you for the update, dear. An intriguing chapter as usual. Eager to know which one of them will back down from their stubbornness. Amazing how with so much to take care of, you are able to appease the insatiable appetites of the IF readers with your wonderful updates. Great job.😊

Originally posted by: shahbhavini

Ketaki I really appreciate your genuine opinion about this chapter.

I truly loved it...🤗 you have given a chance to defend me😆, Ketaki please do comment like this frequently😛... I love it when readers give me constructive suggestions. No doubt I am going to write my pov on this chapter but I will keep in the mind readers love to read emotional side of Jalal and Radha which you think is missing in this chapter.

I will reply to your comment in detail later.

waiting for that di...😉😆

Your first disappointment you indicated, the chapter was in a bit pieces and not in a flow. Before posting I even felt the same but then again to looked at closely and felt it was ok...

After reading it twice I feel that now that it is okay...that was my opinion from a very first read 😆

the first event as soon as she comes out of Jalal's chamber happens between spy and Radha... and she received a message from Adham... You feel everything in pieces because too many things happened within few minutes.

Radha just came out of Jalal's chamber, she didn't get a chance to ponder over their meeting and she got a message from a guard that Adham has invited her. She was looking forward to Adham's attentions since she came to the palace, and she noticed the way he was looking at her in the function, she knew anytime he will invite her to spend the night. So instantly she thought... most awaited message.

Adham attention...what all things she have in her little mind...😕

Before she could leave, Spy saw her and heard the Adham's message... Here I introduced a new character so I gave a brief description of the spy, and their conversation leads to doubt which needed for story progress.

yes even I feel that his doubt is needed...I am concerned about jalal's increasing doubt...I know it is important at this point but as i love them both I have a soft corner for him...😳

Well, the next scene... Jodha thinks about her conversation with Jalal... and her inner talk... I feel it perfectly chained since she just came out of Jalal's chamber. After meeting a spy, a message from Adham and Jalal's indirect confession and care which clouded her mind.

yes this part is perfectly written no doubt on it...

Also, because of Surya's entry, Radha is charged up a little bit for the mission. (normal reaction) Ipush to act up on her revenge mission. therefore I added Jodha and Radha's inner conflict talk.

Well... Rukaiya is an important character in this story... How could I just ignore her after this big insult? Sometimes you cannot create a chain of the event so you have to open up a new scene... this particular scene I felt connected just because it was a fresh incident, Jalal insulted Rukaiya just an hour ago... besides I wanted to show her reaction to readers and her relation with Adham. So before introducing Adham I added Rukaiya's scene.

Adham is a new character, so I introduce his background including Jalal... and Rukaiya's relation... here I tried to give detailed about Jalal, Rukaiya and Adham's childhood how it shaped up.

Then the message to Adham from Radha... and his reaction... I feel it's ideally connected to Rukaiya's scene.

It is connected to ruk scene...no issue with it...

Just to show Adham's cruelty I added concubine little scene. Rukaiya and Adham's all scene in the chain.

I agree... I have given too much space to other characters because I have introduced two, three new character in this chapter which was necessary to continue the story. Last chapter, about 10k word, were almost all about Jalal and Radha's... completely emotional. You have to understand this event are happening within a day... I have shown Jalal's emotions so much that looks kind of weird as a king...

Jalal and Faizal conversation was very important part of this chapter... Here the story takes twist... Jalal began to doubt on Radha... and he declares a shocking news, The Farman got stolen... I feel it is chained... I didn't want to divert readers mind toward decree until Adham's part finish... I knew this will grip readers instantly from filler part dullness.

I felt it was enough of Jalal and spy drama, therefore I added Hamida and Radha's scene for a change... Obviously, Hamida who always think about kingdom first then his kids would react like this. It was connected scene but again not forcefully added, Jalal met with Hamida a few hours ago, so it was expected reaction from Hamida. At first, I was thinking to add her emotional and mental state after Jalal's harsh behavior... but I didn't because I wanted to show Hamida as a strong-minded lady.

you have made hamida a strong minded person...I completely understand her state now...

If you notice in the entire story I have shown only a few places where Jalal worked like a Shahenshah, It was necessary to show him as a king, not just an obsessive lover... What I wanted readers to know, how stressful his life is and on top of the Radha's passion... How tactfully he is managing everything while controlling his weakness. What I was trying to let readers know, no matter what emotional situation he was, he always stayed focus to the task and worked all the time.

you are introducing his shahenshsh side but please include his lover's side as well in a chapter..maybe balance both...I love him di...😳😆

I added Qadi Sahib scene after Radha and Hamida just because to give variety of scene to readers, and this scene even connected to the story, if you remember in the beginning when Jalal changed the law he mentioned, it will create a problem, lot of them will be against to his decision to allow Hindu prayer in the palace. So I added this scene in that relate.

Then Raja Todarman... again here I wanted Jalal to know about Radha donated money and financial crisis plus Farman details... I don't get it why are you thinking scenes were not connected and all over the palace. Sometimes to move forward you need small scenes to feed the story.

I am slowly letting readers know that Jalal has begun to doubt on Radha... but still, he is defending her.

yes he is doubting her yet defending her as well...interesting...

Radha's message to Jalal

Here you felt I didn't put many details on Jalal's side. The only reason I felt not to show much emotion because... they have gone through so much... their emotions are on Plato now... Jalal understood her frustration and know very well that she loves him and he loves her. Even though he read she want to accept Surya's proposal... he doesn't react just because he very well know that it's her anger talking... not her... and also they both are completely overwhelmed with too many emotions in a short time. they both are too tired to even feel the emotions. they are drenched and their mind numbed... and can't think further or react and that is why he decided to cancel all his meetings. He is hurt... he is feeling pain but now he is prone to her sarcasm. Also throughout the story he is much more balanced than Radha... I have shown him broken and drained when Radha purposely hurt her feet and he insulted her but the letter didn't bring that many emotions just because he knows it's her anger and tantrum... (That's what he thinks... hehe)

May be next chapter you will see many emotions from both side. If I get to that track...😃

OMG you have an interesting track on mind...take your time...I am so eager to read more...

To show the severity I added Salima and Radha's convo... to point out to the readers slowly Radha is getting stronger and stronger because one by one her connections are breaking she built in last few days, Radha has no one in this palace... she has to fight alone with all the obstacle. Yes... Radha is arrogant and strong headed... that is what her character is and further you will see what she has paid in the past for her arrogance.

yes radha is becoming strong day by day...and I feel bad that her connections are breaking ...after reading this now I get a clear idea about your thought while writing the chapter...
waiting for your full reply to my comment...😆
love you di...❤️

Originally posted by: pari27angel

WOooww di u update the story
U made my day
Thnku dii [:D/] 👏 🥳 🤪

Originally posted by: kartikaJA

woo awasome update

Thanks😃

i hope jo forget about her revange and tell jalal all truth

Hmmm... Let's wait for few update and I will ask this question again.

if jalal find out radha real identity consequences are not good

I agree to that

i hope jo tell her real identity to jalal

Hope so she reveals before he finds out himself
waiting for next update

Originally posted by: lashy