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shahbhavini

@shahbhavini

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Posted: 11 years ago

#231

Chapter: 10

AWWW... I LOVE THEIR HIDE AND SEEK GAME... THEY BOTH ARE PLAYING GAMES WITH EACH OTHER... SO CUTE...

KYA BAAT HAI...I LOVE THIS LINE

agar aap bhaagin hai toh hum yaha ke cheetah hai, raftaar kahin zyada hai aapse"

My cutie pie Jodha ne sach me jallu ko lallu banaya lets see ab Jallu kya karta hai... I am reading while commenting...

I really loved Maina and Jo's convo... Mother always worried for daughter... and I loved how she masked her pain with smile... Superbly written

Aww middle of the night he is searching for her... aww. So cute...

Jalal is really missing her... he is so much in love... when this two will understand their love for each other... Jodha is sleeping like innocent child... Heheheh Jalal tickle her...(heheheh)

sleeping Hamari neendein udaake aap chain se nahi so sakti jodha begum he again tickled her feet, this time on both the feet...making jodha come out of her sleep at once! ( I rolf out loud omg)

omg I adore this Jalal... Dadisa ke samne romance... and the way both lost in each other superbly written ... so passion... chandni raat me yeh dadi nahi hoti to... kya aur kuch jayada ho sakta tha... hehehe...

They both so in love... me soo sooo lucky to read next chapter and not to wait... (Sorry for late comment and Thank U for this mind blowing romantic chapter)

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Anika_VR

@Anika_PreRish

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Posted: 11 years ago

#232

Emotional update thha.
Jodha asked Jalal to go away from Aamer,but why?
Though her heart didn want him to go.
Jalal ne bura maan liya aur chal diye apne Agra...
Atleast,Jalal shud have tried to have a talk with Jo..
Jo must be feeling very lonely..
Haeh..
Yeh 2nd last update thha..???
*falls with a thud!*
umm...
Last update mein SR toh hona hi hai plus some cute moments of JaJo,like,after the SR,few days later,Jodha is getting ready in her hojra when Jalal comes inside and hugs her from back... Yeh scene zzarur rakhna,Surbhi di,please...
Continue sooonish.
Thanks for the pm.

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shahbhavini

@shahbhavini

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Posted: 11 years ago

#233

Chapter: 11

You know Surbhi... U always write about nature so beautifully... doesn't matter you writing about night .. day... sun... rain... flower... every single words are so beautifully written... probably well known writer can't write like this... I always love it...

I love how you have describe Jodha's condition... unknowingly how she is reacting weird... Her mind is only able to think about him... she wants him... but still confuse... some unknown fear... ( I wish in serial they would have shown this kind of curiosity to viewers... Yeh to gayi kam se...heheh

, kyun hum itna vichlit mehsoos kar rahe hain..."( kyu...heheh)

Pooja karte vakat yeh kya soch rahi hai...heheh...

Sword practice and after scene beautifully well portray...

Vow what hot angry conversation between them... she really sharply snaps back at him... and then intense emotions... perfectly beaded together... Omg Jalal sach me chala gaya... both are in deep pain... You are mind-blowing writer...😳 Superb!!!!😳 I am waiting update... What I would like to see ... I want big drama before SR... doesn't matter emotional or funny or suspense... but something really big jisse SR ka maza aur aa jaye...😆

I want Jo manofying Jalal for the harsh words she used...

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PBDcrazy

@PBDcrazy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#234

Surbhi yaarrr ...this was so beautifully penned update ... jodha's fighting emotions ... where just bang on ... but hated that her ego won over her love ... poor jalal just gave up & went back ... indeed it was very rude on jodha to ask him , her husband , her shehenshah , indirectly to leave the palace ...

but anyways lets see what holds up in the next chapter ... hope she rectifies her mistake & reconciles with jalal ... one request surbhi i want a nice SR chapter ...yaar !!! & do not end it so early ... ek SR chapter deke fir end karo na plz ... itz a request ... try to fit into ur story dear 😳

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aisha

@aisha.....11110

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Posted: 11 years ago

#235

beautifully written!! ❤️

just loved it! continue soon!!!!!🤗

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--a.ishu--

@--a.ishu--

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Posted: 11 years ago

#236

Awww!! 😳 Chapter was too good!! Please update as soon as possible yaar!! Pleej!!! 🤗

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khushboo

@khushbooparmar

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Posted: 11 years ago

#237

amazing update...
yeh jodha khud nahi janti ki woh chahti kya hai??
pehle khud hi jane ko kehti hai aur chahti bhi ke jalal use chodke na jaye...
thanks for pm
i want romantic rain scene n SR toh banta hi hai...

Edited by khushiparmar - 11 years ago

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RSlovesJA

@RSlovesJA

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Posted: 11 years ago

#238

Just clear the MU & a happy ending...lovely update continue soon & do pm..

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gauriS

@gauriS

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Posted: 11 years ago

#239

touching update. continue soon😊

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hemakeerti

@hemakeerti

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Posted: 11 years ago

#240

Oye.. this is the last but two update or last but one? What ever, you are ending so soon.. 😭
Then start up a new FF/SS on Ben track.. I like that track as we get to see the jealous side of Jo.. 😉

I completely understand Jo's anguish in this chapter.. she years for him, but her ego doesn't let her go.. her anguish should reach boiling point before it vents.. glad that she thought as a queen, not just as a wife.. the wife in her wants her husband, but the queen in her reminds that he should be back to Agra.. I totally relate with her emotions.. she wants him to go and not to go too.. But when she told Jalal to leave, why didn't he ask her to come with him? why didn't he persuade her when he knew it's his mistake too? Too much ego, huh 😆

I doubt if he had really left her back and proceeded to Agra.. I doubt he's playing a game with help of Shivani, just to see her reaction.. and I really wish Moon shows its charm on this couple soon.. very well written chapter sis.. you exactly depicted a royal woman's hurt ego.. 👏👏