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mandy001

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Posted: 11 years ago

#231

omg...first of all [:D>] for song...these days m being mad for ds song nd listening ds song non stop.

nd in ds chapter u portray all emotions of jalal amazingly...ya allah rula diya aaj to.

u wrote his emotions really well. omg he ws in so much pain. now dying to read maham nd jalal confrontation.

plz update soon.

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ash

@ashpat

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Posted: 11 years ago

#232

Omg! This was heart-tugging. U know t is so weird, i think this is first time it appened, that when i was reading the partb "where jalal asks salima to read the letter urgently, his heart was racing", my heart was racing too, even though i knew what was in letter. This is a big compliment for yu as writer bec it means i can feel and see jalal!s pain. U r so descriptive with jalals feelings after salima left. It is commendable that u can describe hurt, anguish, resentment into so many paras.

Thank u so much for this story. Loving it. Thx for pm. Plzzz update soon.

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Tahniat Ahmad

@Sexylicious.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#233

First of all I'm sorry that I couldn't reply any of ur updates as I was inactive. So let me start with my comment for all the chapters.

Pallavi 🤗🤗 thank you so much for writing this brilliant piece of SS. I'm so glad that you wrote it. We readers should thank you for writing such an emotional SS. This has become one of my Favourite SS and I even voted for it for the JA awards. You truly deserve an award for this SS. It is so emotional and with all the twists it makes it even better.

The sword fighting scene was really well written. Benazir ,the witch thought that it would be easy for her to defeat Jodha but no no she underestimated Jodha's power. Damn girl she fought! She made Benzair lose and even Jalal was happy with it and he couldn't control himself from clapping.

I felt like killing benazir when she was acting in front of Jalal. Poor girl! She thought that Jalal was crying for her. 😆 she is a fool to think that. That scene was very much painful for Jodha when Jalal held benazir to give her support. My heart ached like Jalal's.

The goodie badie thing was a brilliant thing to write about. Jalal's duelling between HIS MIND and his heart, which exists in him but he denies to the fact.

The painful moment for Jalal was when he went up to Jodha. When he touched her she collapsed right in front of Him. I loved the way you wrote Jalal's reaction to all the series of events. I had tears in my eyes. Believe me. I'm sure many of the readers did have tears in their eyes.

One thing I loved about that scene was when Jodha gripped him tight although she was in the line between life and death, she tried to make Jalal believe that she had not done anything wrong.

Jalal's pain was quite evident. The baarish song made the update more special. It went with the update. I felt that the song was espicially written for this SS. His imagination ❤️ I love this emotional SS of yours.

Rahim is the best. He saves the day! Mahamanga get ready to face Jalal's wrath. Not only wrath, hate,anger and most importantly her punishment.

I wish Jodha gets well soon. Jalal has started loving Jodha.. Madly... I just want him to realize it. I really want to read more.Even though you have the longest update ever but still my heart tells me to read on and on. I love ur SS ❤️

YOUR AMAZING MY PALLAVI ❤️ love u my Jaan ❤️

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Nancy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#234

What the!!😲😲😲😲 WOW! 😳

👏👏👏MASTERPIECE 👏👏👏👏

Pallavi My Jaan.. A big Hug to you..🤗🤗

This was WOW!😃 I have no words!❤️ Omg SPEECHLESS!!!!👏⭐️👏⭐️👏 My God..How did you do this my love? I am so so emotional right now!😭👏⭐️ This was the bestest chap..I mean All the chaps were bestest..I cant choose among the chaps..Everytime I feel its the best and nothing can be better..but you come up with Exceptional Masterpieces!!!!❤️😳👏

WOw! Jalal was first so anxious and tensed..what if Jodha was right! His fear was depicted with sheer brilliance❤️ and I was blown over there!!!😭😭❤️ His heart was racing..oh god..so was mine!😳 Salima is always an angel! ❤️😳I was so much impressed when u brought in the talks of Vishkanya the benaagin🤢😡..I mean uski pol patri bhi jaldi khulegi! Superb !!!👏⭐️👏 Rahim the cutie pie did his work in amazing way!!! 😃Love you Pallu for this awesome storyline!❤️ So, Salima read the letter and Jalal was like..What! It ended?😲 Oh my! I was feeling his pain..😭 Salima read it again and then he was shocked! So there was NOTHING in it which his Kamini Ammi had read!!! Just brilliant Pallu!👏👏 Lovely description! 👏⭐️👏 God! His shattered state was written with utmost phenomenal words!😭👏⭐️ I just LOVED IT!!!❤️❤️ The song, the atmosphere, the feelings, the emotions, the torn state, the shattering, the remembering of each time SHE tried to justify herself, the replies he gave to her, the way he behaved with her, the way he insulted her..All were written with OUT OF THE WORLD talent!👏⭐️👏⭐️❤️❤️ I bow down to my Pallu Jaan for this Chap!!❤️ I am so touched! Jalal's pain was so so overwhelming and heart -wrenching! 😭😭❤️ Angelic Jodha came to his rescue from the pain and sufferings..but poor My Jalal..It was all too late! WHat else he could do other than hallucinating her.. Omg..I was crying when he was crying..You made this Chapter sooo0oo Excellent my sherni!👏⭐️❤️❤️ Overall, I loved this chap to bits and each word was worth praising!😳👏⭐️❤️ I am so lucky to say this again and again that we have got you as a brilliant exceptional writer over here.👏😳🤗..Seriously I am not at ll interested in show unless ben and Shivani track gets over.. But I am just madly in love with the FFs here..but Ishqzaade😳 and Ehsaas😳 are the ones which make me go gaga 😳and I feel so proud coz the writer of these two Masterstories is my Jaan..My sherni..My Pallavvi di 😛!!😳🤗 You are too good ! Love you!❤️🤗

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Nancy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#235

And these two BITS were my Favs..You can make us see flashbacks, make us visualise everything😳👏 ..You have got THAT skill which only professional writers have! 😳👏Love you Pallu..WOnderful Story!! 😳⭐️⭐️

("shenshah humari baat to suniye"...."hume aapki koi baat nahi sunni...aapne suna nahi humne kya kha ...jayiye yaha se..."...in the function how he first looked at jodha and when she walked up to the thrown..."hum chahege ke aaj humara khaas taufa humare saath aaker baithe"...then how Benazir surpassed her and sat beside him smirking...how he made Benazir wear the "kada" he gifted her...in front of jodha..."lekin haath se jyada ye kahin aura acha lagega..."...how he humiliated her in front of all royal and the public as well in meena bazaar..."humare paas benchne ke liye to kuch nahi hai kintu hum aapke liye ek bhent laaye hai..."..."ye meena bazaar hai...hum yaha kharidne aaye hai...taufe lene nahi..."...and he moved further without looking back at her...how he accused her for the precious gift containing her blessings..."aapne hume wo tamacha mara jo sidha jaker humari rooh per laga...aapki himmat kaise hui humari mardangi per sawal uthane ki..." ..."kintu shenshah"..."Bus (pointing his finger)...jayiye yaha se"

(...Each and every word of her started echoing in his ears ..."Hum jante hai ke aapki koi galti nahi hai...aap apni jagah bilkul sahi hai...kintu hume bhay hai ke kahin aapko sach ka pata lagte itni der na ho jaaye ke humare bich sahi karne ko kuch bhi shesh na bache..."...the memory of her painful flooded eyes started haunting him...the moment when she touched her and she fell down lifelessly...how she clutched his kurta tight...even after striving hard for her life...she never stop saying until she was completely unconscious..."humara vishwaas...vishwaas kijiye...humne kuch nahi kiya..."...

These two WERE WOWWW!!!!!!👏⭐️👏⭐️⭐️ He was so broken n shattered remembering all those moments..Og God..Pallu..U r wonderful re..made my day with this chap!👏⭐️

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...janu...

@...janu...

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Posted: 11 years ago

#236

wow mind blowng part plz update soon and pm me

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Tahniat Ahmad

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Posted: 11 years ago

#237

@nancy this was my Favourite part
(...Each and every word of her started echoing in his ears ..."Hum jante hai ke aapki koi galti nahi hai...aap apni jagah bilkul sahi hai...kintu hume bhay hai ke kahin aapko sach ka pata lagte itni der na ho jaaye ke humare bich sahi karne ko kuch bhi shesh na bache..."...the memory of her painful flooded eyes started haunting him...the moment when she touched her and she fell down lifelessly...how she clutched his kurta tight...even after striving hard for her life...she never stop saying until she was completely unconscious..."humara vishwaas...vishwaas kijiye...humne kuch nahi kiya..."... ...)
Kya huaa asar tere saath reh kar naa jaane
Ki hosh mujhe naa raha
Lafz mere thhe zubaan pe aake ruke
Par ho na sake woh bayaan
(.the horrifying memories pierced his heart into pieces...his throat had become too glitch and heavy to speak anything...his breathes had become irregular because of the silent sobs coming in b/w...he clutched the letter tight in his hand and moved it close to his heart... and finally the sight when she sprang down in his arms came in front of his eyes...he just shut his eyes tightly and started screaming out loud in agony unable to speak anything...looking at the sky...)
Dhadkan tera hi naam jo le
Aankhein bhi paighaam ye de
Teri nazar ka hi ye asar hai
Mujh pe jo huaa
Jalal: - arhhh... (Crying bitterly...completely shattered)
Is dard-e-dil ki sifaarish
Ab kar de koi yahaan
Ki mill jaaye isey woh baarish
Jo bhiga de poori tarah
(his sobs were getting more and more loud and painful...he had broken down completely...it felt like he had no strength left in his body...he was cursing himself for not trusting her... ...for hurting such a pure soul... for confiding in a person that was not even a bit worthy of it...he was ashamed of himself and his so called manly ego in which he stooped so low to take his revenge without knowing the truth...he was feeling backstabbed...and the person that did this was none other than his "BADI AMMI"...the women whom he worshipped like his allah...for the first time in life...he was feeling helpless...ashamed on being an illiterate...he almost squeezed his cheeks with his nails...it was getting really hard for him to bear this feeling of repentance and not having the one around...when he needed her the most...he almost covered his face with his hands and started weeping bitterly with uncontrollable sobs...)
Is dard-e-dil ki sifaarish
Ab kar de koi yahaan
Ki mill jaaye isey woh baarish
Jo bhiga de poori tarah
Yaariyan ve... Yaariyan...
(He was lamenting poorly in his grief covering his face with his hands...with his head bowed down...all lost in his emotional trauma...when he felt a soft touch on his head...he looked up at the person...it was none other than jodha...dressed in a white angelic outfit with his hair left open...just the way jalal liked them to be...looking innocently at him with a faint smile with tears in her eyes...she was indeed looking like an absolute fragile and divine princess with incredible glow on her face...jalal couldn't take his eyes off her...she caressed his head with her soft hands and wiped his tears off by running her fingers on his wet face...moved her head sideways in a "no" signaling "plz don't cry..."...smiled at him)

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Anika_VR

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Posted: 11 years ago

#238

A masterpiece...
Beautifully portrayal of Jalal's emotions... I loved it,especially,the ending part where Jalal feels Jodha's presence,dressed in angelic white dress with her hair open...
Song was apt and beautiful... My favorite...
Well done,Rahim and Salima Begum... :)
continue sooonish... :)
thanks for the pm... :)
precap is damn interesting... :)

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Nancy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#239

@ Tahni - I am telling u Tahni..pallavvi is hiding something from us.. She is pakka a professional writer.. she makes us addictive to her stories..haina.. btw loved the part that u selected as ur fav..me too loved it.😃

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Tahniat Ahmad

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Posted: 11 years ago

#240

Originally posted by: PrincessNancy
@ Tahni - I am telling u Tahni..pallavvi is hiding something from us.. She is pakka a professional writer.. she makes us addictive to her stories..haina.. btw loved the part that u selected as ur fav..me too loved it.😃

Pallavi tell us the truth! Arey u need not to hide it from us.. We are ur frndz na! 😉