OS 'HE opened his eyes and THERE SHE was, beside him!'

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: --Janvie--
You are such an Amazingly Talented and Beautiful writer yaar!! 👏 👏 ⭐️ I have been a silent reader to many of your OS,SS on Akdha but couldn't help but to comment now. 😳
Just loved the way you expressed the depth in emotions with an undefinable ease.. 😳 That's really Amazing you know!! 😛 😃 😳
Thank you so so so so much Janvie...I was very happy to see that you were pleased by the outcome...thank you so much dear..😳

Loved this Whole Angry,Teasing Naughty side of Jalal yet the agony He felt bcoz of Jodha's anguish. 😳And Jodha who just can't stop wondering What's with the multiple personality disorder of this Guy!! 😲 😆 One Moment Angel and Next Moment Devil!! 😆 Really He is a Vichitra Prani indeed!! 😛 😳 😆
Yes...he is...like he's three men-in-one sometimes...😆

I just wish CV's would have shown something of that Promo they gave which have made our expectations so high!! 😡 😭
I know it would have looked better had they shown it immediately after he regained consciousness...the promo it felt like the scenes were more tender...but with a sudden change in personality...now at Amer, nursing scenes would be more naughty...

🤢 But With Jalal's self talk on Friday and his naughty side back with a BANG to the Surface There are full chances that We get many such punishments in Amer Which will help to heal our wounds to an extent!! 😃 😳 😆
Yes...that's what I said above too but it will never feel like how it would have felt just after he regained consciousness...

Although I still regret and will always despise the Great CV's for not having a proper interaction of Akdha after the tiger attack and nothing of that DAMN AWESOME promo!! 😡 😡 🤢
TELL ME ABOUT IT!

P.S.Me sending you a buddy request.Pls accept it and PM me if possible whenever you write something on Akdha!! 😊 😳 😳
I've accepted it...thank you so much...
I don't know how to send pm to multiple memberst yaar...😕
But, thanks once again dearie🤗

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sashashyam

@sashashyam

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Posted: 11 years ago

#32

Very nicely done, my dear Shraddha, and thankfully not too warm for my conservative tastes in bedroom, no recovery room scenes. It rings true and could very easily have happened. It would alsp neatly bridge the gap between the time of the Hakim Sahib's visit and the exchange between them on Friday.

But what it does not bridge is the much more serious and inexplicable discontinuity between the 1/2 scene between them as Bharmal is leaving, and the incredibly mischievous one later in the episode. These too are shown as happening very close to each other, which makes it worse!

No, no, my dear,how on earth can you call Jalal on Friday mean? Not at all, he is only teasing her relentlessly, but not maliciously, and when it comes to her family, he is instantly serious and reassuring. Anyway all this is in my post of today: Mischief abounding.

Finally, I am deeply flattered to have this charming confection that you have whipped up with such a light hand, like a souffle, has been dedicated to me. Thank you so much, my dear.

Shyamala

PS: Unless Jodha had found time to douse herself in Jalal's favourite itr instead of having the bath she does not seem to have taken, I doubt very much if any stray lock of her clammy hair would have any fragrance to it!😉

RECOVERY CHAMBER

Edited by sashashyam - 11 years ago

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#33

@ shyamala aunty

Awww aunty thank you so much...😳

Very nicely done, my dear Shraddha, and thankfully not too warm for my conservative tastes in bedroom, no recovery room scenes.

😆 I did warn you...I am after all, a romantic by heart aunty...the stuff of Mills and Boons does enthrall me to a certain extent 😳 only that I enjoy comedy, thrill and action JUST as much! therefore, I enjoy stories that do justice to all of the above ...JA has that potential, only hope they continue tapping it properly...

It rings true and could very easily have happened. It would alsp neatly bridge the gap between the time of the Hakim Sahib's visit and the exchange between them on Friday.
But what it does not bridge is the much more serious and inexplicable discontinuity between the 1/2 scene between them as Bharmal is leaving, and the incredibly mischievous one later in the episode. These too are shown as happening very close to each other, which makes it worse!

Actually, I didn't intend for it to perfectly sit in the flow of episodes...it was just meant to be a transition...basically, it was supposed to quench my want for a proper FIRST scene between the leads after Jalal regained his consciousness - something I was looking forward to more than anything else since their Dargah visit...😳

Even if it was meant to be hostile, I wish there was a proper scene between Jalal-Jodha before the rest of the story unfolded...the scene we saw between them on Friday should have aptly been scene 2. So, this OS was more or less a bridge between their last conversation before he passed out and the next less-than-friendly conversation they had on Friday. I didn't really cater to the other frills of the story here - be it, the slaps, Hakim sahib or bharmal/sukanya angles..😳

No, no, my dear,how on earth can you call Jalal on Friday mean? Not at all, he is only teasing her relentlessly, but not maliciously, and when it comes to her family, he is instantly serious and reassuring. Anyway all this is in my post of today: Mischief abounding.

By 'mean' I meant the tantalizingly mean, not the callously mean...😛

Finally, I am deeply flattered to have this charming confection that you have whipped up with such a light hand, like a souffle, has been dedicated to me. Thank you so much, my dear.
Awww thank you aunty - anything for you...🤗

PS: Unless Jodha had found time to douse herself in Jalal's favourite itr instead of having the bath she does not seem to have taken, I doubt very much if any stray lock of her clammy hair would have any fragrance to it!

LOL...I know I know...realism and romance have a very odd relationship...😆

Basically, for this bit (and maybe a bit others) - I just followed the stuff historical folklore were made of...from where I come, there's a famous saying that 'A noble lady's hair will never be devoid of fragrance...' (There's an interesting story behind this, I'll tell you if you wanna know😳) I just stuck to that principle...

thank you so much once again😳

Edited by lashy - 11 years ago

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sashashyam

@sashashyam

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Posted: 11 years ago

#34

Do tell, my dear!

Shyamala Aunty

Originally posted by: lashy
@ shyamala aunty

PS: Unless Jodha had found time to douse herself in Jalal's favourite itr instead of having the bath she does not seem to have taken, I doubt very much if any stray lock of her clammy hair would have any fragrance to it!
LOL...I know I know...realism and romance have a very odd relationship...😆
Basically, for this bit (and maybe a bit others) - I just followed the stuff historical folklore were made of...from where I come, there's a famous saying that 'A noble lady's hair will never be devoid of fragrance...' (There's an interesting story behind this, I'll tell you if you wanna know😳) I just stuck to that principle...
thank you so much once again😳

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: sashashyam
Do tell, my dear!

Shyamala Aunty

Here;s the story..picked it off the net so forgive any grammatical errors within. Its the story of poet Nakeerar (from Madurai)

The king of Madurai, King Shenbhaga Pandian once had a doubt - since his queen's hair seemed to have a natural fragrance to it, he wondered if the fragrance was because of artificial add-ons or if it was naturally so. Though his poets told him otherwise, he wasn't satisfied. So, he then ordered that anyone in the country who clarified his doubt will be given thousand gold coins.

A poor Brahim wanted to lay claim to that money, so he sought help from Lord Shiva. Lord Mahadev came down in the form of a poet and told the priest, Don't worry! I will give you a song which clarifies the doubt of the king. Go and give this poem to king and claim those thousand coins. You can have money.'

The priest was hesitant Who will accept me as a poet if I take your verses? How will anybody respect me if I take your poetry and show it as mine?'

Mahadeva said 'Don't worry! You go, take it and give it to the king. You will get the money.'

The poetry signified that women had natural fragrance in their hair that was present even without using anything on. So, the priest went and read out the poem in the court, and the king was very happy. His doubt was cleared. The king was convinced that this poem was from a poet who had intuition and he decided to gift him the thousand gold coins.

But, there was a Chief Poet -called Nakeerar - in the court who was not satisfied with all of it 'No, no, no! You can't give money for this poem, because what is expressed in this poem is not truth. Women don't have natural fragrance for their hair. Fragrance is only artificially induced because of use of flowers and scented oils, not natural.'

Now, this was the poet of the highest calibre in the kingdom. He dismissed the poetry - so, the king also dismissed the Brahmin without paying him the money.

The Brahmin then went back to Lord Mahadev and blamed him for misguiding him. Needless to say, the angry God Shiv couldn't take the insult and paraded straight into court to challenge Nakeerar.

Mahadeva (still disguised as a poet) reiterated that a woman's hair had natural fragrance in it.

However, Nakeeran argued 'No! Women's hair has no natural fragrance!'

Angrier, Mahadeva went to the next level - the devathas and devis 'Don't Devis have natural fragrance in their hair?'

Nakeeran stood firm 'No! Even the devathas, devis and gandharvas have no natural fragrance in their hair!' Even at this point, he wasn't aware that he was arguing with Lord Shiv!

Then, Mahadeva went on ask him finally - his rage as profound as ever - 'Would you say the same for even Godess Meenakshi (Lord Shiva's own wife)?'

Nakeerar (at this point he'd noticed Lord Shiva's third eye, but yet he stood true to his stance despite knowing that he'd be punished by the Lord if he did so) 'Yes. Even Goddess Meenakshi has no natural fragrance in her hair.' he said

That is where Nakeerar lost his Integrity. He assumed a stand and decided to stick to it.Lord Shiva grew so enraged, that he opened his third eye and razed the poet to the ground.

The logic was that Nakeerar was a man who'd submitted to learning and erudition, thus his senses had become numb to to more materialistic sensations of life. However, Lord Shiva was still a God in love with his wife and the subtler sensations of love like touch and fragrance were not masked from him.

Obviously, after he cooled down, Lord Shiv himself resurrected the poet again and blessed him!

Hope this entertained you aunty

😛

Edited by lashy - 11 years ago

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sun29

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Posted: 11 years ago

#36

awww Lashy ...it was dreamy...wish wish wish this was the continuation ..stupid cvs...as you had said either the 90 people have returned or another 90 left ..the episode was that disjointed😆

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: preeti.r
Good one ... Wish there was one such episode

Thanks dear...😳

I wish there was one too...something some form of bridging scene..but alas, there was none and Ja...Jo emerged with some form of MPD the day after the turmoil...😆

Thanks once again...😳

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: -Khush-
Excellent work again Lashy ! You fulfilled my wish remember?! 😛
I did?😲 Which wish?

Now I want an OS from Amer ! 😈
But, I've seen a lot of OS-es from Amer lately dearie...😆

As much as I loved the taunts Jalal threw on jodha about his protection from her, I too was kinda going WTH ?! When Jalal didn't even have an ounce of anger for jodha or jodha have a pinch of guilt by facing him !
LOL tell me about it!

I pray this amer track does what this tiger track was supposed to do! Well the CVs might have changed gears since for junta janardhan it's always better to watch this KJo/Rajshri style wedding love stories than some guilt love ! 😆
Wedding love it is!😛

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: peachesandcream
Lashy this was very beautifully done.👏 You are very talented.

I so wish the CV's had included something like this. It would have allowed the story to move more smoothly. It would have not only kept the characterizations intact but allowed us to understand the characters point of views. I am sure we all were feeling the need of a scene such as this, but given scene after scene with the leads and others. What's more, both Paridhi and Rajat have the talent to carry such a scene.

That's what makes my heart bleed...they're so capable and under-utilized sometimes...😭

You're right about keeping the characterizations bit...it would helped a lot with that...😊

Thanks so much...🤗

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minnie2308

@minnie2308

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Posted: 11 years ago

#40

Thanks for the PM dear... a piece as beautiful as you...!

A thing that i found missing in the episodes is Shehenshah's 'high' regard for his own life. Any attempt on king's life surely meant you'd part with your head soon...

What I woudn't give to see this scene enacted. A man angry for being subjected to such life threatening situation, a man in awe of a delicate princess riding through the night after hauling his not so bantem weight over the not so short horse!

looking at the serial I'd started expecting raw real emotions from the leads... alas,!

So Jalal is confused what he feels for Jodha. Anger for putting his life at stake, sympathy for being in an uneviable state of distress, guilt and exhaustion!

Your descriptions of each emotion are so real. SubhanAllah👍🏼

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