OS 'HE opened his eyes and THERE SHE was, beside him!'

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disha

@disha15

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Posted: 11 years ago

#51

im re-reading it,so that I can feel bliss again! 😆

shall comment in a few! 🤗

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disha

@disha15

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Posted: 11 years ago

#52

I loved how you started off describing Jalal's sleepy confusion and then has he started gaining consciousness,the first thing he noticed was how Jodha how. How his condition had its effect on her.

But yeah,ofcourse he wouldn't let her know that he was afterall,empathetic 😳 Instead,he masks it with his usual taunts. She ofcourse isn't irritated this time. She knows that,this time,she did faulter.

But yes,his anger did surface,in installments amidst their 'civil' conversation. And hsi taunts felt like actual statements now. What more,even though she thought his opinions didn't matter to her,they did.

My favourite part of the os though,was the whole sequence following the shawl part 😆 Reminded me of our good old prankster Rajat 😆

The way he puts pressure on his back,just to annoy her 😛 Yet,being the pativritha wife,she doesn't give up,yet 😆 And then comes the 😳 Ahem!

It made me go ☺️ all at once you know?! 😃

Damn,it makes me want Rajat as MY GUY even more now! 😳

Ab toh khush ho na aap?Meri neend churaake 😆

Shradha di.you write epic pieces you know? 👏

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: Pallavvi
awesome...loved it😊

Thanks dear...😳

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: tareyfan
superb dear..👏

Thank you so much...😳

Originally posted by: ginco
👏wow lashy ,

I simply loved it .. It was like a K-I-S-S .. keep it simple stupid..

Your OS is filled with detailed nuances n emotions , how how i love romance n complications it brings with it .👏👏👏👏

Love
Kashi

Awww thanks dearie...thank you so so much!😳

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: nandinidavid96
Wonderful Lashy...I wish you never end this...you are simply amazing👏 👏

Thanks dearie...😳

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disha

@disha15

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Posted: 11 years ago

#56

Guess what Im doing?

Follow the link

http://rajattokasworld.com/smf/index.php/topic,573.0.html

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Shraddha

@lashy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: disha15
Guess what Im doing?
Follow the link

http://rajattokasworld.com/smf/index.php/topic,573.0.html

lol I'd forgotten I'd even made a genealogy map for the clan 🤣

Btw...I'm planning to write a modern FF on Jalal...and guess where he's gonna be based...😛

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disha

@disha15

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Posted: 11 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: lashy

lol I'd forgotten I'd even made a genealogy map for the clan 🤣
Btw...I'm planning to write a modern FF on Jalal...and guess where he's gonna be based...😛

Hahaha yeah the map! 😛

Did u say FF?!Yayyy 😃 Where eh?Errmmm,Ajmer or Aryanagar? 🤣