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Posted: 11 years ago
Luved both the parts😃...plz part 30 bhi jaldi update kar do...😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

Wow this update was totally amazing and brilliant... Well done!!!!👏👏👏

You captured the dire states of Jalal and Jodha so well and the way you explained the depths of their bond was not only sensible but emotionally charged as well👏👏
I could not have asked for a better AkhDa union
I all the pervious chapters you had set the characters and their situation up so beautifully and finally... This union more than lived up to expectations!! It surpassed anything I could have imagined⭐️⭐️
Well done, please keep it up and update soon!! I am in love with this story!!!❤️
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Posted: 11 years ago
thank u s much for updating it so soon!!! I loved how they both were put in same room and then they get better. amazing.
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Posted: 11 years ago
Nice surprise from hb
Shaguni bhai u r simply awesome
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Posted: 11 years ago
thanks...loved it...great job...well done...amazing...please update sooon
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Posted: 11 years ago
Ausme... Very nice...luvd it...

Plz continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
hey!
sorry for the late comment
it was superb dear, i just loved it
please do continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
part 30
jalal and jodha after returning to their chamber in the main royal tents late at night were resting in each others embrace,without even knowing it...though it had been sometime that the sun had been up neither wanted to get up from their sleep...they kept snuggling into eachother inhaling eachothers sweet and musky fragrance...


hamida bano had gotten up really early,with the first rays of the sun...after getting ready and doing her prayers she set out to meet rb and mn...rb and mn were in the main living room when hamida bano was announced...both got up to greet their samdhansa...
mn-arey aaeye na samdhansa...itni subah subah...aap raat ko aaram se so gayi thi na...
hb-ji maharani...hum bikul aaram se apni neend puri kar chuke hain...bas ab jalal aur jodha ko ek nazar dekhna cahte hain...
mn-hum samajh sakte hain samdhansa,aap chinta mat kariye hum abhi unke liye sandesa bhijva dete hain...
mainavati sends a maid to inform jodha and jalal of hamida bano's arrival...the maid sees moti bai and asks her to inform jodha of teh arrival of shehenshah's mother...moti seeing the urgency and the seriousness of the situation goes to inform jodha but cannot enter her room esp when she knows both jalal and jodha are still sleeping...so she tries talking in a really loud voice just outside jodha's room
moti-reva tumhe pata hai shehenshah ki maasa yahan aayi hain...
reva-kya kab...
moti-kal raat hi...aur ab woh shehenshah se milna cahti hain...
with all the commotion going on outside their bedroom both jodha and jalal begin to arouse from their sleep.both looked at each other with sleep induced eyes and finally realise that they were almost sleeping on the other person...jodha is totally embarrassed...she is about to get up and put some space between them but jalal holds her hand and brings her close,and whispers in her ear...
jalal-aaise mooh pher kar kyun ja rahi hain jodha...hum toh aapka deedar karna cahte hain aur aap humse nazarein chura rahi hain...
jodha-bahar koi aaya hai shayad...humein jane dijeye...kissine aaise dekh liya toh kya sochega...
jalal-yahi ki ek shauhar apni begum ke saath waqt beeta raha hai...aur vaise bhi kal toh aapko bahut parvaah thi hamari...agar humein kuch ho jata toh...
jodha trns around and puts a hand on his mouth...
jodha-aapne humse vada kiya tha ki aaisi baat aap kabhi nahi karenge...
jalal-nahi karenge agar aap hamare sawaal ka jawaab dengi...
jodha-kaisa sawaal...
jalal-aapko kyun farak padta hai ki humein kuch ho...aap toh humse nafrat karti hain na...toh humein kuch bhi ho...koi humein ghayal hi kyun na kare aapki ankhon main ansoon kyun aate hain jodha...
jodha has no answer,she just keeps looking down...jalal lifts up her chin and makes her look in his eyes...
jalal-jodha agar aaj aapne apni chuppi nahi todi toh hum toot jayenge...bataeye aaisa kya hai hamare beech main jo aapko aur humein jeene nahi deta...
jodha-humein nahi pata shehenshah...humein bachpan se aapse ghrina karna sekhaya hai parantu pata nahi kyun lekin agar aapko kuch bhi hota hai toh hamari saansein ruk jati hain...aaisa lagta hai ki humein bhi nahi jeena...kal jab humne suna ki aap ghayal hain toh hamare pairon ki tale se zameen hi khisak gayi thi...hum nahi jante ki humein kya hota ja raha hai magar hum aapko taqleef main nahi dekh sakte shehenshah(she says all this with tears in her eyes)
jalal wipes her tears ,holds her head between his hands...joins his forehead to hers and says"JODHA,AAP HAMARE SAATH AGRA VAPAS CHALENGI NA"
both their eyes r closed,forheads still joined,hearts beating together ...jalal is waiting for jodhas answer...
jodha"AAPKO HAR CHEEZ BOL KE KYUN BATANI PADTI HAI SHEHENSHAH,KABHI KABHI KHUD BHI KUCH SAMAJHNA CAHIYE"
jalal-"AAPKI ANKHEIN HUM PAD CHUKE HAIN JODHA,AB AAPKI ZUBAAN SE SUNNA CAHTE HAIN...BOLIYE NA"
jodha after keeping silent for sometime and raising jalal's tension level finally says"AGAR AAPKE SAATH NAHI JAYENGE TOH YAHAN MARR JAYENGE...SHAYAD SE HUMEIN BHI AGRA KI AADAT HO GAYI HAI..."
jalal-"AUR HAMARI"
jodha coyly looks down"AAPKI BHI"
jalal is so overwhelmed that he hugs jodha out of sheer relieve,kisses her forehead and is about to kiss her cheeks when moti bai interupts them...
moti-humein shama karna shehenshah...aapki maasa aayi hain yahan...aapse aur rajkumari se milna cahti hain...
jalal-theek hai tum chalo hum dono abhi neeche aate hain...
jalal-zaroor MM humse milne aayi hongi...chaliye begum dekhte hain kya baat hai...
both jodha-jalal get ready and go down to see who has come to meet them


jodha and jalal enter the living room only to find rb with mn and shockingly for jalal HAMIDA BANO waiting for them...hb rushes to jalal and takes him in her arms...
hb(with tears in her eyes)-aap theek toh hain na jalal...
jalal-ammijaan aap yahan...humein laga MM hongi...
hb-humein pata hai aapko apni badi ammi ka intezaar tha ,magar humse raha nahi gaya...aapke tabiyat ke baare main sun kar hum seedhe yahan chale aaye...humne maham se bhi kaha tha ki woh bhi hamari saath chalein par shayad unhe koi kaam tha...isliye unhone mana kar diya...
this was news to jalal...MM not wanting to meet him esp when he is injured...he felt really bad...the person who he consideres his mother was not there when he needed her and the mother who had left him when he was young had gone out of her way to leave behind her palace and come running to her child when he needed some support...he did not know what to make of it...
jodha could sense some tension in jalal and to distract hsi mind she went ahead to meet hsi mother...she bend down to touch her feet...
jodha-pranam ammijaan...aapko yahan dekh kar humein bahut prasanta ho rahi hai...
hb-jodha meri bacchi...aap kaise hain...aapke yahan aane ke baad toh jaise agra ka mehal suna hi ho gaya hai...pehle aap yahan aa gayi phir jalal...sari raunak khatam ho gayi...
jodha-magar aap itni jaldi yahan kaise aa gayi...
hb-hamare bete ko hamari zaroorat thi jodha...agar jalal ko kuch bhi ho jata toh hum bhi kaise jee pate jodha...apne bete ko sahi salamat lene aaye the...ab aap donon ko lekar jayenge...

for the first time jalal was seeing hamida bono in a new light...he realised that he had never given her a chance to shower love on him bcoz he held a grudge against her...he hated the fact that she was not there for him when he was small and needed a mother figure but now he could understand that it was not that she wanted it to be like that...she might have never wanted to leave him alone but circumstances must have forced her...jodha and his mothers bonding had forced him to think that if someone as pure as jodha had taken a liking to his mother than maybe he should also give his relationship with his mother a chance...for the first time in his life JALAL,SHEHENSHAH-E-HIND,became a son,hamida bano's son and touched her feet...hb hugged her son with so much warmth and love that jalal started tearing up...he started to feel like a 6 year old jalal in teh arms of his mother and lovingly hugged her for the first time...after they parted he kissed her forhead and turned to greet rb and mn...

jalal-ab hum aap se izazat cahenge maharaj...hum apni ammijaan aur begum ke saath vapas agra lautna cahtein hain...
rb-bilkul shehenshah...aapne yahan aa kar hamara jo maan badaya hai uske liye shukriya...
jalal-aap humein sharminda kar rahe hain maharaj...humein toh aana hi tha...ek toh hamari behen ki shaadi thi aur upar se hamari amanat aapke pass thi...unhe lene toh aana hi tha na...

rb and mn with a lot of pomp and show bid farewell to jalal,jodha and hamida bano...jalal was going back with a sense of calm and peace in his mind...not only did he get his jodha back but he was also on his way to mending his relationship with his mother...he thanked gods who had brought jodha in his life and vowed to give her all the happiness in the world...though he still refuted that he has a heart but he himself knew he was lying...it would be only a matter of time that he would accept and admit this to himself and to jodha,the princess who not only stole his sleep,peace of mind but also his heart...
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Posted: 11 years ago
beautiful update...
finally akbar realised his mistakes and accepts his mother...
i am feeling very happy for jodha and jalal...
i am sure jala will cme to knw abt MM's truth soon...
well written...
continue soon...
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Posted: 11 years ago
Wow this was absolutely beautiful!! Just when I think that you are too good and your story is impossible to improve you come up with something even more brilliant than before!!! I love the way you write the dialogues... It's amazing!!!👏👏👏 It's so beautiful and so sincere you actually get caught up in the moment and feel what your characters are feeling and I think this is the greatest accomplishment for any writer🤗 Thank you so much for gifting us with this wonderful story... I loved how Jalal and Jodha woke up in each other's arms and I absolutely applaud your brilliance how you planted that seed of doubt in Jalal about his Badi Ammi!!⭐️⭐️⭐️
I love that Hamida and Jalal are on the way to mending their relationship... You set that up so beautifully and obviously... I love how you set Jalal and Jodha up to recognise their love and to give their relationship a name!! Congrats sugar👏👏
Keep it up!! I can't wait for more😛
Az

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