OS : The fracture : pg 12

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poetic

@poetic

Stunner

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

This is so good and this is how it should have happened

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Hamm.

@hamna19khan

Navigator

Posted: 9 years ago

#22

Oh wow this is great or should I say
ANKHON KI THANDAK and DIL KA SUKOON it is :)

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neiralove

@neiralove

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#23

This is just perfect; thank you! 😊

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shri123

@shri123

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#24

Very nice update. Yes, it should have been this way in the serial. But NB completely ruined it.

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roneeta

@ronitfan

Trailblazer

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: ronitfan

Ragini was now breathing through her mouth, another classic sign of too much pain.. he winced in response.. this was too much for him to take.. he wish he could end her pain instantly.. what was happening with them?!

Thankfully, he heard a car back up and put his arms gently around Ragini and tried to pull her in his arms but she cried out in pain because of the jerk to her hand..

Nachikettt

His heart constricted as he heard that word.. he winced again and his eyes narrowed.. as if he was the one hurt.. but he was..

I'm sorry Ragini, I have to do this..

Saying so, he swooped her up into his arms in one grand stroke and tears started streaming down her face.. she was not so verbal about her pain now but she could no longer hold back her tears as she grabbed him around his neck as tight as he could.. her anxiety and pain meant she was digging into the back of his neck causing him excruciating pain in the process, but he pursed his lips and rushed to the car ..gently placing her on the seat while he went over to the other side, sitting besides her and and pulling her to rest against his chest... his right hand cradling her elbow, helping her hold up the right hand without much pain. she winced whenever they hit a pothole and he found himself shouting at Ranbir to be careful.. and instantly feeling bad about it..

Ragini seemed like she was going to black out due to the pain.. despite everything, he found himself pressing his lips to her forehead.. wishing it would do something.. hoping against hope.. and she responded by burrowing in more into his kurta.. her tears now flowing down and staining his kurta..

And they had finally reached the hospital and they had wheeled her in sitting on a wheelchair.. and the doctor nodded at him nervously before injecting Ragini with painkillers.. she was getting drowsy because of the drugs but her body was still racked by small sobs.. he felt a breath stuck in his chest the entire while..

Ranbir accompanied the doctor out to get the nurse to put a full blown plaster on her arm.

And then it was there, the sudden rage..

WHAT ON EARTH WERE YOU THINKING, Ragini!?!!

Ragini was absolutely stunned to hear Nachiket shout..

WHAT IF SOMETHING HAD HAPPENED TO YOU?

DO YOU NEVER THINK OF IT AT ALL?!

WHAT IF YOU WOULD HAVE FALLEN DOWN ON YOUR HEAD?!

WHAT WOULD HAVE HAPPENED TO YOU?!

WHAT WOULD HAVE HAPPENED TO ME, HAVE YOU THOUGHT ABOUT THAT?!

And then there was a deafening silence as both of them processed the words he had just put out there in the open.. he looked up in frustration and moved his hand in his hair.. and then banged his hand on the steel table as hard as he could.. the pain getting to him and he started shaking his hand as he heard a weak 'Nachiket' from the bed..

He could not look at her.. not in this state.. the strong one, Ragini.. she must be in so much pain.. and this pain was going to stay for at least a couple of days...

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shabana

@shabz50

Dazzler

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

This is so perfect the way it should have been written.

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roneeta

@ronitfan

Trailblazer

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Thank you so much you lovely people

*HUGS*

Someone please please continue this I really need to crash now :)

Please, I'd love it if someone takes this forward and ends it beautifully..

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@metoyou

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#28

Sukhi yaar!!!

I have seriously NO idea how bad and insensitive it was shown in the show but THIS is how it should have been. And to keep this as reel and real as possible, I will NOT watch the episode. It will ruin the feeling I get from your take.

Out of all this particular bit really touched my heart and shows his true emotions:

he looked up in frustration and moved his hand in his hair.. and then banged his hand on the steel table as hard as he could.. the pain getting to him and he started shaking his hand as he heard a weak 'Nachiket' from the bed..

You know my weakness for this man and the way he emoted his pain was just too real. It was because of her, for her. He is in equal pain and his frustration was bang on.

Can't thank you enough for this Sukhi, WONDERFUL! ❤️

🤗

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neiralove

@neiralove

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#29

Thank you so much Sukhi Di for writing this lovely piece! It was really the need of the hour and how much ever gratitude I try to convey in words won't be enough. 🤗

This story was perfect, gorgeous, marvelous, and downright amazing to say the least (sorry I'm running out of adjectives)! Please go get some rest and come back to finish this up tomorrow--I'll be waiting to see how you finish this! 😳

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