arshi ff: without you... #3, chapters 28 - epilogue **completed** - Page 53

Originally posted by: mandy15

loved it dear :)

Originally posted by: shiv456

awesome

Originally posted by: Archu61

I liked the way the story is flowing ,slowly things are getting back to a normalcy ,the nuances in the feelings of all your characters is right on target as Payal anjalie and Mami all have different expectations ,khushie is maturing ,with her husband ,she is learning to step of the safe and narrow and take new steps ,,keep going your doing very well

Originally posted by: Javeria3991

Awesome update. It was so hilarious. I couldn't stop laughing in the end 🤣

I really love this update because it was all about raizada siblings and their lives.

Aww payal and Akash cute and lovely romance. They want a daughter which was lost. Their kid will definitly bring new hope and brightness in everyone life.

I love conversation between Anjali and Arnav. Anjali is finally out of her grief and she has let go shyam. Dr verma made her feel special, complete which she never felt with Shyam. And most importantly she feel alive with him. I like her cute comment to Arnav my naak pe gussa dil romantic shomantic bhaiyya,

Its great that you closed the loop of Khushi babuji paralytic stroke. Garima feel right to kill shyam because that man destroyed her family which no can ever tolerate and neither can forgive.

Your description of their force marriage mandir scene was wonderfully written espeically Arnav thoughts at that time.

I enjoy alot reading this update

Originally posted by: RajiSobtian

Lovely update
Very nice written

Originally posted by: amus5

indi...what actually struck me across the entire update is that this Shyam fiasco has made everyone learn things the hard way ...

i thought when something really bizarre happens in life, it always leaves a deeper mark... sometimes we learn from it, sometimes it breaks us, sometimes a bit of both and i am sure there are other reactions... shyam was nothing if not bizarre...then there was chacha ji and always there was the past and sheeshmahal...but perhaps the most important event in the recent months was asr's coma... watching him lie there almost gone must have been chaotic for everyone... i think the return of asr from that, brings a new perspective to many and there is a will to move forward, not explaining well... ha ha but you know...

Arnav...can we ever imagine him actually telling khushi that he doesnot want Sheeshmahal history repeating in their lives...asking/advising Anjali to give life a second chance - Arnav has mastered the art of clairvoyance.

not clairvouant, our asr is clever teehee... he has been noticing little things that tell him di is opening up to having another man in her life. doc v has been around all the time, and she took him to lucknow... then akash's comment about doc v approving of payal's bed rest... shatir asr, terribly worried about di always, decides to act. you know, i am enjoying him feeling things about his mother's life, both his girls, khushi and di, he sees their predicament at some place vis a vis his mother's... he can't bear to see his mother hurt... he could not change that... but it gives him a resolve and an understanding maybe.

Anjali ...though close to Arnav will actually think beyond Shyam or the past and openly say that yes she likes Dr Vijay Verma

aisa bhi hota hai whew.

Garima...she is actually confiding in khushi and is being open about her thoughts

for years she hid things, but dear shyam with his vileness, makes her think differently. i'd hav elove to have seen her give shyam one thappad.

Manorama ... is actually ready to accept that Payal is her bahu who is gonna make her a grandma and that she will be pampering her to the bits...

well, the other clever one bhantings grandson but issettlkings phar granddaughter becoj, either bhays she becomings mores impaartant... i am wondering what she'd do if she had three grand daughters and not yet a grandson... poor akash and payal, akash's nightmare of many bacchas just might come true.

Khushi...has become more mature and the underlying understanding has bloomed and as Arnav says she has come a really looonnnggg way...

she is a smart girl with immense possibilities i always felt... and that indestructible happiness, faith and innocence of her... saves her, makes her more.

it feels like everyone is learning to pick up the shattered and battered strings of life and start living once again

they seem to be saying " life is short - live it in the most positive way"

enjoyed the bus ride (nah - khushi's red car) with a tipsy jalli-rani and a rapchi😉 kadoos laad... writer dead. oh btw when and where did daniel ji(?) come into the pic 😆 😆 ( looks like 'people speak the truth in an inebriated state' holds true here too 😆)

thanx for the update...pls continue soon 😃

amu 😃

Originally posted by: aarwen

with or without sindoor, with or without mangalsutra, with or without what you call god, with or without lies, falsehood, unfaithfulness... you are mine. for six months. forever.

you write contradictions beautifully.

I got lost in the chapter. Nothing simplistic linear. You covered a spectacular range of emotions indi di. So aman is his support system? why do I like the sound of that.

Two forthright conversations the man had, with two important woman in his life, and one drunk one.. why do I fall for him har baar? I really liked the phone conversation with Anjali and transition from nirupa roy to karan johar. The talk with khushi about the dress.. the way she evaded the issue, you got that tone perfectly right. I know he thinks exactly what he said, and I know the lingering sadness that must remain in Khushi, still I would have been happy without this extra explanation... not sure why...

I wanted to hug little curious khushi.. haha I never thought I would hear a guttural groan from adult khushi.. and you had to make her try whiskey? isn't it blissful to be able to write for ourselves, what we want? loved both of them drunk..

Originally posted by: kizh72

Felt joy and a funny ache inside for these two persons who are so real for us. Beautiful as always, Indi di. Ha laphroig, a favorite of my brother's, keep saying how much foot of land he has in Scotland from all the bottles drunk!

Originally posted by: jazz.kaur

awesome update...

Originally posted by: indi52

yessir, madam can give many guttural groans, madam is all and wonly possibilities...

thank you for liking the writing.

you know non linear is how i think life is... points from different parts of it join up and complete a picture, but we keep thinking it is a linear single line of events each leading to the other...

this being story, i am of course looking for a physical linearity to the tale, but the internal movements of characters... nahiiin. in bangla we say...ja poddo mile ja... go poem go and rhyme, when something feels unreal and a bit to simplistically not simply tied up...

hope i am avoiding all temptations to do that.

but yet there is structure.

hai re nand kissore... what the h am i doing.

okay, appreciate your discomfort with asr explaining. thought a lot about it... before i wrote... i finally decided he being he, would notice she is down and would be honest and upright about it... he would speak to her... even if she interrupted and said no need.

firstly, his own nature would say he should... that sorry in the middle of the night hints at it... also always wanting to do the right thing by his patni.

patni... big word for this young man... he has seen one patni being treated terribly.. the woman he has loved the most perhaps in his life... his mother.

a lot of feelings about her in him.

not always things he can or wants to talk about.

but she stays... always there... she returns him to this world, to life from his coma, he sees her reflection in his two beautiful women... yeah, anjali remains his sab kuch... there is no competition in his heart as i see it... both anjali and khushi are his sab kuchh.

and that night at sheesh mahal... realising his mother did not kill herself... i will touch on that somewhere, i think again releases things in him.

if you notice, to both khushi and anjali he refers to his maa's life. not in a cheap maaa main aa gaya way... but you know... it's all disturbing him all over again...

a mix of many emotions.

he sees her downcast face... he hears why... first he loses his cool.. ha ha, my man.. then he absolutely insists on having his say...

not trying to tell you to like this bit... just explainiyang bhy i am bhantings that isscene.

and oh, i just adored khushi for stepping in and "saving" him at that "ek ghutan si". a wife saying... enough!!! she ain't letting her hubs explainiya or suffer no more... hum samajhte hain. she really does samjho.

about the whisky: have you noticed how people in desh feel a certain freedom, an okayness about stepping out of the norm, when they go to videsh? i know of this lovely girl from a very trad business fam, always in sari, always gracious, who showed me pictures of her in a lovely dress somewhere in italy... said whenever they travel, her husband wants her to wear western clothes and she loves it... i don't think khushi will drink regularly now on... but a spirit of experimenting and oh asr so wants her to be a part of his life in every way... but without changing her... may i now retire and love this khadoos husband forebheriya.

thanks for liking miss curious. she is checking out daniel ji ha ha.