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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: vidya.sanjay
Beautiful :)
Her longing for her soulmate and the, remembering both thier good and bad moments with each other were simply brilliant.

vidya.sanjay, 😳

thank you so much for reading and saying what you do. they are quite a wonderful pair... yeah good and bad, no running away from either.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: sohara
can't describe in words how beautifully you wrote this story!
Arnav and Khushi's first anniversary, can't be better than this. they talked their heart out, they made love to each other, she wore his favorite red saree, dressed the way how he loves.
what an assimilation of the dreadful night of their wedding with their present state. On that night Arnav had turned to a tyrant. but one thing that never changed is his feelings for khushi
"you are mine"

he was far away in the US . But how can he stay away from her on the special day of their wedding. His Khushi is above all. so he just ran to her from the other side of the world.
the moment was so heart wrenching when Khushi cried her heart out sitting on his lap. Then they reminisces so many significant moments of their lives. It was always my wish to see Arnav and Khushi recollects their memorable event, their untold feelings, their unspoken words. But sigh it never happened in the show. Thanks to you that you fulfilled my wish.

Loved how brought the season in this story to make the story more sublime.

sohara,

in bold pink, you say it all.

assimilated... every moment of our life gets assimilated in it somehow... if we can do that with a positive view, with hope and love without lying without grand gestures but just by knowing feeling making space and growing bigger... ah beauty. asr and khushi's life together has a beauty in it and it includes terrible things too in a sublime way... what say. thanks for liking, and your last line too.

you liked her crying? and the saree, and all that love making? you dancing a bit i hope. 🤗

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Maria

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Posted: 11 years ago

#43

running out of words it was just brillant!👏

Arnav couldn't stay away from Khushi on their Wedding Anniversary Day ... he hurt her but the love he had for Khushi was above all...

i truely enjoyed reading it keep rocking!!!!👏

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RizArshi

@RizArshi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: indi52

hi rizarshi,

thank you thank you... i am so happy you loved it... i have to say i enjoyed writing this one a lot. i didn't try to "feed" them anything, just left them in a situation and they found their way themselves. there were a few superfluous details that got written in but since i didn't want to perfect the tale too much, leave it a little "elomelo" like life, i just let it be. think it perhaps added to the fun in a way. many thanks for reading.

Hello Indi di,

Its always a pleasure to read your stories. Yes life is indeed a little "elomelo". Its never perfect for any one. I think that is what made a monsoon story perfect. I believe a story should be just like that. If you try to perfect it, it will get ruined. Thanks for your reply. Looking forward to reading more of your one shots. I just love them. Another thing I always forget to mention is that I love your siggies. Nice edits 😳

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shanaya_sharma

@shanaya_sharma

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Posted: 11 years ago

#45

thanks 4 pm and sooo lovely story and it is wonderful

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chitra

@chitrajay

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Posted: 11 years ago

#46

somehow this wedding was always their real wedding to me. always. no matter how full of hurt and terror and suffocation it was. he and she will accept it as they go along... and it will perhaps trigger more and more beauty things as a consequence... as it did here.

@bold
Yes I so agree- perhaps in their love story, as turbulent as a river in full spate, this is how it was meant to be?
Somewhere deep within, each had already acknowledged the other as their other half...
And yes slowly - good memories, happy menories, intense and full of love will heal the past, will build a better and brighter tomorrow - stronger for having come out of the worst trials they could have- like gold which is strengthened by putting through fire.
😊

Edited by chitrajay - 11 years ago

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DurgaS

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Posted: 11 years ago

#47

Indi, do you know why you thought of me towards the end? Telepathy. Because that's what I did when I was leaving Mumbai, said Goodbye Samundarji. We used to stay near the beach area. Grew up watching the sea almost everyday. It was visible at a distance through our kitchen window. Would share my deep thoughts with the sea whenever I went to the beach. Your story, especially 'Aate hain Yamunaji' brought back those memories. Thank you. 😊

About the story, loved how you made a character out of the river. The little box, how we all would want to have one, so many moments to preserve. Loved the moment when Arnav opened his arms and Khushi ran to him. Kya socha tha dono ne, that they could manage without each other. Of course, he had to come back. No need to prolong the torture, Khushi had to be with him, always, hamesha.

Loved the description of the temple wedding. And both are sharing their thoughts at that time. Beautifully written about the characteristics of the river in full spate. A river never gets lost. Wow Indi, I love how your words flow in full abundance, never losing way, always reaching its target. Bang on. 👏

Aww, gold bangles and the way he asked her to come with him, loved it. 😳 Again, the last bit in the plane, so depicting Khushi's excitement, very well written.

Indi, you are right about me liking this one. Not only like, I loved it. See how many times I've used the word above. 😳

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.Brooke.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: indi52

thanks so much, lizzie...

i am now convinced these two characters will drive me mad... 😆

i watched the wedding and kept imagining how he and she must have felt... needed to see how they'd get past this terrible moment... and knew almost instinctively it had to be on the back of that feeling tehey had... the closest expression was "mine, mine." really pyaar has interaction with sahi and galkat, it just exists and it workd in its own way.

have a great weekend. i will update the othe stories. read at leisure... take your time...

Exactly as ASR in Ranjha's disguise said iss pyaar main sahi galat ka koi matlab nahi...matlab he to bas main humesha humesha tumse...

And it was all written on his face during the whole scene of hate marriage she is mine and how could I let her go.And she also accepted the fact just that hurried action of wedding gave her pain.

Once again thanks for giving this beautiful piece of story.

Looking forward for the updates 😊

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: MariaArHiholic
running out of words it was just brillant!👏

Arnav couldn't stay away from Khushi on their Wedding Anniversary Day ... he hurt her but the love he had for Khushi was above all...
i truely enjoyed reading it keep rocking!!!!👏

mariaarhiholic, hi

thanks so much for what you say. glad you enjoyed.