arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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Sunshine80

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Posted: 11 years ago

#771

Originally posted by: indi52

chhotey, you shut me up... aisa bhi hota hai... with that wonderful post. yes it felt like crooner... please do leave your thoughts more often. i was just thinking today, whough you say you can't wwrite, your minutes used to be spot on, and your ganas, alos your takes.

what more is needed for goosd wriyng.

thanks so much for enjoying thsi chapter. hope ishtory headed the right way. frankly i just ahave a broad bigger story idea, the chapters come along as the details start suggesting themselves to me. anjali and asr are special... and no she is not weak. i hope i don't reduce her to a prop ever. you like arnv bitwa sort of noticing that thing between his di and the tall man? let's see if that comes to a good place naturally.

thanks for reveling i the asr khushi thing... so cute and hot, na? something completely hatke in them...

and your edit... when did you become so fantastic at this. i am going to steal this one of course. 😆

i look forward to more crooner type comments from you. and i am being very complicated here 😆😆

love your mami ji lines. she is so suttupiya today... but soon i hope to have her doing her thing... east or best her nephoos eej the best

Raanisaahiba...aap badi mazaakiya ho and also complicated 😆
phir nahi to kya?? me writing good😲...
all who writes so beautiful comments here will be like

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You are being partial to your chotey😆...but as my Di said I will take it as compliment. 😳

ASR n Khushi...I have so much hopes on u Di ki u will make all our SKD's come true😉..so super excited as spider man here😉

Yes Di...I felt ASR was always sensible towards her Di feelings and would love to see if ASR understand Di's feelings more than Khushi...ok again that's my POV...it's ur story and I am liking the story like the way it is going😳

Definitely would try to pen my thoughts whenever possible...but like said AD is hectic di.

Di...jo mera hain woh aap ka hain...u need not ask or steal edits..hak se le lijiye🤗

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#772

chhotey ji,

ok, haq se taking your edits. and again complimentiyaing you. i know ad is demanding... jab ho sakey, come and write your thoughts. ha ha of course ranisahiba is partial... royal hain hum... glad you are liking the story. i need to give khushi some deep thought... 😳

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#773

Originally posted by: mashira
sorry for the late comments indi di. this is one hot, sweet and deep chapter...one of the best till now I must add.

the evolution of ASR really...his vulnerability when it comes to his precious Di and his actually terrible love and longing for family bonding is what makes him what he is. more irresistible. ultimately for all the opposites attract business in ASR-Khushi love story, I feel after all it was about common values, common principles and common outlook to life and love in general that really bonded them... in a bond I like to believe went much deeper than attraction.

looking forward to how the bro-sis duo handle the snake and of course, more romance :)

rashmi,🤗

what late? just posted a day ago... and i don't mind if it's late even... you know that.😳 thank you for hot sweet deep, the best adjectives ever. i like your thoughts on what makes asr asr. yeah, take away that love for his near and dear ones, his commitment to his family, you just have a shadow of this man left. and you are so right, asr and khsuhi were alike in many ways, in their values and also in their chutzpah... both survivors... i must find a connection to this side in the story... and both quite stubborn and unreasonable in their own way. the opposites aspect were more on the outside... essentially they believed in the same things... this was very clever i thought, because in the deep positive constructive relationships i think this is usually the case.

thanks again for reading and your most pertinent remarks... deep hot sweet included 😆

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bs_deeps

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Posted: 11 years ago

#774

Originally posted by: indi52

hello, dips,

hugs back. as long as you enjoyed. write when you wish to... if you do. achha tha i hope. you like the scene as the sun sets? and anjali up all night? where are relationships made and built... crazy the places you find.

aaw di..I liked every part of the update, I smiled when you described Anjali's chote, couldnt stop smiling reading about his thick black hair, and surprisingly, mamiji's quiet moment brought tears to my eyes, and sun set scene, had to b a special one isnt it..

mamiji and ASR bond was something special in show, even when she dig at his Khushi he never said anything to her, if only someone cared to explain it would have been an small interesting plot..

while I was reading ASR Khushi romance, I remembered your take on ASR Khushi's consummation before wedding, you were one of the very few who didnt want any conditions between these two, so today while reading, before you brought in La into picture, I was little surprised, but at the end, with La, it all made sense.. " lavanya ji kitni achhi hai"..is everything alright? I wonder if you are up for something with this line, not that I am worried, Arnav, Khushi hamesha saath rahegi...

I am liking the way you bring in all the characters of the show and explaining thier bond with Raizada family, especially ASR..and I really love these small details, like smaller half of the chocolate, soft cushiony feet..sister brother bond, heard lot of stories, but ASR and Anjali were special till CVs didnt know how to take that beautiful relationship forward, I know you will take a different route, so I am waiting for that..

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#775

dips,

i am so happy you llike... mami ji was weird and touching always to me. remember how he bought her that necklace and later how he handled her over the payal akash wedding...

anjali and asr, especially in the opening scenes are a delight. she is a smart cool educated woman, not the silly directionless fret queen they made her into later... i wondered why they should have this bond, the result was what you read.

about lavanya, no i don't see anything in that right now, but something there, need to see. and that sun set love making that is of course from before, she does remember lavanya at the last minute and pushes him away... otherwise she would have gone all the way... sometimes we do.

thanks for trusting me to not let down the story or the characters, i hope i do live up to it.

wiwy asked me what made him make love to her like that... it's fun thinking that one through... hope to update soon. please do tell me if something is not quite what it should be... i am trying to learn this story telling thing. 😆

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Cynthia Abruzzo DeSiena

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Posted: 11 years ago

#776

Indi, I think this is my favorite chapter. I just loved how you included everyone in the family and I love, love, love the birth of Arnav and Anjali's care for her mom. Just beautiful, mother daughter love! Anjali and Arnav OMG just wonderful and I can see and feel their love. I have to say I admire your Anjali so much more than the IPK Anjali at times.

Arnav and Khushi OMG hot and heavy !! Before realization and poor, poor Lavanya she never catches a break.

and please translate this, PM me when you do.

"nahin, arnav ji, yeh ho nahi sakta..." soft, firm voice.

"ho nahin sakta?" in an instant rage sparked, nostrils flared, "kyun? what the hell are you saying, khushi! stop playing games."

she snatched a shard of his anger and shot back, eyes smouldering, "hum koi khel khel nahin rahe hain... khel toh aap rahe hain... hum sab ke saath... lavanya ji ka kya hoga, arnav ji?"

Loved it!!! Feeling better because of you!

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henamani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#777

i wouldnt shy away from the fact that i loved arnav's character more than khushi's. even though they are two halves of a whole, i always maintained that ASR is probably one of the best MALE characters written for TV. strong, suave, angry and yet soft

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#778

Originally posted by: henamani
i wouldnt shy away from the fact that i loved arnav's character more than khushi's. even though they are two halves of a whole, i always maintained that ASR is probably one of the best MALE characters written for TV. strong, suave, angry and yet soft

hi hena,

no shying away from that... this was a beautiful character, bristling yet tender, and delightfully strong, magnificently vulnerable... he was etched with a keen heart and longing by his maker. khushi is lovely in her own way... will she ever reach asr's depth or breadth... i really have no idea. good to see you here. 😳

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#779

Originally posted by: cinthiann1758
Indi, I think this is my favorite chapter. I just loved how you included everyone in the family and I love, love, love the birth of Arnav and Anjali's care for her mom. Just beautiful, mother daughter love! Anjali and Arnav OMG just wonderful and I can see and feel their love. I have to say I admire your Anjali so much more than the IPK Anjali at times.
Arnav and Khushi OMG hot and heavy !! Before realization and poor, poor Lavanya she never catches a break.
and please translate this, PM me when you do.
"nahin, arnav ji, yeh ho nahi sakta..." soft, firm voice.

"ho nahin sakta?" in an instant rage sparked, nostrils flared, "kyun? what the hell are you saying, khushi! stop playing games."

she snatched a shard of his anger and shot back, eyes smouldering, "hum koi khel khel nahin rahe hain... khel toh aap rahe hain... hum sab ke saath... lavanya ji ka kya hoga, arnav ji?"

Loved it!!! Feeling better because of you!

cynthia,
i wanted to make you feel better... and hoped you'd read this fast... something in it would lighten the mood i was sure... 😳 i am glad anjali and asr touched your heart.

here's the translation,

"nahin, arnav ji, yeh ho nahi sakta..." soft, firm voice.

"no, arnav ji, this can't happen..." soft, firm voice.

"ho nahin sakta?" in an instant rage sparked, nostrils flared, "kyun? what the hell are you saying, khushi! stop playing games."

"can't happen?" in an instant rage sparked, nostrils flared, "why? what the hell are you saying, khushi! stop playing games."

she snatched a shard of his anger and shot back, eyes smouldering, "hum koi khel khel nahin rahe hain... khel toh aap rahe hain... hum sab ke saath... lavanya ji ka kya hoga, arnav ji?"

"i am not playing any games... you're the one playing... with all of us... what about lavanya ji, arnav ji?"