arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#301

Originally posted by: ArshiHamesha

Thnx Indi ,yes I used to read sunshine posts everyday as a silent reader as I didn't know anyone and this is me I don't chat back and forth that much ..don't know why...lack of time is the biggest reason and may be something else ...couldn't figure out yet.

Any way "that one dialogue "Paas nahin...covers most of your update,...her feeling way too much upset ,couldn't make jalaibis, seeing him every where and feeling him and his hand...His making her feel his presence as HE IS HEARING HER WHILE IN COMA...Telepathy did not finish...right ...am thinking wrong..so correct me if I am...

arshi, i wonder, if you really love, and i mean love a person, can you ever be in a state where you can't sense them?

i believe if we can let our hearts open... and i do not mean it in the flaky silly sense... i mean really, the place of heart, if it's open... then you can sense things. and love is a thing that makes that door open... no matter what tampers with it.

there telepathic connection is not just limited to a conversation through the stars. it is in them... part of that boding... that becoming one. now does this happen in real life? i don't know. but sometimes you can hear the other without them saying a thing.. even when they are miles away...

asr and khushi lines... one on paas and saath, the other on hamesha saath rahhenge and ek hain... it has validity. in their love story at least. may be that is what is driving this story.

you see, i completely refute the notion that these two can ever be in a place where they are not in love with each other. dead or alive, comatose or alzheimer struck, a feeling ties them and that is eternal. too bad, producer/director/channel/anyone.

this is my myth maybe...but i will keep it. 😆

and so, he does indeed sense her, wants to reach her, make her feel ok. just as she wants to reach him.

you used to read sunshine? okay sunshine99, pyal, was aregular writer on redux and i have met her a few times... lovely style. but this is sunshine80, doesn't write much, but has the sharpest mind, the truest love for asr... and is the maker of fabulous edits and parodies.😳

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#302

Originally posted by: cinthiann1758
Every time I read your story I cry. The thought of him in a coma away from her physically makes me sad.
So beautifully written it seems real.

awww. love ya for saying that. i feel awful too. for her. for me. cynthia, we got to get him back. now going to meet the honeymooners. 🤗

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nishu_shorna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#303

loved the update...again u made me cry...but naniji's telling Arnav about Khushi is bound to bring some effect...he cant see her in pain naa...
glad to see caring side of ASR...and their third meeting at the bhool bhulaiya...
when Khushi said she cant live without Arnav,he promised naa that she wont have to...Arnav Singh Raizada never breaks his promise...so I am 110% sure he will be alright...
thanks for the pm dear...I really really love this story...

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

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^^^ nishu-shorna,

thank you for reading and feeling, and what's this... why crying? asr asks, tum theek ho? 😳 you know this is no calibrated, conditional love, this is give you all, take me wherever you want, i am not afraid, can't live without you love.

dadkane ek ho jaati hai love.

neither he nor she can one fine day just opt out and walk away. that's what i realised. i tried to kill him off and see if that felt right.

even my keyboard refused to support me.

does that mean he can't die or she? not at all. they can.

but not this time. their journey still has some time right here. sigh.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#305

^^^ thanks, mastermagician... good to see you. 😳

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riti4u

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Posted: 12 years ago

#306

indi di..🤗wonderful update di... things i loved the most... the way you described the past haunting ASR..reference of white linen shirt that he wears then while remembering all his past moments...khushi cries..holding one of those white shirts... Ahh...it was my wish for a scene in the show...when ASR gets kidnapped..that they show khushi with one of his shirts..crying and at the same time..feeling his presence...around... then I loved the way you described..ASR giving her support when she needed it in bus...even though he is not there...just feel of his being around..makes her all right...I also liked the way you described nani's confidence in chottey.. nothin can happen to him...well narrated di...eagerly waiting for next update... as i can see we already have another encounter of sanka devi and laad governor in flashback...

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#307

^^^ hi riti,

😳 you like? i am happy. oh you wanted a linen shirt and khsuhi scene?... awww... maybe you sent me the vibe and i just added it in 😆 i am glad no one till now has asked me, oh my g, is he a ghost... we are such asr khushi phangurrls, we know exactly how they hang around each other,. yes, nani is the not easy to scare backbone of this family... she knows life deals its blows... her daughter gone tragically, her son married to not the sort of girl she may have wanted, widowed young, all the responsibilities... yet she's never bitter. traditional but loving and progressive. i have always had a thing for her... and asr is really like her in many ways.

thanks so much, sanaka is about to chabao chana... hopefully soon. tell you, she's a hard one to handle. 😆 see ya, thanks so much.

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IssK.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#308

Chapter 5 took my breath away, Indi! In both the feeling and the writing of it ⭐️ 🤗⭐️
My favorite part, 'Ladies and Gentlemen, I give you Asli KKG Singh Raizada'. Awww ❤️ You're churning out never-before-seen Raizada moments! And they are really something. He is red-hot looking at his face in the mirror no more than a cursory glance of course, for this is the Raizada, not some silly preening man, tying that 'slim dark brown' tie of his. You describe his cool dapper self and his complex dark thoughts with so much finesse, I want this version in a tv series right now!! I will volunteer to be the spot girl for free - will stomp over my ego and beg for it!!
The specific reference to 'labyrinthine corridors' of Sheesh Mahal was spectacular for me. I'm going to get a little carried away here, but allow me...I had a moment 😛 Him blazing past as a young boy, Her blazing past to save herself, both in distress...it made for a cinematic treat in my head as I read your words. Visually, spatially tied to each other right there in those corridors, even before they had met. I had never before seen it this way. Music played in my ears, a gorgeous pink lehenga on the run, a young boy turning to look, quick cuts, heart beats rising, gun shots two...all came together as one piece. Fab stuff madam! And OP was such a relief in the midst of it all, brought a smile ekdum 😊

The Raizada's 'slightly lunatic women' present here including moi of course, how much are you going to make us weep, by the way? Bas bataa do, hum taiyyar hain..."arnav ji main aapke begair jee nahi paaoongi" ne toh jaan le li yaar! Khushi ji, aap jeeo, hum toh already mar gaye!!
Naani ji hospital gaye toh haunslaa, consolation, mili. Seriously. She's so strong i thought. Lemme draw some inspiration. Loved her. Stroking his hair, blessing him. Great moment.

All in all, wonderful work, Indi. Loving seeing your movement.

I'm all set to board a blue and white metal bus now to sit next to the Raizada.

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.Brooke.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#309

Originally posted by: ArshiHamesha

I don't know I am first so what should I do...😆

Just brilliant Indi.👏👏👏... very emotional though , she is hallucinating him everywhere...
Arnav is protecting her "saath nahin tou iss ka yeh matlab nahi keh paas nahin"
Very touchy part he took her back home...

Naniji's action can cause a reaction in him and he can move as his Khushi is not eating ,or breathing properly without him...

Love the song touch though...indeed Bin tere Koi Khalish hai. hawaon mein...
Awww...nice edit...sunshine is cool...

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