arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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supriya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#321

tht was a hrt touchin chapter 👏👏

on the startin scene...you din miss out on the haircut 😉...nd the tie the knot came perfectly - you make me remember my school days...my frnd whom i used to sit next to...every mornin before the class she would knot it up for me 😃 in one take nd she would without complain😆

you gav OP quite few time...thts sweet..i can so imagine the actual scene...nd the purse he picked...nd ASR stern voice to keep it bck...loved tht

he had still kept the purse till date...👍🏼

Khushi's condition...my heart is breakin to see her this way...a year bck even i lost some1 who was really close to me...nd for a quite some time...i couldn think of anythin but her...i was hurt...it was terrible 😭😭 nd till today...i sleep with somethin tht belong to her...remember her every night!!!

Arnav's presence felt by Khushi in tht bus...bein thr for her whn she needs him... askin her to come home ...their love is so strong..they will together overcome it all ❤️

Naniji concern for Khushi...nd vijay verma's delight in seein Anjali happy too good 👏 (yeah knew Amitabh Bachchan's character in Deewar yet to watch the movie)

Arnav is gettin Better

loved the song you chose... Bin Tere...at one point...i couldn stop listenin to it 😊

just one thing..the bus scene...i wish it was bit more clearer...as to explainin tht it was Khushi's illusion

really good edit by your frnd 👏

Beautifully written Chapter...⭐️👏

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#322

^^^ hi supriya,

thanks so much for your lovely comments.

the tie knotting took you to your school days... i feel great... that's connection, the thing anyone who makes anything, craves.

losing people is terrible. never quite settles down the earth, after that. you try and live with it. i really can't let khushi or asr go through that right now. i wonder if life is as thoughtful while giving death.

sorry the bus scene was not too clear. i didn't want to explain too much. wanted the reader to feel and come to their own conclusions. even i don't know what exactly happened. just that with the pain, the hurt and then the movement and the song, a threshold was crossed and another space experienced. where asr and khsuhi could meet, even if he was laid up in a hospital. i don't want to define it too kuch... just a powerful feeling that's all.

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RebeccaDaphne

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Posted: 12 years ago

#323

Oh Indy this was beautiful! You wrote such a satisfyingly long chapter, and you described so well the depths of sadness people feel when they miss someone, almost akin to grieving. It was so real when Khushi went to touch items of his wardrobe just to have him close to her, and it was so lovely when she found that he had kept her purse all this time, a beautiful secret discovered at a time when she needed it most! 👏

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Mysticaldivine

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Posted: 12 years ago

#324

Originally posted by: indi52

arshi, i wonder, if you really love, and i mean love a person, can you ever be in a state where you can't sense them?

i believe if we can let our hearts open... and i do not mean it in the flaky silly sense... i mean really, the place of heart, if it's open... then you can sense things. and love is a thing that makes that door open... no matter what tampers with it.

there telepathic connection is not just limited to a conversation through the stars. it is in them... part of that boding... that becoming one. now does this happen in real life? i don't know. but sometimes you can hear the other without them saying a thing.. even when they are miles away...

asr and khushi lines... one on paas and saath, the other on hamesha saath rahhenge and ek hain... it has validity. in their love story at least. may be that is what is driving this story.

you see, i completely refute the notion that these two can ever be in a place where they are not in love with each other. dead or alive, comatose or alzheimer struck, a feeling ties them and that is eternal. too bad, producer/director/channel/anyone.

this is my myth maybe...but i will keep it. 😆

and so, he does indeed sense her, wants to reach her, make her feel ok. just as she wants to reach him.

you used to read sunshine? okay sunshine99, pyal, was aregular writer on redux and i have met her a few times... lovely style. but this is sunshine80, doesn't write much, but has the sharpest mind, the truest love for asr... and is the maker of fabulous edits and parodies.😳

Indi in BLUE...Telepathy and mehsoos ,the feeling of other person does not limit to a man or a woman...as a mother I have that and more than me My younger one has it for me...It's a quiet strange thing yet it's not a joke and exists very strongly and you can't rest peacefully...TOTALLY agreed you don't need words or conversation its just a feeling ...way disturbing sometimes ...

In RED those dialogues have way deeper meaning than ever for a person who can dig in ...indeed their dialogues for each other seeps into their skin through their veins and run like a life without which there is nothing left in the show...and the delivery done by these two SUPERB ACTORS and that's what makes it IPK...

Their love is beyond the presence of JISM ...as they are soul mates ...

It's not myth at all...I am not a very much in that kind of love person yet does have the knowledge through different sources and since I am in Sufiism a lot and YES I do believe in certain things which were have no meaning for me and usually took my life as I am controlling my destiny yt it doesn'yt go that way...

UNderlined thnx for correcting me...Yes I used to read sunshine99 at Redux and at main forum too...I don't know sunshine80..sorry for that...

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BarunDiwani

@BarunDiwani

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Posted: 12 years ago

#325

Indi, my heart is warm and fuzzy and my eyes are in tears...tears of not joy, not sadness just of feeling. why do i feel that her imagining him in the bus was really no imagination? it had to be his mahsoos at its strongest. deep sigh, loved it all. How strong and brave was she to get on that bus that look the same?

OP got his screen time huh? good job giving his backgroud, ASR would order for the girls to be educated 👏 also love the little Nani/Chotey moment. She has been through so much, losing her daughter and now seeing chotey like this, i feel her crumbling behind that strong exterior. At the same time love her confidence in him to fight out of this. and love how you've sewed in that accident wala scene in this one. can't wait for more of that!! finally perfect choice of that song..hehe that title of that movie is deceiving! my poor ASR!

Thanks for the detailed description of his thobda, felt like my hands were touching it with hers!😳

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#326

Originally posted by: divsarunfan
superb di👏

thank you so much, 😳.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#327

Originally posted by: RebeccaDaphne
Oh Indy this was beautiful! You wrote such a satisfyingly long chapter, and you described so well the depths of sadness people feel when they miss someone, almost akin to grieving. It was so real when Khushi went to touch items of his wardrobe just to have him close to her, and it was so lovely when she found that he had kept her purse all this time, a beautiful secret discovered at a time when she needed it most! 👏

rebecca 🤗

thank you so much. yes that sadness... layered by a constant nagging fear... what if. satisfyingly long chapter? good. i will wait for the next one to come. hope the story takes me in the right direction. very happy you are reading. 😳

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#328

Originally posted by: ArshiHamesha

Indi in BLUE...Telepathy and mehsoos ,the feeling of other person does not limit to a man or a woman...as a mother I have that and more than me My younger one has it for me...It's a quiet strange thing yet it's not a joke and exists very strongly and you can't rest peacefully...TOTALLY agreed you don't need words or conversation its just a feeling ...way disturbing sometimes ...

In RED those dialogues have way deeper meaning than ever for a person who can dig in ...indeed their dialogues for each other seeps into their skin through their veins and run like a life without which there is nothing left in the show...and the delivery done by these two SUPERB ACTORS and that's what makes it IPK...
Their love is beyond the presence of JISM ...as they are soul mates ...
It's not myth at all...I am not a very much in that kind of love person yet does have the knowledge through different sources and since I am in Sufiism a lot and YES I do believe in certain things which were have no meaning for me and usually took my life as I am controlling my destiny yt it doesn'yt go that way...

UNderlined thnx for correcting me...Yes I used to read sunshine99 at Redux and at main forum too...I don't know sunshine80..sorry for that...

hi arshi,

parents, often mothers have this sixth sense about the kids. my mother did... i hope i do too. i remember a friend's mom... he was born with difficulties and be strapped to a wheelchair at all times, sharp, cool brain buzzing in him, a great fun guy. his mom would have clear visions of her guru as warning whenever her son face danger. i know if at least twice when this has happened.

this mehsoos/telepathy... it's quite a thing isn't it? talks to you... asks you to act on it. then we pull on our "rational" blanket and walk away. my husband has traveled like mad over the 28 years we've been together... tell you, whenever i felt hassled about not getting news or anything, always relied on my inner voice. if that was calm, i centred. needless to mention, i often know he's going to call me, and the phone rings... so many time we are calling each other at the same time. all chance? all coincidence?

so yeah, i guess i absolutely believe asr and khushi have that connection.

e e cummings's "i carry your heart in me," often comes to mind.

thanks for writing, and sufis, they believe in crossing thresholds don't they? as do mystical streams of most faiths. it's a fine balance... to be here and allow yourself to think there might be a wider larger experience-able universe. but it can be done... with elegance and faith.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#329

Originally posted by: BarunDiwani
Indi, my heart is warm and fuzzy and my eyes are in tears...tears of not joy, not sadness just of feeling. why do i feel that her imagining him in the bus was really no imagination? it had to be his mahsoos at its strongest. deep sigh, loved it all. How strong and brave was she to get on that bus that look the same?
OP got his screen time huh? good job giving his backgroud, ASR would order for the girls to be educated 👏 also love the little Nani/Chotey moment. She has been through so much, losing her daughter and now seeing chotey like this, i feel her crumbling behind that strong exterior. At the same time love her confidence in him to fight out of this. and love how you've sewed in that accident wala scene in this one. can't wait for more of that!! finally perfect choice of that song..hehe that title of that movie is deceiving! my poor ASR!

Thanks for the detailed description of his thobda, felt like my hands were touching it with hers!😳

tears of feeling. ami, i am glad to read that. feeling, ami ji, feeling... how i wish for it, and love it. haw soppy me.

she is brave, and asr's thoughts help her go more into her courageous heart... no running away, no not looking at pain and staying always happy. now he is there hamesha and she can always tell him if it hurts. he gives a faraq and he is hers... no compromise, absolute haq hers.

isn't op cute, he deserves a girl friend... one he sneaks out of work to meet, buy her gajra, take her to the movies on his moped, maybe choose a pink purse for.

yes, this man has a thing about women and their rights and place in society. haven't you noticed? he is a tyrant who shouts at the servants, totally non pc, yet takes care of them and is fanatic about girls being treated right. okay, my take... if your mother, who was from a good family, educated, devoted, were treated like this... maybe you would start thinking why... along the way as you saw how your dad fooled two women, and your dadi tried to pretend all fault lies with the girls, you'd get to the point that in this world women are not treated as equals/fairly... this is wrong, at a fundamental level. and since education is what helped you break the barriers and fly, you'd see that as a solution to break free... and then in your asr gussa style you'd just give the orders... all girls to school.

okay, there is a paternalistic streak in the man... he wants to set things right for others, sometimes without consulting them... as with khushi and that company he gives her, also all that "calm down calm down," i am older wiser air from time to time hehee how i love it... this is such an endearingly real streak in a "karta" kind of character... he becomes a tad overbearing, but always with the best of intentions... takes me back to the character he is closest to, his nani.

and underlying it, maybe a 14 year old boy's scream when all fell apart. he wants to reverse that destruction... make things ok.

the writers of characters in ipk wrote with complete and unwavering instinct. they had somewhere known such people, even op. i see bits of my grandfather hehe, father, and husband in asr...

and i so love him shouting at the prakashes and them knowing exactly what this means and respecting him anyway.