arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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Mysticaldivine

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Posted: 12 years ago

#291

I don't know I am first so what should I do...😆

Just brilliant Indi.👏👏👏... very emotional though , she is hallucinating him everywhere...

Arnav is protecting her "saath nahin tou iss ka yeh matlab nahi keh paas nahin"

Very touchy part he took her back home...

Naniji's action can cause a reaction in him and he can move as his Khushi is not eating ,or breathing properly without him...

Love the song touch though...indeed Bin tere Koi Khalish hai. hawaon mein...

Awww...nice edit...sunshine is cool...

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eAqgwl-fbHI[/YOUTUBE]

Edited by ArshiHamesha - 12 years ago

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#292

^^^ arshi, my dear,

at last you have time to hang here. thanks so much for reading and posting the song. sunshine is a gorgeous girl. she is devoted to asr... so am i, you may have noticed.

i am so grateful for your precise comment. you know you quote that hum paas nahin par saath hain... i didn't remember it consciously... but that is what i have obviously internalised thanks to the fantastic story telling of ipk. it came from within, without the prompt of that line. i literally ask myself so what will asr do in this situation or what will khsuhi do? and more often than not the answer comes on its own. that speaks of the power of ipk writers. 👏 👏 👏 and muuaaahs to them. also to the two brilliant actors who convinced us that in delhi there's this strange big house where a tycoon lives with his jhalli wife. this time in delhi, will go and look for them. 😆

in the end fan fiction really speaks of the talent of the original creators. always grateful to them.

and thanks so so so much for reading. hugs.

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wiwy

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Posted: 12 years ago

#293

How beautifully you have crafted this update, Indi ! Something as ordinary as tying a tie felt so sensuous!

Nice background touch about Op and other prakash bros and how ASR has helped them and their families esp the girls! Yes, the ASR we know is such a caring person!⭐️

Khushi not being able to make jalebis! How distressed she must have been! Nuzzling into his white shirt! Wish I could do that too!😉 I think if Star Plus had put up barun's white shirt for auction their profits would have doubled!😆

Khushi is seeing her husband everywhere! The bus sequence was really touching, Indi!

He had kept her pink purse from their first meet! I love him, dammit!❤️

12 days in the hospital 😭 bin tere...without you...emptiness...

Story is getting more and more interesting. Waiting for more to fill up my vaccum...

🤗

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Horizon

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Posted: 12 years ago

#294

Indi, just read chapter 2 and had this surreal feeling engulfing me! How did you conceptualize that swimming pool scene.. why Khushi came to Sheesh Mahal.. how she fell in in arms .. again.. only for both of them to be drowned .. so literally together in this eternal bonding!!! So different from the original .. yet these two very much under their skins.. big hug my frnd!!

With ASR's vital signs coming back.. I see that sun rise.. although it was honestly hard to read that description of his.. reminded me of a Telugu novel by a very famous writer where the female protagonist literally infuses life into the male towards the end by proclaiming her love for him.. not well received that time as being unrealistic.. but some how I have always loved to read that.. or even watch when it was made into a movie... my faith in Khushi to be able to resurrect his saansey is unwavering.. look forward to read that as I tread along!!

Great read Indi! One way I feel blessed not being able to read last few days as I can read all of them at once. Thanks for sharing your daughter's comments! Age is only a number.. you are as energetic as any teenager could be when it comes to this man.. and this story.. very glad to be here with you my frnd!

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Mysticaldivine

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Posted: 12 years ago

#295

Originally posted by: indi52
^^^ arshi, my dear,

at last you have time to hang here. thanks so much for reading and posting the song. sunshine is a gorgeous girl. she is devoted to asr... so am i, you may have noticed.

i am so grateful for your precise comment. you know you quote that hum paas nahin par saath hain... i didn't remember it consciously... but that is what i have obviously internalised thanks to the fantastic story telling of ipk. it came from within, without the prompt of that line. i literally ask myself so what will asr do in this situation or what will khsuhi do? and more often than not the answer comes on its own. that speaks of the power of ipk writers. 👏 👏 👏 and muuaaahs to them. also to the two brilliant actors who convinced us that in delhi there's this strange big house where a tycoon lives with his jhalli wife. this time in delhi, will go and look for them. 😆

in the end fan fiction really speaks of the talent of the original creators. always grateful to them.

and thanks so so so much for reading. hugs.

Thnx Indi ,yes I used to read sunshine posts everyday as a silent reader as I didn't know anyone and this is me I don't chat back and forth that much ..don't know why...lack of time is the biggest reason and may be something else ...couldn't figure out yet.

Any way "that one dialogue "Paas nahin...covers most of your update,...her feeling way too much upset ,couldn't make jalaibis, seeing him every where and feeling him and his hand...His making her feel his presence as HE IS HEARING HER WHILE IN COMA...Telepathy did not finish...right ...am thinking wrong..so correct me if I am...

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binimoti

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Posted: 12 years ago

#296

How do you maintain to write so beautifully, lovely update I loved every bit of it, hope Arnav wakes hus Khushi can't live , without him

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#297

Originally posted by: wiwy
How beautifully you have crafted this update, Indi ! Something as ordinary as tying a tie felt so sensuous!

Nice background touch about Op and other prakash bros and how ASR has helped them and their families esp the girls! Yes, the ASR we know is such a caring person!⭐️

Khushi not being able to make jalebis! How distressed she must have been! Nuzzling into his white shirt! Wish I could do that too!😉 I think if Star Plus had put up barun's white shirt for auction their profits would have doubled!😆

Khushi is seeing her husband everywhere! The bus sequence was really touching, Indi!
He had kept her pink purse from their first meet! I love him, dammit!❤️

12 days in the hospital 😭 bin tere...without you...emptiness...

Story is getting more and more interesting. Waiting for more to fill up my vaccum...

🤗

hello wiwy,

that in pink... 👏 👏 let's sell the idea to star plus and makee some moolah. but nahiiin, not for money, not for nuffin' am i selling my asr to this bedard duniya that chases trp's and lets ipk die then scrolls my bitwa's name on the screen claiming he ruined it all.

they ain't gettin' your brill white shirt idea. 😡

ok, thanks so much for detailed sweet comments... this time op drove me round the bend, he even wanted to be in the last line. i had to practically tie him up and hang him from a tree to keep him away.

are you having this problem with your characters?

seriously, i have no real finely crafted story in my head, just a general plot direction. when something comes by, i write.

always glad to see anyone is bothering to read. but, wiwy, i have to admit, i am beginning to have fun. and every reader feels precious... enjoy our little teehees after the chapter... an after party of sorts.

strange process... fiction. keep asking myself what happens when death is at the door and your dearest person is whom it seeks. then bin tere plays in the head and a girl going crazy, fighting back, and a man whose heart hears things not only his ears... does this happen? who knows? but those who are doctors often come to believe there's something other than medicine and rational modern tech that seems to be out there.

so glad you enjoyed... see you soon.

and today i come to check out that broken bed of yours. i need a good pllace for the two when he's ready to leave his cubicle. think he'll like the honeymoon special? you know, trauma they say changes people. 😆

Edited by indi52 - 12 years ago

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#298

Originally posted by: binimoti
How do you maintain to write so beautifully, lovely update I loved every bit of it, hope Arnav wakes hus Khushi can't live , without him

hi binimoti,

thanks for reading and loving it... feels lovely to read that. i promise i will take good care of him, otherwise sanaka devi might do extreme damage to me. 😳 without him... i hope never. here's to asr. see you soon.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#299

Originally posted by: Horizon
Indi, just read chapter 2 and had this surreal feeling engulfing me! How did you conceptualize that swimming pool scene.. why Khushi came to Sheesh Mahal.. how she fell in in arms .. again.. only for both of them to be drowned .. so literally together in this eternal bonding!!! So different from the original .. yet these two very much under their skins.. big hug my frnd!!

With ASR's vital signs coming back.. I see that sun rise.. although it was honestly hard to read that description of his.. reminded me of a Telugu novel by a very famous writer where the female protagonist literally infuses life into the male towards the end by proclaiming her love for him.. not well received that time as being unrealistic.. but some how I have always loved to read that.. or even watch when it was made into a movie... my faith in Khushi to be able to resurrect his saansey is unwavering.. look forward to read that as I tread along!!

Great read Indi! One way I feel blessed not being able to read last few days as I can read all of them at once. Thanks for sharing your daughter's comments! Age is only a number.. you are as energetic as any teenager could be when it comes to this man.. and this story.. very glad to be here with you my frnd!

hi horizon,

thank you, sir. surreal feeling... tell you, every time i finally sit to write a chapter it sweeps in. something about writing about asr khushi seems to need a plane other than real. at least for me.

i can't "fix" them and make them do things., rather i let them in and seek their ways... sometimes i get it, sometimes not. the writers created full characters, then the actors went and made them impossibly real... magnificent work really.

i am glad you felt the surreal thingie. how the pool? no idea. i just saw a wide blue rippling expanse of water, and an arm rising and going back in, a swimmer moving aaway from me. the scene just came. now that you mention it... yes drowned in emotions together... eternally bound.

i guess, arnav means the ocean, water... is never far from the mind.

really enjoyed your reference in red. so you believed in the premise somewhere. i don't really know what the boundaries of reality are. do we know all? is physical evidence of a phenomenon gathered carefully and examined with extreme enquiry, the only way of knowing what is or isn't? i have no idea. but i feel, there's more out there. i know those you love us try to tell us things.

satyavan savitri speaks of a wife who went to death and brought back her husband... if you wrap a thing in myth no one questions it... if you say you thought you saw it happen, they call for the straight jacket.

our paagal duniya.

thanks so much and yes this one is a teenager but of course... after all it is the boy we claim to lau,how not to be young and frantic. 😆