arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed** - Page 27

Originally posted by: DurgaS

Indi,

'Enough' here too! But of course, in a different voice. 'Baby', here too! Albeit in a different sense. 😳 Ye telepathy humko pagal karke chodega. 😆

I actually liked the first part. Quite sensuous and didn't feel uncomfy this time. 😉 So was that your writing, or am I changing 😕 ? Just joking. 😆 Of course, it was very well written, could recall few scenes from the wooing track and farmhouse at once.

I liked the name 'Chiriya wali Mandir'. Is there really such a temple in Delhi or elsewhere? The seven day fast, Khushi might think of doing that, but I don't think Arnav would like that, he's listening right? Maybe he will fight back, because Khushi would do the fast. I think I am going too fast into the story. Slowing down... 😉

Good that you are delving more into the character of Dr. Verma. But, he does recognise that there is a force, that's interesting, Nancy, nice name. Looking forward to know more about his story.

About the doctor wondering about the absence of Anjali's husband. Does he know that she was/is married? He must have met many women who were married, unmarried, divorced and probably those middle aged or elderly women who never married. So, why is he even bothered to wonder? Unless, he's already paying attention and he doesn't realise that. 😉

Very well written. As Chalhov puts it, liked the kal, aaj aur kal style of writing. Looking forward to the next one. 😊

Originally posted by: indi52

thank you... baby 😆. so glad you could sit through the morning scene... uh huh, don't blame the writing you naughty girl.

but really, it's so easy to slip into just sex when writing about the two... it's hard to find the heart of it... once you do, i guess it stops being embarrassing and starts becoming love... life.

so you like the doc... well, he is a grown man, he can possibly tell by looking at a woman whether she's been with a guy or not and also, with women anjali's age, it's quite normal to think they're married, especially in our land... so i guess that's why he wonders about her husband.

yes, there was nancy... wonder where she's now.

wonder why i give such a faraq about all these characters who don't exist.

writing okay, my poet? not too much of a drag?

Originally posted by: indi52

^^^ incandescent hi,

thank you so much for trying to give it a shot. sometimes i wonder what lunacy brought me to fan fiction, i have no idea how to do this... but that picture did it.

enough scare tactics... enough playing with all our emotions... i need to know what happens to my man and his girl should that happen. i have never been so enamoured of anything television... no obsession with any movie or actor has come even close. it's a whole new phenomenon, i don't feel like walking away and saying it didn't happen... that picture had to be dealt with... this was my way.

thanks for reading the prologue and saying you like the way i write. i am happy to see you here. please do let me know what you thought of the rest.

Originally posted by: indi52

thanks, so much, incandescent

oh i sooo wanted action in that silent waiting pool, sometimes it looked so forlorn...

kinda hot... i love that. my brief to me: sexy, hot. if that doesn't happen i am an abject utter goner in the writing department.

yes, he is still here... no amount of ugly photographs will blow him away... if a whole production house with strange tales of story running course and a behemoth channel with its colossal i don't care couldn't do it, what will a creepy picture do. they tell me he is not only breathing he is putting life back into things named after life itself. 😆 as a dear friend of mine in the forum loved to say: asr zindabad.