arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed** - Page 26

Originally posted by: mukta3112

Hi thanks for sending me the links. Caught up with both the chapters today. Fabulous writing. Wish someone makes another serial with them and incorporates these scenes

Originally posted by: supriya.arshi

Indi 😃 tht was a wondeful update ⭐️

their mornin romance...its soo adorable nd loving Khushi's passion for him 😳

" khushi was finding it hard to breathe...why must he do this to her. unfair." - this entire para...its totally unfair...made me melt...it was soo good!!!

"oh she wanted him so. how could he not know." ❤️ - who wouldn

the wish part...fasting for seven whole days ...you brought tht to make a point isn't it!!! Khushi is gonna fast for Arnav to get better!!!!!

nd abt encounter at the temple...Khushi couldn stand the fact tht...thts wat he thinks of her...she had to run behind to give him an explanation- awww...

you got in the doctor...who's eyes fell on anjali..nd wonders why her husband is nvr around...another story lined up..nice 😊

no wonder Khushi here loves his eyes so much...you r so in love with those expressive chocolatey eyes 😉

it was a beautifully written chapter...the best part has to be the startin one...early mornin romance...love your phrases nd wordings thr...⭐️👏❤️ nd entire scene was almost from Khushi's POV 👍🏼...just love your writin 👏

Originally posted by: BarunDiwani

YAY for more hotwa and more hotness!!! the opening scene was too delicious, i want breakfast on this fine sunday morning😳😉!!!! Good thing the "baby" talk is not happening in front of Nani, or else Khushi would get yelled "Chotey ka aapka baccha lagat hai jo app unhe baby baby pukarat hai"...something like that😆 also love you 2nd layer of the story at the temple...wonderfully crafted! and the third uff the miracle, thank you for this!! i have to watch this vija verma movie just so i can get your character better. its dewaar correct? your last line is too cute, that is so somthing Khushi would say...the man who cant have chocolates has chocolaty eye...for Khushi and us to feast on. Love it, your writing is something!!

btw apologies, for calling that beast a truck not the bus that it was 😊 will be waiting for that plot to unfold !!

Awesome update!!

Originally posted by: indi52

hello, isspkaur,

what is this, have you been sent by arnav ji to make me feel wonderful about myself? thank you so much for always writing eloquently and with interest on something as time pass as my fan fiction. you really are too kind.

and i love the way you write... oh yes it was a dark moment indeed. i can practically see him sitting there and churning. and no, even my asr was not a virgin... he didn't need to be. in itself virginity is no great virtue for me... man or woman. it's who you are.

anita, that was her name. but in my head she became nancy... from another culture, one we have more than enough misconceptions about. i still don't know who nancy is exactly... but she'll come along.

i am touched you like the para your quote. i was very emotional while writing it.

never thought i'd write this sort of fiction. now that i do, must say these characters pull me into thought and rush me to write.

thanks again... arnav ji has said he wants top billing and max time on the next few episodes. i tell you, handling these male, number one star egos.

Hello Indi,

I finally caught up with this story. I have a confession to make. I tried reading this quite a few times earlier, but I couldn't get myself to read it and each time I gave up after the first few lines of prologue.😳 It was the hardest thing for me to read.

This was THE dreaded moment most of us never wanted to see, could never to see. But I am tempted to read it because I have to find out what's in there. This picture still haunts me whenever I see it. This will be a much needed closure to those images, so thank you for having the courage to write this.

I love reading your posts...they are like poetry. I am very happy to see you writing a FF and whatever course this story takes, I am sure you'll do a wonderful job. 😃

I just finished the prologue. Beautifully written but it was heart wrenching. 🥺😭

I'll update my comment after I finish the chapters.

Chapter 1

Loved the flashback.

The almost kiss...now a kiss without interruptions.😃 Beautifully written. The way you described Khushi's hesitation was amazing. A part of me kept wondering if it was the unfinished diwali kiss or this kiss happened some other day.

What will the doctor say?...hope there's still chance.

Chapter 2

He's alive.😃

The flashback was again a treat. The first encounter was unique and it was wonderfully written.👏 At first I didn't understand what was happening...just like Arnav...until the bundle had sprouted arms and grasped him tightly. 😳😆 It was little funny too but it was kinda hot. Arhi in a swimming pool...hmm.☺️

While watching the show, many times I imagined what would have happened if Arhi fell into the pool. But of course that didn't happen.😳

"arnav ji," she whispered again and with her eyes still tightly closed she wished she could run to him and throw herself on his wide, warm, solid chest, feel his arms go around her so she could tell him there was no way she could bear this... she couldn't lose him... she wouldn't be able to live without...

what was that? was that a gust of wind?...a sign of his presence. He is still here.

The part where she took his hand placed it over her chest was so stirring. She wanted him to feel her heartbeat. When they are near, their hearts beat faster...their heart beats become one. Maybe his heartbeat would become steady.

I hope I am not getting too carried away. 😳

So it may not have been an accident after all. I hope Khushi can find out some answers soon.

Vitals signs...steady and strong. That's a relief.

Beautifully written. 👏

Originally posted by: incandescent

Hello Indi,

I finally caught up with this story. I have a confession to make. I tried reading this quite a few times earlier, but I couldn't get myself to read it and each time I gave up after the first few lines of prologue.😳 It was the hardest thing for me to read.

This was THE dreaded moment most of us never wanted to see, could never to see. But I am tempted to read it because I have to find out what's in there. This picture still haunts me whenever I see it. This will be a much needed closure to those images, so thank you for having the courage to write this.

I love reading your posts...they are like poetry. I am very happy to see you writing a FF and whatever course this story takes, I am sure you'll do a wonderful job. 😃

I just finished the prologue. Beautifully written but it was heart wrenching. 🥺😭

I'll update my comment after I finish the chapters.

Chapter 1

Loved the flashback.

The almost kiss...now a kiss without interruptions.😃 Beautifully written. The way you described Khushi's hesitation was amazing. A part of me kept wondering if it was the unfinished diwali kiss or this kiss happened some other day.

What will the doctor say?...hope there's still chance.

Chapter 2

He's alive.😃

The flashback was again a treat. The first encounter was unique and it was wonderfully written.👏 At first I didn't understand what was happening...just like Arnav...until the bundle had sprouted arms and grasped him tightly. 😳😆 It was little funny too but it was kinda hot. Arhi in a swimming pool...hmm.☺️

While watching the show, many times I imagined what would have happened if Arhi fell into the pool. But of course that didn't happen.😳

"arnav ji," she whispered again and with her eyes still tightly closed she wished she could run to him and throw herself on his wide, warm, solid chest, feel his arms go around her so she could tell him there was no way she could bear this... she couldn't lose him... she wouldn't be able to live without...

what was that? was that a gust of wind?...a sign of his presence. He is still here.

The part where she took his hand placed it over her chest was so stirring. She wanted him to feel her heartbeat. When they are near, their hearts beat faster...their heart beats become one. Maybe his heartbeat would become steady.

I hope I am not getting too carried away. 😳

So it may not have been an accident after all. I hope Khushi can find out some answers soon.

Vitals signs...steady and strong. That's a relief.

Beautifully written. 👏