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Posted: 12 years ago
#11
^^^ hey rashmi, thanks for coming by, he he, never written a story... no idea where it's going. just had to give that lame release of unsettling pictures a "mooh tod jawab." if it's asr and his mad love for one khushi kumari gupta singh raizada eating channe, i guess the ending has to be unexpected... also the rest of it. question is can stodgy, non fiction writer indi get it right. but, thank you all those who released those edits, now i just have to do it. hyuk.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: mukta3112

Hi nice story but sad, do continue, eager to read the next part



thanks, mukta, will do so, and try to not make you sad next update. 😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: indi52



prologue

the bus came out of nowhere. it hurtled down the narrow lane at reckless speed, weaving from side to side, a storm of dry afternoon dust in its wake, a frenzied behemoth on a rampage.

he saw it before her. there was no time to lose.

"khushi!"

why did her name always sound so different on his tongue, a need in it, an excitement, a feeling like no other, that "kh" as he exhaled and carried her name on his breath.

swiftly he moved, arm slicing the air, pushing her out of the way. she fell backward startled, winded by the force of his push. what was...

and a silence fell across the world.

before her eyes a large metal monster in blue and white raced straight toward arnav singh raizada and no, it didn't stop. it made contact with his supple, intense body and continued to move. the impact threw him up and out. she watched as his body flew, was she really seeing this, but there he was still moving in an arc through the air, the hot, blazing afternoon glare of delhi's 3 o'clock sun in june wrapping around his arched frame, unable to stop the flight.

then he fell on the hard charcoal gray asphalt, where steam rose from the surface, a shimmery layer
about six inches high, floating endlessly just above the ground... time for mirages, this heat before the rains.

but that was no mirage.

arnavji... yes, arnavji was lying there. still. he wasn't moving at all. and something dark red had just begun to flow on to the bitumen gray.

"arnavji," her breath shivered on his name, a chill she'd not known before grasping her hands, clutching her heart, freezing her thoughts. she stood up without realising she had and started to run toward him, she must reach him, she must, but what was happening, why were her legs not carrying her forward? and what was that dark red thing?

was it time for holi? and who were these people running toward her... reaching him. no no, leave him alone, she wanted to scream, i am coming, i know what he needs. he doesn't like to be touched by strangers. he is going to get very angry if he he sees this. you can't handle his gussa...

the sun grew more orange and hot white.

a desire stalked the air, what did it want. and why was he so still? and where was all sound, she couldn't hear a thing.

without you
as second anniversary approached, a series of disturbing shots of the "death" scene were suddenly all over the net. of course, it all rattled the h out of me like everyone else. and yet, a sudden desire to enter that moment i so feared... to see what was there, got me. i have started this story, no idea what you will make of it. hope to update this weekend, fingers crossed. i haven't written much fiction, but it is anniversary time and i'd like to give it a try. your honest opinion always looked forward to.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice concept i have cried while reading it please update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wow Indrani. Big fan of your writing. Silent reader of your blast from past. Very chilling, my heart stopped for a second as I was reading it but I held on to my faith that it will be fine. Things always workout for these two. They after all have Devi maiya at their side. cannot imagine these two without eachother. Thanks for sharing. P.S. I was angry when the first post i saw Monday morning was those dreadful pictures😡😡 . I hope your story will give it a different ending then what they were trying to portray. Please continue soon.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#16

I have goosebumps reading this...omg i am so looking forward to this!!
this is like closure to all those disturbing images..cz like u said they r refusing to leave me too and i am glad to get to read this!!
really waiting to know how it unfolds...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#17
hey!!

i just read this! i must say its such a bold thing to write on this being an arshi fan!!!😉

the prologue was so beautifully worded and written with emotions expressed well and clear!!!😛

my heart broke when arnav was hit😭!!! it felt so real and its of course cause the way you described it!!

it was beautiful and would love to read more!! do write and do pm me if possible!!!!😳😳

i am glad to see a writer write such a different script!!!!!👏👏


looking forward to your next update



and i am sure as you start writing you will have more and more readers!!!! all the best with your first fan fiction though with the way you have written you already seem to be an expert!!


love always
coolbakes!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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that was tough to read...but compelling, as compelling as that haunting picture. Miracles happen, and they may take time, but faith can move mountains, no? and khushi has faith, and where her arnavji is concerned her faith is deeper than the deepest ocean and higher that the sky...so who knows what may happen or what lies ahead...?
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Posted: 12 years ago
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So indi di is now a fictioal writer too 😊.

I am so glad to see your growth in many departments through

IPK.

Coming to the story I never wanted to think about

thing like this in my wildest imaginations.

Those pics are a nightmare to watch.Though Barun was

looking at his very best in the scene.

But if you come up with the idea to write about it.

Then plz go ahead.

Your writing is as beautiful as ever.

Scene description is awesome.

It brought tears in my eye and heart started to ach.

Continue it I have faith in your love for ASR.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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🤗I will b unreserving soon...bt bookmarking...😊
edited,,😭,
Indi Di...I always love your work🤗...this was so beautifully written...way ASR says khushi...and way khushi reacts on seeing Arnav... I am tempted for more...but ASR dying😭..
Do continue Di... 😃..I like the way you describe their feelings...its magical..😊
Edited by riti4u - 12 years ago

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