Ashlok FF - You've Won My Heart! (Chapter 10 updated on page 138)

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Samia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#801

Originally posted by: niki795
awesome update Sam
loved it
the needle poking is superb
nice precap
continue soon
thanks for the pm

Thanks Niki 🤗

Abt pm, did u get my pm this morning or yesterday? Apparently many people didn't when I did pm everyone yesterday. May be some technical problem with IF? 😕

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nandu_nan

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Posted: 11 years ago

#802

Oh sam finally u updated .I was waiting for ur update .and yeah it was really superb. The needle scene and the phone conversation bet swati and shlok astha feeling bad everything was awesome ...precap sounds interesting I think it s shlokor else a new guy to make shlok jealous ..?plz update the next part soon ...u r fans (i am one among ur fan)r waiting for ur update.

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ish123

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Posted: 11 years ago

#803

Hey Sam, brilliant update even though u done after some time. Plzzz do regularly :-)

Loved this chemistry building between ashlok. Superbly written.

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Nirmala

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Posted: 11 years ago

#804

⭐️Sam, ⭐️

wesome. I just all the chapters in one go. Really some great piece of writing. Love the way you are building up the story and also Shlok's feelings for Aastha. The bathroom scene, the sewing of the button etc was great.

With every chapter and update, you are getting better and better. Love it.😃

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latha_555

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Posted: 11 years ago

#805

hey sam, just came across your story, and read all 9 chapters! I am hooked...love the story and characters...

I like the way shlock did confess to his family about his love for another girl and i loved that aastha told him to fight his own battle...why should she hurt her parents for his sake when he was the one who loved someone else!!!

I love how you make him feel guilty and the first night chapter was really awesome...glad aastha took a stand. The conversation between shlock and swati was awesome...shlock really did stoop to low, and i really felt so bad for aastha and swati...he gets married and doesnt even tell her...then he flirts with her openly...but i totally enjoyed reading it...

please update soon, and if possible add me to your pm list.

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Samia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#806

Originally posted by: athmi
awesome update 👏

Thanksss 😳

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Samia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#807

Originally posted by: .Farah.
Ahmaaazzziiinnnggg! Loved this very very much! Especially the needle part 🤣
It was awesome! And precap... Woohoo 🥳
Update soon! 😳

Hehe...thank you Farah 😆 Glad u liked it 😃

Will try to update by this weekend. Sorry for the wait! 😳

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Samia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#808

Originally posted by: Aishaa3
Wow I need to cment smthng of cmparable length to Suris thesis?😲

Well u have will have a very tough competition then 😉

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Samia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#809

Originally posted by: sathuraj
Nice update dear...

Thanks dear 😃

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Samia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#810

Originally posted by: Aishaa3
He darted his eyes across the room, searching for her but she was nowhere in the room
Wow usually after waking up ppl look around for things they are habitual to...Shlok is already seraching for Astha?😉

Well in this case it's not the matter of habit. She had been occupying his thoughts lately...whether those were pleasant or unpleasant thoughts, that's arguable. Besides, lately her attitude and behaviour with him has been puzzling him as he is unable to understand the reason behind it. Wouldn't u expect the same reaction even if they are not yet habitual of it? 😊

He was unable to comprehend the cause behind his annoyance
He is as confused as I am!😆kidding...I loved how you are potraying the uneasiness of Shlok in matters related to Astha...when he shoudnt have bothered actualy!

Thanks...phew it's nice to know someone else is understanding ur thought process because in stories u sometimes can't convey the message directly 😃 Yes he is confused regarding all the matters related to Astha because of the drastic change in her attitude. So he can't help being bothered with it 😉

She was clad in a maroon chiffon saree with white crystal and beads work all over it, and off-white roses embroidered on its border which added glitter to its beauty. The saree was enhancing her slim figure, highlighting the curves of her body. It was the first time he was seeing her in a saree and a realisation was dawning on him that just how mistaken he was about Astha.
this part I was lost in the saree!😳How awwwsmly detailed!⭐️

Thanks 😳

She wasn't just attractive, she was strikingly beautiful and at the moment in the saree she was looking every bit graceful and elegant that anyone can appear
Nuthead finally saw light😆

@underlined 🤣

Shlok couldn't help throwing her a glance every once in a while😲
I doubt after they got married Shlok atleast once thought abt Swati😆

Like I said she occupies his mind pretty much all the time 😉😃

He was just a few feet away from the book when he heard a tiny click and saw the door of the washroom open. Astha came out wiping her face with a towel
You drowned my hopes here!😆I was hoping for some accidental romance😉But anyway u are really hatke...will give u some time to get there😛 The diary ahaan Asthas love nest confession😃 C'mon Shlok steal it asap n feel damn guilty...well but he couldnt🥱

Well bringing romance at this point will be too early and look unnatural. But rest assured I have started to build up towards it 😃
Oh u think it's a diary? How can u be sure? 😈

Besides, I can always find out later, he thought, his mind already scheming.
Yeah looks like instead of goin to work now Shlok is going to visit his Sasumas place😉

Could be.. 😉

"You might not be a sore loser but I am sure there is going to be something else sore tonight.🤣
wooow loved this😆Tit-for-tat Shlok you sooo deserve it! the kavya Astha part was sooo cute sweet wonderful and everything😳😳 I can totaly feel it happening!

Aww thanks 😃 That was my favourite part of this chapter 😆

Was it just I or the update was longgg?😃 It was. I made it extra long to compensate for updating after a long time

Sorry for the SUPER late unres...😊 It's ok. U compensated for it with ur long comment 😃

Woahh Its an FF now😃🥳Superb banner i guess Meerab😳 Updte part 10 sooon😛

It was starting to feel like too long a fiction to be SS. So I changed it to FF.
Yeah Meerab made the banner 😃 She surprised me with it. Got few more. Will use them for my next chapter.
Will try to update next chapter by next weekend 😊

Wow that's long comment 😲 Didn't expect this much from u...looks like u r competing with Suri 😆😆 But honestly speaking initially, before reading ur comment, I was taken aback by ur comment coz I thought they were all ur words but later I realised that u copy and pasted some of the bits from my update 😆😆

But loved reading ur thoughts. Thanks Aishu 🤗

Edited by Sam_15 - 11 years ago