O Mirzyaaa....... - A RiKara TS(Last Part: page 13; 25.11.2017) - Page 4

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Posted: 8 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: The_Inner_Voice


Faye... Oh you have me enchanted... and the first four lines are so for you ... custom made for you my Li'l Fairy... 🤗



Aapke lafzon ne kuch yun bhardi,
Waqt ke reth mein jaan;

Kuch aahen aur siskiyon se likhi,
Ik Mirzya ki daastaan.





To start with I loved the title ...
O Mirzyaaa - the cry of longing of a beloved... the song that so beautifully encompasses the emptiness of separation... a plead so filled with hope to have let one know - not all is lost.


Masking beneath the cloak of the night-
With one of the greatest heartbreaks that a human can bear- that of a mother leaving behind her babies... the ones she bore and loves to death ... knowing that they would never know her...
... I feel for the Mother


Masking beneath the cloak of the night-
Trying to hide her unfathomable love for her better half, even if it means being left with only the ashes of her desire to be understood and maybe ... loved...by him
... I feel for the Wife


Masking beneath the cloak of the night-
There is someone who has been through every imaginable strife and fought every unimaginable battle... Strong enough to let go all that define her life- the very epicenter of her being... her Omkara and their babies- if letting them go is what it takes to see them in a better place... so be it!...
... I feel for the Woman

That's what you did again Li'l Fairy- You made me feel and I so love you for that ❤️



Now for some specific mentions in the write-up...

Sometimes all you want to say is "Nothing"- little does one know that the very "Nothing" engulfs "Everything" ~
She could have lashed out accusations at her once assaulter of words, but all she says is - "Humaare paas kehne ke liye kuch tha hi nahi, kya likhte?"- Sheer beauty Faye ❤️


Sometimes all you can do is love someone unconditionally~
He has broken her so much, that sometimes the cracks glaringly gaze back through her eyes...and yet a mere realisation of what he implies as he says "I'll die bef" breaks her more than any of his words or actions could... so much, that amidst the shattering, she lungs forward to stop him midway. ❤️


Sometimes the rude voices of the past ring out so loud and alarmingly, that they deafen every hopeful whisper~
It took him a moment to lose trust in her... Now its gonna take a while to win her trust... Whoever said love was easy? Fair enough!!!❤️

Now coming to the characters... the ones I have come to love... OMKARA and GAURI
I loved the stark contrast of the characters ~

In the very cloak of darkness ~~
Omkara knows what he is holding on to... he is persistent on Gauri's presence in his life... as his life

To put it as Shakespeare did~
"It is not in the stars to hold our destiny, But in ourselves"


In that very cloak of darkness ~~

Gauri keeps swaying between holding on and letting go...her desires and uncertainties

To put it as Shakespeare did-
"To be, or not to be: that is the question.

I'll hope she finds her answers right there as he holds on to their destiny tenaciously - and we witness a love that transpire time... like the one of the folklore of a certain Sahiban and a certain Mirzya.

Thanks Faye for the WORDS ... I will be waiting for your next update... with whatever best you have decided for them... in the meanwhile all I can give back is my undying stock of Hugs



Till we meet again
❤️ n 🤗
Sneha



P.S.: There was this part in your write-up where they both spoke about how they did not want her to be another Jahnvi and their children another Omkara- that is such a deep thought there... its not mere names- Jahnvi and Omkara are hurt and pain personified. The want of being a happy family in truest sense is so deep-rooted, reflecting something that they never had as children... And that someway had me sniffle and break into a sob or two.




Love you Li'l one 🤗



Haaayyiii Sneha! Yaar, you kill me everytime with those shaayris.

The title was a cry and to symbolise how Sahiba does the very thing that is the end of both of them by breaking the arrows. Here, Gauri is doing the same because leaving her kids and husband is going to slow-poison her while her very absence will kill Omkara. But there's also the hope - marta nahi ishq o Mirza; sadiyo Sahiba rehti hai...

A mother leaving her kids willingly causes a heartbreak that can never be mended. It's not about leaving them in a better place, it about her choosing to leave with whatever is left of her self-respect and her diginity.
Thank you for feeling for every part of this Gauri.


Kabhi kabhi humaari khamoshiyan hi bohot kuch keh jaati hai, lafzo se kahi zyaada. Whatever Gauri does, she simply can't let anything happen to him. That's how crazily in love she is with him.


Omkara knows what he will be loing by letting her go while Gauri doesn't know what she will get if she decides to stay except for her kids. But sometimes just being a mother is not enough. Sometimes you need the love of your husband. I'm happy you liked this. She'll find the answer soon, because we all know how good Omkara is with words and how easily Gauri gives in to him.


Ps: Jhanvi and Omkara are my favourite characters because they encompass everything that life can do wrong to you. Because they are the messy people who somehow manage to hold on to life just because there are people who want them to. It's so nice to hear from you.
Sending you hugs back. I love, love, love your gifs. Keep those long comment coming which are an OS in themselves. *And you got the Faye part!!*

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Posted: 8 years ago
#32
This is so good.
Loved it.
I'm liking Rikara extremely nowadays.
This was just awesome.
They even had twins.
Awww. That is dream.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: par0ma

Faye, I love how you're mining the angst, this was so emotional and gut wrenching. Usually I'd say Gauri needs to walk away and save her sanity and her soul but there is the matter of the twins. Gauri seems to me that she'd be mother earth - nothing would allow her to leave her kids to their own fate, she'd fight to the death for them. In today's episode she said she put Omkara's life above all else including her pride and esteem. I think as a mom she'd put nurturing and protecting her kids above all else including her soul.

Terrific piece of writing, I can't wait to read the rest however you choose to go with it.


Thank you Paroma!


She is strong and yes she will go through everything for her children, that's the type of person Gauri is. But sometimes, it's just too much. To be asked to leave by your own husband when you are 3 months pregnant after he accuses you of infidelity, that's got to break something in you that is irreparable. She'd fight to death for them, but here she thinks her kids don't deserve a broken woman as their mother while their father hates her. She thinks of herself as Jhanvi and she knows what TejVi relation did to Omkara. I hope you get her pov. It's a bit twisted.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: enthusiastic

superb update dear
loved itt soo much...
whole part was very beautifully written
thanks alot for pm sweety
waiting for next part
pls update soon...


Thanks babe! Would love to know what to call you!

I'll post soon and will also try to send a pm.

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Posted: 8 years ago
#35

Originally posted by: Shraddhadikshit

So emotional yaar...Faye...

Missed ur stories,but this made my day...
Thanks a lot for this...& come back soon with the next...


Aww shraddha! Even I miss you guys.
I'm glad to have made your day.


I'll try to post soon. The response has been amazing so the chapter has to be on the level!


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Posted: 8 years ago
#36
@marriedlove love, love your dp. A sherlockian here. Thank you
@priyanka thank you! Hope you stay to read the next part.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#37

Originally posted by: sara1990

awesome. it must have been really difficult and tough decision for Gauri. Please update the 2nd part soon. Twins needs both their parents. Gauri should Omkie a chance to repent. Of course Gauri is really hurt and I am sure Om will heal her soon with his love


Sara! After a long, long time! Hope you are ok!
Yes, leaving your kids is hard and Gauri should give omkie a chance. But he does have to work hard for it. Itna suna deta hai bechaari ko!

I'll try to post as soon as I can. Thank you for the lovely comment.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#38

Originally posted by: iam_aheli_98

Hi Faye di, 😊
Awesome chapter! 👏 Feisty Ri. 😉 But OMG!! So much MU btw Rikara even after more than 1 year of marriage n twins that she decided to leave Om n her twin babies! 😕 😭 Om is trying that Ri doesn't leave but Ri is adamant! I hope Omkie ne kuch bohot bada kiya hai for which Ri is so hurt that she's even leaving her children behind. 😭 But Ri should return back to Omkie n Omkie should do all the hard work of mending her broken heart. 😉 Eagerly waiting to know the actual reason of their MU n then their patch up. 😳 Update soon n thanks for the pm. 😃
Okk I need to tell u something di, my 1st year honors final exam is starting from 25th of this month n will continue till the end of August. So I won't be able to visit the forums regularly, but will try to visit n comment but I can't give u a guarantee. So plzz keep sending me the pms n I'll read them as soon as I return. 😳
And if possible then plzz visit this link below n if u can then plzz help me plzz. 😔
Link:- https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/142913375
With love,
Aheli.


This takes place in a verse where Omkara gets Gauri pregnant after that spiked drink, so all the harsh words he says remain.
I explained in the other replies. Omkara accused her of infidelity after asking her to leave without her baby. So she is leaving;doing exactly what he asked her to!!!

He is an idiot, I know.

All the best for your exams! Study hard and then come back and join us for RiKara fun. Will send pms and wait for you.

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Posted: 8 years ago
#39

Originally posted by: A-Musing-Me

Faye hii.. Mirzya.. you definitely didn't have a happy ending in mind did ya.. Sahiba n mirzya .. died together .. while it is the end of their love story agreed but it is also the only way they could have ended up with each other even post death. Twisted. Legendary. So this title makes me wonder what kinda end you have in mind. Anything you give will be worth a read that me knows. So bring it on. The angst already slays as two people so connected yet so distant find reasons for their existence in each other's life. M hooked. Happy ending to wohi sahi. But m waiting to read more. Cheers!!


Hi Neha! I know, thodi zyaada hi sadistic hu mai. The title is about how sahiba/gauri are doing something that will eventually destroy mirza/omkara and herself. The breaking of the arrows and her leaving his house. Mirzya is just wow! Twisted but so very proper.

Thank you for loving this angst. Mus ka matlab angst to hoga hi.


Vaise happy ending his milega. Like bittersweet, hope you'll like it. Do you want her to go away?
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.

This is so good.

Loved it.
I'm liking Rikara extremely nowadays.
This was just awesome.
They even had twins.
Awww. That is dream.



First, welcome to our tiny corner. I hope you stay!

It's lovely to hear from you and to share the common love of RiKara.

Yeah, they have twins in this story. Hope you read the next part too and like it. Thank you for liking this enough to drop a precious comment.

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