O Mirzyaaa....... - A RiKara TS(Last Part: page 13; 25.11.2017) - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
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I need a happy ending for this. Please!
Even if the next part has a bucket full of angst, I still need this to have a happy ending
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Faye... Oh you have me enchanted... and the first four lines are so for you ... custom made for you my Li'l Fairy... 🤗



Aapke lafzon ne kuch yun bhardi,
Waqt ke reth mein jaan;

Kuch aahen aur siskiyon se likhi,
Ik Mirzya ki daastaan.





To start with I loved the title ...
O Mirzyaaa - the cry of longing of a beloved... the song that so beautifully encompasses the emptiness of separation... a plead so filled with hope to have let one know - not all is lost.


Masking beneath the cloak of the night-
With one of the greatest heartbreaks that a human can bear- that of a mother leaving behind her babies... the ones she bore and loves to death ... knowing that they would never know her...
... I feel for the Mother


Masking beneath the cloak of the night-
Trying to hide her unfathomable love for her better half, even if it means being left with only the ashes of her desire to be understood and maybe ... loved...by him
... I feel for the Wife


Masking beneath the cloak of the night-
There is someone who has been through every imaginable strife and fought every unimaginable battle... Strong enough to let go all that define her life- the very epicenter of her being... her Omkara and their babies- if letting them go is what it takes to see them in a better place... so be it!...
... I feel for the Woman

That's what you did again Li'l Fairy- You made me feel and I so love you for that ❤️



Now for some specific mentions in the write-up...

Sometimes all you want to say is "Nothing"- little does one know that the very "Nothing" engulfs "Everything" ~
She could have lashed out accusations at her once assaulter of words, but all she says is - "Humaare paas kehne ke liye kuch tha hi nahi, kya likhte?"- Sheer beauty Faye ❤️


Sometimes all you can do is love someone unconditionally~
He has broken her so much, that sometimes the cracks glaringly gaze back through her eyes...and yet a mere realisation of what he implies as he says "I'll die bef" breaks her more than any of his words or actions could... so much, that amidst the shattering, she lungs forward to stop him midway. ❤️


Sometimes the rude voices of the past ring out so loud and alarmingly, that they deafen every hopeful whisper~
It took him a moment to lose trust in her... Now its gonna take a while to win her trust... Whoever said love was easy? Fair enough!!!❤️

Now coming to the characters... the ones I have come to love... OMKARA and GAURI
I loved the stark contrast of the characters ~

In the very cloak of darkness ~~
Omkara knows what he is holding on to... he is persistent on Gauri's presence in his life... as his life

To put it as Shakespeare did~
"It is not in the stars to hold our destiny, But in ourselves"


In that very cloak of darkness ~~

Gauri keeps swaying between holding on and letting go...her desires and uncertainties

To put it as Shakespeare did-
"To be, or not to be: that is the question.

I'll hope she finds her answers right there as he holds on to their destiny tenaciously - and we witness a love that transpire time... like the one of the folklore of a certain Sahiban and a certain Mirzya.

Thanks Faye for the WORDS ... I will be waiting for your next update... with whatever best you have decided for them... in the meanwhile all I can give back is my undying stock of Hugs



Till we meet again
❤️ n 🤗
Sneha



P.S.: There was this part in your write-up where they both spoke about how they did not want her to be another Jahnvi and their children another Omkara- that is such a deep thought there... its not mere names- Jahnvi and Omkara are hurt and pain personified. The want of being a happy family in truest sense is so deep-rooted, reflecting something that they never had as children... And that someway had me sniffle and break into a sob or two.




Love you Li'l one 🤗


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Faye, I love how you're mining the angst, this was so emotional and gut wrenching. Usually I'd say Gauri needs to walk away and save her sanity and her soul but there is the matter of the twins. Gauri seems to me that she'd be mother earth - nothing would allow her to leave her kids to their own fate, she'd fight to the death for them. In today's episode she said she put Omkara's life above all else including her pride and esteem. I think as a mom she'd put nurturing and protecting her kids above all else including her soul.
Terrific piece of writing, I can't wait to read the rest however you choose to go with it.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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superb update dear
loved itt soo much...
whole part was very beautifully written
thanks alot for pm sweety
waiting for next part
pls update soon...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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So emotional yaar...Faye...
Missed ur stories,but this made my day...
Thanks a lot for this...& come back soon with the next...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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awesome story dear
thanks for pm...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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awesome. it must have been really difficult and tough decision for Gauri. Please update the 2nd part soon. Twins needs both their parents. Gauri should Omkie a chance to repent. Of course Gauri is really hurt and I am sure Om will heal her soon with his love
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vrindagupta

Awesome update

Gauri took the decision to leave
But it didn't take long
For omkara to find her

This problem between them
These MUs are killing Gauri
She loves him
But can't bear the torture

Omkara was able to break her resolve
But Gauri is adamant
She is hurting him
Hoping he will leave her

Wonder what will happen now
What decision will they take
Waiting eagerly to read more
Update soon


The MUs will be the death of us and RiKara. Thank you for understanding that Gauri is trying to hurt him even if it's a little bit. It will be Gauri's decision because Omkara doesn't get a say in it. He's done it all.

Love your feedbacks, Vrinda!


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: minamma

This is wow

Fiesty gauri
Loved it


Absolutely love your name: Minamma! (the chennai express effect!)
Thank you, welcome to this corner! Hope you stay and keep encouraging.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#20
Lovely Faye...i havent read this before...missed it...😃

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