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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: -Srushti-
Aditi...absolutely FANTABULISTIC...so awesomely written...his thoughts..his pain,,,,his haplessness in the whole coming out...wonderful yaara👏

Thanks Srush 😊 I am big fan of your writing yaar, I don't know how you come up with such brilliant post day after day, it takes a lot to write something so amazing and beautiful and you seem to never run out of things to say, I am glad I joined this forum and am able to join on your edt, I regret missing it out when the show was on but thanks to you I can atleast make up as much as I can, so big Thank you, for the daily thread yaar...it's amazing to meet so many like minded individual scattered all over the world speaking,feeling and singing the same tune...🤗

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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: kiran_trudecent
aray wah 😲 😃 res 😃

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wow wow aditi lovely letter yaar, i felt like waqai kesar has written it, superb yaar 👏 i liked the way u have mentioned kesar's pain n the way he told her about the green bangles, wow n he vl not post the letter either 😭 so heart wrenching but indeed a heart touching letter, well done aditi 🤗

Kiranwa🤗 sahi main Kesar ne hi likha hai, Kuyki mera dil aur dimag aaj kal usi ki tarah sochta hai aur bas usike baare main sochta hai😆 About bangles it had to be through letter na, he always used to say sorry through letter or through notebook na , yaa phir kisi aur ke through directly kaha bolta tha...Thanks for your lovely comments Kiran means a lot

Edited by enchanted23 - 13 years ago

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alanta

@alanta

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#13

Aditi🤗, first of all sorry for the late comments dear, I so wanted to unres the very same day...but never thought it would get delayed this much...

Coming to the letter, it was really well written, went so well with the real story, if Kesar would have not met with the accident and left for the city once leaving Gulaal still on her own decision, and ever wrote an unsent letter as usual, I am sure there is no better form for it than what u have written, excellently empathized with his feelings and thoughts and well executed👏...he being Kesar, if u have written 17 instead of 7yrs, it isnt a surprise,...u have exactly portrayed his character in this.

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I was always sure that u have the potential of quality writing, and I have always craved for a creative piece from u...and thank u so much dear, and I too agree with Mini,.please yaar, write something from Gulaal's POV too, may be of a similar sort...you can do it.👍🏼

Edited by alanta - 13 years ago

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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: alanta
Aditi🤗, first of all sorry for the late comments dear, I so wanted to unres the very same day...but never thought it would get delayed this much...
Coming to the letter, it was really well written, went so well with the real story, if Kesar would have not met with the accident and left for the city once leaving Gulaal still on her own decision, and ever wrote an unsent letter as usual, I am sure there is no better form for it than what u have written, excellently empathized with his feelings and thoughts and well executed👏...he being Kesar, if u have written 17 instead of 7yrs, it isnt a surprise,...u have exactly portrayed his character in this.
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I was always sure that u have the potential of quality writing, and I have always craved for a creative piece from u...and thank u so much dear, and I too agree with Mini,.please yaar, write something from Gulaal's POV too, may be of a similar sort...you can do it.👍🏼

Hey Alanta, return hug🤗 Thanks for lovely comments yaar, and don't worry about being late or anything We are always here na😊...Yes I wanted this letter to stay true to Kesar's character so I tried as much as possible to retain his thoughts and his views while writing it. I am so glad you liked it. I wish the wait will not be 17 years yaar...If Gulaal got her way for 7 years he should get his wish too na...in this life😳

As I replied to Mini, It's difficult to see Gulaal's point of view when you are so much immersed in Kesar and his dilemma, but I will try my best and with support I have found I might just be able to see her side as welll some day😉 Thanks for your comments yaar,much appreciated

Edited by enchanted23 - 13 years ago

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#15

Arrre!!! You have a written piece on Gulaal, and only yesterday I was thinking (in between our scene takes) that someone should convince you to start of an FF too - and here I was today, looking through old threads to find a particular post and finding this thread, instead! Of wishes that come true... 😳

So anyway - it's a simply laid out beautiful piece Aditi. I think the highlight has to be that just all those letters from Kesar we had in the show, this one too is straight from the heart and to the point. Blunt and forthcoming Kesar style 👏

It was one of the things to speculate about - if the show wasn't coming to an end as soon as it did - if Kesar might as well not have been compelled to retreat to town for a while, away from Gulaal, in honour of her wish. And on that note - isn't it interesting (I suddenly realized) that you explored this make believe version of if Kesar had gone along with Gulaal's wish and given her time out alone ... and I am currently writing that vignette which deals with the exact vice versa?! Haha! 😆

Loved reading it - and if people haven't told you already, you totally need to get on the thinking cap and weave out something longer... like a wholesome treat of an FF!

JZee

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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: JZephyr
Arrre!!! You have a written piece on Gulaal, and only yesterday I was thinking (in between our scene takes) that someone should convince you to start of an FF too - and here I was today, looking through old threads to find a particular post and finding this thread, instead! Of wishes that come true... 😳

So anyway - it's a simply laid out beautiful piece Aditi. I think the highlight has to be that just all those letters from Kesar we had in the show, this one too is straight from the heart and to the point. Blunt and forthcoming Kesar style 👏

It was one of the things to speculate about - if the show wasn't coming to an end as soon as it did - if Kesar might as well not have been compelled to retreat to town for a while, away from Gulaal, in honour of her wish. And on that note - isn't it interesting (I suddenly realized) that you explored this make believe version of if Kesar had gone along with Gulaal's wish and given her time out alone ... and I am currently writing that vignette which deals with the exact vice versa?! Haha! 😆

Loved reading it - and if people haven't told you already, you totally need to get on the thinking cap and weave out something longer... like a wholesome treat of an FF!

xx
JZee

Thanks, Jzee I did try my best not to deviate from Kesar's character as it was letter through which he always expressed himself, one had to write it from heart, no beating around bush no querying about sundries just plain simple feelings that so encompassed his being, he never could and never ever was separated from her in his mind, she was always there even when he was but a kid as his guardian (as you correctly pointed out) as his only true friend(who he could share all his thought through letters) and his nemesis(he was more distressed about her keeping Dushy's secret than Dushy being his bro's murderer)

I am glad you liked it, I am looking forward to your vignette exploring the effects of her staying away and heeding his wish, he's so going to regret what he wished for and through your writing the feelings will unquestionably come alive so please bring it on soon...

Jzee I am not sure about writing FF, I do not have creative streak like so many brilliant writers here and coming from you who 's always has edge with words, I am really humbled , all I can do is analyse something and express opinions and may be put it in laymen's terms being in IT profession that what I am good at so writing something like OS or SS is still possible but FF may be not...

And thanks a lot for your lovely comments...🤗

Edited by enchanted23 - 13 years ago

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#17

Oh come! You're being modest, and you know it! You could probably write more letters from Kesar - maybe even do some diary entries from Gulaal! There was so much scope for reading between lines and interpreting unspoken words and emotions in this show - and with your 'analyzing' streak as you call it, you would pull it off wonderfully Aditi.

Of course - only in accordance with your time and life outside of the forum. It would be great reading more of these from you =)

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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#18

I will be updating another letter tonight or tomorrow, I hope you guys like it...Please do not hesitate to point out any mistakes and comments,likes,dislikes are always welcome...

Context for this letter is few years on in the hostel say around late teens...

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Gulaal,

Vasantbha ke janamdin ki badhai, janta hu tu aaj bhi devi ma ke mandir nange pairo se chadhawa karne jarur jayegi, mera man iss sachai ko jante hue bhi usse jhuthala deta hai, kya mera shak sahi hai ya mera vishwas main kaise sach ka pata lagau, kaise Gulaal...

Yeh sach hai ke waqt ke sath sath bahut kuch badalta rehta hai ab meri pasand bhi badal ne lagi hai,Thuje yaad hai kaise main har waqt jid karke tuje apne sath le jaya karta tha jab naye kapde karidne hote the,aur sari almari ulat deta tha kuch dhoodne ke liye, ab muje aadat ho gayi hai apne pasand ke kapde kharidke pehne ne ki, per aaj bhi yeh intezaar rehta hai ki tu aake yeh almari thik kare, kuch bhi to nahi milta muje,waise kuch cheeze kabhi nahi badalti...mere yeh umeed karna bhi issi kabhi na hone wale badalav ka ek hissa hai...

Kuch din pehle ki baat hai, hum sab school se thodi dur ek bahut sunder jagah picnic ke liye gaye the,bahut din ke baad khule aam bageeche aur behta pani dekh ke dil ko ek sukoon sa mila,aisa laga jaise tu bhi yahi kahi hai,tuje mehsoos kar sakta tha,teri hasi ki goonj sun sakta tha,thuje Vasantbha ke piche dodte hue dekh sakta tha aur Vasantbha ko uss aam ke ped ke piche chupte hue dekh sakta tha,Kyu hamari duniya itni badal gayi hai Gulaal ki iss choti se khusi bhi muje itne dino ke baad mili hai,kyu har waqt tujse nafart karke bhi teri hasi ke liye taras jata hu...kyu Gulaal...

Thuje pata hai Gulaal yaha har kaam samay anusar karna padta hai,bhook lage na lage sham ko saat baje khana padta hai,agar saat baje khane pe nahi gaye to dusre din tak bas bhuke sona padta hai,tere bheje hue laddu aur namkeen mere bhaut kaam aate hai,yaha se khuch door ek talab hai aur uske kinare pe bethke main hamesha samay ki ginati bhul jata hu,Vasant bha ke baare main sochta rehta hu,talab main unhe doodne ki koshish karta rehta hu,janta hu ke woh ab kabhi nahi aayege per phir bhi dil nahi manta kya karu talab main unke sath teri tasveer jo dikh jati hai aur gusse main aaakar pathar se usse mitane ki koshish main lag jata hu, kya sach hai Gulaal,kyu Vasntbha hamare sath nahi hai kyu...

Kal MB ka khat padhke dod ke waha aane ka man kar raha tha,main bahut khush hu ki Devadi ki shaadi ho rahi hai,bhagwaan kare usse duniya ki saari khushi naseeb ho aur woh hamesha khush rahe,main phir bhi nahi aauga Gulaal, aur iss ki wajah sirf tu hai,aur teri bewafai Vasant bha ke liye,kaise jhuthlay woh baate jo maine suni thi,kaise karu kissi pe yakin ,kaise lu maan ke tu,ke tu kuch chupa sakti apne Kesar se...kaise Gulaal...kyu Gulaal...

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Ok guys here's my second attempt to see Kesar's(can't seem to think from anyone else pov sorry)dilemma when he was in hostel,please please let me know of any errors,will help in correcting future letters😉

Edited by enchanted23 - 13 years ago

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alanta

@alanta

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#19

This was really touching... excellently exhibited Kesar's probable thoughts through this one...the dynamics in his and the way in his letters that were brought out by the show through his voice modulation while reading the letters, have brought out by u here through your writing skills..👏..you are outstandingly talented dear👏 and that u have proven in the last para through portraying his helplessness of not being able to hate her, nor part himself from her...Brilliant👏

Hope u will come up with another one soon.😊

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MR21

@MR21

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

#20

Aditi...me waiting now 😍

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Aditi 🤗...you made me very emotional yaar 😭

Ithna achcha kaise likh sakthi hai yaar...this is too good... loved the way he accepted that some things are changing with time but still he is waiting for some things to continue...ohhh that picnic part was very good...how he stated that he hated her all the time but still wants to hear her laugh...throwing stones in the pond is his trade mark...n the last bit blaming her for not returning to the house...n the last word kyun gulaal 😭

Aditi...this is amazing yaar 👏...waiting for the next letter 😍

Me missing this show like anything 😭

Edited by MR21 - 13 years ago