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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#71

Originally posted by: nneeiill
Jzee,
wow absolutely brilliant..each and every image was flashing in front of me while reading and the above posted lines is what i loved most.

Thank you Nithya! 😳 I'm glad you enjoyed reading... although its never possible to chose one scene as a favorite between GK - their first episode after his return was so well shot, i never get tired of that first coin toss, and this first aur tu scene! Just maybe I will follow up with the remaining 'aur tu' scenes, cause each one is so awesome! ☺️

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#72

Originally posted by: bioinfo
finally therez an update*sigh*
i nearly mugged up the previous posts😆
thanks JZee, its brilliant👏loved each and every word⭐️
pls update the next part soon😳

LOL @ you mugging up! Since I do these the drabbles pretty randomly, in no chronology of inter-link with each other, I tend to lapse more than usual... but as I said to Nithya, I'm going to try and do all the aur tu scenes, because I like each one of them so much! Let's see how that works out...

In the meantime, I'm glad you liked this one 😳

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chweetu

@chweetu

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+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#73

I love love love ur insight into kesar emotions Jzee..👏👏..but I have to confess d first few paragraphs are above my understanding level..I have to read them twice to understand..🤔...thats y I afraid to comment on ur posts...but loved it Jzee...😳

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#74

Originally posted by: chweetu
I love love love ur insight into kesar emotions Jzee..👏👏..but I have to confess d first few paragraphs are above my understanding level..I have to read them twice to understand..🤔...thats y I afraid to comment on ur posts...but loved it Jzee...😳

Thanks Siree - you're very nice to say all that! But on a more important note, please feel free to ask anything that sounds warped or complicated, or just plainly vague - I will be more than happy to explain the best I can. 😊 I'd be disappointed if the reason I don't hear back from you is because the writing wasn't explicit enough - so you have to comment and gime the chance to explain, okay?! 😊

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chweetu

@chweetu

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+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#75

Originally posted by: JZephyr

Thanks Siree - you're very nice to say all that! But on a more important note, please feel free to ask anything that sounds warped or complicated, or just plainly vague - I will be more than happy to explain the best I can. 😊 I'd be disappointed if the reason I don't hear back from you is because the writing wasn't explicit enough - so you have to comment and gime the chance to explain, okay?! 😊

Ur welcome Jzee...🤗..n yeah sure...from now on I will definitely comment and I will ask u..if there exist any difficulty for me to understand...😳😃
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@ShellJA

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#76

Marking this post to read later when I have more time.

Looks delicious!

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Incense

@Incense

Sparkler

Posted: 14 years ago

#77

omg omg omg finally u wrote ! superexited

res😛😳

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Piu Chatterjee

@Transference

Stunner

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Posted: 14 years ago

#78

I walked into my room, and the first sight of it in ten years stalled me in my tracks'it looked like a portrait of a space that had stood still, untouched by the sly maneuovers of time.

Oh yes Jzee the room looked unaffected by the trials and tribulations of time and brought back thousands of memories before his eyes...OH lovely ..it is beautifully put forward...What an idea..👏

I. Some things neverchange'

And yet,some things had.

Oh yes She was the same gulaal..but Kesar viewed her in a new light...Oh Jzee How come you write such meaningful and awesome stuff.😲..Do you really feel that you need to make me more crazy😆...BElieve me I am your craziest pankha.🤗..Bole to now I want more FD's wo bhi jaldi jaldi😳

Her business. My business' when had they ceased to be one and the same?

Sad but true...KG who were always meant to be together..were forced to live miles apart...by a cruel truth revealed by destiny...

Did she have an inkling of how those words cut me open?MyGulaal would have known. I'm not sure I can trustthisone. Mentally, I lodged myself between the discomfiting prospects of fightingher, and fightingher pull. A tight line to walk, if ever there was one.

Oh Jzee I am so missing this angry and confused Kesar..who was clueless about why he is being pulled towards her..Why he was not able to hate her...

@bold...Oh I simply loved those lines...

Aur tu? Tu muje yaad karti thi?

This was classic Kesar dialogue na...It was always GULAAL for him..not even Dushy being the murderer...I remember the confrontation scene...he was so upset that she in fact kept away the secret..from him..his KESAR for 10 yrs...Awww It has always been about His Gulaal...

And then she turned around. The sulking girl was a woman once again. Smiling,patronizing,she ruffled my hair, called me silly -how could she not miss me?!My adoring trance grew wary again, and even as the side of my eye went to her hand on my shoulder, my mind sought to get together the cold act back in place. And that's when she said,agar tuje yaad nahin karti, to Vasant aa jata, teri yaad dilane' jimedaari jo gaya tha saup kar!

Oh jzee I was always fascinated by the way CV's handled the KG relationship...I remember Gulaal..cuddling...hugging Choyu kesu...fondly...But now she just ruffled his hair...and I loved the small eye play of kesu with this gesture...You've described it so beautifully...Awesome⭐️

Ia m just so looking forward to many more FD's can't wait.😍.this was so beautifully described.👏Itna acha kaise likhte ho...Ise kya review karun😲..it is just awesome⭐️

👏..Oh yes..one request...i WANT YOU TO DO.. more scenes which are my kinda favourate...

1.the rain confession scene from Kesar's POV

2.the drunk Kesu barging in gullu's room..and saying..tu meri pareshaani hai

3.And the terrace scene where K esar accidentally hugs Gulaal..while chasing Talli

Oh Jzee...I am your craziest pankha🤗...Want more FD's ASAP//😛

Or Do you want me sadao..your meaningful thread..with my Ghatiya shayari...SO BEWARE😆

Fd ka silsila nahi karna close

varna dungi ghatiya shayari ka overdose

look it is up to you to choose

jaldi next FD..lao..varna..uda dungi tera fuse..🤣

Sorry everyone..I have only this hathiyaar to poke Jzee to give us the pleasure of reading her FD's...bole to this is piu isshhhtyle😉

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#79

@Siree - now that's my girl! 😃

@Arti and Shelly - will look forward to reviews from your both 😳

@Savz - Thank you!!!

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#80

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

Piyu 🤗 That comment made me smile so much - just when I was beginning to get all Kesar-like grumpy and mad about the new piece of article on GK! Thank you so much to totally change my mood - and can I say its ever my pleasure to write anything about GK?! It takes more daring on my part, because their standard from the show is just so so hard to match up, but this is one of my favorite-est scenes ever, as I've been saying and I started it a while ago, but everytime i got back to it - I could only do a few lines at a time... this morning i just had an impulse and scraped the old draft and did it afresh in one go - so thankfully it sounds more coherent than the old draft did! Why I'm telling you this? Well I realized sometimes that's what one needs to do. Tear off the old chapter without giving it one final look and that start new on a blank fresh page. You never realize how much more you were struggling with making the old one perfect till you start brand new! - and somehow, I realized, after reading your comment which fizzled out my mad moment at the article - that GK have been trying so hard to make it work, make it right, survive together against the world... maybe all they need is to write off this old chapter, close it, or tear it off, and start from ground level - where there is no hope... no expectation... perhaps that is so consequential to to things finally falling in place after all!

Okay - enough of my rambles. i just want to say I was going to go all ballistic and make one mad post about the new turn, then I read your comment and cooled down, and it occurred to me as fair enough that they should part ways for good before getting together once and for all - yes, I dread the family drama we will get, but as long as it justifies GK the best way!

Thank you for the comment - and yes, for the sher too! you need to quite calling your rhymes crap - because I'm always amazed at how much you can rhyme! 😆