A Stone's Throw Away - *complete* Pg 14 - 02/01

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prachurya

@prachurya

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Posted: 14 years ago

#51

I really respect u a lot for your writings. I mean hats off 2 u for such a beautiful writing. I just have no words to describe how awesome it was and I loved the concept

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#52

Psst Shalu, being wordless! Thanks anyway 😆

Originally posted by: Gman
Jzephyr, its really beautiful well written and enjoyed reading very much. You are very good at writing.

I pretty amazed with your talent to connecting bangles forcefully broken at ritual of vasant deaths with reconstruction of Kaleidoscope. I loved this part. How she treasured this bangles and how Kesar beautifully reconstructed into her childhood beloved toy.

Honestly, I did not understand most of bits but did somehow to get conclusion probably through last line. Your writing is above my par of understanding, of very high standards.

Can I ask you what Kaleidoscope represent in this OS?

I will read everyones comments to understand better of your OS.
Thanks for sharing your OS with us.😊

So I'm not sure, exactly what parts confused you G, but I'll try to give a more explicit overall idea of what I was trying? To me Kaleidoscopes can be metaphorical to several concepts - essentially being optical devices, they operate primarily with the presence of light, even the merest, because the inside mirror construction of them facilitates amplification of same through multiple reflection and refraction stages. So when I talk of the object coming to life when re-exposed to light, its literal, as well as figurative of the way Gulaal was back to being her old self when set free from her self imposed shackles, for a day.

Again, construction wise, a Kaleidoscope, the ones made from fragments of bangles, are curious devices that can use a bunch of total crap and build illusions of beautiful geometry. In operation, a single Kaleidoscope is capable of showcasing several patterns, using the same pieces of bangles. [the same is not true about Kaleidoscopes which use graphic patterns, but i'm not referring to those] So to me, in a way, it connects with the way both Kesar and Vasant are progeny of the same home, but different in how they may appear. Consubstantial, if they were objects not humans, and hence correlated, but very different like the patterns formed in a single Kaleidoscope.

The overlapping patterns of a Kaleidoscope I used to figuratively define how the past and present of a person's life co-exists, even overlaps, but should not interfere with he brilliance of one phase or the other.

Finally - the idea of using broken bangles which are hence waste, to recreate something which may not be put to same use, but is brilliant in its own way nonetheless is symbolic of reconstructing a broken dream...

Because to Gulaal - those broken bangles are symbolic of her shattered past.

I hope that helps? I know my imagination runs out of bounds with symbolism here, lol, but I've always had a fascination for Kaleidoscopes... there's no dearth of ways they can be employed for figurative hints in writing, or so I think!

Thanks for reading, and even more for raising your doubts - it makes me very happy as a writer to know you as a reader actually care about understanding every little thing I'm trying to project and not just walk away with the convenient gist! 😳

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: prachurya
I really respect u a lot for your writings. I mean hats off 2 u for such a beautiful writing. I just have no words to describe how awesome it was and I loved the concept

Thanks Prachurya! I really appreciate you to stick around with the thread and read my drabbles! And am all the more glad you liked this concept since it's not altogether straight out of the show (:

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Anjalg

@Anjalg

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Posted: 14 years ago

#54

Oh wow!! Jzee...that is beautiful!!!!! Going back to read it again...seriously..that is an amazing piece!! 👏

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Bioinfo_Chaitu

@Bioinfo_Chaitu

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Posted: 14 years ago

#55

wow, is the word for this...

keep up...

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Ganga

@Avatarana09

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Posted: 14 years ago

#56

I leave it reserved since I am too overwhelmed reading the last one especially. I have no words to express how it felt reading these. Somewhere the Kaleidoscope strikes a cord within oneself.

So JZee, later for the day.

Yaar, you made me emotional and I HATE TEARS...

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Incense

@Incense

Sparkler

Posted: 14 years ago

#57

jzee u r genius my eyes are wet after reading this...hats off jzee !

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Swetha

@Swetha-Sai

Achiever

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Posted: 14 years ago

#58

JZee dear😳...u have written it really well👏

ur a gifted writer according to me👏😳

thanks for the PM😳... else i would have nvr got to know abt this post of urs..😔

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: Anjalg
Oh wow!! Jzee...that is beautiful!!!!! Going back to read it again...seriously..that is an amazing piece!! 👏

Originally posted by: bioinfo
wow, is the word for this...
keep up...

Anjali and bioinfo - I'm glad you guys enjoyed reading it, because I had fun doing this piece! Thanks for dropping by (:

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: MeySimi
I leave it reserved since I am too overwhelmed reading the last one especially. I have no words to express how it felt reading these. Somewhere the Kaleidoscope strikes a cord within oneself.

So JZee, later for the day.

Yaar, you made me emotional and I HATE TEARS...

Ganga 🤗 Welcome to the thread, and I shall eagerly look forward to greater critique from you, as and when you can sit at it! I'm sorry about the tears - but can I (not so) secretly confess my penchant to write... let's say, angst evoking pieces? Lol! I know it sounds sadistic, but tragedy truly is the more profound of circumstances!