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divya22

@divya22

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#11

Now it was sad... n heart wrenching...

i was in a happy mood so thought of reading some new os n look nw...

nw this stiry will revolve in my mind for rest of d day. .

u r a goid writer dear.. u depict emotions very well..

try something with emotional bt happy stories..

gud work

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JaasChowdhray

@JaasChowdhray

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Posted: 10 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: khwaishfan
emotional sad OS! beautifully written! They were friends n fell in love! she disappeared n came back! Maan also suffered with his problems! Bt she had blood cancer! he came 2 know too late! she died! she was his everything! Epilogue please

Thank you for reading and liking the story dear! I may give epilogue to this but much later.

Originally posted by: .snowdrop.
very emotional...

😊 Thank you!

Originally posted by: chiki143
U have made me cry 😭 . It was so touchy... 😭

Awww I am so sorry dear..cheer up will ya. There is lot more Happy note OSs are yet to come. Thank you for reading and liking the story dear!

Originally posted by: nanor
simply amazing loved it

😊 Thank you.

Originally posted by: Parimishty
😭
Such a emotional ud..
Geet so lively..so selfless..
Pta nahi y god do this to all the nice & selfless persons..
She went thru all d pain of chemoes all alone..
Maaneet..childhood frnzzz..lover..life partner..
Beautifully written...

Awww don't be sad dear. its just a story but yeah I cried a lot too while reading it again. Thank you for Reading and liking the story dear!

Originally posted by: Geetdrashti
nice os

😊 Thank you!

Originally posted by: Madhuri53
emotional os
beautifully written
she died of blood cancer
but she never disclosed anything to him
what time she had left would have spent happily with him

Thank you for reading and liking the story dear! She thought it will hurt him more by seeing her suffer in pain so she did what was necessary and right according to her.

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nehakapoor7

@nehakapoor7

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#13

OMG.. its really painful... m very much crying... maan geet was together since they were children... but now she has gone...

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JaasChowdhray

@JaasChowdhray

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: spoorthi28
No I didn't cry!
But to be honest enough there is something in the flow of words... that I can see.. there is a lot more to come from you!

N I would be waiting for that one master piece😊

Thanks for the beautiful story!

😆 I knew it someone might make me to challenge myself. Thank you for being honest about the story dear. I will try to make you cry with my next OS, I hope so.😳 I am still raw around the edges when it comes to depict the emotions via story. Thank you for reading and liking the story dear! 😊

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JaasChowdhray

@JaasChowdhray

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: divya22
Now it was sad... n heart wrenching...
i was in a happy mood so thought of reading some new os n look nw...
nw this stiry will revolve in my mind for rest of d day. .
u r a goid writer dear.. u depict emotions very well..
try something with emotional bt happy stories..
gud work

Awww I am so sorry it made you sad. I am a new writer on IF and this is my second OS. To cheer up your mood I suggest you to check my other works if you like. link is below in my signature. Thank you for reading and liking the story dear!

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JaasChowdhray

@JaasChowdhray

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Posted: 10 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: BrainEaterOwl
Heart wrenching story.

I really like how you showed the story from the very start. From their childhood to growing up days. They were in contact even when Geet went to London. But everything changed with Geet's disappearance.

If Geet suffered cos of cancer then Maan too did. He lost his family and then there were this sudden appearance and disappearance from Geet which would keep any person on the edge.

But I felt Geet selfish to be honest. Cos she dint realize what type of pain it must have caused Maan or her family with her sudde appearance and then she goes without even informing anyone for months together. Still Maan loved her selflessly till the end and dint complained for once. That made me feel a hell lot for him. Strangely I felt for Maan more than Geet and its cos the story is been narrated by Maan.

Your writing style is really good. I loved it.

-Sanjana!

Hi Sanjana,

First of all I like your name. I have seen you commenting on other threads. Its a pure joy to read such a long & detailed comment.

Coming to the story, I agree with the point geet being selfish but think from her point of view. She did whatever she thought right and necessary to avoid maan getting hurt by seeing her suffer in

pain day by day. She knew that It will hurt him more than her sickness later. She tried to stay away from each one of those she loved to spare them from heartbreak but circumstances always brought her back to him.

I dont blame u for feeling for maan as this story is from his pov. If I were in geet's position maybe I

would have done the same. for example i am very good at hiding my hurt/pain from others coz I feel its only meant for me. I always will have this soft corner for subtle maan, maybe in my next OS i will try to justify both maan & geet.

Thank you for reading and liking the story dear! I am glad u find my writing style is good enough to read worthy.

Jhaanvi

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Manjeet Kaur

@manjeet6

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#17

Beautiful os
Loved it U written very Beautifuly jo directly dil ko chhu gaya
Me abhi bhi crying

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priya

@priya111111

Stunner

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#18

missing rosie. we both just interacted 1 month before her demise. in that one month we have spoken a lot. really missing her😭 and this os made more emotional. 😭

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no name

@Endgame

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#19

so emotional heart wrenching story their childhood masti to grow up together n falling in love awesomely written last scene was very painfull maan didnt want to let her go but he had to do this because she wanted this but i think she should tell them about her cancer atleast she could spent her last few days with her loved ones but she is also right in her place she doesnt want to give them pain but maan atleast can make more momeries with her loved the story