MG OS || RIPPLES IN A POND || - Complete - 15th April 2015

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|| Ripples In A Pond ||

|| Author's Note ||

Hello Readers

Ripples in a pond, is my second one shot on my favorite onscreen couple Maaneet. I dedicate this story to my beloved sister like friend Rosie. She is no more today between us but she always lives in my memories forever. I have very good memories with her and the best ones are the time I spent with her watching GEET. I really miss her so much. Hope you all will like this story even if it makes you cry, I apologize in beforehand. Keep a tissue box ready beside you for safer side coz I don't know about others but I cried like anything while typing this.

Ignore mistakes and press like button and please leave your comments.

Thank you

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Jhaanvi

This is a story of my life. No it is just not my story, it's our life story, I Maan Singh Khurana and Geet Handa's story. How do I start this story? What can I say about you? Why did you have to go so soon? Your serine smile and that mischievousness, and how you made my world light up with your smile not only mine but the whole world light up with your amazing laugh. I smile when I remember. But let me start at the beginning. We were eleven years old, and we had just started high school. You came into the classroom, looking so serious and only sat next to me because you couldn't find a seat. We looked at each other. We were so different, you were clever and popular, I was shy and quiet. It took us a while to understand our humor and ways, but we did. Oh how we did, we laughed and went to the park, we played jokes and giggled for hours. For six whole years we stuck together like glue until the time came for us to leave for college.

I found a part time job straight away, in an office near my home. Starting work on the first day, I walked in, and there you were! You had got the job as well! I remember the look on your face when I walked in; it was so funny I wanted to take a picture. So there we were, starting our new lives but still together.

At seventeen we decided we were old enough to go to the pubs. We weren't supposed to, so we made up so many stories to convince our parents that we were at Pinky Pandey's house for combined studies. How we laughed. We started dating at the same time, going to clubs and meetings, along with our other new friends Aditya and Pinky. I remember those days through a haze of rose colored memories. Laughing, dancing, meeting loads of girls, boys and discovering how it was to be a young adult.

I remember the first time that I cried with laughter so much I couldn't stand. I had arranged to meet you in the pub and you were late. The music was playing, we were all dancing. Then suddenly we could hear above the sound of the music, clip clop clip clip bang! Then the whole pub was echoing with your laughter. It reverberated around the room, and everybody stopped what they were doing and looked towards the door. There you were, on the floor in your high platform heels, screaming with laughter because you had tripped up on the way in. No, you hadn't had a drink. You didn't need one to laugh like that. I remember looking around at the other customers. They were laughing. but not at you, with you. I started to laugh and I laughed and laughed until I cried.

Over the next few years the four of us went everywhere together. We had so much fun, but in the midst of all the dancing and music, there was you with your laughter. We said it sounded like a hyena! That made you laugh even more. And clumsy! You would breeze into the club, yelling hello to everyone, and swing your handbag around on your shoulder, and whoomp! You knocked over everybody's drink on the table. They got so used to it that they moved their drinks when you walked in! Ha Ha. Oh and that time when you rushed into the ladies bathroom to get to the toilet, and you suddenly shot back out and fell to the floor! I stood in amazement as you burst into laughter again. What had you done? You had caught your sleeve on the door handle and it had pulled you out of the door! We four laughed so much we had to go in separate directions! The pain of laughing was too much!

I joined engineering at Delhi, and so did you at Bangalore. We still saw each other. Do you remember the time when you fell asleep in your car along with your other friend outside your hostel, what was her name haa sameera, and woke up 10 miles away, because your car had been towed onto a traffic police lorry? You had both drank so much that night you didn't even wake up! But you told the story so well; I fell about laughing for a week. And that was your talent. Your's so special talent.

Not just the funny things that you did, but the way you told the story. Clumsy, jolly full of laughter, you.

Another 10 years passed and you moved to London, but I always knew when you were coming back. Oh, I didn't need the phone to tell me. I just knew.

So many times I would phone you at your mother's house when you had only just walked in the door. 'How did you know I just got off the plane?' you would say. I would just smile and say, 'Don't be stupid, you know how I knew' And she did. It was uncanny. But she accepted my telepathic ways, and thought they were funny. You moved back to London and we started on the pub circuit again. By now we were in our late twenties. And then one day you just disappeared without a word. Just like that.

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The pebble dropped in the pond.

It's been a year since you disappeared into thin air. Even your family didn't know where you are and what happened to you suddenly. I searched a lot for you; there is not even single source left I wouldn't have used to find you. And I even went your house every day in this hope to hear that you are back but there was nothing. I didn't lose hope and kept searching for you until one day I received a letter. Just a line nothing else, Please come and get me and address. It was a address of some farm house which was located in outskirts of delhi. How come I didn't think about this before?

So I got into my car and drove to the address you left. When I reached there you were sitting with your dog and suite case. You looked different but I don't want to ask you anything.. so I grabbed your case, your dog and you.

I took you home. I believe if you spend time with family for some time you will be fine and gets normal. But that's the biggest mistake of my life, Next day when I came to meet you with your favorite flowers but you were gone again without a word.

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One ripple in the pond.

I never saw you for another 6 months. You never came. I heard you kept in touch with pinky and that you are doing fine and safe. Then one day you turned up at my door. The laughter was still there, but there was an edge to you. It frightened me. You were hard. Mentally and physically. But the girl I knew and loved was still there. I should have done something; I should have got you away. But I was afraid. I had my own nightmares. My mother had committed suicide, and my dad killed himself after killing my sister. I was broken emotionally and couldn't help you.

You just came and hugged me crying. I let you cry but you cried for hours and I was helpless to make you stop from crying. I can't let you slip through my hands this time. I confessed my love for you and said I could die you ever try to leave me. But you silenced me with a longing kiss reciprocating my feelings. I was over the moon finally able to express my undying love. That day we became one as a mind, body and soul. Next morning when I woke up on my bed alone, you were gone. Again you left me alone without a word or two. It frustrates me for not knowing what it is making you to disappear again and again. I know you have your reasons but now my life is linked with you. How could you leave me like this?

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Two ripples in the pond..

Three months passed and I never saw you and you neither called me. I even came to your house but aunty said you don't live with them. I tried to locate you with pinky's help this time but pinky also isn't aware of your whereabouts. And then I heard this terrible news about your father passing away. I saw you at the funeral from far. You have lost weight and looked thin but still you were most beautiful girl I even seen. All of a sudden you collapsed when I confronted you. My hands shook as I was waiting outside for doctor to come and tell that you are perfectly fine. I waited and waited for hours to get your one glimpse but that time never come. I heard you have left the hospital long back. I took the phone and called your home. I was heartbroken to know that you are not yet back, But deep in the back of my mind I knew you again left without saying anything. I just knew it.

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Three ripples in the pond.

Another 7 months passed there was no news from you. And then one day I got a call from your brother brij to come over to your home immediately. When I reached your house, it was a mess. I couldn't handle seeing your mother crying like this. She was truly broken and longed for her daughter. Who could? I started to keep in touch with your mum, tried to phone you. But your phone always kept ringing but you never picked up. I got through once. You didn't sound like you. You were shattered. Your voice coming very weakly. I begged you to come back to me..I threatened you with my life...but you were so adamant. I put the phone down after speaking to you, and I was shaking with crying.

Another month passed away waiting searching for you. Then one day I got a call from your brother brij that You ended up in hospital. No, you would be fine, they said. But I didn't understand what was wrong. I thought it was your mind. But it wasn't. It was your body.

I hated hospitals. Not just the smells, but the sounds. The moans and groans, the efficient swish of nurse's Uniforms, but now what he really hated was the blip-blip sound he Heard coming from geet's room.

Today was the day. The doctor told him earlier. There was no hope.

He sighed and heaved trying to delay the confrontation as long as possible, he stood in the hallway and thought fondly of Geet, his Geet still a child at heart, innocent, trusting and disarmingly beautiful. Most selfless person he ever met.

Maan steeled himself and slowly walked in the room and watches her sleeping on bed with all the equipments attached to her fragile body making beep sounds. She looked so thin and small. My poor geet went through this hell of treatments all alone. How much pain she went through all this along? Why god why? Why do you have to do this to my geet, why her? She didn't even know what was coming.

Maan had been in hospital for weeks, silently holding her hand, absently stroking her palm. She looked alive, maan had to admit that.

The doctor told him there was no hope. The blood cancer is in its last stage. They have tried many chemotherapies but it never got succeeded. Every time the cancer bounces back.

"Maan" Brij called maan handing over a cup of water.

"How can she still be so beautiful?" maan asked him without looking at him, " Even with all she's been through."

A nurse came in then, checked geet's monitors and gave maan a sympatric look before she left.

Brij took a deep breath. "Maan you know geet is..always fun loving and making others happy with her chattering..She will die before see her loved ones cry for coz of her and heartbroken"

Maan didn't look up, but just stared at geet. " I know..I know and I failed to understand her silence.. failed to be a friend and companion to her..How I failed to take her sufferings and pain." He said softly.

Brij just patted on his back not knowing how to console him or himself or his mother.

He at gee, she looked so peaceful. No hair, the chemo took it. But she had pink in her cheeks, and she was so lovely still, so angelic.

He took her hand in both of his, and thought they must be wrong. For the hundredth time, he thought they were wrong.

The doctor came in five minutes later. He nodded to brij and, after hesitating for seconds, he said to maan.

"Mr.Khurana its time"

Maan looked at doctor blankly. He doesn't want to let go of her hand. How could he? He wanted to shout beg scream and cry to her to wake up for one last time but her brain activity is dead. Doctor has declared her as clinically dead but still maan fought with everyone for not to do this. But she can never wake up from this sleep ever, keeping her on life support only adds up to her misery. It's her last wish too. And maan can never deny or question her anything. Maan hugs her and kisses on her temple one last time. His tears dropped on her pale face non-stop. "I will meet you soon geet but I will wait till my time comes" Maan nodes for a yes and doctor slowly unhooked the bleeping Machines and airway tube from geet.

Silence in the room was deafening. She took one shaky wheeze before her breathing stopped without oxygen.

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Four ripples in a pond.

What starts as a small pebble falling into the water, will cause ripples to grow and grow until they cascade outwards into chaos. I will never see her again. I loved her.

Geet, she was my best friend, my companion, my lover and my life. Heaven will a happier place with the sound of her laughter.

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Please read the note above this post.

Let me know if you want an epilogue for this OS. Its all depends on likes and comments

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Posted: 10 years ago
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emotional sad OS! beautifully written! They were friends n fell in love! she disappeared n came back! Maan also suffered with his problems! Bt she had blood cancer! he came 2 know too late! she died! she was his everything! Epilogue please
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Such a heart wrenching piece...
Was Geet's cancer the reason of her repeated absences in Maan's and her family's lives??
Maan loved her a lot...
Its a beautifully tragic tale of 2 broken souls that seared my heart.
Your writing style is unique and different...
Do write more... :-) :-) :-)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: pearl.white

Such a heart wrenching piece...
Was Geet's cancer the reason of her repeated absences in Maan's and her family's lives??
Maan loved her a lot...
Its a beautifully tragic tale of 2 broken souls that seared my heart.
Your writing style is unique and different...
Do write more... :-) :-) :-)


Hi Thank you 😊

I cried writing it remembering my friend's last minutes.
yes the reason behind geet repeated absences is cancer. she was detected very last stage and she had to leave without informing anyone as it gives only pain to her family and friends.
I don;t know about others..but i love writing sad stories...coz I cry along with the story ..
thank you ...I write until my heart feels content...writing is one thing keeps me steady and stable.

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Posted: 10 years ago
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U have made me cry 😭 . It was so touchy... 😭
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emotional sad os.. they are friends fell in love with each other.. she was suffering from blood cancer.. painful os
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No I didn't cry!
But to be honest enough there is something in the flow of words... that I can see.. there is a lot more to come from you!

N I would be waiting for that one master piece😊

Thanks for the beautiful story!
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Such a emotional ud..
Geet so lively..so selfless..
Pta nahi y god do this to all the nice & selfless persons..
She went thru all d pain of chemoes all alone..
Maaneet..childhood frnzzz..lover..life partner..
Beautifully written...
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Heart wrenching story.

I really like how you showed the story from the very start. From their childhood to growing up days. They were in contact even when Geet went to London. But everything changed with Geet's disappearance.

If Geet suffered cos of cancer then Maan too did. He lost his family and then there were this sudden appearance and disappearance from Geet which would keep any person on the edge.

But I felt Geet selfish to be honest. Cos she dint realize what type of pain it must have caused Maan or her family with her sudde appearance and then she goes without even informing anyone for months together. Still Maan loved her selflessly till the end and dint complained for once. That made me feel a hell lot for him. Strangely I felt for Maan more than Geet and its not cos the story is been narrated by Maan. I strangely feel I would have felt for him more had the story being narrated by Geet.

Your writing style is really good. I loved it.




edit-typo and to add one extra line.


-Sanjana!
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emotional os
beautifully written
she died of blood cancer
but she never disclosed anything to him
what time she had left would have spent happily with him

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