Dil Chahta Hai # 2 updated part 14 on pg: 40 ON HOLD note pg 46 - Page 12

Originally posted by: goldenmoon

no you are not bothering us...actually your post made us feel that there is still some reader who is waiting ...even after such a long break...your waiting post really encourage us...😊

n khawish dona is very soon gonna gv u suprises ... so stay tuned 😉

Originally posted by: arunima.

n khawish dona is very soon gonna gv u suprises ... so stay tuned 😉

oye aru

Originally posted by: Kalpana_Writer

Ok! You are way too sweet so I feel you wont be offended if I ask you this! Why did you choose me for reviewing your work? Dona Di, I understand! She knows me! But you dont know me! I am stranger, so why you agreed to listen to my criticism? You guys have got me really curious with your request! Answer only if you want to!

since nw we r frnds u cn ask any ques dear n I wk def ans ... I told dona dat I feel I m nt dng justice with this ff ... as my writing is very immaturish ...I m nt descriptive ...all in all a vry hpls cs in this writing jonour ... n its dona effrt n encoragement I started agn ... actually the truth dona is the soul of this ff bcz she has dn a lt 4 dis ff and I really wanted to do this fr dona to cmplt it but nt wid d same mistakes n same loops ... so I asked dona 4 a honest review so dat if nt gud I can keep on improving so dat one day I can feel dat I vapable of dng hustice wid d writing n gv the readers wat I wanna read frm writers in irder wrds fulfill the expectations of reader n fr this I want a prsn who shud tell me the honest review n mostly my mistakes hw bt to repeat them n she suggested u ... dat u r a hard taskmaster ... and must say dona's choice is perfect as we really wrkng on our loop holes ... once agn thanks frm bttm if my heart bcz criticism is alwz ones tchr ... n we were lkng fwd 4 dat ... n ur rvws really hlpd us ... I knw I hv brd ur frm my big boring lect but cant help ab tum hamare gang mei shamil ho gai ho to sunna padega :p

Reading Chapter 2 and I have to ask you guys: Who wrote the dialogues? Because they are fantastic. The Dada Dadi lines and Sia Maan nok jhok was really well written. I cannot believe that first chappy and second chappy is written by same people. Is it? If first chappy was fast forward the second chappy was stable and well written. It is obvious you have thought out what to write in each chapter and that is good.

Originally posted by: goldenmoon

oye aru

hehehe cnyrl ni honda 😛

Originally posted by: Kalpana_Writer

Reading Chapter 2 and I have to ask you guys: Who wrote the dialogues? Because they are fantastic. The Dada Dadi lines and Sia Maan nok jhok was really well written. I cannot believe that first chappy and second chappy is written by same people. Is it? If first chappy was fast forward the second chappy was stable and well written. It is obvious you have thought out what to write in each chapter and that is good.

The best part of this story is you set the stage. The first chap was about Geet, the second chap about Maan! Well written!

Ok! I have read the whole chapter twice and found some flaws but later realised that all flaws are connected! You see, your chapter needs editing, thats all!

Mistakes found:

1. Space missing between two words in some places!

2. Words missing in sentence! That scene where Maan rolls his eyes and mumbles about his Dadu, some word is missing in it!

3. Carrier is written when it is supposed to be career!

Not insulting you or anything, just stating the facts. Now I do these mistakes too.

1. The first problem happens when you type fast. The space button does not get pressed right way so you miss out on space. I face it too. Infact, even right now, my 'p' and 'g' are giving trouble.

2. Second problem happens because our brain is faster than our typing. Happens to me all the time!

3. Now this mistake is again due to brain being faster, your brain subconsciously ignores this mistakes as it wants you to type down the thought in your head before it vanishes.

All three problem can be solved by editing.

Now there are two ways to do it!

1. You write the work, leave it alone for 2 to 4 hours and then reread it. The mistakes will pop out at you. (I reread even my posts before pressing post reply button😉) This popping out will happen as the writing is not fresh in your brain and hence it does not subconsciously ignore your mistakes!

2. Send it to someone. Dona or Sia or Aru! Any of your partners! As they have not written it, they will find mistakes easily! And will correct it too! Infact, best is one write it, two edit it; that way there will be double safeguards for mistakes.

And if you writing your story directly on IF, stop doing it. The window is small for typing and posting here and hence you will do a lot of mistakes. Plus, if ever light or net went away, you are doomed!😕 Write it on MS Word, edit it and then post it! Spelling mistakes will be cleared with MS Word too.

Ok! I am done with commenting on this chapter. So far finding only simple mistakes which editing can take care of! Lets see what next chappy brings!

Take care

Kalpana

P.S. Awesome comic timing with Dada Dadi!

thanks ...aree u dnt tk tension we wl nt feel bad ... splng mstks n shortfrms I m wrkng over it ... n other two also I wl keep in mind frm nxt part ...thanks n ys wl be eagerly w8in 4 nxt reviews 😊

Originally posted by: arunima.

hehehe cnyrl ni honda 😛

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Originally posted by: goldenmoon

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oye I mnt cntrl ni honda😛

Originally posted by: arunima.

oye I mnt cntrl ni honda😛

tujhse kya control ni hota yaar??!!

Originally posted by: goldenmoon

tujhse kya control ni hota yaar??!!

yahi dat u r hvng sm suprises fr ur rdrs unfolded in ur sleeves