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Posted: 11 years ago
Geet's mom is such a 🤬 🤬
part 9 hope Geet is fine loved the updates
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Posted: 11 years ago
i so much hate her so called mother
she gave her birth just for her life
why she didnt put her in some orphanage
there her life would be better then here
n omg geet n suicide
thax god maanu was also there n will save her
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Posted: 11 years ago
How much more insensitive can Rano be
Her words must have pricked Geet so deep
Oh no Geet jumped off from the five storyed building
Hope Maan somehow saves her
plz give the next update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
part 8 & 9
emotional updates
geet heared her parents talk
she is shocked to know about the truth
In a hope she went to her mother that its lie but she told her its truth
geet jumped from building
hope she will be fine
waiting for next part
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Posted: 11 years ago
haila.. Geet already jumped off from that building.. will Maan able to save her?

waiting for next part.. thnx for pm😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
mimu dear where were you .. gunaah is something i always wanted to read , this is something the best concept of the fiction ... u have made me hooked to this story of yours the way u portrayed geet and her mother i can say that it is very rare to see a mother like rina stil u can see B*** like her chi how can she be like this... geet jumped off NO dont let anything happen to her and her father he is a nice man but with some self conscience hope he will love his daughter and maan wo toh hai hi...

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Posted: 11 years ago
so painful update...😭...yet nice...😊
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Posted: 11 years ago


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Chapter 10-Will you be my friend?

(Guys this part is where the prologue comes from- the read part is what geet is thinking in her Conscious or sub-conscious mind)

As she was falling she closed her eyes...

Darkness...Darkness is all i can see around me...
Why is it so dark??
Oh!!..he he he..so funny! BHai & mommy are right! I am Sooo stupid...this darknes..is ...The Darkness of My Heart..
...It's so cold here,so damp, so suffocating...i don't like it here...
...I want mommy to hold me in her warm arms...WAIT!! She will not hold me...cause i am stupid..I am filthy...
...My mommy won't hold me..cause she...she...SHE HATES ME.
...Yes...EVEN PARENTS CAN HATE THEIR OWN CHILD...especially when they are unwanted...
...he he he so funny!! i actually heard my mommy & daddy talk ...i know..that i am mommy child, but not daddy's.
i know that I was result of mommy's cheating daddy...when he was out of town...i know...daddy let me & mommy stay cause daddy loves mommy...daddy is a good person...
bt mommy says everything is my fault..if i were not born...everything between mommy & daddy would have been fine...i guess mommy is right...i am the cause of their problems...

i wish...i wish...i was not born...janam lena...ye meri galti...nahi...ye meri GUNAAH hai...

***
Damn it geet!! Did you have to take such drastic step??!! What the HELL happened???!!! Maan thought as he looked at senseless the girl beneath him,still holding her tightly in fear.

FLASHBACK
Maan turned the opposite direction to return home.
Hold on a sec,isn't that house barren,then to whom she went...he turned back immediately only to see in horror ,her jumping from the roof...
His eyes widened in horror ,bt he reflected quickly & ran to that direction...
Bt when he felt time was too short for running,he jumped towards the falling girl & hugged her tight preventing any big impact,as they rolled a little cause of the force.
Thankfully he managed to stop on time & nothing major happened except a few scratches on him & a twisted ankle of hers.
******
He sighed in relief as he saw no sign of any major thing except her swollen ankle.
Well he did managed to get on the nick of time & prevent her from falling on the ground & finish herself off. But he couldn't do about the twisted leg though...
Bt i can't take her to hospital. There will be too many unnecessary & unpleasant questions,he thought.

Well,it was true,in the society what he saw till now,people loved to judge one in a very nasty way without knowing anything about that person.
Since he saw no deadly harm,he thought he could take her to his home,actually to his dadi precisely,later with her guardian,they could always go to hospital for checkup.

****
Dadi! Dadi!!! Kaha ho app?? Maan screamed too call his dear dadi as he carried geet.
Dadi stood there on top of the stairs with a bowl of ....MAGGI!!!!
DADIII!!!Why are you eating noodles in the morning?? Maan glared at her.
Kya karu,app to khate hai ghass-puss,aur yaha koi hai nahi..too kiske liye pakaun (cooking) khana!! Then she noticed the girl in maan's arms
Wow maan !! She literally hopped down the stairs in excitement!
Mera pota bahu laye ho!!! She looked at geet who was still unconscious.
KITNI PYAARI HAI!!! Maan, apne to hume inke barein mein kavi nahi bataya!! Aur hume to ye bhi nahi pata tha ki app itne romantic ho!!! SIDHA GODD(LAP) ME UTHA KAR LE AYE APNI BRIDE KO!!!
Maan rolled his eyes. DADI!!! He gritted his teeth.
She is GEET!
Ofcourse dadi knew who was geet. She was one who made maan agree to his parents' weird deal! Actually the first time she saw geet's photo,she had decided that she will be Maan's bride. She fell in love with this sweet looking girl instantly.

Though maan knew nothing about it. The only thing he knew that the principal was his grandma & his parents' family friend & that in exchange to live his dream job for a few years discarded MOST OF company's dealings,he had to help this poor little girl called GEET.

He first thought it was weird that his parents put on such a term in exchange for his dream job,bt it didn't look that hard plus he would gain some experience,& he was happy to help & most of all,after knowing the story,his dadi started constantly nagging in his ears to save the child...so here he was.

What he didn't knew that dadi had seen geet even before he was offered this proposal!

So dadi simply feigned ignorance.
OH MY GOD!! This is GEET!!
Yes dadi,now please open the bedroom door so that i can make her lie down.
What happened to her? Now dadi was seriously concerned.
While laying her to bed,he explained the event of this morning.
Seriously dadi,i don't know what actually triggered her to take such a drastic step!
Maybe...dadi said after thinking a while...
Maybe,she ...Dadi stopped,NO,she couldn't reveal geet's real identity yet. She couldn't possibly let maan know that geet is Rina's Illeg...
She brushed off the thought,Not that she cared,she just knew,from the principle...He was Bikas's Uncle .

She couldn't let maan know about it cause she didn't want a to built up a relation based on sympathy,as if already there wasn't enough!!!

Maybe she had a fight with her family. Dadi said aloud
Impossible dadi! I have seen geet . She will never take such drastic step over such a small reason.He said as he wrapped the blanket on geet.
***
Warm...it's,so warm...i never felt like this before.
Mujhe bahut accha lag raha hai . Kya jab sabki mamma unko pyaar karti hai,to unko aisa lagta hai??
Kya pata? Shayed aisa hi ho! Kya hai na...mamma ne kavi aise mujhe pyaar nahi kiya na...to mujhe thik se pata nahi.
Par ye ehsaas,aisa lag raha hai ki koi pyaar se mere sir par hat rakh raha ho...
Kya iska matlab hai ki mamma mujhe pyaar karti hai??
Shayed wo sab ek bura sapna tha,main jag jaungi to mamma mujhe school jane ke liye bulayegi,hai na babaji!
****
She slowly opened her eyes . First it all looked fuzzy,then when her eyes adjusted,she saw an older lady beside her was sitting & stroking her head with utmost love in her eyes.
She didn't realize it,bt she asked it loud...kya jab koi pyaar se sir (head) par hat bulata hai,to aisa lagta hai? She asked with innocent curiosity .
Dadi almost choked on her tears,ha beta.
oh...kya pata,mere saath ye pehli baar hua hai na...she said with utmost sincerity & innocence.
Then she realized that she was blabbering her heart out infront of an unknown elder lady. She sat up hurriedly
Oh i am sorry,main..wo..
Koi baat nahi beta,dadi smiled at her.
Par main kaha hu,aur yaha kaise..
Ye mera ghar hai. Aur app behosh thi to mera ...
She couldn't complete her sentence.
I am very sorry,maine apko pareshaan kiya...main abhi chalti hoon
Are are apko itna ghabrane ki zarurat nahi.She held Geet's hand.
Dekhon geet,maine apke Papa ko phone kar diya hai,unhone apko yaha saradin rehne ki permission de di hai.
Magar!! App papa ko kaise janti hai? Aur unka number??
Beta hum apke principle ke dost hai,yakin nahi aata to hum unse apki baat kara dete hai.
She called the principle to make her at ease...
Ab apko yakin aaya??
Nahi mera matlab wo nahi tha,she said in fear that the kind looking elderly lady would get mad at her now for doubting her!
Are koi baat nahi,
Par main phirvi yaha ...kaise...apko pareshani hogi.
dekho beta,agar app chale gaye,to mere pote ko bohut bura lagega.
Apka pota?
Ha,wo humesha akele rehta hai na..app rehti to thoda company mil jata unhe...Dadi made a fake sad face.
Now geet was in thought...
Apke pote ko bura lagega?? she asked innocently.
HAA,BOHUTTT!!! Waise bhi hamesha sad sad,aur gusse mein rehte hai!!
Koi baat nahi,main mood think kar dungi,chote baccho ke saath mere khub banti hai.
Dadi almost laughed out....MAAN!! AUR CHOTA BACCHA!! YE LADKI MAAN KO CHOTA BACCHA SAMAJH RAHI HAI!! She thought

Ha beta,ab to app hi kuch kar sakti hai!
Thik hai...da..she stopped,not really sure if she was permitted to call this elderly lady "dadi"
Dadi smiled sadly,How much low esteem she has that she doesn't even have the courage to call someone !!She thought
App hume Dadi bula sakte hai.
Sacchi!! Her face beamed with delight.
To,app hamare pote ke pass ye milk lekar jaiye,wo bade nakhre dikhate hai...tab tak main apke liye kucj bana deti hoon.
Geet looked at dadi like she said she would give her most precious thing in the world.
Waise kya khayengi app??
Geet looked down...
Kya hua?
Geet blushed & played with her dupatta & fidgeted looking here & there...
dadi was amused!!
Kya hua?
Wo,Ap sach mein mere liye khana banayegi??
Ha,
Garma garam??!!!!!
Ha!!! dadi said in a "obviously" tone.
MERE PASAND KA!!!??? Her voice pitched higher than usual in obvious super excitement & awe
Ha!!!

App itna sharma kyun rahi hai?!! Dadi said very amused
Geet blushed more..
Wo kya hai na...pehli baar koi mere liye garma garam khana bana raha hai,wo bhi mere pasand ka!!!. she finished with a blush & a soft smile on her face looking down
Just when dadi thought her heart could not break anymore,her heart again shattered in million more pieces.
She managed to smile...
Jaiye,mere pote ke pass,tabtak apke pasand ka khana...waise kya kyagi app??
P..pa...parantha,she said softly. Aloo Parantha...she said looking down,still blushing.
Wow,apne to mere pasand ki keh di,Parantha ,makhan aur thande dahi ke saath...UMMM
Lagta hai ki hum dono ki khub jamegi,dost??,she said winking at her.
Geet smiled broadly at this...& shook her head vigorously.
aise hi muskurate rehna,apko suit karta hai..she kissed geet's forehead with love.
****
She went to the room which dadi showed her before going to kitchen.
She could only see a light shadow on a curtain hanging in the middle of the room .
Maan was everyday thinking of some fun way of teaching students,so now he was testing some software where the typed words will be voiced by the tone u want,from a baby' voice to a robot's voice (hey there really is a software like that)
He was pissed off at dadi. Dadi never hid anything from him,bt this time,she surely was hiding something!
Oh well,MAAN SINGH KHURANA will find it out anyhow!! he thought.

He heard some noise & concluded that it was dadi. he didn't want to talk to her now,so he used the software he was checking & this time used a 9 years old boys's voice...
Dadi ,i don't want to talk to you now, the voice said as he typed the words.
Dadi nahi,main geet hoon. With the voice speaking,geet's thought about dadi's pota being a 9-10 years old became more stronger.

Dekho,i know that u are angry at dadi,bt khane par naraz hona buri baat hai...Acche bacchoon ko aise naraz nahi rehna chahiye.
Maan was shocked,which soon turned into amusement.
Ye Geet bhi na,hamesha mujhe school boy kyun samajhti hai?!
He continued to talk through the software created voice.
I Don't want to eat anything.
Agar nahi khaoge to SUPERMAN ki tarha strong kaise hoge?
Maan tried to hold his laugh.
Still he typed,Mujhe Superman pasand nahi.
Geet knew to deal with this ALL NO type kids,since his brother brij was one...
HAAA!! Wahi to!!! Mujhe bhi pasand nahi,kaise chaddi bahar ki tarha pehnta hai,CHI CHI BABAJI!! (NO OFFENSE INTENDED to Superman,ONLY FOR FUN)
Maan snickered in his painful attempt to suppress his laugh.

To Batman?? Nahi nahi,wo bhi to chaddi bahar pehnta hai! (NO OFFENSE INTENDED to Superman,ONLY FOR FUN)

To ... Wonder girl...CHI CHI BABAJI!! Main kya bol rahi hoon!! Tum ladki thode na ho!!
HA!! TUMHE SCOOBY DOOBY ke tarha banna chahiye!
ScooBY!!!! Maan was now falling on the ground silently laughing.
Ha ,Scooby pata hai,saaare bhoot ki kaise pol khol deta hai!!!
Wo SUPERHERO HAI!!!??? Maan managed to type in the midst of silent laughter

Ye bhi nahi!! To tumhe..tumhe...ha,pata hai,hamare school mein ek DANAV ki tarha bade teacher hai...
Really,whom she is talking about ??I never met such person,maybe he is on a leave.
Dadi came behind her,not wantting to miss the drama
Pata hai,wo ITNEEE bade Aur ITNEEE wide hai,mote nahi...wide ,wide...she said dramatically gesturing with her hands & slowly stepping towards the curtain,inorder to make the "KID" drink his milk
Who the hell is,it sounds like a Monster!! Dadi & maan thought
Pata hai,waise to bohut acche hai,par ITNEEE bade hai ,ITNEEE strong hai,ki hamare room ka darwja (door) hi tod diya.

Dadi & maan knew instantly who it was...
Actually geet's school'd lab room's door was jam for some reason,not wanting to waste a class MAAN tried to kick open the door,bt accidently he used a little too much force & broke the door totally!!!
Now it was Dadi literally on the floor laughing & maan didn't know what to say!!

Bt before he could react geet already had lifted up the curtain to reveal ...the "DANAV" she was talking about.

Precap- Maan & geet's reaction,some FUN TIME & the last bt not least Chudail's entry

ANY SIMILARITY IN SCENES IS UNINTENDED. PLEASE CONTACT ME DIRECTLY IF U SEE SUCH.

Edited by Shilalipi - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
superb update

so dadi knows geet and wants her to b maan's bride.. but how come she knows her father..

is she aware about geet's life
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Posted: 11 years ago
She just called him a daanav
Wow that was funny
Wait maan it's your fault only
Sheesh that was hilarious how she was trying to make him maan drtink his milk
So dadi wants maneet to be together one day
She has been planning already
But seeing her sure broke her heart
That childhas such low esteem and was happy with dadi being so nice with her
Man it just broke your heart to see her like this
Good man came to her rescue
And took her with him
No point in taking her to her home
That will only make things worse
Dadi was eating Maggie interesting
Awww it was cute with maneet talks
She thought man was a child when he isnt
But it was good their talk
Now for their reaction
And whom is chudail
Her mother or someone else
Cheers for pm

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