Milan... A Poetry For Maaneet.. Maan's POV Page 5 - Page 3

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Here is Next part on aakriti's Demand.. She wanted Maan's POV also…

I hope u like it Basanti… Luv ya…

And Thank you so much chutki(Ananya) for this pic..

Pehli baar use dekha aur dil de baitha

Baawra mann hazaro sapne bun baitha

Pyaar ko aaj se pehle kabi mehsus nahi kiya

Pyaar ka pehla ehsaas usi ne mujhe dilaya

Jab use dekhne gaya uski maaumiyat ne dil moh liya

Jab nazre mili to dil ko jaise uske dard ka ehsaas hua

Juba se ha kaha par Uski aankhein kuch aur keh rahi thi

Maano jaise wo apna dil mere saamne rakhna chaahti thi

Jab hum mile to kai saari baatein soch rakhi thi

Par usne jo kaha to pairo tale zameen hi nahi thi

Atit ka wo panna usne mere saamne khola

Acha laga usne is layak to mujhe samjha

Dard to hua ki use kisi aur se pyaar tha

Par aur dard hua jab use dard mein dekha

Sapne tute jab usne kaha mushkil hai is rishte ko nibhana

Meine kaha mera pyaar hai na jo is rishte ko saath rakhega

Aaj vaada karta hu Mein is rishte se koi umid nahi rakhunga

Bas aap thoda saath do mein apne pyaar se sab sawarunga

Wo kehti rahi unka milan adhura reh gaya

Meine kaha MILAN hai adhura nahi reh paayega

Din beet te gaye aur humara rishta majboot hota gaya

Pyaar se mein bas unki zindagi main khushiya lata raha

Ek din aaya jab usne khud mere pyaar ko kabul kiya

Aisa laga Jaise sab kuch un teen labzo me meine paa liya

Wo kheti hai mere pyaar se use pyaar hua

Mere pyaar me unhone khuda ko paaya

Meine to unse sirf beinteha mohabbat hi ki hai

Har pal rab se jyada usi ki hi ibadat ki hai

Humara MILAN to kismat ne likha tha

Ise kisi janam main ab mein adhura nahi chodna chahta

Chahe maut bhi kyu na beech aajaye humare

Vaada hai ye MILAN har janam me hoga rab ke hi saamne

Thank u sooo much guyz for your likes and comment.. I will rply them tomorrow…

Plzzz Do hit like button and comment…

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Res--Ritzieee U know I just love you sooo much soo very much yaar...!! I actually needed a smile without any tear in my eyes and U gave me one today after 2 days...u indeed my fairy who always make me smile in worst situation...I love u yaar...love u sooo much...n now for update...I actually pry someone much more special than this maan for my cutest frnd with all my heart! He took my heart away yaar! Aise hote hai...I know aise angels hote hai life main! Who loves their partners with each flaw with each drawback in them! I believe Arrange marriages can be as successful even with a past of other partner it's just the belief and love which endure a smile on your face to keep ur relation awake even after each hurdle if we expct a generous support from someone he need the same in keeping his promise...right!! I Love the fact yaar...this was actually close thn the past poem of same OS...I Love Maan's POV yaar it's just perfectly awstruck the way you described his feeling was so heart soothing yaar...I Just Love it... The start than how Maan met her with family allience how her first look told him her heart and than how he took care of her feelings when she told him abt her past how he felt dejected still maintained his love for her how at each step he took care o her and their relation...how he took care of everything with all his love and care and finally was paied back with her love...she was forced to love him...the same way...aoww I just love the while story...U indeed with no dobt the best in poems and trust me ur poems make me smile even when they touchy...and trust me aaj b yahi hua...n today i actually wnna ask u something...i wnt u to be with me each tym i cry!! To make me smile...!! I love U sooo much
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Posted: 12 years ago
#23
veryyy beautiful Ritzz... 🤗
the rhyming and stuff was bang on... 😃 👍🏼
very well done on that note...

Also... the emotions and story that u tried to put across came out evidently... so again.. hats off to you for that...

This MILAN truly tells that all u need to do is keeping loving the one u love... and wateva will happen will be correct... 😃

Awesome Ritzz...
love u GF... 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awww luv u luv u luv u mbd :* ummuahh lekin aapne gili gili kissy phir se di :o i am a big girl na :p he he toh kya decide ki apni sazaa ke liye?
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Posted: 12 years ago
#25
simply incredible

awesome

amazing

mind blowing

maan's pov was soo good
loved it to the core

thanks for pm
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Posted: 12 years ago
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u r awesome ritzzz
kese likti ho ye sab??
its jus too gud
loved it
the feelings rhyming everything is bang on
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Posted: 12 years ago
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That was awesum...
"watever may happens keep loving each other..."

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: dazzlingdivz

Aiee le Sam m all over each and every thread of urs at frst till now :D :D :D aowww I Love It :D :D :D :D dhinka chika!!
Happy Birthday darling :*


now coming to OS :D poetic OS yet again ;)

as always I just wnna say it again, U know it na there is always a special someone for U...always a one who is made for U and only U, fir chahe koi fareeshata ho yaa khuda aapke naseeb main wahi special someone aayega who is meat to be urs no one else! Kya kare destiny hai :) dil to bawara hai...right!!
Let him go if he is ur special someone...he will be ur at the end of day! No one can change that nor he neither U...so let it go...coz agar kisi ko baandhoge he will get suffocated and chocked relation always restriction, ek inhibitation bann jaate...bojh...n humare rishte itne khokhle nahi hai...hai kya? Nahi na so let them free...let the relation breath :)

hushhh philosophy ho gayi na :p LoLzzz

chalo ab mudde pe ;)

it was fantabulous mindblowing owsome and chumeshwari aowww Just Love it...the beging to end the whole poetic way u told a simple story was just mesmerising just beautiful in it's own simple way...U know U one of the 2 ''The best poetss I know...n i feel the flow reading U each tym coz the words the emotions...ur feelings U convey in them...it's always so smooth that it feel we feeling the same emotion...as if it is the same feeling we living in...just perfect...and in one word...hypnotising ur words are...trust me u have a spellbound talent in U n I love this power in u actually respect U for something in here :)


U knw what... I just love u meri GB... Hugsss...
Whenever I wanna have smile bas tera cmnt padh lo kisi bhi FF pe...
It gives u new enrgy to do something more intresting...
Lolz I never knew mere bache ko itni philosophy aati hai.. Hehe...
And Muuuahhazzz For this comment...


Originally posted by: sakshi.ekansh

This is an awesome addition to your wonderful works ritu... awesome.. loved it.


Thank u sooo much Sakshi...

Originally posted by: aakritisri1111

Haye mere veeru jst nw i had posted comment on ur prev os nd tune mere dil ki tamanna itni jaldi puri kar di dusra os deke... Dats my veeru

Yaar sachi me aaj tune mera dil garden garden kar diya hai... Ek ek word ek ek lyn was written so beutifully nd u knw wat aisa laga k main kisi ki real story padh rhi hu... True yaar smone smwhere is defo made 4 u... Jst lyk 'Geet' gt his soulmate... HAYE!!!

LAFZON ME KAISE BAYAN KARU,
K KYA ASAR KAR GAYE TERE ALFAAZ DIL PAR MERE,
BAS YUN SAMAJH LE KE TERE ALFAAZ PADH KAR,
ZINDAGI JEENE KI EK WAJAH MIL GAYI...

Lolz... Sorry 4 d crap huh... I m nt as good as u... :-P

oh! Veeru once again a big big big bone crushing hug to u 4 dis marvellous creation... Luv u yaar!!! Mmmuuaaahhh

P.S. I want Maan's p.o.v too pls pls pls pls pls...


Aww.. Meli Basanti.. I love u sooo much...
lolz garden garden.. Hehe...
Aww... Lines for me aree sooo sweet.. Luv ya yaar...
And Teri wish puri kar di hai...
Hugsss... Muuahzzz...

Originally posted by: Jeba.Rahman

fantastic.
must say its brilliant :)




Originally posted by: .bloom.

superb poetry ... loved it



Thank u sooo much Sweeties...


Originally posted by: ritzy09

well you already know how i feel about this poem...it is just fantabulous...

i love the way some simple words come together to tell such a sweet story...poetry has always facinated me and you have just rekindled the passion...
first part which articulates a phase where she looses hope...betrayal blamed on destiny...pain of being alone
And then comes the true destiny...that one person who God made for her...whom she had asked for in her last life...who she had just not found yet.
Finally they come together and magic happens...they complete each other and she relaises that her God was always with her
Absolutely brilliant 👏 and You are a star⭐️



Aahhh Di I love u sooo much...
Yup I knw how u feel.. and really I was soo happy by reading ur cmnt...
U always give me some positive thought to write...
Hugsss and muuaahhhzzz...



Originally posted by: tabby999

awesome poem,loved it




Originally posted by: 3295

awesome di!!!!!!!!!!!



Originally posted by: OsheenDGr8

Its awesome Ritu I had read the first two parts of the poem on FB n the third one I read here...
Every word is perfectly chosen n is presented wonderfully... The poem in itself is a complete story n there is magic in ur writing
Loved it dear, waiting for more poems from u...
Luv ya❤️






Originally posted by: deepali1022


wel being honest i didn't lyk it...

I LUV'd IT...

I don't knw how many tyms i had said bt again i m repeating...u r mindblowing...ur poems always speechless...

Thnx for again giving us such a wondrful os...



Thank u dearies...






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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Miss.Mars

That was sho sho sho shwweeettt MBD!!
Lovely!!
Jis Milan ko khuda bhi na rok saka woh milan toh janmo janmo ka hai...😉
Simply loved all the three parts TOO GOOD👏
Really MBD aapke haathon mai jaad hai... Your poems can make anyone drown in them... I was so so immersed in the poems
Just like them
Haaayyyeee!!!!! MBD you really bring out the feelings through the poem,s too welll
Milan is a brilliant Master Piece HEAVENLY!!!!!
Love you MBD😳


I love u sooo much Chutki...
And This pic is just aweeesssummm...
Hugsss and muhhaazzz

Originally posted by: 786muskaan

awww loved ur Milan haiyeee
sooo deep...
sowie ritu cant comment long net prblem n mama ki health nay to ban baja diii:((

its sara khan from fb:P


Thank u sara... Luv ya.. and Its fine yaar... No worries.. Tc...


Originally posted by: AbbyluvsMaan

omg omg omg...
Ritzzz... dis is absolutely beautiful...

I love the flow of the feelings in all the 3 parts...
beautifully etched...

lolzzz... u knw me nah... so cnt say much on poetry... lolzzz

I love you... ❤️
n ur work is absolutely amazing...!!!!!!!!! [l]



Hayeee meri BF... Luv ya...
hugsss and muahhzzz...



Originally posted by: 16anyaa.gurti

Awww! Shooowwieee Ritu dee for being shooo late *again*🤢
yaar how can u be sooo creative? apki all poems are like WOWWW.👏
This one too yarr,... The Judaai bit was very emotional.
Lekin My Favourite was The third one.
The actual MILAN, it was just superbbb.
awww, once again an ammaazzing poetic OS tha Ritu di.
Yeh hunar sirf app mei hi ho sakta of writing such beautiful Poeitic Os's
Ummaaahhh to u Dii,😳
Lubb ya, nd again Sowwieee



Hawww choti... No sorry.. Bhul gayi...????
Luv ya soo much for this sweet comment...
Hugsss and Kissi on ur cheeks...

Originally posted by: gargi12

awesome as always ritu...
Sply he line khup avadli
Jo Dil mile hi nahi unka milan kaise ho sakta tha Kismat ko manjur nahi wo rishta kaise bun sakta...
Gr8 yr!!!
At strt vatla sad stry a bt happy endin vachun i ws lyk...neva eva predict future of d stry!!! Hehe
Lub u ritu...


Aww... Thank u gargi.. Luv ya...
And yes never predict future.. Hehe..
Muuahhzzz

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