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Saams

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Posted: 13 years ago

#801

just finished reading all the parts.
I find that this one gives more insight into the characters of Maan and Geet unlike the old one.Apart from that the plot remains the same ryt? well,I liked the small additions you had done so far to each update.
Also,the first meeting at airport and hot chocolate update are mah favourite in this one.
I dont know what to say after Geet's call to Dev.hmm..she truly is trying to preserve her marriage.

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: Soapoperasrfun
But, if I can make a request, it will be for something in that is yet to happen. I just wish to see a different reaction of Geet's when Dev asks her for a divorce. Not that I am complaining about the last one, but I think this story and character demands a different interpretation of that as well...

So what do you think this Geet will do, when she hears the news?

Certainly, she is still a Geet who has access to her emotions much easily than Maan. She could be contained if she tried, but is still a loose cannon around Maan, only because there is another natural self that is pushing against the facade of demeanor she portrays with him.

Well, I have already written the skeleton for that part (Yesterday! 😊 got much done. Too proud to stop mentioning that). She is certainly not mercurial this time (To my knowledge. Any disagreements?) But, would love to hear any thoughts you or others have to say about it...

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Posted: 13 years ago

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I do especially like the breakdown that she goes through from the last time. It is so characteristic of what people go thru' and as painful as it is to read, it is necc to go there in my POV.

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Originally posted by: had2bu
I do especially like the breakdown that she goes through from the last time. It is so characteristic of what people go thru' and as painful as it is to read, it is necc to go there in my POV.

"You might think I'm irrational in wanting to do this...", she said as her silent tears spilled into her cheeks and looked at him then, an anticipation for his approval surfaced in her despite knowing that it could be only be what he would call a crazed idea was.

"So what?", he said sounding so unlike him that she clasped his hand tighter to assure herself he was really there, "I don't think anyone can prepare for life's many situations, especially for one like this...There is perhaps no right or wrong way to deal with it when you are hurting this bad..."

"I'm not...", she rejected him forthright, her eyes angry even and felt her insides crumble to ash the next instant, "But...I...", she doubled over and braced herself against the pillar behind her, "I don't know what this is...I just don't know Maan..."

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Originally posted by: 6th.Element

"You might think I'm irrational in wanting to do this...", she said as her silent tears spilled into her cheeks and looked at him then, an anticipation for his approval surfaced in her despite knowing that it could be only be what he would call a crazed idea was.

"So what?", he said sounding so unlike him that she clasped his hand tighter to assure herself he was really there, "I don't think anyone can prepare for life's many situations, especially for one like this...There is perhaps no right or wrong way to deal with it when you are hurting this bad..."

"I'm not...", she rejected him forthright, her eyes angry even and felt her insides crumble to ash the next instant, "But...I...", she doubled over and braced herself against the pillar behind her, "I don't know what this is...I just don't know Maan..."

Beautifully done. The last time I felt her pain so much and the way he stood by her, I think is when I fell for him. Glad you are getting some time with this. Still I truly want to go over each line until I am satisfied to respond to it more. Did I tell you how glad I am that you are writing it again for the 100th time; because I am.

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Onir

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Finally me here... I've read the last part so many times, yet it is just seeping through always...Geet's pain was so heart-wrenching, the guilt, conflicts she's having within her is so understandable... the realisation in itself is something which is a very far fetched possibility for her...

She's calling it an illness in her head... but what about the feelings her heart is having, the soul deep connection between them... its very difficult for her to face it.

The way she's clinging onto Dev for being the person to be a source of escape & distraction is a defence mechanisim that she's whole heartidely trying to use but even that is crumbling down, which is in all causing her to breakdown emotionally in those moments of despair.

He's become so much forbidden for her that her mind is conjuring Maan for her in her unconscious dream states.. & holding onto those minutest details of moments spend with him.Each line of the song intermingled with the scenes was so apt & everything carried a soulful meaning that it really made me feel & imagine it clearly... truely - Mehsoos kiya hai...She even feels its her folly & fault yet accepts it that it was inevitable as she couldn't have helped it ... by both body or mind...

What's with this Karwa Chaut? I think this time round Dev will break the news to her after hearing her this painful Voice message... post the karwa chauth update wherein he doesn't come ( I remember you ahd given a teaser mentioning it)

Yes indded it was a dream ending all of her other dreams that she has ever perceived for herself in her life... atleast for the present scenario...I'm in love with this song ... I've heard it umpteen times & each time i picturise the NYT scenes in it...

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Onir

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Yes last time her whole breakdown after Dev asks for a seperation... was very needed , the way she was just wanting to go just once there to meet him against all odds jsut for a chance if possible & then later just letting go after glancing at the window was so much of a haze... there was not much clarity of what thoughts were going in both Maan & Geet's mind

Also the talk at the falls was good ... the way he stands by her was another promise in itself.

My favourite among all was the sit-out scene, wherein they hold hands & convey the thoughts in silence, but yet what was that going on in their minds precisely at those moments would be good to know...

I hope I could aptly put forth what I was trying to... as I feel its quite confusing... only saying that those moment POV's if included would be quite appreciated.. as in it would bring clarity

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Boogle.Schiz

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Okay, I haven't written a comment on any stories or updates in such a long time...forget about writing stories of my own, I can't even collect my thoughts to comment on one anymore! Apologies if this doesn't make sense.

I don't know why you were so apprensive posting Hot Chocolate, it was great. Whenever Maan and Geet have conversations all my interest focuses on their conversation, because the way they think is just so...interesting (for a lack of a better word.) They're both so different to each other in terms of everything! Yet when they're together it just seems so right. They're like two puzzle pieces.

I remember posting on the first version saying how I hate the feeling of drinking something hot, so for me your stories are like ice-cream on a hot summers day...under a shaded tree with a slight breeze ;) :p

Geet's gifts were quirky and it really did bring a smile to my face. I could imagine the look on Maan's face when opening the package and reading her note then finding them...a very feel-good update.

CH23 - You always say you're not good at intimite moments but honestly I think you write one of the best. I remember your take on 'Dil Se' and that also had absolutely stunning scenes in it. I'm sure every married woman has had less than approproate dreams about another man at least once in their life, but in Geet's situation its understandable why it would be so terrifying. She knows her relationship with Dev holds no meaning anymore but she doesn't want to acknowledge she's having feelings (strong ones) for another man...

Looks like she's in need of a dream catcher rather than Maan...

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Nishttha Nath

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Posted: 13 years ago

#809

Love the way the story's flowing .. Always a pleasure to read :)

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Posted: 13 years ago

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They were his ghosts and she had hers and it was best not to invade the people who lived behind those veils of silence.

if it isn't something you have already paid attention to, then it means you just haven't yearned long enough for it...Like really really want it bad; those simple pleasures of life.

a small lapse of time in a lifetime of living

some of my favorite lines from chapter 20.

The sentiments where she thinks he is a show off on entering the car and he looks at her in the rearview mirror; the hands over the shirt that she does not buy; esp. the gift buying instead of the shirt; the way the eyes meet while that song is playing on Yash's ipod. Loved it all.

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