*Dark Secrets*Updated part 3/4

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hiii guysss!! ok this is my second ss i have written one which im stil updating called maan,geet (aur )mahii... its more family orientated. i knw its hasty that im writing two SS at the same time as im a first timer but an idea popped into my head and i really want to share it with you guys ! :):):) hope u all like it 😃
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POEM:
the set finshed.
the curtains closed
she went out for a walk,
she didnt even see it coming...
shadows unseen coming up near her back
they slid down the dark-hollow alley,
moving in for a grosetque attack,
innocently playing with her dolls chiding away a rhyme
when unexpectedley
trampled, shrewn,'SLAP,SLAP,SLAP'
ligments in excrutiating pain
she wanted to scream, but they closed in on her
PROLOGUE
Geets eyes flew open.Her head moving from side to side agitatedly; trying to capture her surroundings.her muscles started to tense and her head throbbed profusely in excrutiating pain. Beads of perspiration trickled down her forhead. multitude tears trickled down her pulchritudinous hazel eyes. just like how water gushes out from a 'monstrous tusanami'. she arose from her bed in panic and yelled "NOOO *SOB* NOOO *SOB , PLSSS ... PLSSS... LEAVEEE MEEE " tears consistently welled in her scarlet-red swollen eyes. suddenly the door flung open; (with a tremor)the impact caused geet to flinch and crwal her petit figure unedrneath the vast bed. she rocked her body back and frnt, avoiding the the pentrated gaze of the rooted man that stood few inches ahead of her. "GEEETTT... GEETTT" maan yelled. he looked here and there and strode towards the bed when he heard miffles and heavy breathing... "GEET" maan said.. maan gazed at geets tear-stricken face and yelled "NURSEEE, NURSEEE" (nurse entered the room and was not amused at the sight her eyes caught. "not again" she whispered audibal enough for maan to hear. "Sir i think we should get her some help these intemittent attacks are frequently increasing." Maan gave her a deathly glare. A tingling sensationrushed through her veins,;her heart palpatating fasst. " DARE U ADVISE 'MAAN SINGH KHURANNA' now SHUT UP AND GIVE ME THE INJECTION BEFORE U ARE FIRED" maan screeched loudlyy which made geet jump up in fear... maan captivated geets gaze with his pitch-black ones full of mystry enticing her. he then jabbed her hard. 'SLAP' Geet slapped maan hard not being able to endure the pain that was circulating through her blood.before maan could react she went into deep slumber. maan wondered how long this will prolong...</font>
index
prologue: page1
part 1: page 2
part 2: page 3
Teaser:page 5
part3:page6
part4:page6
OK guys did u all like it ??? *shuts eyes tight* will update character sketch also update part 1 as soon as i get response and likes :D :D :D and i appologisefor spelling erors i had written all of this and it got deleated sooo this is really fast lolzss
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Posted: 13 years ago
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nice concept... pls updt dear 😊
and plss try 2 give regular updtsss 😳
waiting is killing u knw 😉
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Posted: 13 years ago
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congrats on ur new ss dear...
seems intersting...
continue soon dear...
will be waiting.& pm me..
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hiii guyss!! im sooo sorry for not updating i was a bit caught up with family ... im just writing the next part :) will hopefully post by the evening :-) muwahhh
Edited by maan.ki.fizz - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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PART 1

Maan gazed at his beloved wife's pale -face. She was in deep slumber for more than 24 hours now. Maan caressed geets hair in affection whilst he was lost in a whirlpool of thoughts. He recalled what the nurse stated earlier yesterday; did she really need help? No not at all! All that she requires is a bit of love and care. Maan was trying to satisfy himself with his answer however somewhere deep down he knows that he is living in illusion. But at least it's better than parting away from his better half. He loves Geet to such extents to which he has now words to describe. He cannot live a single minute without her. He knows that by not sending her to the hospital he will have to face sever ramifications and queries esp. by society, however he will bare all just for her. He jolted out of his thoughts when the door clicked open... "Can I come in" meera whispered. Maan signalled her to enter." How is she" meera enquired Maan sighed "look Maan I think we need to take her in these attacks are increasing and we have no significant explanation for her behaviour as we have not consulted a doctor i think it's time... meera's voice trailed off when she heard Maan hiss , "nooo"and he told her to leave. Meera left baffled. Maan looked at her retreating figure in anguish. At that same instant he felt Geet stir in her sleep and in reflex of the sound of the door; she jumped up and held her teddy that lay beside her. "Geet "Maan said softly. Geet looked at Maan and angrily turned her gaze. She then picked up items that were present in the room and started throwing them at Maan. "GEEETTT" Maan said "stop it this instance, kyu maar rahi ho mujeh"." Ouchhh" maan got wacked on the head by a glass , which started bleeding profusely. Maan strode towards Geet in fury and forcefully took the vase out of her hand and pined her to the wall. " Geet why the hell are you hitting me, HOW DARE YOU ", Maan roared. Geet looked at him intently and remained quiet. "TALK TO ME DAMMIT" Maan said. Geet still remained silent... she was testing his patience. Geet was trying to pry of his strong grip from her arms, however she was too vulnerable." I will not leave you until i get answers samjhii" Geet glared at him fiercely and said "chodo mujeh chodo, tumhe koi haq nahi hai mujeh chunne kah SAMJHE" Geet roared equally fierce. "GEET I am Ur husband I have Every Right to touch you understand." Geet pushed Maan off ignoring his every word and walked to the washroom. Maan face was contorted with fury. He walked towards her and stopped the bathroom door from closing. He pushed her inside and locked the door...

To be continued...

Ok guys I know this is a really short update.. I'm really busy with skl work lately as its started :-( i promise i will try to update next part tonight..no guarantee though !! if not today then tmrw :-)
Edited by maan.ki.fizz - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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interesting ss dear do pm me
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Interesting concept...
Love the storyline...
So maan is deeply in love with geet and geet ko kya hua...why is she so tortured...
But the last part was shocking...maan locked geet in the bathroom...kya maan sach much geet se pyaar karta hai...
The story has so much of suspense in it...
Continue soon...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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interesting story dear,,, hope to receive pm next time also 😛😛
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow

very nice concept
loved it
plz do continie
and add me in pm list
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Like it please add me in your pm list

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