Somethings are just meant to be : ff

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Was reading this novel which reminded me of Geet and Maan and thought of penning down a sequence where Geet loses her baby . This write up just deals with the pain Geet goes through when the baby is no more. From a personal perspective i would very much want the baby to make it but from a story point of view losing the baby can give a different perspective to the relation. This is my first ever OS. Hope U guys like it!! Dedicated to all the die hard Maaneetians.*edit* changed it into a ff
PART 1
Geet didn't want to wake up. She wanted to stay in that dark place where there was no pain, no loss, no heartache. Nothing. But someone seemed determined to bring her back. The layers of mind fog lifted, revealing a grey world where life no longer held any meaning.Sterile smells of hospital sheets, disinfectant and antiseptic. Impersonal sounds'the clank of metal trolleys, the hum of air-conditioning. A stranger's hands, prodding, pressing, saying her name. She sank back to the dark.After several attempts'over how long? She didn't know'she reluctantly opened her eyes. She noted without interest that she'd been moved to a private room.

No one had told her, but she knew she was no longer pregnant. She clenched a hand over the place where only hours ago she'd felt it kicking. Now all she felt were contractions'angry fists of pain deep inside where her womb had betrayed her. A nurse appeared from nowhere and soothingly gave her a glass of water. Geet heard the woman's footsteps recede and stared up at the cold fluorescent light. Nothing could soothe the despair that surrounded her like the dark clouds beyond the window. Every part of her body ached and the chill of the winter evening outside seemed to settle in her bones. Tiny flashes of heartwrenching memories came back to her...the connection she felt with her baby for the very first time, the instant all-consuming need to protect her precious baby from anyone who tried to harm her, her first ultrasound with her husband Maan by her side....

Her heart shattered. She'd never look on her child's face, would never touch that satin-soft baby skin or hold it to her breast, would never hear its first cry or exclaim over its first smile.She felt empty, numb and alone. She wanted the only other person who understood, who'd share her misery,Maan..Where was he? Why hadn't he come? Insecurities reared its ugly head. She felt useless and wasted...

That now familiar warm sensation stroked her like a velvet glove, and she knew he was there before she looked. Propping up the doorway, big and sexy and male, just as he had the first time she'd seen him at Hoshiarpur.But this was different. They were different. Bitter-sweet pain clenched in her chest. She knew his strengths, his fears, his past, his body, just as he knew hers. She sensed a certain hesitation in him, a slight shivering in his hands when he came near her.'Maan'' She lifted her hand, watching, waiting for him to do something'anything. His hair was spiked with rain, his T-shirt rumpled as if he'd thrown on the first one he'd come across.

For a few seconds that stretched to eternity their gazes remained locked and a shared well of pain seemed to open up between them. 'You're awake.' His voice sounded tired and rusty as if he hadn't used it in a long time. Then he moved towards her as if the world dragged at his feet. 'I wanted to be here when you woke.' He shoved a hand through his wet hair. 'Dammit, I should've been here.'

'You're here now, that's all that matters.'

He put her overnight bag on the bed. 'Some comforts from home.' He stood, awkward and uncertain, as if he'd run at the least opportunity. She nodded and secretly craved for that one touch, one kiss, that understanding. Something flashed in his eyes, a primal look

"Geet..Oh God Geet"...

Metal creaked as he sat down heavily on the bed. Then he was clutching her shoulders, burying his head against her neck. He smelled of rain and sweat and an underlying hint of the cologne he'd used this morning. This morning'a world away, another lifetime away. This morning only they had cuddled in the bed and shared their dreams about the angel who was supposed to come . His big body heaved and she knew he was crying inside. A man like Maan didn't wear his emotions for the world to see, not even for his wife. Her own tears, which she'd kept dammed, fell like a silent river for both of them.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Very well written. 👏 👏 👏

This should be a wake up call to all those who are demanding that the CVs kill the baby because they want Maaneet romance 😡.

Seriously do you think Maan can ever get over the fact that he could not protect Geet and the baby? If Geet loses the baby Maan is going to be so guilt ridden he will have a hard time even coming in front of her. Moreover it is going to be tough for him to see her in so much pain.

The pain that a mother goes through on losing her unborn child is heart-wrenching and agonizing. It is a part of her that is ripped out. She also loses all the dreams that she harbored and may even lose the will to live. It takes a long time for a mother to get over losing her child. This child is Geet's reason for being. If she loses it, the fight will go out of her and she will give up completely. 😭

So imagine what this will do to Maan and Geet's relationship. You might want to consider this before you ask the CVs to kill the baby. 😭

On the other hand if the baby survives we will get to see Maan pampering Geet and lots of cute romantic moments while Geet throws tantrums and makes Maan run all over town to satisfy her cravings. We will get cute moments of them with the baby. 😆 😆 😆

So CVs please do not kill the baby. 😭
Edited by liv2laugh - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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very well written....👏......are u going to continue?

its heart wrenching to even contemplate Geet having a miscarriage....😭 😭 😭
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Posted: 14 years ago
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itl be horrible if the baby dies...am gonna edit n write maan's perspective too..the baby is now part of the unbreakable bond between them. itl be a gross injustice if it is killed at this stage.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Pallu! 🤗 That was absolutely beautiful! Seriously, no one could have written this as better as you have done. The way you penned down Geet's pain of losing her baby was so heart wrenching. It made me angry at those members who still believe that Geet should lose the baby . How could anyone be so heartless?

I seriously have no words to convey how brilliant this one shot is. Please write some more. You have great potential dear 👏.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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thnxx everyone for the wunderful words..wil try to write maan perspective n then continue with the story....ppl plzzz do not ask for a miscarriage ..the pain of a miscarriage will shatter them both!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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plz do continue and add me to ur pm list cuz that was such a beautifully executed OS on her feelings... u cud literally feel as if u were in a limbo with her and going thru the agonizing pain of losing a child! and yes i cannot BELIEVE ppl would be so arrogant as to ask cvs to drop the baby track just for more romance not realizing more romance will come WITH the baby being there.... how can they be so heartless :S?
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Posted: 14 years ago
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A very good display of that pinch a woman have after she loses her most dearest..your emotional flow and the way you express the storm of aimlessly wandering emotions..is awesome..i just loved it..
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Posted: 14 years ago
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omg.... i want this to be like an FF.... seriously this is just too beautifully written.... <3!! i cant wait to see how she lost her baby in this OS ... cuz that wud be interesting to find out.. and yea the way you describe looks, feelings, situations is just PRO! i swear id read this if it were a book!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Oh my god! I absolutely LOVED IT! Oh my god! I am in LOVE with this one shot. Pallu you have to extend it into a Fan Fiction! This is so amazingly beautiful. Your such an amazing writer! Oh my god! I have no words! Their mutual pain was so heart wrenching and I seriously do not know what to say!

You are fantastic!

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