FF about RN- In a diff. style (ud P35) - Page 14

Originally posted by: feedback

awesome!! continue soon :)

thankuuuuuu soooo muchhhh dearrrr 🤗

i will continue in 1 hr ....
thanks for commenting.....
take care and keep smiling....
sheenu...😊

Originally posted by: aarsow

awesum n mindblowin,waitn 4 the next part sweety 👏 👏 👏 ,

u hav given a gr8 ff,RN married n Shalini's help in bringin them 2gether simply super dear,



Aarthi

thankuuuuuu sooooo muchhh dearrrr🤗
next part will be updated in 1 hr... thanks for commenting dear....
Shalini will help them bringing together lets see what will she do for this to happen????

till then..
take care and keep smiling....
sheenu....😊

Originally posted by: fanatic 21

it was superb.........loved d way u added dos lines in btwn d song......also nice choice of song.....it was very appropriate...........

waiting for sundays updt...........

thankuuuuu sooooo muchhhh dearrrr....🤗
that song was actually suggested by shaina.... thankuuu that u liked that.....
i will surely continue it in 1 hr....

till then...
take care and keep smiling...
sheenu....😊

Originally posted by: sania_58

too good

thannkuuuuu sooooo muchhh dearrrr🤗

take care and keep smiling....
sheenu....😊

Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Very good!!! Thankuuuu soooo muchhhh dearrrr🤗

Waise hope you find Simi soon finally i found her.... she is diya from LRL... i have seen her pic which golden girl has posted and she will be perfect for the role and will look good with her pair and don't worry about who looks the part,....think about pairing!!! arrey pair toh i have decided long ago but i am nt telling

As for the person if it is positive then I hope it is Col.Shakti Chandra and if not then make it whoever you like. person is positive or negative... emmm... i m nt telling... i have decided... this role will be played by ACP pardyumann of CID i think his name is Shivaji.... and col. chandra will be there but will come later on...

Waise right now he does not sound very positive as he is stopping Raj from telling Naina. he might be stopping Raj with some good intentions....

And what do you mean by hospital ka uniform....she is a captain woh toh captain ka uniform pehnegi.aarrey yaar i m just saying that she won't wear that KMA's uniform which shalini and lolita used to wear...but please only on independence day and republic day...the rest of the time keep her in casuals like Raj ........ok.she will wear uniform only on certain occasions... as she is not a teacher in KMA she won't wear uniform in KMA... ok ...

Yes Shalini I am with you and even I hope Operation Milap is a success!!!
even i am with shalini go shalini go....

And yes in the song Tere Liye tune female words bhi Raj ke upar dal diya...khair whatever!!! arrey imagine that the whole song is picturised on a male.... or imagine raj singing in female voice...😉... watever u like...

And yes Try to check out the names I have given which you have not seen!!!
i checked diya... and i don't think i need to check others... she is perfect for the role....

And darlling if she calls him Capt.Shekhawat and he calls her Dr.Naina in front of everyone..it will be really odd...switch to Raj and Naina...if not Veer and Mann. i actually can't switch to veer or mann... u see.. she is angry with him... and yes i will switch it to capt. or rajveer and naina....

I know we have heriones calling their husbands Mr.Bajaj and Mr.Walia...but here it will be very odd!!!
hey plz don't talk about ekta's serial.... i m changing it will be capt. in the starting and rajveer afterwards and Naina for Raj...okkkk... i don't want my fic to be compared with Ekta's serial.... plz plz don't.... i simply hate her... and i don't watch her serials....

ok now plz take care and keep smiling....
and plz do check my other fic... i will wait for ur comment...
sheenu...😊😊

Originally posted by: yyyy

Super yaar 👏 ... too good
thankuuuu soooo muchhhh dearrrr🤗
i guess that lady ..... was ritu(spy)...i just love shalini yaar...she is too good...hope operation milaap is successful.
lets see what will be the outcome of operation milap.... shalini is tooo good and her ideas are also good....

To be honest i really don't want rajveer 2 say the truth so soon....i want some khatti meethi moments..and i am sure after knowing the truth naina oops mann will make up for her absence....
will Rajveer say it or not... hmmm lets see... check the update for this..😆
actually i also want some nok jhok... so lets see... and Naina....hmm dekhte hai... wat will she do???

So does naina love rajveer...?? hmmm read the story dear... cant tell u now...

Dr naina and capt shekhvat sounds soo odd....i guess naina and rajveer will be good... arrey that was for 1 part only... it will be Naina and Rajveer only...

take care... and keep smiling....

sheenu...😊

Originally posted by: iqbal-pallavi

so sorry for the late comment...arrey its perfectly okk dearrr... u commented that is imp.... forst of all, i'm a seriously a nut head i read your fic and then oi thought i have already commneted ... this actually happens with me also... so i know it.... but today i checked your fic again and i was like eh wheres my comment, so i realised i didn't even write one 😆 ......😆😆.............

anyways heres my comment on this part, it was really gooooooood!!!!thankuuuu soooooo muchhhh dearrrrrrrrr i feel sorry for bechara raj though, he'll have to tolerate his mann's anger towards him awwwwww my dear jaanu aannn Raj will have to tolerate this for few more parts.... hope he gives some back though that will be fun to watch or in this case to read 😆 ..... even i m looking forward to some nok jhok.... in which raj reply to his mann..

anyway's loooooooooooooooooooooove shalini in this i hope her operation milap works,yipeee... shalini has some sneaky ideas i m also with her.... go shalini go.... i' am so in this with her woop! woop! you go shalini 😆 ok i'm seriously going out my mind, so i'll stop here once again lovely part !!! 😆
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and btw i am taking great care of my hair, i also love my hair alot, but if i don't get to know hows simi related to navin, i am surely going to rip your hair off 😆 nooooo.... my hairs... nooo ok now i will reveal most of the truth soon.... but plzz leave my hairs....😆😆

take care 😃
yasmin

take care and keep smiling....
sheenu...😊

Ok friend toh now I have decided who will play the role of rajveer's sir aka colonel Arjun Sahay….. This role will be played by kiran kumar ….. and role of Simi will be played by diya of LRL (I have seen her ….. a member here has posted her pics and yes she is appropriate for the role besides you all have seen her in army uniform so it won't be difficult for imagine her as a cadet) so now this problem is solved… now enjoy the update and please do check my other fiction the journey (its different…..lol.. I am sounding like javed jafri as he is in that ketchup's add.).

PART 8

P: tumhari usse baat hui captain….

R: abhi tak nahi sir…. Mai usse apne room mei le jaake batane hi waala tha… par tabhi aapki call aa gayi…

P: gudd….. matlab maine der nahi ki…

R: mai kuch samjha nahi sir…

P: tum abhi Naina ko kuch nahi bataoge Rajveer………………

R: what???? Par kyun sir……. Aap jante hain Naina ko ye baat batana kitna jaruri hai….. hum usse ab aur andhere mei nahi rakh sakte….

Now the person comes close to Raj and we are able to see his face…. He is none other than colonel Arjun sahay… and put his hands on raj's shoulder and says

Col. : dekho Raj mai janta hunt um ye baat Naina ko jald se jald bata dena chahte ho… par beta ye baat mai hum sab ki bhalayi ke liye kar raha hun….

R: mujhe kuch samajh nahi aa raha sir….

C: raj samajhne ki koshish karo… is waqt academy mei sab ko pata hai Naina 3 saal baad wapas aayi hai.. iska matlab academy mei jo spy hai wo bhi ye baat janta hai…. accha mujhe ye batao jab tumne Naina ko aaj yahan pehli baar dekha to tumne kya samjha…. Tumhe ye nahi laga ki wo yahan pe kisi aur wajah se aayi hai na ki sirf hospital mei apni job karne….. batao….

Raj thinks for a moment and says: haan mujhe yahi laga tha ki Naina mere sath rehne ka itna bada faisla yu hi nahi legi… kuch aur jarur hai uske dimag mei…

C: isiliye raj…. Aaj jab maine headquartes mei suna ki Captain naina ka transfer ambala military hospital mei ho gaya hai to mujhe usme kuch aur baat lagi to maine pata kiya… aur mujhe pata laga ki Naina ka transfer wahan pe karvaya gaya hai…

R: ji sir????

C: haan raj… uska transfer BC ke orders pe hua hai… iska matlab hai ki naina yahan pe aane waali hai iski khabar unhe bahut pehle se thi… aur mujhe lagta hai ki Naina is baar Navin ko innocent prove karne aayi hai…..

R: sir lekin tab to Naina hamari help kar sakti hai….

C: raj samajhne ki koshish karo…. Jis tarah hame laga tha waise hi terrorists aur us spy ko bhi Naina ke yahan pe hone pe shaq hai… is waqt wo sabki nigrani mei hai… jisme apni Indian army bhi shamil hai….

C: Indian army bhi janna chahti hai ki ek deshdrohi ki behen uski maut ki jagah pe kya kar rahi hai…. is waqt Naina ko sab kuch batana na sirf usko balki bahut logo ko musibat mei daal dega…

R: lekin sir hame Naina ki jarurat hai… woe k dr. hai… sath hi wo us ladki ke bare mei bhi janti hai… bina usse baat kare hum us ladki ke bare mei kaise pata lagayenge……

C: raj iske liye hame bahut hoshiyari se kaam lena hoga… hume usse sab kuch pata karna hoga bina usse koi shaq karne ka mauke diye…. Waise bhi tum jante ho us sachai ko Naina ko batane ka matlab hai kayi jaano ko khatre mei dalna… aur jo bhi hamne 3 saalo mei solve karne ki koshish ki hai uspe risk lena…. Nahi raja b hum eek ek kadam soch samajh ke rakhna hoga…..

Hum naina ko sab kuch batayenge lekin sahi waqt aane pe…. Jab uspe sabka dhyan nahi hoga… aur wo is state mei hogi ki iss sachai ko she paye… tum to jante ho ye sach bhale hi usse khusi dega lekin isme bhi dukh hai….

R:…………………….

C: janta hun Raj tum 3 saalo se apne dosto ko aur specially naina ko miss kar rahe ho…. Lekin tum hi batao kya tum chahte ho ki hamara mission khatre mei pade jiske liye tumne ye 3 saalo ki duri sahi… batao……

R: nahi sir… mere liye ye mission sabse imp. Hai aur uske baad kuch… aur waise bhi aaj nahi to kal Naina ko sab kuch pata lagega hi wo mujhe tab maaf kar degi….. aur tab tak mei uski nafrat jhel lunga sir……

C: Raj bhale hi mai tumhara senior hun lekin aaj tumhe salute karne ko ji chahta hai… I salute ur spirit Raj… I salute u…. tumhare jitna bada sacrifice koi nahi kar sakta… tumne apni puri jindagi daav pe laga di hai is desh ko bachane ke liye….

R: nahi sir maine jo kuch bhi kiya wo ek soldier hone ke naate mera farz tha….waise bhi mujhse jyada bada sacrifice Navin ne kiya hai is desh ke liye….

C: Raj tum dono mere aaj tak ke sabse acche students ho… bhale hi navin mera protge tha lekin tum bhi mere liye uske saman hi ho….aaj mujhe lagta hai ki mera jivan ek teacher ke mayno mei safal raha…bas ab mai yahi chahta hun ki ye teacher apne students ki har sambhav madad kare….

R: sir hame aaj taka apse accha guide nahi mila… aap hi ne hame sab kuch sikhaya hai… bas ab sirf Navin ko begunaah saabit karna hi mera maqsad hai…

C: mera nahi hamara Raj… hamara Raj… accha mei chalta hun…. Mujhe aaj hi headquarters pahuchna hai…. mujhe maaf kar dena aaj ke liye…

R: nahi sir ye kaisi baat kar rahe hai aap….. infact agar aaj aap nahi aate to kuch bhi gadbad ho sakti thi…

C: jai hind Raj… apna khayal rakhna aur Naina ka bhi aur…

R: mai sabka khayal rakhunga sir… Jai hind…… aap bhi apna khayal rakhna… bye….

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Raj's room….

Shalini: so everything settled Naina….

Naina: yes shalini… ab kya karna hai….

S: jab tak capt. Nahi aate chalo mai tumhe academy ka round doon…

Naina smiles…

S: why r u smiling???

N: I think shalini u r forgetting that I have spent 1 whole month in this academy… I m very well aware of every corner of this academy…. So you need not to give me round…..

S: arrey koi baat nahi…. Fir bhi ghum ke aate hai… yahan baithe kya karenge… capt. Ka intezaar….

N: chalo shalini….

S: chalo pehle mess chalte hai…

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In the mess

Our dear six cadets were there laughing and enjoying when shalini and Naina enter the mess…

Huda: arrey simi sun na plzz chal mai tujhe apne gao aur raajesh ke bare mei aur batata hun….

Simi: huda plz I am nt interested in your bhais….

Huda: arrey yaar mai to chahta bhi nahi tu kisi aur mei interest le sivaye is huda ke… accha bata mere bare mei tera kya khyal hai…..

Simi: huda plzz… and she stands up and turns and stops….

Pooja: arrey kya hua simi tera connection kahan atak gaya… arrey ye to capt. Naina hai… Capt. Rajveer ki wife…

Huda: arrey yaar ye capt. Ka naseeb kitna accha hai unhe kinni soni kudi mili hai life mai… aur ye janani jise mai patane ke bare mei soch raha hun wo mujhe bhaav bhi nahi deti…..

Pooja: shut up huda… chal mil ke aate hai….

And she goes there..

Pooja: hello mam I am cadet pooja ghai… aapka sim to capt. Rajveer ke mobile mei hai na…..

Naina didn't understand any word and give shalini a wat-is-she-saying look….. shalini laughs and says: ye cadet pooja ghai mobiles se kuch jyada hi influenced hai isliye apni bhasha mei bhi wahi use karti hai… inka kehne ka matlab hai tum capt. Rajveer ki wife ho na…

Naina smiles and says: hello pooja…. Plz call me Naina… mai tum sabse jyada badi nahi hun… aur na hi tumhari teacher hun…

Pooja: par hamare teacher ki wife to ho na aap.

Naina: to kya hua??/ chalo hum ek naya rishta banate hai… frndshp ka… will u be my friend cadet….

Pooja: arrey waah… pooja aapse connection jarur jodegi…

Naina: aur hamara connection lifetime hoga aur wo bhi jam free….

Pooja: arrey aapne to meri language bhi sikh li….

Naina: aap nahi tum pooja…

Pooja: naina tum sach mei bahut sweet ho… chalo mai tumhe apne baki friends se milvati hun…. Aap bhi chaliye na dr. shalini…

Pooja: ye hai ali… sharmila aur sida sada… bahut kam bolta hai… isse ek call karvane ke liye bhi balance hame kharch karna hota hai….

Pooja: ye hai kaidi.. oops aalekh… pata hai jitna ye paani nahi pita pure din utni sharab pita hai… khooni sharabi kahin ka…. Sabki incoming leta hai par outgoing no… bas ek hi sms karta rehta hai 'nautanki' ka…par ek sach baat kahun dil se ye sab ka bhala sochta hai…

Pooja: ye hai huda… jat… apni kam bhainso ki baat jyada karta hai…. ab to iske paas se bhi bhainso ki baas aati hai… har ladki pe line marta hai… itna attitude kabhi kisi mei dekhne ko nahi milta jitna isme hai…

Pooja: ye hai yudi…. Hamara sharmila boy… itna sharmata hai ki ladkiyo ki bhi maat de de… koi bhi isse ulloo bana de… par dil se saaf hai…

Aur ye hai…

Naina: simi….

Pooja: arrey tumhe naam kaise pata…

Naina: vo cadet yahan aane se pehle dr. shalini tum 6 ke bare mei bata rahi thi… sabka naam bataya… 5 ke naam pata lag gaye… to ye simi hi hogi….

Pooja: arrey haan… accha ye simi hai… bahut kam bolti hai… kuch bhi outgoing nahi karti… kabhi bhi apne connection jam kar leti hai… par fir bhi meri sbse acchi dost hai….

Pooja: aur ye hamare capt. Rajveer ka permanent connection hai… aur ham sabse connection jodna chahti hai… chalo chalo.. ab ye hamari frnd hai… aao naina chalo kuch khaate hai… hamne subah se us major ki drill ki vajah se kuch nahi khaya.. aur mere khayal se tum bhi safar ki vajah se kuch nahi kha paayi hogi… chalo chalo… arrey tum sab bhi chalo…

Huda: arrey tu kuch bolne ka mauka to de punjaban… dekh tune simi ka connection aise kaata ki jabse buth banke khadi hai… oye chal simi kuch khaate hai…

Simi: a..ahhhh… chalo…….. still has her eyes on Naina…. Naina aap bhi chalo kuch khalo….

Naina: chalo simi… aur plz aap nahi tum kehna….ok

Shalini: tum log kuch kha lena mei chalti hun… mujhe infirmary mei kuch kaam hai….. naina tum yahin rehna mei hr aati hun… kahin akele mat jana aur jana ho to sirf apne room mei jana… capt. Mujhe tumhari responsibility deke gaye hai….

Naina: don't worry shalini… mei is academy mei pehle bhi aa chuki hun… kho nahi jaungi… chalo fir bhi mei sirf apne room mei hi jaungi… ok..

Shalini: ok… b bye….

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Raj was walking towards his room when he sees infirmary door open…

Raj: shalini to Naina ke sath thi… fir ye infirmary …. Lagta hai dono yahin pe hai… plz god help me…ki mei Naina ki nafrat she paun…..

And he goes there…. There he sees that shalini is alone…

Raj: shalini tum yahan pe akeli… tum to Naina ke sath thi na…kya hua usse??? Kahan hai wo??? Wo thik to hai na???

Shalini: woo woo… capt… kitni tension le rahe hai aap… I must say you love her a lot… don't worry capt.. she is in mess with our first yr cadets… I left her there so that she can have something….

Raj: ohohkkk…..

S: waise captain u r really very lucky… no doubt u love her so much… she deserves that…

R: wo kyu dr..

S: she is really very sweet capt… usne abhi se sab first yr cadets ko apna dost bana liya…..she is really good in making frnds…

R: yes dr… tabhi vo meri sabse acchi dost thi… I mean hai…. accha aur kuch hua….

S: nothing capt. Just she settled… now you go in the mess… I told her to wait for me in the mess….but now u go…

R: oh come on shalini…. I can't… I mean how can i… I have classes from 3 and its 2:45…. So u go and take care of her….i m going for my drill with second yr cadets…. B bye….

S: capt. Aap kitna bhi bhagne ki koshish karo… par ye shalini aapke aur Naina ke bich ke distance ko jarur kam karegi…. Chalo dr. love …. I mean dr. shalini apna kaam karo……

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END OF PART

Finally managed the whole part… I was very tired…but finally I did it… ok friends I vl take ur leave…..

Take care and keep smiling……

Sheenu….😊

awesome too good very nice waiting for next asap with more RN part.

gr8 dear excelent,plz do contn,
mindblowin,


Aarthi