“When I was broken” Part VI (ending) - Page 5

Originally posted by: seasplash

hey such a wonderful story i just loved the character of prashant
i have imagined angad and kripa in their place
😳 😳 😳
write more stories yaar 😊 😊 😊

Hi , thanks for appreciatign the story am glad u found it good enough.. u liked Prashant..looks like Prashant has become a hit of this story this makes me feel really happy... in our serial male charcter strogn n intelligent r shown very less hope we get such a charcter to watch.. hopfully....will post more stories just thinkign which one ..😃

bhoomi sab se phelay tight hugy 4 u 🤗...u wrote a awosum story i've no words 2 describe how much i liked ur story i realle appreciate ur work 👏 ...superb ending 😃...i love it 😃 😃 m waiting 4 urz next story 😃

omg, I am so mad at you! I was sitting on the bus and reading your story (my hi-fi bus happens to have internet), and I almost started crying. Like I literally had tears in my eyes by the time I finished!!! My friend saw me and asked me if I was okay. 😆

Okay, I'm totally kidding...I'm not mad. Just really impressed with your story. It was a wonderfully sweet and uplifting story, and despite being so short, it shared a whole range of Sarika's emotions with me. Absolutely beautifully.

If you don't mind some constructive criticism, I think you should work on structure...I mean, have it in normal prose style with organized paragraphs (like books are). And watch out for typos! Hope you don't mind. I think you are a writer who can really express emotions effectively...and improving the organization will only improve that.

Thanks once again for sharing this story with us! Looking forward to your next production! 👏

Originally posted by: ghazala_gr8

bhoomi sab se phelay tight hugy 4 u 🤗...u wrote a awosum story i've no words 2 describe how much i liked ur story i realle appreciate ur work 👏 ...superb ending 😃...i love it 😃 😃 m waiting 4 urz next story 😃

HI ghazala, jhappi for me...aww😳mast thii...so sweet of u... I am glad u had a good time readign this story... thanks dear for appreciating my work..it surely encourages me... Am happy ending bhi theek lagii na... will post the next soon..😃

Originally posted by: SuhanaSafar

omg, I am so mad at you! I was sitting on the bus and reading your story (my hi-fi bus happens to have internet), and I almost started crying. Like I literally had tears in my eyes by the time I finished!!! My friend saw me and asked me if I was okay. 😆

Okay, I'm totally kidding...I'm not mad. Just really impressed with your story. It was a wonderfully sweet and uplifting story, and despite being so short, it shared a whole range of Sarika's emotions with me. Absolutely beautifully.

If you don't mind some constructive criticism, I think you should work on structure...I mean, have it in normal prose style with organized paragraphs (like books are). And watch out for typos! Hope you don't mind. I think you are a writer who can really express emotions effectively...and improving the organization will only improve that.

Thanks once again for sharing this story with us! Looking forward to your next production! 👏

Hi Rabia,

My goodness was the story that touching.. I am overwhelmed with the feelgin that it touched u so much... hope i bring smiles more and tears less..:) Am glad u liked my thoughts in the story... I always believe that i have thoughts but dont know whether can make my words strong enough to express them..

About criticism, I totally agree and u r most welcome to help me improve my writing..i agree with u on what all u said, I am among the most lazy people in reading my own story..lol.. i dotn knwo how u people read such long ones.. I mostly dont recheck my story as when i write in the flow i write it and rarely recheck the spelling only just those where the word doc shows itself i try and change them..hehe.. but i agree there were too many i read after I posted...i read it to know what the part said when i posted..so ya there r many..i will keep that in mind..and become less lazy u see..:D thanks so much for all ur lovely comments ..

About the paragraph and organisation...i read books or novels rarely..i havnt read any english novel uptil now.. I will try to do that... waise Bhoomi ka touch hoga..yeh to sure hai..😆.. i understood what u meant..ab dyaan dungi for sure..😃

Will surely post few more from my production as u called it😉..hehe..thanks dear for all the lovely encouraging words.. 😃

awesome bhoomi

sorry i am latein replying but it was wonderful. loved the way prashant talked to sarika.

Originally posted by: golu_1677

awesome bhoomi

sorry i am latein replying but it was wonderful. loved the way prashant talked to sarika.

Golu... am happy u liked it..and comign from u means so much to me.. no need to say sorry dear... i am sure u must be eager enough to reply it happens..😃..u liked prashant n sarika ka bolchall...eheh..feels great..hope my story gives u a differetn flavour each time..😃

As usual this was awesome bhoomi..i enjoyed reading this all over again...am so glad u are posting u're short stories here..can't wait for the next one...

Sorry for the late reply dear..it's been kinda crazy at my end...

Originally posted by: binidoshi

As usual this was awesome bhoomi..i enjoyed reading this all over again...am so glad u are posting u're short stories here..can't wait for the next one...

Sorry for the late reply dear..it's been kinda crazy at my end...

Hi Bini dear, so sweet of u to read this...already u have read the sotry still u read ..aww u r enjoying readign all over again.hehe.. yeh sab story r urs adn much they r mine...😃..aur agar phrise kaha naa Sorry to dekho puchment aisa dungii ki...sareee cryign icons ek ke baad ek post karungi..😉so sorry na bolooo theekkkss😳

hey sweety one more fab story frm u it was really nice and short will read the new one and comment in it and a big jappi 4 u for such a cool story🤗