Do Pal Ek Dashtan (12/29) Twist-*Note - Page 6

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Posted: 18 years ago
#51
cmon open d suspense soon...
who dat guy is?? 😉 😉
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Posted: 18 years ago
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~:PART 8:~

Naina decided to make tea for everybody, so she went to jungle to find some herbs. she started walking backward and got crashed with somebody when she and he turned back he stated to shout loudly like BACHHHHHHHHHHHOOOOOOOOOO......SHEEEEEEEERRRRRRRR....
by hearing SHEERRRRRRRRRRRRRR naina also started shouting........

now both were BACHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.........SHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRRRR..... .

hearing naina shout RAJ-ALEKH AND HUDA(he came back by this time) jerked up for their sets...they all ran toward the direction where the sound was coming..

by this time naina stopped yelling as she heard somebody saying...
GOD! I AM TOO YOUNG TO DIE, PLZ SAVE ME....I AM NOR EVEN MARRIED..I DONT HAVE A GIRL FRIEND.....PLZ GOD....
and started saying hunaman chalisa.....

naina looked at him and sarted laughing....tehn men who had his eyes closed and hands together opened his one eye and saw naina laughing....
he hugged niana and said...

THANK YOU NIANA...YOU SAVED MY LIFE..IF YOU WOULD HAVE CAME I WOULD HAVE DIED WITH THAT SHER...NOW I CAN MARRY AND I CAN HAVE CHILDRENS....THANKS A LOTT..

naina: YUDI(yes he is out yudi) wat r u talking about....

Yudi: naina i was walking backwards and i got crashed with somebody so i thought that it would be sher and so i started yelling....and then you came and saved my life..thanks a lol..

N: 😆 😆 sher....it was you who was yelling sher ...sher...you are the one who scared me...dumbo i was the one who crashed with you...i came here to find some herbs..

(by this time RAJ-ALEKH-HUDA came and saw the whole scene...and started to laugh loudly)

hearing laughing of somebody they looked at raj who was smiling..(trying not to laugh) and alekh and huda were laughing...

N/Y: wat are you all doing here?

R: yeh tum dono (2)puch rahe ho?

N: ya..

R: b/c we heard you yelling and we thought you were in trouble so we came here and saw you 2 yelling and then we listened to your conversation...

H: naina to darr rahi thi...yusi to chuha(mouse) hian..par tu....(and started laughing)

Y: hey bro i am not chuha...it was umm...ah..i was not afraid of sher...

H: yudi woh dekh tera peecha sher...

yudi jumped up and went behind naina...

and everybody started laughing and this time raj-naina too.

they all headed back too the camp....naina made tea, the tea want as god as regular tea but i can work. they all started chatting..

N: kya yaar tum log koi plannig kar ki thi...kii mujhe daroghe(will make me scare)....forst hud and then yudi..

all laughed at her question...

R: yudi how did you know that we are her..
Y: sir, when i was heading toward ur point i saw ur truck so i thought that you guys might be in jungle. so i headed toward jungle to find you and tehn i heard breaking of branch do i thought it would be some animal.but then i herad that sound coming near me so i started walking backwars to look as if it is it behind me..then i got crashed with naina and i thought it was sher...and then you know wat happened..

H: yudi tu aaj kal smart ban gaya hain..(saying this he winked at him)

Y: bro leave me alone...why are you always pulling my leg..

they chatted little more then niana asked raj..

N: sir at which point do we have to put this box(pointed toward a box which was lying beside raj)...and how?

R: cadets this our important mission i know that you will help me finish it, here i have map...

here at this point(he pointed toward the X markk) we have to put the trrigers...and to reach that place we have to go through this mountain. This mountian doent look this simple as you can see. during our way toward that point we have to face many things.

N: like?

R: It is extremely dangerous. Wild animals, unexpected pits, quick sand, week bridges over deep lakes, extremely rocky terrain…. You name it, its there. It si a perfect place to keep things requiring tight security. is what we will betaking up. Any question? No? good. Come, let go.

All of them took their bags and everything necessary and headed toward the mountain. ALEKh was wallking ahead as he knew how to read a map and huda and yudi were carring the box and following alekh..raj and naina were walking last. suddenly naina trriped over a stone...

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THANKS for ur comments....its helping me a lot....if any of you have ideas for next parts please free to PM me....

BHUMI😛

Edited by ami_princess - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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HEy..
cool...i hop naina falls on raj..haha...anyways...yuidi is funny...cont soon
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Posted: 18 years ago
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😳 😳 😳 itss cooooooooooool 😛 😛
but u see i read tis fic in Orkut so 4get to reply here 😆
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Posted: 18 years ago
#55
omg that was soo funnyyyy!!!! lol!!! update soon! =D
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Posted: 18 years ago
#56
hey

too good pl continue soon
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Posted: 18 years ago
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HEY THANK YOU FOR ALL OF UR'S WONDERFUL COMMENTS.....I HOPE YOU ALL LIKED MY FF THIS FAR.....

KEEP COMMENTING.. 😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
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~:PART 9:~

Suddenly naina tripped but fell right into Raj's arms. And it happened again- the same sensation- blushing, drowning into each others eyes………. Oh God……. What was happening to them? They could hardly breathe…. Completely un aware of their surroundings…. They felt like running away but experienced a complete incapability of moving their legs…..they just could not take their eyes off each other….. naina felt so comfortable in his arms….. Oh God…….
everybody body was watching this scene...but they didn't knew that they were not teh only one watching this scene...their were many othe eyes which were watching them from the bushes.
HUDA could took that anymore...he felt something burning insode himmmso her coughed...hearing his cough raj-naina jerked put from their thoughts....

Huda to naina: phoolan tu thik to hian na? (with concern in his voice)

Naina: yes all thanks to captain rajveer(she looked at him)

Raj: anytime cadet naina "ah" singh(he winked at her)

they all again started walking...but all of them were lost in their own thoughts..

HUDA(he thinks)...yeh captain apne app ko samajta kya hain? jab dekho meri phoolan pay dhora dal phirta hain...iska to kuch karna padega...

ALEKH(thinks): yaar kash main daru liya hota.....mera to sar gum raha hian....

YUDI(thinks) abb main kya karu...jise main sabko bata saku to main bhi mardh(men) hoon.?

RAJ(thinks) yeh mujhe kya ho raha hain..jab bhi mein naina kai saath hota hoon to kyun itni bechan feel karta hoon....jaise hi main use dekhta hoon mujhe violind kyun sunai deta hain...he was deep in his though...

Naina was also in her though but suddenly she heard some voice she stopped and turned around to look but no body was their...
so she thought she was just dreaming so she started walking again but again she heard some footsteps..she turned around but didnt found anybody..
suddenly raj noticed that naina is not walking with him so he turned around and saw niana looking back...he came by her and asked her as why is she not walking..

N: sir..i think hamara koi peecha kar raha hian...
raj was shocked...he looked around but didnt founf anybody...he asked naina as if she is sure...naina said sir i am not sure but i heard some noise..

R: naina no body is here...i might be some kind of bird or animal...

N: i think you are right..
they both again started walking but naina was still not sure if it was a animal...after a while naina heard voice agian but this time she didnt turned she took a mirror out of her pocket...and pretended like she is looking at herself..she looked though that mirror as if anybody is following them and she saw 3-4 mens behind the bushes with guns..naina slowly held raj's hand tightly..raj looked at her in suprise..and he was about to say something but naina signled to look in mirror...raj looked in mirror and saw 3-4 men were following them...but didnt reacted first but then he saw a men pointed gun toward naina....

he(raj) yelled out...CADETSSSSS RUNNNNNNNNNN.....SEPERATEEEEEE..!!!!!!
cadtes followed him as they heard the gunshot...they all ran as raj told them to.. ...raj was injured as he was the being shot..(he pushed naina..but the bullet just touched him) ...the mens who were hiding came out and started firing but raj took nainas hand and raj to different direction...soem men followed raj and naina and some followed Huda-alekh and yudi...the mens(terrorist thought that the triggers were with H-S-Y as he sended more men toward them)

RAJ-NAINA were running in full speed..they didnt knew where they were going...raj arm was bleeding badly, naina saw that but diditn said any thing as she saw 3 mens runnig after them..

raj pulled niana behind the old peepal tree...and pushed her toward the trunk...he closed her mouth with his hand...they were so close to each other that they can almost feel their breath....naina was looking into raj's eye and raj was looking for the terrorist...and tucked his hand behind his backa nd took his gun out and pointed toward the terrorist and BANG!!!!!!!!!!




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Posted: 18 years ago
#59
hey too good

pl continue

the suspense is really good

pl continue soon
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hey
sounds great...wow...lov the r-n chem...especially when raj holds naina's mouth...woww...and Naina looking into his eye....awesome...cont soon

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